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"Quake I", on the other hand, is FFN's meddling - it was "Quake III", but the two other I's somehow got lost when I submitted it. (And while we're at it, I don't understand why FFN's software censors /'s and -'s out of titles and summaries, anong other characters - I have to find ways around that.) As for the lampshade hangings... I spotted two. This Quote:
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It's minor, but "Xelman Greenwood" in the other story is a reference to two other Wookieepedians - "Xelman" and Steven "Riffsyphon1024" Greenwood. Quote:
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2007-09-19, 08:41 | Link #122 |
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Hey everyone, I've been lurking around here for something like forever, but you guys are actually doing what I've always wanted people to do with fanfiction, but they never do (except on EE's If There Be Thorns, but you need to on that fic) - actually going through and doing analysis.
Good for you guys. Let's see, I've written some Mai-fic recently, more so than I usually do while House is airing. I divide my time evenly. Shameless plugging / I'd really love some feedback: Killpoint Passages The Strange Affair of the Katsu Ruins <-- that one's being edited right now, so it's seems rather half-gone through right now. |
2007-09-19, 11:17 | Link #123 |
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Oh, wow. Those are my favorite Mai fanfictions, and you are a very talented writer.
I suck in writing good reviews and I'm actually quite busy with my work, but I promise to all of you better comments in the next days for the updated chapters of Passages and The Forgotten Colony... . And yes, I'll sit down quietly waiting for the next chapter of Killpoint. |
2007-09-20, 08:50 | Link #124 | |||||||
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We appear to be on different frequencies, then. You see, the first line you mentioned there is canonical, it (or some sufficiently close variant) appeared in the actual thing. I intend to walk as close to the line as possible without actually crossing it. We'll see how it works out. Quote:
Some, like the 300 or DW references, should be obvious. Others require more thought or specialisation. For example, there's the "It's a Bridget!" in Chapter One, which only proficient Internetians will get. Another example would be the "'Mistress Prebr' is not the name of any country I have ever heard of. They speak Rancaskan in 'Mistress Prebr'?" line, which plays on another highly-referential work. Then there are those which should be obvious but are cunningly-hidden, like Sweetdream Alpha or Muesterteklang's name. There's a lot of divergent thinking to be done, part of the fun is identifying each of the references as they pop up. ------------ And now to questions about the "Who-crossover" . Quote:
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2007-09-23, 09:54 | Link #125 | |
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Think of Stargate as an analogy. The Stargates are remnants of alien technology whose abilities are regarded by the primitive locals as magic - and the Goa'uld milk this superstition for as much as they can. The SGC, on the other hand, not only regard the Earth Stargate as what it really is (impressive technology, rather than magic), but even had to create their own dialing mechanism to compensate for the lost DHD - gaining more understanding and control of the Stargate's operation as a result. The backstory I developed for my Mai stories (there are more to come after these two) is along these lines, although I hadn't watched Stargate by that time, and only used its general premise as an inspiration, to explain how humans colonized Earl. I originally considered having Searrs master actual space travel, but I reconsidered as it would have to be discovered very soon after Mai-HiME - something unlikely even for an organization able to build a fully-functional AI android by 2004. Having a "magic" door capable of interplanetary travel, however, would surely help with such early expansion - if they reverse-engineered it... and the destruction of the HiME Star disrupted Searrs' plan to (ever) take over the Carnival, forcing them to seek alternate ways of starting the Golden Millennium - which itself will be a plot point. As for spelling things out clearly: I'm now under full understanding that most readers don't read between the lines (except when it involves sex), so when I make a point, I try to convey it as clearly as I can while not being overly anvilicious. Also, I try not to introduce any mysteries to which I don't have an answer myself: to take Akane as an example, I "know for myself" who, why and when killed her, and why it didn't result in Kazuya's death-by-contract. And every question that I explicitly raise will be answered eventually - the only question is when! |
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2007-09-27, 15:36 | Link #126 |
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Chapter 3 of "Mai HiME Ryou" is out. New "revelations" (in "my universe", that is) about the Otomeverse include the origins of the "Mikoto animal ensemble" and the term "乙HiME"/"Otome", as well as the beginning of Fumi's involvement with the Otome.
Tomorrow I'll review Thesinwithin's stories. |
2007-09-27, 19:23 | Link #127 | |
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2007-09-30, 17:13 | Link #128 |
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The third Doctor Who half-chapter has followed - and I hope to finish "The Maiden's Flight" tomorrow, and resolve everything.
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After that, I'll finish the other story, and then we'll see which way I go, depending on the reception. One thing is certain: all my current and future stories will be part of the same continuity. |
2007-10-03, 14:48 | Link #129 |
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I've finally read the latest chapters you posted Sikon. The third chapter of "The Forgotten Colony..." is for sure surprising. It'll be interesting to see how they'll manage to counterattack without two of their best warriors.
The Mai HiME Ryou new upload is good too. Even better for my taste. I like the believable way you are linking together Hime and Otome, and I appreciate the political background you are creating around the characters. |
2007-12-22, 22:27 | Link #133 |
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Prinz von Sommerhoffnung Chapter Four is in the house! Do enjoy and review.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3291350/...Sommerhoffnung http://community.livejournal.com/maihime/92312.html EDIT: BTS at my LJ.
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2008-01-04, 17:33 | Link #134 |
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Stray Dogs: chapter one
Title: Stray Dogs
Rated: M Summary: In the near future, Japan has become corrupt. Anarchy and violence are common, gangs are ever prevalent. This story focuses on the Duran gang, as they cross paths with their most bitter enemy . Shoujoai, AU Natsuki, Shizuru. Story is located here:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3984594/1/Stray_Dogs |
2008-01-04, 17:47 | Link #135 |
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Kaguya: prologue
Title: Kaguya
Rated: T Summary: Mai Otome. Someone appears from Shizuru Viola's and Natsuki Kruger's past and creates a rift between them. Story located here:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3991541/1/Kaguya |
2008-01-07, 01:04 | Link #136 | |
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2008-01-10, 18:19 | Link #137 |
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Well I have started recently new story with fake movie trailer XD Decided to make my version of it...not sure how good it is but here is link Comments are always welcomed Oh! And the actual story starts from chapter 2
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3949593/...attle_of_Fuuka I'm very surprised that no one wrote something like this before... Anyway what do you think? |
2008-03-30, 18:20 | Link #138 |
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Hime Noir drabble
ust a quick drabble This is an upcoming Noir fic I'm working on.. Tell me what you think. I apologize about the formatting. Also I have written this in script form but the fic will be first person with descriptions.. It's rated PG-13 for suggestive content.
INT. PARADISE LOUNGE -- CONTINUOUS Natsuki walks in through the door. The club is filled with men in suits and women wearing cocktail dresses. She walks towards the bar. NATSUKI (V.O.) The Paradise Lounge. A watering hole for the ultra rich and aristocrats alike. The name Nagi came up in a few low key reviews claiming the place as this year's hot spot. Natsuki walks across the street towards the lounge. NATSUKI (V.O.) Shizuru Fujino was the main attraction, a Kyoto bird that mysteriously flew in one day to the audition. They said she had the most beautiful voice, not that I would complain. She was statuesque and gracefull, but people said she had a tendancy to be mischeivious. And those eyes ...those piercing, red ruby eyes that with just one look, would pierce into one’s own soul. As Natsuki nears the bar something catches her ear. A piano begins to play and a femenine voice begins to sing. She looks over her shoulder and sees a gorgeous woman on the stage. She has long brunette hair, a sparkling violet dress and scarlet red lipstick. She is Shizuru Fujino and she's leaning on the piano holding the microphone and singing into it. The bartender approaches Natsuki, who is so enchanted she has not noticed him. BARTENDER What can I get ya? Natsuki doesn't respond. BARTENDER (CONT'D) Kid? Natsuki is still gazing at the stage. The bartender grabs Natsuki's shoulder and she quickly turns to face him. BARTENDER (CONT'D) Hey, gawk all you want, but there's a two drink minimum. NATSUKI Oh, awh, I'll have a beer. BARTENDER Beer? Kid, this is a cocktail bar. You want beer, you go somewhere else. NATSUKI I'll take a gin and tonic then. BARTENDER (sarcastically) Good choice. Natsuki looks back to the stage and sees that Shizuru has finished singing and is chatting it up with some over eager fans. She notices Natsuki staring at her and Natsuki quickly abruptly looks away. After a while, Natsuki looks back towards her and Shizuru is approaching her. The bartender puts a drink down in front of Natsuki and waits to be paid. Natsuki realizes and starts searching her pockets for money in her trenchcoat. Unbeknownst to her, Shizuru approaches and sits beside her. SHIZURU Put that on my tab, Reito-san. She pulls out a silver cigarette case and puts one in her mouth and lights it up. She offers one to Natsuki. Natsuki declines it with a gesture. NATSUKI Smoking is a bad habit. She leans over and lights her cigarette with a match. SHIZURU Yes, well, we can't always be good these days. She presses her lips together and slowly blows the match out. Her cleavage catches Natsuki's eye. NATSUKI You always buy drinks for strangers? Shizuru grins and winks at her. SHIZURU Only the cute ones. NATSUKI Cheers. Natsuki takes a drink of her gin and tonic. She cringes as she puts the drink on the bar, while coughing. SHIZURU Too much for ya? NATSUKI I've had harder. SHIZURU Oh, I'm sure you have. Natsuki looks her over and clears her throat. SHIZURU (CONT'D) You look familiar, come around here often? NATSUKI First time. Shizuru stares at her seductively and chuckles. SHIZURU There's a first time for everything, I suppose. Natsuki blushes. SHIZURU (CONT'D) You got a name, Miss First Time? NATSUKI Natsuki Kuga. Shizuru grins and nods. She's not surprised to hear the name. Her eyes are on Natsuki’s again, searching. SHIZURU Ara. I see the resemblance. NATSUKI Pardon? SHIZURU I figured someone would come asking around for Kuga, but I never expected it to be her daughter. NATSUKI Sometimes ya gotta get your hands dirty. SHIZURU So it would seem. I suppose you think I know where she is? NATSUKI She was working for you, so you must know somethin'. Shizuru’s expression becomes cold, as she turns her head to the bar. SHIZURU I don't care to be called a criminal, Miss Kuga. She takes out a compact and starts powdering her face. --tbc-- |
2008-04-01, 13:37 | Link #139 |
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Sikon!!!
Your fanfic is just great, I don't know what else could I say. Finally I know the origin of mysterious Yggdrasil. I especially liked the whole idea with Bifrost and the link that you made to the M.O. Zwei scene of Nina's teleportation. Thanks a lot, good luck with next chapters! (I wonder why are Searrs (and anime creators) so fascinated with Norse mythology (I saw Yggdrasil in some other anime, too) |
2008-04-27, 19:31 | Link #140 |
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Wind. It set me free, blew away my problems and grief, and embraced me without knowing who I was or where I came from. The wind didn't care what I wore, what I did, or where I was going. It accepted me without restraint, freed my mind, and calmed me down. I was asked several times why I rode my motorcycle, why I disappeared for days at a time just to drive. The answer wasn't something I could tell, wasn't something I could just say. It had to be felt, had to be witnessed, had to be experienced. Here, with you against my back, on this open rode laced with the flowing cherry blossoms, I shared it. I couldn't answer you either, couldn't say what I wanted, couldn't find the words. What I felt was the same as the wind. It was all we needed right now, all we had to know. We were free from everything, free from people's thoughts, people's stares, people's words. With the wind I didn't have to worry about them, with the wind I could be honest. I liked you. Through everything, the pain, the hardships, the good times, and the laughter. I couldn't tell you this because the feelings were more than my words could describe. Like the wind, you were there for me, embraced me, accepted me. My past didn't matter to you- in fact you shared some of it with me. What mattered was simple; we were together, embraced by the rushing sound of air. I couldn't tell you, but I know you could feel it. You were my wind.
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