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I am no one
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Unless the girl is, again, frowning angrily. Kodaka isn't exactly crying or even frightened at the time, if my memory is clear.
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2012-01-08, 10:00 | Link #17164 |
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@ Demi - All of them are D with the possible exception of Clarissa who looks like a B/C.
@ Senpai - So where does this fat load of cash go? He could use it for something personal once in a while. Side note - Honestly, who thought for a second that Charles was a guy? Every person who watched the anime went "Guy my ass" when they saw her Side note 2 - It worries the other characters since they go as far to mark special dates on their calendars for days when they're going to screw the other over They even remark that this is the first time they've taken to interacting with a specific person so much Hell, they even have each others cell number. Side note 3 - Irish rarely smiles so his expression during the intro was deadpan. Anyway, so guys really get the short end of the stick here?
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2012-01-08, 10:09 | Link #17165 | ||||
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Though he once use his money to follow Haruna, who went to Canada. Apparently afraid he can't get another chance to confess. yeah, love makes you blind. Quote:
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@Everyone please read and comment :3 Spoiler for Waaah~:
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2012-01-08, 10:16 | Link #17166 |
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@ Senpai - You mean he couldn't just wait for her to come back and confess then?
Side note - I do admit that Charles looks manlier in the manga. Still, the premise ruins it: "Ichika Orimura was found to be the only male pilot so he was sent to ISA". This kills the premise if Charles was a genuine guy. Side note 2 - What do you mean sexual carnage? Neither of them do anything sexual.....okay, they did sneak to each others bath that one time, but that was just for blackmail purposes! Side note 3 - Fridge Briliance: Irish isn't a girl Scene - Seem very similar to the real one Houki's unwillingness to defend the illegal fishers made me go wtf when I saw it/ Seriously, Houki, you think illegal fishers deserve to die? Nice priorities you have there
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2012-01-08, 10:25 | Link #17168 |
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None of them would care Maya's too scared of Chifuyu to say anything, Clarissa cares mostly about Laura, and Natasha would conisder hanging out at the Orimura's her off hours so anything she finds out doesn't have to relate to work
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2012-01-08, 10:27 | Link #17170 | |||
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He's carrying a huge idiot ball, so large even Haruna scold him. Though she reciprocates quickly, this is happened in the ending anyway, shortly after Yui confessed to him. (OT3 ensues ) Quote:
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It's still about 35% copypasta which I have to fix (compared to earlier part that is 100% original), and yes, I go WTF Houki as well, should I change it?
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2012-01-08, 10:36 | Link #17172 |
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Same as Eras, seriously. Only Maya would actually care, and Ichika, but they're afraid of Chifuyu.
Then again, Chifuyu will eager to kick Tabane out unless she has VERY GOOD reason (aside from being chased by agents of course) Any comments on the draft?
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2012-01-08, 10:39 | Link #17173 | ||
the "Z" is for "Zeta"
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*breaks some backlog*
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2012-01-08, 10:39 | Link #17174 |
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@ Flame - He only has one year till his age abandons him
@ Treme - That's already in Daydreams @ Senpai - So he failed to realize that she'd have to go to ISA considering her age and the fact that all teenage cadet reps go there? Side note - To be fair, it's better than the random male IS pilot fics that completely destroy canon. Side note 2 - Even worse? They're both in the bath so she tries to take another pic to embarrass him. She made sure he could do nothing about it since she rigged her camera to instantly transport the data to the ISA network when the picture's taken. Result? He doesn't take kindly to the attempt and tries to grab the camera. Both of them struggle for it and she ends up on top of him while both of them were wet....then they hear the camera clicking and a flash. Side note 3 - Would it be too much if Irish wears the regular uniform instead of a custom one? Scene - It's alright it shows some unlikeable traits on the heroines. Still, that's like saying a purse thief deserves to be blown up
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2012-01-08, 10:44 | Link #17175 |
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@zero: please rewrite the boat part... fanfiction, light novel, anime... no matter what media the Silver Gospel arc was the only real arc that hooked me in, but it was studded with really awkward feel epic moments like that(which amount to really bad story execution for me).
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But what should I do? I meet a wall here!
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2012-01-08, 10:52 | Link #17179 |
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@ Stratos - That was on the wallbangers page on TVtropes. That's a genuine plot hole.
@ Senpai - Love makes ya blind Side note - At least you have the decency to include the main cast first and foremont. Most of these OC's shoulder their way into the main character slot and make the CC fanboys/fangirls 9/10 times who easily get worfed. Side note 2 - Neither of them were able to look each other in the eye after that. The cheery on the top? The picture got put in the ISA site - Students section with the caption " New lovu lovu couple!" In big bold letters on top Irish was pissed. Side note 3 - There are wraps for breasts, are there wraps for that as well? Scene - Don't change it. It's the one thing thing that shows them doing wtf inducing things.
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2012-01-08, 10:52 | Link #17180 | |||
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Maybe I should change the boat scene to Houki went leeroy jenkins and overconfident then.
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