Infinite Stratos Character Creation and Fanfiction Discussion

[HasuMasu]

Like hell, daydreams is probably in my top 5 fics for the Infinite Stratos section.

[StratoSpear]

Originally Posted by agetreme

@StratoSpear: the joke tournament is large than a squad.....

I was more referring to the fight with the two Uchiganes which took place in Inami's Day 1 scene of SWC.

But yeah, towards the end, he joins the fray against Cecilia and Rin alongside Ichika.

He'll most likely have a chance to hold out since he's paired together with an IS.

But if Inami were to face Rin and Cecilia alone, then his chances are slim.

Originally Posted by Eratas123

Karin system? it's been a while since I read Athena Boucelier so I'll need a reminder

Could you read my latest post for SWC? I feel like it's not very good

In Chapter 5, Inami acquires the Karin system alongside the Vanguard unit. While the Vanguard unit is briefly introduced as an integrated weapons booster pack, a somewhat vague description was given about the Karin system.

From Chapter 5:

"As for the Karin… Think of it as the Minerva's version of an IS' One-Off Ability…" - Jinrai's explanation about the Karin system

As for the latest post on SWC, you mean Irish's? I find that one great

While I do not know much about Irish, the chase scene involving him and Tatenashi is pretty much allright. Though I was hoping he didn't have to sit through the train ride with ripped clothes.

[Eratas123]

Originally Posted by StratoSpear

I was more referring to the fight with the two Uchiganes which took place in Inami's Day 1 scene of SWC.

But yeah, towards the end, he joins the fray against Cecilia and Rin alongside Ichika.

He'll most likely have a chance to hold out since he's paired together with an IS.

But if Inami were to face Rin and Cecilia alone, then his chances are slim.




In Chapter 5, Inami acquires the Karin system alongside the Vanguard unit. While the Vanguard unit is briefly introduced as an integrated weapons booster pack, a somewhat vague description was given about the Karin system.

From Chapter 5:


As for the latest post on SWC, you mean Irish's? I find that one great

While I do not know much about Irish, the chase scene involving him and Tatenashi is pretty much allright. Though I was hoping he didn't have to sit through the train ride with ripped clothes.

One off ability? That sounds interesting. Hopefully it's unique.

As for Irish getting ripped clothes, it's Inami's fault He told Tatenashi where he was hiding.

@ Detective - Thanks, Its an experiment to improve my romantic writing so I hope it's working.

Side note - To any body who's read Daydreams, here's a part of Ran's chapter, please tell me if it's okay or not.

Spoiler:

Gotonda Ran was a Maiden in love.

Now you may be asking yourself. Why is she a Maiden in Love? Isn’t she just 14?

Who could make someone so young be so certain that she had found the love of her life?

The answer to that question would (of course) be Ichika Orimura.

Now you’re probably asking yourself: Him again? How did he charm a girl who just entered puberty?

Then sit back and listen to her story.

Gotonda Ran was the second born child of the Gotonda family, her older brother Dan being born first.

Their father had died in a car accident when both were still young which forced the two to grow up without a father figure to guide them.

Despite all this, the family was close and tight knit, they could always count on each other when they had problems.

“NIIIIIII~! WHAT DID YOU DO TO MY CD!?”

“I DIDN’T DO ANYTHING TO YOUR CD! YOU PROBABLY JUST LOST IT AGAIN!”

Well....All families argue right?

“DAN! GIVE RAN BACK HER CD!”

“DON’T YELL AT ME YOU OLD MAN! I SAID I DIDN’T TAKE IT!”

You know the saying: “The more you hate the more you love”?

“DON’T YELL AT YOUR BETTERS LIKE THAT!”

“I’M NOT YELLING AT MY BETTERS, I’M YELLING AT YOU!”

I don’t think that applies here.

“Ara ara, what’s happening here?”

“M-Mom!”

Ren Gotonda was the chain that held the family together, either that or everyone was scared shitless of her.

“I hope none of you are arguing.”

“O-Of course not mom! Right Ran!?”

“Right Nii!”

Sacred shitless seemed more likely.

“Then I hope neither of you are too busy to help with the restaurant.”

“Of course not! We’ll be happy to help!”

All of its members helped in running the “Gotonda eatery”, a family run restaurant that was started by her grandfather.

“Hey it’s Ran-chan!”

“Ran-chan’s here!”

Ran in particular was a blessing in disguise for the small restaurant; many people came just to see her.

“Hey Dan, how’s it going?”

This is also when she first met Ichika Orimura.

[HasuMasu]

Btw, I'd really like to hear your
comments on the draft I posted
a page back.

[ZeroXSEED]

Originally Posted by Eratas123

Why do you need it anyway? If it's for your fic then you can just make it up, we don't exactly know how much money goes to the army there considering the IS beats most infantry units by a mile.

I was taking combined arms in to consideration, you don;t expect mere 10 I.S. is enough to form an army for German don't you?

Originally Posted by StratoSpear

Still contemplating, hence the puzzling

Here's part of the conversation the characters had in the early parts of Chapter 6:

Spoiler for scene:

Maya then steps forward to give the details of the issue.


“We’ve received reports of a rogue IS entering Japanese airspace, the unit codename is Silver Gospel...”


The atmosphere grows tense as the Academy pilots are slightly shocked about the news though they aren’t familiar with the IS’ unit name.


“Silver… Gospel..?” Houki clarifies the name of the rogue IS. Inami recognizes the IS as he’s seen the same name in classified Praxidike reports.


“…Gospel? Jinrai-san, isn’t that the…” He asks. Jinrai nods slightly as he also recalls reading about the IS. Inami then stuns as he realizes that everyone’s eyes are fixated on him.


“Arisawa-kun, you know that unit?” Maya breaks the silence, suspecting that he knows something that the others don’t.


“I uuh… Well…” He mumbles inaudibly while looking at Jinrai, unsure if he should share. Jinrai smiles while gesturing him to go on with his explanation.


“The Silver Gospel is an IS unit built with the collaborative efforts of the USA and Israel IS engineering departments, its’ believed to be one of the most powerful IS units known to the world…”


The pilots, as well as Chifuyu and Maya, grow anxious as they listen to his explanation on the rouge IS. Tabane, being the creator of the IS cores, is also intrigued by the revelation of a malfunctioning IS.


“However, it’s plagued with a history of malfunctions. Most of the time it would go berserk and wreck the immediate area while the test pilot is trapped inside… Usually the issue is quickly resolved but seeing as it has made its way into Japan, it’s no doubt that the Silver Gospel is at optimal combat strength…”


“A rogue IS… The cores’ AI are made similar to each other, there’s no way it would go berserk on its own without an external issue involved.” Tabane speaks up for her creations, in denial that the IS is the one at fault.


“Nevertheless, it still intruded our airspace. We don’t know if the pilot is in control… or if there’s even a pilot to begin with. Only way to find out is to intercept and stop it.” Inami suggests as Chifuyu receives a call on her cellphone.

^ So Tabane is not the one made gospel Berserk?

Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Meister and Zero - Okay, here's Irish's. Read and review.

Side note - He'll be less of a prick in this chapter, it's because he tends to get along well enough with Tatenashi later.

Spoiler:

'This is stupid, I don't see why I have to go through with this.' Irish thought with contempt.

The 14 year old albino was being dragged by the arm by an energetic blue haired girl towards the train station.

'What the hell is Sarashiki wearing in the first place?'

Tatenashi wore a short sleeved blue blouse that matched her hair along with a black skirt and a pair of white high heeled boots. It gave her the appearance of some kind of model.

'How could she hide any weapons there? Is she really that reliant on her IS?'

Irish by contrast wore a long sleeved white shirt, black skinny jeans and a pair of black running shoes. Not very fashionable but you could easily hide a small weapon and the tight fabric made it harder for enemies to grab you.

"Sarashiki, where are we going anyway?" He asked the blue haired girl as he continued to run (get dragged).

"Hm? We're going to the train station of course." She replied as if he asked a stupid question (it probably was).

"I know that." He said exasperatedly. "I meant where do we go after? I didn't know we had a mission."

"We don't have a mission."

"We don't?" He immediately planted his feet on the ground which forced the both of them to stop. "Then why are we going out of the academy and even wearing disguises."

Tatenashi just shook her head left and right as if she was talking to a kid who asked too many questions.

"We're going on a date of course, and these aren't disguises, they're my casual clothes."

'That explains the odd choice in clothing.'

Irish was ignoring the fact that his clothing would probably attract more negative attention than hers any day.

"Wait a minute...date?" He tilted his head in confusion. "What does today's date have to do with anything?"

Irish didn't know that he was in a position most men would kill for at that moment, he simply wondered what the number of the day meant to anything.

"It's not that kind of date, this date is when a boy and girl go to different places to spend time with each other."

"Didn't we do that last week?"

"No Irish, spending two days in a freezing mountain being chased by IS drones does not qualify as a date."

Irish was confused but Tatenashi didn't have time to explain before she had to drag him again towards the train station.

'Wonder what this "date" thing is, hopefully it doesn't have anything to do with more crossdressing.'

The two arrived at the train station shortly before the train left and sat down across each other at an empty car, things were quiet but Irish preferred it that way.

"Hey Irish-kun?"

"Yeah?"

"You thought this was a mission right?" She leaned forward in her seat slightly.

"I did, but apparently it's this "date" thing you mentioned." He shrugged his shoulders.

"Does that mean you brought any weapons?"

Irish felt himself stiffen at her question, he didn't want to tell her for fear of her taking them from him.

"No."

"So you thought this was a mission but you didn't bring any weapons with you." She deadpanned. "Am I understanding this correctly?"

"...That's correct."

Irish was a horrible liar to be sure.

"Give the here." She held out her hand.

He suddenly stood up from his seat. "I'm gonna go to the bath-"

"Oh no you don't!"

With a quick leap, she pinned him to the floor and started searching him for weapons.

"Sarashiki! Let go of me already!" He struggled under her grip.

"You can't bring a knife Irish-kun! Now just give the knife to onee-san." She started to lift up his shirt to keep investigating.

"You take my knife and you'll wake up with your IS in pieces tomorrow!" He threatened her with an obvious bluff.

"I'll take my chances, now give me that knife!"

She completely lifted his shirt and found a knife strapped to his chest, as she reached for it he suddenly pushed her off before running out of the car.

"Wait!"

He ignored her yell and ran as fast as he could to another until he bumped into someone.

"Arisawa?"

He found himself staring at the black haired power armor pilot.

"Irish? What are you doing here?"

"Hiding from Sarashiki, just tell her you didn't see me if you bump into her."

"Alright...I guess."

Irish made his way behind a row of seats and hid behind them, nobody could find him.

"Found you!"

Unless you were Tatenashi that is.

"Let go of me!"

"Not until I find all your weapons!"

With that said, she dragged him towards the bathroom in preparation for the search.

30 minutes later

"Hey Irish-kun, are you alright?"

Both of them were once again sitting on the train car on the way to the city.

"...I feel violated."

Irish's clothes were haphazard and his pants were askew, it looked like he'd been assaulted by a mob.

"It's not my fault you didn't give them up when you had the chance."

"You didn't have to take off my underwear too!"

"You were hiding miniature grenades under them, I couldn't just ignore that."

Irish was silent after that, he couldn't find a way to retort to her accusations.

The rest of the train ride was quiet after that.

Writers block is annoying.

Writers Block is indeed annoying, but it's sadder if you CAN write tencically, but real life issues is interfering your usual schedule.

Originally Posted by Yachiyo

My sequel, no, Part 2 of Where have you been? Chapter 1 is done! I'll just need to clean some errors of it before I publish it. It's kinda short and not as good as what you will expect since I really suck it prologues.

Hmm, i've always been waiting for this.

Originally Posted by Eratas123

I'm sure it'll be fine All of us here are trying to get better in our writing

Side note - Do you have any suggestions for Charlottes daydream? I'm afraid I'm not very romantic

^ As Box said, LIES! ALL LIES!

I mean that your story is shonen-like, doesn't mean it';s bad. in fact, that made it better since men isn't into diabetic romance (bar some exception), the fluffyness must be regulated, balanced with fanservice (sexual or non sexual) and humor.

Originally Posted by Detective-san

Like hell, daydreams is probably in my top 5 fics for the Infinite Stratos section.

Agreed.

[Eratas123]

@ Zero - So is the SWC chapter okay? I need all the reviews and help i can get.

I also posted a part of Ran's draft, I'd appreciate your opinion as well.

[Yachiyo]

I'm off! +10 chars

[ZeroXSEED]

^ Like Box said, it was top notch. The romance is almost on par with Yachi's fic, she's better because, well, she knew how young girls think and feel unlike us men, and girls are notably more romantic just because they are.

However, you ahve this advantage of inserting 'men' jokes that work with the medium, Yachi's jokes are much subtler, hers are drawing faint smiles than giant laughter like yours.

(in the end it's up to the readers to decide which one is better)

The Ran Draft is good, but pelase fix the names, it's Gotanda, not Gotonda (many people made this mistake, in fact)

[Eratas123]

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

^ Like Box said, it was top notch. The romance is almost on par with Yachi's fic, she's better because, well, she knew how young girls think and feel unlike us men, and girls are notably more romantic just because they are.

However, you ahve this advantage of inserting 'men' jokes that work with the medium, Yachi's jokes are much subtler, hers are drawing faint smiles than giant laughter like yours.

(in the end it's up to the readers to decide which one is better)

The Ran Draft is good, but pelase fix the names, it's Gotanda, not Gotonda (many people made this mistake, in fact)

Thanks for the advice I'll change the naming to the proper one later.

Is the SWC chapter for Irish okay so far? If it isn't then I'll have to re-write it. (sorry if I keep asking you, I tend to look for commments so I can improve.)

@ Box - I did post a comment on your draft, or are you referring to zero?

[ZeroXSEED]

^ For my standard, it's enough. If you still want to spice it, then ask Old man.

Also, Box, forget to add but your story is incredibly poetic. You're better at writing bittersweet romance than romance comedy.

[HasuMasu]

Hmm, then I guess the last thing to do is
think of a name for the unnamed OC.

[wavehawk]

Can I ask a favor:

Don't call it "Grimdark". Call it either Noir (Film Noir, not the anime) or Cyberpunk (IS being Sci-fi, more Cyberpunk). Grimdark just sounds cheesy and really doesn't fit.

If you still don't get what I mean:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Film_noir
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cyberpunk

Seriously, for the IS fanfic writer, Cyberpunk is the way to go if you want it interesting and believable.

[Eratas123]

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

^ For my standard, it's enough. If you still want to spice it, then ask Old man.

Also, Box, forget to add but your story is incredibly poetic. You're better at writing bittersweet romance than romance comedy.

You want me to ask Hawke for advice? The last time I tried that he became OPed

@ Detective - Don't forget the nationality and place of birth has a huge factor in deciding ones name. It's kind of hard to find someone named Timmy Turner in Japan but easy in America.

[MeisterBabylon]

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Anyway, anyone having ANY idea how real armed forces works? Especially the logistic and budget. I'm in need of help.

This is a very very BIG question which requires a wiki or two to answer. What exactly are you looking for? Weapons? Doctrines? Rules of Engagement? Weapon allotment? Budget report depends on country, technology and circumstances so need to narrow it down more...

Logistics too...

How large is this army?

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

EDIT: I always thought Max is cake eater... and I was right.

Actually, that's just 1 route you can take him down...

Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Meister

Just some more questions for Max's draft.

1. Does anybody love/ have a crush on him? If there is I'll include her in.

2. Does Browning like him at all or just troll him? I know you said you're just teasing everyone but I have to change it according to this.

3. Doall the teachers get along with him? Particularly Chifuyu and Maya.

Also, I posted first part of Irish's SWC date, please give a review/tips for improvemeny if you can.

1. Actually, no. Each of his possible routes starts either Neutral or Hated with him.

2. Troll, yes, very much. But if Max gets into a typical "harem" situation, Browning does seem to get a tad more violent that her usual violent self... But just a little more violent.

3. Maya and him are more like "friends in the office" level, while Chifuyu doesn't think much of him. So far, I only have her telling Browning to "don't hold back."

[ZeroXSEED]

Except my OC is a male with ambiguous feature and name that can be pronounced both way if written differently...

(Iori Senbei -> Aeolia Schenberg )

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

This is a very very BIG question which requires a wiki or two to answer. What exactly are you looking for? Weapons? Doctrines? Rules of Engagement? Weapon allotment? Budget report depends on country, technology and circumstances so need to narrow it down more...

Logistics too...

How large is this army?

I was thingking about how much budget spent in weapon development, and how many corporations involved in that work.

I don't ask about specific, sorry.

[Yachiyo]

I think I went back. Don't want to sleep for a while ^_^

[Eratas123]

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Except my OC is a male with ambiguous feature and name that can be pronounced both way if written differently...

(Iori Senbei -> Aeolia Schenberg )

My OC doesn't even have a proper name It's actually symbolic. Irish could be anyone really. His looks are due to the skull suit, his fighting style based on experience and even his attitude was taken from somewhere else.

Essentially. Even if it wasn't "Yuriko" who got screwed over and it was somebody else then there would still be someone named "Irish" if the events still happened to someone else.

This is the reasoning I'm using for the film noir fic which has "Irish" and <Ren> in it. He's not the same one from the drafts as evident by his psychotic attitude.

[HasuMasu]

Since I'm an Evangelion fan, how about I just call him Adam.

[Saint X]

*warps in*

*drops something small from Development*

Spoiler for Snapshot from the Future:

'xA rre sYEnYEkLYEkLYO diviega, neee elle SILVER=GOSPEL/.'

[Core Code Manifestation: OK]
[Code Code Drawout: OK]
[Drawing Void Ideal Weapon from Host Core: Silver Gospel]
[Draw Complete]


'xE harr Maria=Estevez, wYEsA Adiviega_SILVER=GOSPEL, en gYAvYNwLYI jenge yorr/.'

[Link with User Complete]
[Control Established]
[Void Ideal Weapon Online]


"This is..."

The extremely huge silvery sword was inscribed with the words [SILVERINE] on it, a sort of clue as to where it came from.

cookies for those that can translate the "somehow readable" Hymmnos chant that i made up (i have to verify with the hymmnos-speaking community if it is correct though)

And also, i now know what OP i should use for my still in planning IS fic-ish thing.

Spoiler for From this Season of Shows:

cookies for those that guess the sources too

*warps out*

[ZeroXSEED]

^ Above post seems like something came out from Cthulhu mythos...

Originally Posted by Detective-san

Since I'm an Evangelion fan, how about I just call him Adam.

Talk about symbolism.