Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Kireen]

You know, after sleeping over this I realized a thing, I have a terrible headache.

Anyway for Fate adoption, if Lindy can get away with having all her family live on Earth, why can't Shirou just adopt a girl that more or less came out from nowhere. And yes, there is Raiga around, and if my plan actually starts producing something more than headaches, there's gonna be an eventual LindyXShirou pairing (Other possibilites being Signum and Reinforce, but Lindy being the most probale one), so I guess that she can take care of things too.

Ya know, mybe I should just dig back my old DenYuuDen crossover attempt and start translating and expanding it, that looks way easier, if it wasn't that my knowledge is limited to the anime and the damned thing started spawning OCs like a plague.

[Andarkoshi]

Originally Posted by Kireen

You know, after sleeping over this I realized a thing, I have a terrible headache.

Anyway for Fate adoption, if Lindy can get away with having all her family live on Earth, why can't Shirou just adopt a girl that more or less came out from nowhere. And yes, there is Raiga around, and if my plan actually starts producing something more than headaches, there's gonna be an eventual LindyXShirou pairing (Other possibilites being Signum and Reinforce, but Lindy being the most probale one), so I guess that she can take care of things too.

Ya know, mybe I should just dig back my old DenYuuDen crossover attempt and start translating and expanding it, that looks way easier, if it wasn't that my knowledge is limited to the anime and the damned thing started spawning OCs like a plague.

Well the key issues are that

a) Lindy is a person with lots of authority (Admiral)

b) Fate is a convicted criminal

c) Shirou is just Some Guy who popped up out of nowhere and got involved.

If Shirou got Lindy's support then it might work out, particularly if he gives something to TSAB like information or his services. Also you'd need to build up the Fate/Shirou relationship to the point where Fate would feel comfortable with Shirou and would want to stay with him.

[Twi]

Originally Posted by Andarkoshi

Well the key issues are that

a) Lindy is a person with lots of authority (Admiral)

b) Fate is a convicted criminal

c) Shirou is just Some Guy who popped up out of nowhere and got involved.

If Shirou got Lindy's support then it might work out, particularly if he gives something to TSAB like information or his services. Also you'd need to build up the Fate/Shirou relationship to the point where Fate would feel comfortable with Shirou and would want to stay with him.

What the tentacle abomination said. You can't just put to people together and say that it works. That's a crappy relationship there. Fate needs to trust Shirou and Lindy is not only older than him, but has a son and is a widower. There is a mountain load of baggage there. Put more thought into it rather than using a relationship to solve a problem that can be fixed without pairing anyone up. Maybe Shirou is better off single.

Also, what happened with Rin in the story? Are they on bad terms or what?

[Kireen]

First, the Shirou of my story is around the same age as Lindy, second, the two of them have few things in common, they booth lost their loved one because of a powerful magical artifact, the differece is that one had to watch without being able to do a thing and the other was the one that gave the killer blow, they both have baggage, and i plan to use that to bring them closer, it's not an istantaneous thing.

The main purpose of the pairing was to have a resemblance of a 'normal family' for Fate.

As for Rin, she's at the Clock Tower busy being troll... err...taught by the old vampire bastard, and they are still in good terms.

[Andarkoshi]

What Kireen said made me remember one thing I wanted to ask.

What is TSAB's standing regarding fraternity and similar stuff? I mean if I understand it right in normal military a situation where one member of family is a superior and the other subordinate wouldn't be allowed to avoid preferential treatment. But we have Chrono and Lindy on Asura and there Might have been Clyde and Lindy during the previous Book of Darkness incident (if we are using Movie continuity).

[Lhklan]

Well, guess I'll continue this...

Spoiler for Fire Emblem: Aces:

Chapter 1: Temporary leave

"Are you sure about this, Chrono?"

On a hill overlooking Mid Childa, two persons stood. One was a green haired woman in her 30s riding a pegasus, asking her companion in concern. The other, a blue haired young man clad in light black armor and a spear on his back, stares back, determination in his eyes.

"I am Mother. I know that Father is still alive out there. He is too skilled for a simple MIA during a border patrol. I will find him and bring him home."

The woman sighed, before smiling at her son.

"I know that I can't stop you when you look like that. But please, take care of yourself. I ... don't think I can handle losing both of you at once."

"I will. I promise you that I will return, along with Father."

Before the woman can reply, the sound of a horse running drew their attention. Soon, an armored knight approaches them. When he reached their location, the man lifted his faceplate, revealing a familiar face to the two.

"Sir Graham? What are you doing here?" The youth bowed.

"Do remember that I am both your instructor and a friend of your father. Did you really think I would not join your journey?" The knight replied, before bowing in the woman's direction. "Do not fret, Lady Harlaown. I will see to it that young Chrono return safely."

"Please, call me Lindy. We're both friends here." Lindy smiled back. "Knowing that you will accompany him ease my heart."

The knight nodded, before turning to Chrono. "Well then, we leave on your mark Chrono. And no formality. We are not in the army right now. Just call me as you would"

"Yes sir- I mean Graham. I shall take my leave now, mother."

"Godspeed my son."

**********

Their first destination was Ruwella, seeing as it was the last known location of Clyde Harlaown, Chrono's father. To fastest way to do so, however was to head south through a small part of Orussia, a country currently plagued by civil war. Bandits had taken this opportunity to wreck havoc in Orussia, with occasional incursion into Mid Childa and Ruwella’s territory.

Unfortunately, Chrono and Gilliam encountered one such incursion during their journey.

They were heading toward a small village near the border when they saw it. A group of men were surrounding a caravan, howling and roaring with laughter. As they approach, they found out why: A brown haired youth - no older than 15, Chrono estimated - was fighting a lance wielder.

Judging by the situation, Chrono knew that it would be a matter of time before the lancer’s superior range gives him a win. Nodding to Graham, Chrono silently approached the group, and readied his javelin. As soon as he's in range, Chrono took aim and launch it, hitting the surprised lancer straight in his back. Not allowing them a chance to fully recover, Chrono and Gilliam charged in, the paladin soon among their ranks, his spear making short works of those who were in its path. The blunette soon found himself engaging with two axemen and a swordsman. The youth, having recovered from his surprise, had also joined the fray, his sword quick and precise.

"D-d-damn you!" The swordsman cried out. "Our boss won't let you get away with this."

"Your boss can talk with me when he got here." Chrono replied, stabbing said bandit in the guts.

A few minutes later, the trio had managed to take out all of the bandits. Chrono had directed the caravan to the nearest town, telling them to hurry since more bandits might be approaching. When that was done, he turned toward the brunette, who was catching his breath.

"You did well back there. What's your name?"

"Thoma, sir" The youth bowed.

"Chrono. And no formality, please. I'm not a knight right now." Chrono waved his hand, before pointing to his companion "That's Gilliam.

"Unfortunately, it seems proper introduction would have to wait, as it appears that their boss had arrived." the grey haired man noted, pointing at a dust of cloud.

"Wha-! You! What did you do to my men?!" The boss of his group exclaimed when he saw the bodies of his men.

"As you can see, we killed them. In the name of justice and all that." Chrono dryly replied.

"Why you lit-" The man found himself unable form any coherent words as an arrow lodged itself in his throat.

A javelin took out another bandit. The group whirled around, trying to find the hidden attackers. While still surprised at the unexpected help, Chrono was not one to pass out a chance and rushed at the enemy. Gilliam and Thoma soon joined him, cutting down any who gets in their way. Those that tried to get away were all took down by arrows and javelins.

"Well, that sure was lucky. I wonder who was it that helped us?" Thoma wondered.

Their question was answered when a pegasus landed in front of them, revealing two familiar faces to Chrono.

"Vice? Amy? What are you doing here?"

"Hello Chrono, Gilliam, kid-that-I-don't-know. I heard about what happened to your father. Figures you can use the help" The man named Vice replied. "Amy here offered to give me a ride."

"You and Amy?" Chrono raised an eyebrow at that.

"No need to get jealous. We were working on the same job" Vice smirked when he saw Amy blushing, though it diminished when the same didn't happen to Chrono.

"Nice to see you again, Chrono. You too Gilliam. Though you're still as stiff as ever." Amy smiled, but it soon turn into a frown "Unfortunately, I have to return to Alzas. Seems like something happened back there."

"I see. Thank you for the help and good luck."

After Amy left, the four of them set up camp around the nearest river. As he took the first watch, Chrono can't help but look up, frowning when he noticed a small star dimming in the distance.

"That ... can't be a good sign" Chrono muttered to himself.

Spoiler for Current party:

- Chrono (Harlaown)
Class: Lord.
Weapon: S2U, Javelin
- Gil (Graham)
Class: Paladin
Weapon: Silver lance, Steel Sword
- Thoma (Avenir)
Class: Mercenary
Weapon: Iron Sword
- Vice (Granscenic)
Class: Archer
Weapon: Iron Bow

I'm ignoring the level prospect since except for GIl, all of them would be at least.
Large and medium scale battle aren't my forte it seems. Ah well.

Edit: Oh yeah, almost forgot. This is what the continent looks like to me.

[Kireen]

A bit on the short side, and maybe you should expand the Thoma joins the party scene a bit, it felt a bit rushed. It's not bad, but you should expand it a little.

Also new reports, I feel that my already low quality has dropped again, but I'm still posting them. I feel that it's going to be difficult to top the Jail son in law one.

Spoiler for Report 09&10:

Mission Report 09: Not exactly as planned.

The next morning Yuuno Scrya’s usually hyperactive mind was having a hard time rebooting after the abnormal quantity of alcohol he had ingested, and god knows what Chrono and the two other idiots had made him do while he was not in full possession of his mental faculties.

Seriously, why was he feeling so tired, and why was his head hurting so much. The three bastards were pretty much signed in for the worst torture he could come up with.

Maybe he could call in some favor from his insanely powerful childhood friends to have some help in his holy quest.

Finally, once his brain slowly started to work again, the young librarian finally managed to get up to a sitting position, massaging his temples as he tried to remember what happened, slowly turning his head as he heard a rustling sound from his side.

“Uhm?...AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!” Two identical voices shouted at the same time as a pair of emerald green eyes met an identical one.

“What the hell…” Yuuno muttered as he stared at what looked like a reflection of his face on a mirror, only more feminine, and he was sure that those were definitely breasts, and fairly large ones by his standards.

If it was one of Chrono’s jokes, it was definitely not funny.

“Oh, my god, if this is one of Hayate’s jokes it’s not funny.” His female counterpart voiced his thoughts, but apparently it looked like their first suspect was quite different.

“I’d really love to tell you that this is all a joke, but I’m sadly in your same condition.” He replied giving her an apologetic look. “And by the way, on my side I think that it was Chrono’s fault.”

“But Chrono always treats me nicely.” The female Yuuno replied looking stupefied from his declaration.

“So does my Hayate.”

“She always calls me Ferret-girl, and she never misses an occasion to prank me.”
“Welcome to the club, Ferret-boy here.” Yuuno shrugged.

“Oh hell, that was my first time.” The female blonde cried. “ Wait, does it count as mastur…”

“Stop!” The male one stopped her, extending one hand. “Please don’t go into Hayate’s territory.”

“Right. Well, at least some things are the same even in different universes.” Fem-Yuuno sighed, letting out a small giggle.

Yuuno had to mentally kick himself, reminding that the one in from of him was an alternate version of himself, not just a pretty girl, better keep his thoughts in check.

“So, how did this happen?” He finally asked after taking a deep breath.

“I have some theories.” Fem-Yuuno replied rubbing her temples.

“I have some too, let’s compare notes.”

*Three hours of magi-technobabble and a breakfast later.*

“Soooo, the best of what the two of us could come up with is a Lost Logia did it and it’s all Chrono/Hayate’s fault.” Male Yuuno sighed in defeat. “It’s rather depressing.”

“Agreed.” Fem Yuuno nodded. “I guess that the only thing we can do is focusing on what we can do for now.”

“Yeah, I was just going to propose that too.”

“So, are you thinking what I’m thinking?” The female one asked smirking.
“If it involves lots of mindfuck and binds then I think that we are on the same channel.”

“As I hoped, let’s get started.”

That day two pranksters form different universes understood that what they did the previous night was not exactly their best plan ever.

One meek ferret was a thing, but two angry ones… May the Kaiser help their souls.

Mission Report 10: Blessed wind.

The next day Yuuno Scrya was feeling that being lazy for just one day sounded like a good plan, at least until the damned headache decided to subside.

Yes, his bed felt very warm and comfortable at the moment.

“…ese,..iege, it’s tim…ke up.” Apparently someone had different plans for him, as he heard a gentle voice trying to wake him up from his condition of half-sleep.

“…”

“Please my liege, wake up.” He heard the voice call him again as the owner started to gently shake him.

“Two more minutes, please.” He managed to say in a tired voice.

When did he hire a maid again?

…Wait, he didn’t…

“!?” Was his expressive response upon seeing the person that was standing in front of him, it was impossible to forget about that face.

“Good morning my liege.” The silver haired beauty in front of him welcomed his awakening with a radiant smile.

“R-Reinforce?” He asked as his voice was finally able to come out. “How’s this possible, you are supposed to be…”

“Master Yuuno does not remember about yesterday?” The unison device asked tilting her head to the side.

“No, can you tell me?” He replied trying to sort out his memories, with very little success. “And why are you calling me Master?”

“I don’t know exactly what happened.” The busty silverette answered. “But you were the first thing I saw once I opened my eyes, a-and then we had to … perform a ritual in order to stabilize me, and tie my existence to yours.” She replies starting to blush as she explained the situation.

“Ah…” Yuuno remained speechless as he remembered what sort of ritual they performed, starting to blush as well. “I’m sorry…”

“Don’t be, I’m grateful for what you did.” Reinforce interrupted him. “A-And I-I found it quite enjoyable…” She muttered as her cheeks became even redder.

After the Device declaration, an embarrassed silence fell down in the room as booth the occupants were busy not looking in the other’s face.

“I should probably start fixing some breakfast.” The unison device said, deciding to dispel the silence. “Please take you time getting dressed.”

“Ah, you don’t need to.”

“Please, let me show you my gratitude.” Reinforce requested. “And I want to start helping my new master.”

“O-Ok, I’ll be down shortly.” Yuuno finally agreed, starting to get dressed as the woman got out of the room.

Once he was ready the first thing he did was calling Chrono, even if everything looked alright he needed to let someone know before problems started to arise, and considering his luck they would come to him soon.

“Ohi, Ferret-boy, what’s the matter, we thought that we had lost you yesterday.” The admiral greeted him as the communication screen opened.

“Chrono, please tell me what happened before I went away.” The librarian requested in a serious tone.

“I admit that we exaggerated a bit yesterday.” Chrono started. “But suddenly you went all ‘Screw this, if I can’t find one I’ll make one myself’ and then you disappeared. What happened?”

“Well, I think that we might have a small problem.” Yuuno replied rubbing the back of his head.

“What kind of problem?” Chrono asked frowning.

“That kind of problem.” He answered, turning the communication screen to show his friend what was happening in his kitchen, namely Reinforce cooking while humming a happy tune.

“PFFFF! What the hell did you do ferret!” Chrono shouted, spitting his coffee, and making Yuuno very grateful that he was not in front of the young admiral in that moment. “Little problem my ass! I’m going to strangle you!”

“No harm shall be done to my Master.” Reinforce suddenly spoke in a deadly cold tone as black wings sprouted from his back and red war paint appeared on her face. “Did I made myself clear?”

“C-Crystal!” The admiral stuttered in fear.

“Is there something on my face?” The silverette asked in a puzzled tone as she noticed her now master strange expression, suddenly returning to her previous appearance as if nothing happened.

“N-Nothing.”

“Ferret, I think that we’ll need to do some tests.” Chrono informed his friend. “And there will be lots of paper work to do.” He added sighing.

“Aye.” Yuuno nodded as he watched the silver haired beauty move around the kitchen, hoping that her skills were better than Shamal ones.

He did not wish to know how she would react if he told her that her cooking was bad.

Oh, well, he could handle that for now, at least his new companion looked happy, and he was sore that Hayate was going to be happy too.

[bhl88]

Originally Posted by Kireen

A bit on the short side, and maybe you should expand the Thoma joins the party scene a bit, it felt a bit rushed. It's not bad, but you should expand it a little.

Also new reports, I feel that my already low quality has dropped again, but I'm still posting them. I feel that it's going to be difficult to top the Jail son in law one.

Spoiler for Report 09&10:

“Ferret, I think that we’ll need to do some tests.” Chrono informed his friend. “And there will be lots of paper work to do.” He added sighing.

“Aye.” Yuuno nodded as he watched the silver haired beauty move around the kitchen, hoping that her skills were better than Shamal ones.

He did not wish to know how she would react if he told her that her cooking was bad.

Oh, well, he could handle that for now, at least his new companion looked happy, and he was sore that Hayate was going to be happy too.

Don't forget Reinforce Alter.

And it looks like the harem multiplied by 5, adding everyone in the family who sleeps in the same bed as Yuuno.

Yuuno: Zafira, help me!
Zafira: ..... pass. -_-

[Craxuan]

Report 09 was absolutely, completely unexpected. YOU GOT ME GOOD THERE!

Report 10, well... SO SERIOUS! I CAN'T EVEN LAUGH AT HOW SERIOUS THINGS WERE WRITTEN!

[bhl88]

Reinforce has a yandere side too xD

[WarpObscura]

Originally Posted by Andarkoshi

What Kireen said made me remember one thing I wanted to ask.

What is TSAB's standing regarding fraternity and similar stuff? I mean if I understand it right in normal military a situation where one member of family is a superior and the other subordinate wouldn't be allowed to avoid preferential treatment. But we have Chrono and Lindy on Asura and there Might have been Clyde and Lindy during the previous Book of Darkness incident (if we are using Movie continuity).

It looks like they don't have any issue with (possible) nepotism, at least from what I know.

[bhl88]

I predicted Rule 63 would come xD

[Kireen]

Originally Posted by Craxuan

Report 09 was absolutely, completely unexpected. YOU GOT ME GOOD THERE!

Report 10, well... SO SERIOUS! I CAN'T EVEN LAUGH AT HOW SERIOUS THINGS WERE WRITTEN!

09: Hehe, glad you liked it.

10: Uhm...Sorry?

[Craxuan]

As in the tone is completely different from the other 9 reports. =3

[Kireen]

Eh, I know, but nothing better came to mind at the time, I just finished writing the aftermath of a huge action sequence when i wrote it, the mood was not the best one fot hat kind of story.

[Lhklan]

Spoiler for Support Conversation: Chrono & Yuuno:

C Support
Chrono: You still alive back there ferret?
Yuuno: What's that supposed to mean?
Chrono: Well you look so frail that I'm afraid you'll keel over at any moment.
Yuuno: Hardy har har. Very funny. I'm not going to die that easily. Oh, hold on.
Chrono: What the-! Oi, that was dangerous you know!
Yuuno: I'm not Hayate you know. I can aim pretty well. Beside, the worst that could happen is you losing your hair. I think it suits you actually.
Chrono: Now who's being the funny one? ... And that's 12 for me.
Yuuno: Counting the one I just shot at, I'm at 13. Looks like you're getting slow.
Chrono: Grrrr. I'm not losing to you!

B Support
Yuuno: Something wrong Chrono? This gloom and doom aura of yours is disturbing.
Chrono: Hmmm. Just thinking.
Yuuno: You mean brooding.
Chrono: THINKING, ferret. I've been wondering... Who would raise these undead? Considering that they almost destroyed the world once, wouldn't it have been better not to use them.
Yuuno: I honestly have no idea how to answer that. Perhaps for power. Perhaps for love. Who knows?
Chrono: Love? If all of this is for love, then that is one twisted love. Even so...
Yuuno: We'll stop them. No matter what. Right?
Chrono: *chuckles* You know me too well ferret.

A Support
Yuuno: How did ... things get this bad?
Chrono: I ... have no idea. Still, this doesn't bode well.
Yuuno: Geez, you think? Somehow the soldiers we just killed come back as undead immediately. That's not how it's supposed to work damn it!
Chrono: There's a rule for this kind of stuff?
Yuuno: Not really. Research showed that usually, it took at least 1-2 days before an infected rise up from the graves. But this...
Chrono: I see... Guess we'll just have to make sure that they stay dead, huh?
Yuuno: You bet. And try not to die in the process too. Otherwise...
Chrono: Hah. I'll sooner throw myself into a fireball then let them kill me.
Yuuno: I'll be happy to shoot that fireball at you. If you turn, of course.
Chrono: And I'll gladly chop you to pieces if you become one of them.
Yuuno: Looks like it's a deal. Don't die, Chrono.
Chrono: You too... Yuuno.

[Kireen]

Originally Posted by Lhklan

Spoiler for Support Conversation: Chrono & Yuuno:

C Support
Chrono: You still alive back there ferret?
Yuuno: What's that supposed to mean?
Chrono: Well you look so frail that I'm afraid you'll keel over at any moment.
Yuuno: Hardy har har. Very funny. I'm not going to die that easily. Oh, hold on.
Chrono: What the-! Oi, that was dangerous you know!
Yuuno: I'm not Hayate you know. I can aim pretty well. Beside, the worst that could happen is you losing your hair. I think it suits you actually.
Chrono: Now who's being the funny one? ... And that's 12 for me.
Yuuno: Counting the one I just shot at, I'm at 13. Looks like you're getting slow.
Chrono: Grrrr. I'm not losing to you!

B Support
Yuuno: Something wrong Chrono? This gloom and doom aura of yours is disturbing.
Chrono: Hmmm. Just thinking.
Yuuno: You mean brooding.
Chrono: THINKING, ferret. I've been wondering... Who would raise these undead? Considering that they almost destroyed the world once, wouldn't it have been better not to use them.
Yuuno: I honestly have no idea how to answer that. Perhaps for power. Perhaps for love. Who knows?
Chrono: Love? If all of this is for love, then that is one twisted love. Even so...
Yuuno: We'll stop them. No matter what. Right?
Chrono: *chuckles* You know me too well ferret.

A Support
Yuuno: How did ... things get this bad?
Chrono: I ... have no idea. Still, this doesn't bode well.
Yuuno: Geez, you think? Somehow the soldiers we just killed come back as undead immediately. That's not how it's supposed to work damn it!
Chrono: There's a rule for this kind of stuff?
Yuuno: Not really. Research showed that usually, it took at least 1-2 days before an infected rise up from the graves. But this...
Chrono: I see... Guess we'll just have to make sure that they stay dead, huh?
Yuuno: You bet. And try not to die in the process too. Otherwise...
Chrono: Hah. I'll sooner throw myself into a fireball then let them kill me.
Yuuno: I'll be happy to shoot that fireball at you. If you turn, of course.
Chrono: And I'll gladly chop you to pieces if you become one of them.
Yuuno: Looks like it's a deal. Don't die, Chrono.
Chrono: You too... Yuuno.

Kind sir, you made my day.

[Lhklan]

Originally Posted by Kireen

Kind sir, you made my day.

Thanks. Chrono still have 5-6 supports to go, considering he's the Lord of the game. I'm planning for Amy (his wife in Nanoha), Nanoha (his GF in Triangle Hearts), Carim (My choice ), Vice, Gilliam and Lindy. Yup, Chrono's mom'll join the game later. She, Amy and Nanoha makes up the Pegasus Trio.

[bhl88]

XD can you use other characters like Levi?
Levi: Original's Onii-chan?
Chrono: HNGHH!

Or
Kyrie: Iya-n~ Chrono-kun is a perve-
Chrono: Am not! >o<

[Lhklan]

Levi would have one with Fate, Alicia, Precia, Yuuno (referencing Material Days) and Chrono. Chrono would be on the lowest priority due to the fact that he find her over-activeness a bit much.

Kyrie... would probably have the largest number of male supports.