Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Sam the Onion]

Originally Posted by Satashi

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Thanks

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

BUT! All I just posted was and belongs on the character relationship board.

Originally Posted by KoSSa

@Thread - sorry for ot, I just cannot help myself.

Even that I could elaborate my points better and clear some misunderstandings you seem to have, these two points are something I agree perfectly.

Which is why I am not going to talk about this anymore.

Spoiler for Scenarios 64 & 65:

”TEANA!” Nanoha screamed as her partner flew across to a wall by round shadows. She swore she heard something crack.

”Nice plan.” Same praised the woman slowly walking to her.

-Axel Shooter- Nanoha shot at the man while running from the blades following her.

Without even looking where the blasts came from, black shields came to block them all.

”Damn! She is going to die!” Nanoha cursed herself. Teana's plan would have been good, despite it's rashness, if they had known what this man could do. If Nanoha had known it, she would have never accepted it.

”I try to make it quickly.” The boy waved his hand and black strings pierced Teana's hands.

”Aaaaarg...” Teana screamed from agony as her hands turned black.

”Damn these blades!” Nanoha cursed and shot at them but they absorbed everything. ”Damn!”

Teana was now facing the man and made a final attempt to save her life. ”Yo-you don't have to do this!”

”Screw this!” Nanoha stopped moving and aimed Raising Heart at the man. ”Raising Heart lets blast that man to bits. Full power, no change for recovery.”

[Yes, Master.] The staff replied happily and began loading masses of cartridges

-Round Shield- Nanoha casted at the black items flying towards her and started the countdown. ”Please last...” She pleaded while reinforcing the shield, which was constantly being drained by the illogically monstrous shadows, with every bit of mana she had to spare.

A pink magic insignia, almost half the size of the room appeared in the front of Nanoha.
”You don't deserve to die here.” The man raised his arm.
Pink lights gathered at a point aimed towards the man.
”But some things in life don't go like you wanted.”
The lights continued to gather until a giant globe of energy was formed in the center of the insignia.
Nanoha dispelled her shield to gain another hand for steadying her staff, but at the same time the blades gained an easy path to her arm.
-STARLIGHT BREAKER!-
He lowered his hand and sent the items towards Teana.

”Eh...?” Same turned his head first at the pink rings around his limbs and then towards the pink ray coming at him. -Soul Infused Formation: Devouring Chrysanthemum- Every object around him formed four layers, resembling an air-conditioner, that faced the ray. They started to spin around at quick speed and changed their positions in the four layers, creating a constantly reforming unpenetrable wall. No human would be able to make the path for each one of them.

”You survived.” He smiled at the woman next to him as the shadows started to break.

Eventually the shadow barrier was devoured by the beam and Same was enculfed inside it. A loud thump came from the other end as if he had flown there by the power.

The blades on Nanoha's right arm dissapeared and Teana fell painfully on her knees.

”There was something seriously wrong with those shadows...” Nanoha panted strongly. ”You okay?.” She asked from the girl shivering on the ground, while walking to her.

”I-I-I... am alive...?” Teana shaked on the ground and wrapped her hands around her knees. ”I survived...” Her terror turned slowly into hysterical laughter.

”It's over now.” Nanoha comforted with her left hand, as her right didn't work well.

”Ooohohohoo~ You got me there.” A voice from the dust cloud praised.

Nanoha and Teana were shocked as the man without any real barriers exhaled smoke and stood from a direct hit of Starlight Breaker.

”You really got me there.” Same staggered back and forth, trying to keep his balance. His thin robe had been shredded almost complitely and his left arm seemed to be bent unhumanely. ”But... not fatal enough.” His shoulders jumped up and down maliciously. The red fire aura appeared around him again, coloring the foggy area ominously in hellish red.

”No, no, no...” Teana crawled away from the man.

-I call the army of dead. Goddess Lucine, grant me, your acolyte, loyal troops from the fields of Aralest, the golden land of the dead. Gate of Aralest!- He lifted his right arm and a golden gate appeared behind him, opening slowly.

”Damn magical damage... Get up Teana, the battle isn't over.” Nanoha readied her staff.

”I'm going to die!” Teana sobbed.

”We're both going to die, if you don't!” Nanoha screamed turning towards the girl.

-Come, servants of Lucine and serve me as your master!- From the gate six gold armored soldiers appeared. The gate was like vertical water and flickered like if stones were thrown to a mellow lake whenever a warrior step out from it.

”But...”

”Get a hold of yourself!” Nanoha snapped the shivering girl's head. ”There will be much worse situations. Did you think this job would always be just training or beating mindless drones!?”

”I-I...” Teana stuttered trying to say something but couldn't.

”If you can't do anything, stay home.” Nanoha raised her staff ready for battle.

”I-I...” She continued to stutter.
Was she ready to risk her life for those she wouldn't know?
Was she prepeared to sacrifice others for those she didn't know?
”I...”

”Oh, stop sniveling already!” Nanoha ordered loudly. ”Think it some other time, now we FIGHT!”

”Ye-yes!” Something in Nanoha's voice made Teana rise from the ground despite all her pain. Her knees wouldn't stop shaking and holding weapons seemed impossible as she could barely feel her arms. But as long as she was standing, there was something she could do.

”5 attack, 1 protect!” The man ordered before falling on the ground unconscious.

”See? This isn't even a proplem.” Nanoha encouraged Teana.

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”How long has it been?” I asked my superior, Vita.

”How should I know?!” She answered running away from the blinding fast green blade.

”How do you bother?” The still unharmed man appeared in front of us. His grimson red gown fluttered like it was being pulled as if it wanted to continue moving.

”Run!” Vita screamed and swung her hammer at the man who easily blocked the blow and swung his other blade at Vita. ”Aaaagh!” The real blade stop at Vita's weapon but the green beam attached to it twisted to hit her. I was surprised it didn't leave a stream like before.

”I got you.” I catched the falling warrior before another blinding fast slice came flying. It was definetly the longest 7 minutes in my life.

But... why am I so calm?
This is easily the most grim situation I've ever faced, but still... I am calm as ever.

I know that it is normal for experienced people to be calm in situations like this. But I'm not that experienced...

-Abyss Move: Ambidextrous- Linque casted slowing his arms and the beautiful green lights followed in slow motion. I don't know how I even had the time to look this but I guess the light show was just too mesmerizing.

I knew how fast the hits would come. The blades would unintentionally twist from the speed, making it possible to see them coming. I don't even know why he used those two moves together, there was little he gained from it.

Showing unintented acrobatics I moved in the deadly waves of green light. ”Where did I get this good in this?” I pondered jumping over some blades and spinning away from other, amazingly still keeping Vita on my shoulder.

”Ugh...” I cursed when I failed in a dodge and a green stream attached to my leg. I couldn't really feel it but something in the back of my head told that there was something wrong with my left leg. A green light pulsed like a blood vein, waiting to pierce my skin.

”This is very bothersome.” Linque appeared in front of us again.

But I was ready for this and kicked him to his groin. If that doesn't make him lose his consentration, nothing will.

The man gasped and dropped his blades to the floor. The stream in my leg lost it's keeper and I felt a striking pain from it, like if a knife was thrown to it. Still... the red spot in his head stayed even that his green blades dissapeared with a blast of wind.

Wait a second... Wasn't he suppose to be unharmable?

”Women...” He raised with feminine vigor and picked his weapons up.

Without much consideration I threw Vita to the side and readied myself against the man before he could recreate those blades.

Linque tilted his head. ”You seem like a rookie, but you don't act like one.” He complimented.

”Thank you.” I ran towards the man. [Acceleration] My device aided me in the trip.

Why was I this calm?
He had taken out Vita and was still uninjured, excluding the fatal wound in his head, yet I decided to face him in a duel where could only be one loser.

I was destined to lose this duel.

For a moment I was winning but he quickly made me stay on defensive. My one armed hand wasn't enough to block everything, so I casted small barriers with my other. I was surprised that he didn't ignore it like before. Even with my rollerblades I couldn't gain any distance from the man. He ran as fast as I could, not to mention his teleportations.

I really think that I have some concentration issues. His movement was kinda girly. Like a ballet dancer he spun from side to side so gracefully that dying to it would have been disgracing it.

I was no match for him; I knew it from the beginning. His dual wield swordmanship was superior to anything I had seen. In a class of it's own.

He finished me with a strong kick and I stumbled on my butt, letting out an unexpected moan.
How could I have ever been this calm?

”You don't seem to fear death?” He walked mercilessly towards me, who despite all was rubbing my bottom from the tiny pain. To me it was like a reflex. He kept his blades to his sides just for the look, which, to me, was very cool and menacing pose.

”I was just wondering that too.” I answered from the ground. There was plenty of time to rise but I couldn't. His pose was so commanding that I could easily feel invisible straps bind me to the ground.

”Ever wondered why?” The red clothed man stopped in front of me. There was barely any range between us and any second two well aimed strikes would kill me.

I don't think I have... I had always thought my life was filled with joy and happiness. Was I really missing something that much?
But I didn't want to die; that's for certain. But I couldn't bring myself to counter this man.
Why? There are much more at stake then just my life. He was obviously going to kill me. Yet I just watched his arms rising for a strike.

”You might get lucky. I'm running out of time.” He smiled, keeping the blades behind his red head. Gradually the blades and arms turned bright red, possibly storing strike force. ”I'll never get a change to use this move again; so, how about we gamble? Which comes first: 7 minutes elapse or I am happy with strike force.” He could do that in the pact, yet he fought to kill? Somebody really messed up here, but I guess the bond is effect by their own personalities. I think he really is merciful. Nobody would live even for a second after a slice like that. Unless it hit a leg or such, which would have been pretty nasty.

Accepting the bet, I closed my eyes.
But why? I could try to escape as he had little time left. But I actually wait for him to kill me?

”You really are careless today.” I heard Vita's voice in front of me.

”Hum?” I opened my eyes to see what was going on and Linque turned his head at the little girl behind him. With a little tilt in my head I could see a small girl behind the man. The two had similarly colored outfits and it was surprisingly hard to see which was which.

[Raketenform] Graf Eisen transformed into a rocket. -Raketen Hammer- Vita yelled and struck the man to his side.

But nothing happened. The missile kept spinning in Linque's stomach only shredding his clothes. ”Um...” Linque looked at the the weapon in his guts, dissapointed. ”I thought you knew I was invulrenable now.” He turned around still loading his hands with power. The next blow would utterly annihilate anything it hit.

Vita's eyes widened from her stupidity. Nothing could hurt the man. Not until he lost his consentration or 7 minutes had elapsed. Was 7 minutes really this long?

”Good bye Vita-chan.” He smirked and kicked the weakened warrior against a pillar, pinning her there by holding his shoe on her throat. He would cut his leg with the hit but he was dead already, so I guess he didn't care.

But this won't do. Vita might care for her life; I had never asked anything about people's life, not that Vita would ever answer.

Before I even noticed I am on my feet and sneaking towards the man's unprotected back.
But he is invulrenable. What can I even do?
Even a kick to a groin didn't make him lose his focus.

After a second's planning I press myself against his back, avoiding the swords and blew air to his ear.

”Ah.” Linque swung his arms and threw his blades through the sturdy stone pillar. He himself flew to a my right leaving a stream of blood behind him. All this was harmonized by two loud cracks; one from the force from his head travelling through his spine, crushing every bone that came to it's way, and another from his hands hitting his extended leg shattering not only the leg but the arms hitting it as well. Nobody could have imagined the pain he felt in those few seconds.

But I only laughed at this.
”Aaahahahhaha~!” I held my stomach from the event. Not about Linque facing unimagineable pain, that was horrible. But about the fact that his resolve of steel was shattered by a simple breath to his ear.

”I never knew you were such a sadist, Subaru.” Vita smirked, holding her throat and gasping for air.

”Aahaha... But he lost to a woman's breath.” I calmed myself with a light slap.

”Well, I am a healthy man after all.” Linque searched his blades and found them stuck in the ceiling. ”And I've been stuck here for quite a while.” He crouched for a jump for a long time but I guess it was worth it. With an inhuman jump he lept to the air and grabbed the hilts, that were atleast five meters up in the air.

Effortlessly he pulled the two saber stuck in stone and it looked like he floated back down. After landing his weapons vanished with strange light and he jumped to a handstand. Second later he bounced up from it and was on his feet again. Huh?

Vita laughed while leaning to a pillar. ”Healthy man? That made me remember something disturbting about you.”

”Please let the people find that out by themselves.” He smiled, offering a hand to Vita.

”I guess I did get lucky.” I slapped the man's back and helped Vita stand up.

I didn't even know I wrote this long scenarios at this point

I have to start posting them one by one if this keeps up

Edit: Page claim! This one goes for Raising Heart continuing.

[Satashi]

Spoiler for Week pt.4:

"Ahhhhhn." I felt the food being placed on my lips and I moved forward just slightly to take it from the chopsticks. Nanoha giggled at me as I chewed pleasantly, eyes closed and enjoying the taste. "Mmm...." I hummed out my appreciation while she ate some herself before picking out more for me.

"Open," She commanded in a playful tone. I did just that, both hands on her leg, and leaned forward.

"Ahhhhn." I was fed again, almost squealing out in joy. We were on the roof of the school, a place normally abandoned in the heat of summer. The sun was directly on us, making us each sweat a good bit but still offered us privacy. A small gust of wind blew around me and I was fed a mouthful of Nanoha's ponytail instead of food. "Mmmm," I teased, chewing on her hair purposely.

Nanoha shrieked out a laugh and pulled her hair away from me. "Mine," she stated firmly while giggling. "You can't eat that."

"But it's tasty," I flirted with her, watching her eyes sparkle in laughter. "Just one more bite?" I moved to nip at her hair, but was instead fed a round of sushi.

That was overloaded with wasabi.

"Mmmm!!!" I closed my eyes tightly, trying to swallow it without screaming. My mouth burned hotly, eyes watering. Damn it Nanoha, why did you give me one of yours!? You Japanese people and your cursed wasabi! I can't handle those things!

Nanoha held her drink up, pulling away lightly when I moved for it. She grinned at me, moving it out of the way again when I reached for it a second time. "Say please," She told me.

"Mmm!" I couldn't open my mouth. "Mm! Mmmm!!!! MMmmmm!"

"Such naughty sounds," She cooed, making my face match the fire in my mouth.

"MMHHHHMMMMMMNNNGGGHHHH!!!!" I panted out finally. "Puhwheaze!"

"Okay," She handed me the bottle of water and I chugged almost half of it before taking a breath. "Feel better?"

"Finally," I leaned back and wiped the sweat from my forehead. "I thought I was going to die."

"You should try things more, you might find something you like." Nanoha plucked another bite from her side of the bento. "Try this?"

"I don't like cherry tomatoes..."

"Have you ever tried one?"

I sank back. "well, no, but..." She pressed forward. "...Don't want..."

"Eat," She demanded, placing it on my lips. Her eyes were determined so I opened my mouth lightly and allowed the feeding. "Chew thoroughly." She advised me as I bit down into the weird tasting thing. "How was it?"

"Not bad," I mused. Her face read my expression and I received a knowing look. "Okay, it was good." I fumbled with my hands. How many foods was this now that Nanoha forced me to try? Oh well, at least this one was fed to me.

"Aw, Fate-chan, you're sweating." Nanoha fumbled through her pack and pulled out a handkerchief. "Here," To my amazement she started dabbing my forehead and running it along my neck while fanning out my shirt. "Maybe we should have eaten in the shade on the grounds..."

Her hand trailed to the back of my neck and wiped it there. I felt like I had wasabi again, throat tight and unable to speak. Her face was right there. She apparently noticed as well because she suddenly shot back and blushed. "tha... Thank you," I stammered.

Nanoha laughed lightly, still too shy to look at me again. "Welcome." She finally gave me a small glance, lips turned up just enough to see. Her chopsticks went back to the food, and she took a bite.

Rice on her cheek! I've seen this so many times! Calm down, Fate! I took a mental deep breath to force myself to stay calm. "Na-nanoha, you have rice on your cheek." Her hand went to the wrong cheek, wiping it. "N-no," I leaned forward. "Let me," I kissed her cheek, slowly licking where I could, and nipped it from her.

Nanoha was stiff. Was it too much? Did I scare her? Oh no, I shouldn't have-

She giggled.

I felt releif wash over me. She turned away, fidgeting, and smiled again. Her cheeks were so dark that even her ears were red. "Silly Fate-chan," She scolded me for the bold move. "How long were you waiting to do that?"

Busted. "Um," I looked away as well. Fortunetly the bell rang, keeping me from answering. "Come on, we'll be late if we don't hurry." I stood up and offered my hands to help her stand as well, even getting a panty shot of aqua blue for my troubles.

It was a great day.

[Gilraen Isilra]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Week pt.4:

"Ahhhhhn." I felt the food being placed on my lips and I moved forward just slightly to take it from the chopsticks. Nanoha giggled at me as I chewed pleasantly, eyes closed and enjoying the taste. "Mmm...." I hummed out my appreciation while she ate some herself before picking out more for me.

"Open," She commanded in a playful tone. I did just that, both hands on her leg, and leaned forward.

"Ahhhhn." I was fed again, almost squealing out in joy. We were on the roof of the school, a place normally abandoned in the heat of summer. The sun was directly on us, making us each sweat a good bit but still offered us privacy. A small gust of wind blew around me and I was fed a mouthful of Nanoha's ponytail instead of food. "Mmmm," I teased, chewing on her hair purposely.

Nanoha shrieked out a laugh and pulled her hair away from me. "Mine," she stated firmly while giggling. "You can't eat that."

"But it's tasty," I flirted with her, watching her eyes sparkle in laughter. "Just one more bite?" I moved to nip at her hair, but was instead fed a round of sushi.

That was overloaded with wasabi.

"Mmmm!!!" I closed my eyes tightly, trying to swallow it without screaming. My mouth burned hotly, eyes watering. Damn it Nanoha, why did you give me one of yours!? You Japanese people and your cursed wasabi! I can't handle those things!

Nanoha held her drink up, pulling away lightly when I moved for it. She grinned at me, moving it out of the way again when I reached for it a second time. "Say please," She told me.

"Mmm!" I couldn't open my mouth. "Mm! Mmmm!!!! MMmmmm!"

"Such naughty sounds," She cooed, making my face match the fire in my mouth.

"MMHHHHMMMMMMNNNGGGHHHH!!!!" I panted out finally. "Puhwheaze!"

"Okay," She handed me the bottle of water and I chugged almost half of it before taking a breath. "Feel better?"

"Finally," I leaned back and wiped the sweat from my forehead. "I thought I was going to die."

"You should try things more, you might find something you like." Nanoha plucked another bite from her side of the bento. "Try this?"

"I don't like cherry tomatoes..."

"Have you ever tried one?"

I sank back. "well, no, but..." She pressed forward. "...Don't want..."

"Eat," She demanded, placing it on my lips. Her eyes were determined so I opened my mouth lightly and allowed the feeding. "Chew thoroughly." She advised me as I bit down into the weird tasting thing. "How was it?"

"Not bad," I mused. Her face read my expression and I received a knowing look. "Okay, it was good." I fumbled with my hands. How many foods was this now that Nanoha forced me to try? Oh well, at least this one was fed to me.

"Aw, Fate-chan, you're sweating." Nanoha fumbled through her pack and pulled out a handkerchief. "Here," To my amazement she started dabbing my forehead and running it along my neck while fanning out my shirt. "Maybe we should have eaten in the shade on the grounds..."

Her hand trailed to the back of my neck and wiped it there. I felt like I had wasabi again, throat tight and unable to speak. Her face was right there. She apparently noticed as well because she suddenly shot back and blushed. "tha... Thank you," I stammered.

Nanoha laughed lightly, still too shy to look at me again. "Welcome." She finally gave me a small glance, lips turned up just enough to see. Her chopsticks went back to the food, and she took a bite.

Rice on her cheek! I've seen this so many times! Calm down, Fate! I took a mental deep breath to force myself to stay calm. "Na-nanoha, you have rice on your cheek." Her hand went to the wrong cheek, wiping it. "N-no," I leaned forward. "Let me," I kissed her cheek, slowly licking where I could, and nipped it from her.

Nanoha was stiff. Was it too much? Did I scare her? Oh no, I shouldn't have-

She giggled.

I felt releif wash over me. She turned away, fidgeting, and smiled again. Her cheeks were so dark that even her ears were red. "Silly Fate-chan," She scolded me for the bold move. "How long were you waiting to do that?"

Busted. "Um," I looked away as well. Fortunetly the bell rang, keeping me from answering. "Come on, we'll be late if we don't hurry." I stood up and offered my hands to help her stand as well, even getting a panty shot of aqua blue for my troubles.

It was a great day.

Oh my God. I'm just loving this little story <3 Keep it up Satashi!

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Sam the Onion

Edit: Page claim! This one goes for Raising Heart continuing.

Now you guys are throwing page claims at me?

Greedy people... Expect a new chapter soon.

[Kirika-chan]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Week pt.4:

"Ahhhhhn." I felt the food being placed on my lips and I moved forward just slightly to take it from the chopsticks. Nanoha giggled at me as I chewed pleasantly, eyes closed and enjoying the taste. "Mmm...." I hummed out my appreciation while she ate some herself before picking out more for me.

"Open," She commanded in a playful tone. I did just that, both hands on her leg, and leaned forward.

"Ahhhhn." I was fed again, almost squealing out in joy. We were on the roof of the school, a place normally abandoned in the heat of summer. The sun was directly on us, making us each sweat a good bit but still offered us privacy. A small gust of wind blew around me and I was fed a mouthful of Nanoha's ponytail instead of food. "Mmmm," I teased, chewing on her hair purposely.

Nanoha shrieked out a laugh and pulled her hair away from me. "Mine," she stated firmly while giggling. "You can't eat that."

"But it's tasty," I flirted with her, watching her eyes sparkle in laughter. "Just one more bite?" I moved to nip at her hair, but was instead fed a round of sushi.

That was overloaded with wasabi.

"Mmmm!!!" I closed my eyes tightly, trying to swallow it without screaming. My mouth burned hotly, eyes watering. Damn it Nanoha, why did you give me one of yours!? You Japanese people and your cursed wasabi! I can't handle those things!

Nanoha held her drink up, pulling away lightly when I moved for it. She grinned at me, moving it out of the way again when I reached for it a second time. "Say please," She told me.

"Mmm!" I couldn't open my mouth. "Mm! Mmmm!!!! MMmmmm!"

"Such naughty sounds," She cooed, making my face match the fire in my mouth.

"MMHHHHMMMMMMNNNGGGHHHH!!!!" I panted out finally. "Puhwheaze!"

"Okay," She handed me the bottle of water and I chugged almost half of it before taking a breath. "Feel better?"

"Finally," I leaned back and wiped the sweat from my forehead. "I thought I was going to die."

"You should try things more, you might find something you like." Nanoha plucked another bite from her side of the bento. "Try this?"

"I don't like cherry tomatoes..."

"Have you ever tried one?"

I sank back. "well, no, but..." She pressed forward. "...Don't want..."

"Eat," She demanded, placing it on my lips. Her eyes were determined so I opened my mouth lightly and allowed the feeding. "Chew thoroughly." She advised me as I bit down into the weird tasting thing. "How was it?"

"Not bad," I mused. Her face read my expression and I received a knowing look. "Okay, it was good." I fumbled with my hands. How many foods was this now that Nanoha forced me to try? Oh well, at least this one was fed to me.

"Aw, Fate-chan, you're sweating." Nanoha fumbled through her pack and pulled out a handkerchief. "Here," To my amazement she started dabbing my forehead and running it along my neck while fanning out my shirt. "Maybe we should have eaten in the shade on the grounds..."

Her hand trailed to the back of my neck and wiped it there. I felt like I had wasabi again, throat tight and unable to speak. Her face was right there. She apparently noticed as well because she suddenly shot back and blushed. "tha... Thank you," I stammered.

Nanoha laughed lightly, still too shy to look at me again. "Welcome." She finally gave me a small glance, lips turned up just enough to see. Her chopsticks went back to the food, and she took a bite.

Rice on her cheek! I've seen this so many times! Calm down, Fate! I took a mental deep breath to force myself to stay calm. "Na-nanoha, you have rice on your cheek." Her hand went to the wrong cheek, wiping it. "N-no," I leaned forward. "Let me," I kissed her cheek, slowly licking where I could, and nipped it from her.

Nanoha was stiff. Was it too much? Did I scare her? Oh no, I shouldn't have-

She giggled.

I felt releif wash over me. She turned away, fidgeting, and smiled again. Her cheeks were so dark that even her ears were red. "Silly Fate-chan," She scolded me for the bold move. "How long were you waiting to do that?"

Busted. "Um," I looked away as well. Fortunetly the bell rang, keeping me from answering. "Come on, we'll be late if we don't hurry." I stood up and offered my hands to help her stand as well, even getting a panty shot of aqua blue for my troubles.

It was a great day.

Cuuuute >.< !!!

I saw in this little chapter a stage from the doujin "Love-Love" no ? (tomatoes!)

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Gilraen Isilra

Oh my God. I'm just loving this little story <3 Keep it up Satashi!

Haiiiiiiii~

Originally Posted by Keroko

Now you guys are throwing page claims at me?

Greedy people... Expect a new chapter soon.

I dedicate this post to Keroko continuing Raising Heart.

Originally Posted by Kirika-chan

Cuuuute >.< !!!

I saw in this little chapter a stage from the doujin "Love-Love" no ? (tomatoes!)

Yup ^^ I love that scene. Glad you like it!

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Week pt.4:

"Ahhhhhn." I felt the food being placed on my lips and I moved forward just slightly to take it from the chopsticks. Nanoha giggled at me as I chewed pleasantly, eyes closed and enjoying the taste. "Mmm...." I hummed out my appreciation while she ate some herself before picking out more for me.

"Open," She commanded in a playful tone. I did just that, both hands on her leg, and leaned forward.

"Ahhhhn." I was fed again, almost squealing out in joy. We were on the roof of the school, a place normally abandoned in the heat of summer. The sun was directly on us, making us each sweat a good bit but still offered us privacy. A small gust of wind blew around me and I was fed a mouthful of Nanoha's ponytail instead of food. "Mmmm," I teased, chewing on her hair purposely.

Nanoha shrieked out a laugh and pulled her hair away from me. "Mine," she stated firmly while giggling. "You can't eat that."

"But it's tasty," I flirted with her, watching her eyes sparkle in laughter. "Just one more bite?" I moved to nip at her hair, but was instead fed a round of sushi.

That was overloaded with wasabi.

"Mmmm!!!" I closed my eyes tightly, trying to swallow it without screaming. My mouth burned hotly, eyes watering. Damn it Nanoha, why did you give me one of yours!? You Japanese people and your cursed wasabi! I can't handle those things!

Nanoha held her drink up, pulling away lightly when I moved for it. She grinned at me, moving it out of the way again when I reached for it a second time. "Say please," She told me.

"Mmm!" I couldn't open my mouth. "Mm! Mmmm!!!! MMmmmm!"

"Such naughty sounds," She cooed, making my face match the fire in my mouth.

"MMHHHHMMMMMMNNNGGGHHHH!!!!" I panted out finally. "Puhwheaze!"

"Okay," She handed me the bottle of water and I chugged almost half of it before taking a breath. "Feel better?"

"Finally," I leaned back and wiped the sweat from my forehead. "I thought I was going to die."

"You should try things more, you might find something you like." Nanoha plucked another bite from her side of the bento. "Try this?"

"I don't like cherry tomatoes..."

"Have you ever tried one?"

I sank back. "well, no, but..." She pressed forward. "...Don't want..."

"Eat," She demanded, placing it on my lips. Her eyes were determined so I opened my mouth lightly and allowed the feeding. "Chew thoroughly." She advised me as I bit down into the weird tasting thing. "How was it?"

"Not bad," I mused. Her face read my expression and I received a knowing look. "Okay, it was good." I fumbled with my hands. How many foods was this now that Nanoha forced me to try? Oh well, at least this one was fed to me.

"Aw, Fate-chan, you're sweating." Nanoha fumbled through her pack and pulled out a handkerchief. "Here," To my amazement she started dabbing my forehead and running it along my neck while fanning out my shirt. "Maybe we should have eaten in the shade on the grounds..."

Her hand trailed to the back of my neck and wiped it there. I felt like I had wasabi again, throat tight and unable to speak. Her face was right there. She apparently noticed as well because she suddenly shot back and blushed. "tha... Thank you," I stammered.

Nanoha laughed lightly, still too shy to look at me again. "Welcome." She finally gave me a small glance, lips turned up just enough to see. Her chopsticks went back to the food, and she took a bite.

Rice on her cheek! I've seen this so many times! Calm down, Fate! I took a mental deep breath to force myself to stay calm. "Na-nanoha, you have rice on your cheek." Her hand went to the wrong cheek, wiping it. "N-no," I leaned forward. "Let me," I kissed her cheek, slowly licking where I could, and nipped it from her.

Nanoha was stiff. Was it too much? Did I scare her? Oh no, I shouldn't have-

She giggled.

I felt releif wash over me. She turned away, fidgeting, and smiled again. Her cheeks were so dark that even her ears were red. "Silly Fate-chan," She scolded me for the bold move. "How long were you waiting to do that?"

Busted. "Um," I looked away as well. Fortunetly the bell rang, keeping me from answering. "Come on, we'll be late if we don't hurry." I stood up and offered my hands to help her stand as well, even getting a panty shot of aqua blue for my troubles.

It was a great day.

Ehmm... did you take a look to my...
Forgett it.

Your story is going very well
I can't wait for part 5

[Dr_Tom]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Week pt.4:

"Ahhhhhn." I felt the food being placed on my lips and I moved forward just slightly to take it from the chopsticks. Nanoha giggled at me as I chewed pleasantly, eyes closed and enjoying the taste. "Mmm...." I hummed out my appreciation while she ate some herself before picking out more for me.

"Open," She commanded in a playful tone. I did just that, both hands on her leg, and leaned forward.

"Ahhhhn." I was fed again, almost squealing out in joy. We were on the roof of the school, a place normally abandoned in the heat of summer. The sun was directly on us, making us each sweat a good bit but still offered us privacy. A small gust of wind blew around me and I was fed a mouthful of Nanoha's ponytail instead of food. "Mmmm," I teased, chewing on her hair purposely.

Nanoha shrieked out a laugh and pulled her hair away from me. "Mine," she stated firmly while giggling. "You can't eat that."

"But it's tasty," I flirted with her, watching her eyes sparkle in laughter. "Just one more bite?" I moved to nip at her hair, but was instead fed a round of sushi.

That was overloaded with wasabi.

"Mmmm!!!" I closed my eyes tightly, trying to swallow it without screaming. My mouth burned hotly, eyes watering. Damn it Nanoha, why did you give me one of yours!? You Japanese people and your cursed wasabi! I can't handle those things!

Nanoha held her drink up, pulling away lightly when I moved for it. She grinned at me, moving it out of the way again when I reached for it a second time. "Say please," She told me.

"Mmm!" I couldn't open my mouth. "Mm! Mmmm!!!! MMmmmm!"

"Such naughty sounds," She cooed, making my face match the fire in my mouth.

"MMHHHHMMMMMMNNNGGGHHHH!!!!" I panted out finally. "Puhwheaze!"

"Okay," She handed me the bottle of water and I chugged almost half of it before taking a breath. "Feel better?"

"Finally," I leaned back and wiped the sweat from my forehead. "I thought I was going to die."

"You should try things more, you might find something you like." Nanoha plucked another bite from her side of the bento. "Try this?"

"I don't like cherry tomatoes..."

"Have you ever tried one?"

I sank back. "well, no, but..." She pressed forward. "...Don't want..."

"Eat," She demanded, placing it on my lips. Her eyes were determined so I opened my mouth lightly and allowed the feeding. "Chew thoroughly." She advised me as I bit down into the weird tasting thing. "How was it?"

"Not bad," I mused. Her face read my expression and I received a knowing look. "Okay, it was good." I fumbled with my hands. How many foods was this now that Nanoha forced me to try? Oh well, at least this one was fed to me.

"Aw, Fate-chan, you're sweating." Nanoha fumbled through her pack and pulled out a handkerchief. "Here," To my amazement she started dabbing my forehead and running it along my neck while fanning out my shirt. "Maybe we should have eaten in the shade on the grounds..."

Her hand trailed to the back of my neck and wiped it there. I felt like I had wasabi again, throat tight and unable to speak. Her face was right there. She apparently noticed as well because she suddenly shot back and blushed. "tha... Thank you," I stammered.

Nanoha laughed lightly, still too shy to look at me again. "Welcome." She finally gave me a small glance, lips turned up just enough to see. Her chopsticks went back to the food, and she took a bite.

Rice on her cheek! I've seen this so many times! Calm down, Fate! I took a mental deep breath to force myself to stay calm. "Na-nanoha, you have rice on your cheek." Her hand went to the wrong cheek, wiping it. "N-no," I leaned forward. "Let me," I kissed her cheek, slowly licking where I could, and nipped it from her.

Nanoha was stiff. Was it too much? Did I scare her? Oh no, I shouldn't have-

She giggled.

I felt releif wash over me. She turned away, fidgeting, and smiled again. Her cheeks were so dark that even her ears were red. "Silly Fate-chan," She scolded me for the bold move. "How long were you waiting to do that?"

Busted. "Um," I looked away as well. Fortunetly the bell rang, keeping me from answering. "Come on, we'll be late if we don't hurry." I stood up and offered my hands to help her stand as well, even getting a panty shot of aqua blue for my troubles.

It was a great day.

<3<3<3<3 I'm loving this little story! How much more if it do we get to expect because technically even though we're on Part 4 we're still on...day 1 I believe.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

Ehmm... did you take a look to my...
Forgett it.

????

Originally Posted by Dr_Tom

<3<3<3<3 I'm loving this little story! How much more if it do we get to expect because technically even though we're on Part 4 we're still on...day 1 I believe.

It should be about 30 parts long. going to try for around 3 parts per day, Morning, noon, and night. Then the ending. Since this is a "short" and not a real fic, I'm only going to write on this at work. So no updates over weekend

*goes to start SbtB*

[Gillian]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Week pt.4:

"Ahhhhhn." I felt the food being placed on my lips and I moved forward just slightly to take it from the chopsticks. Nanoha giggled at me as I chewed pleasantly, eyes closed and enjoying the taste. "Mmm...." I hummed out my appreciation while she ate some herself before picking out more for me.

"Open," She commanded in a playful tone. I did just that, both hands on her leg, and leaned forward.

"Ahhhhn." I was fed again, almost squealing out in joy. We were on the roof of the school, a place normally abandoned in the heat of summer. The sun was directly on us, making us each sweat a good bit but still offered us privacy. A small gust of wind blew around me and I was fed a mouthful of Nanoha's ponytail instead of food. "Mmmm," I teased, chewing on her hair purposely.

Nanoha shrieked out a laugh and pulled her hair away from me. "Mine," she stated firmly while giggling. "You can't eat that."

"But it's tasty," I flirted with her, watching her eyes sparkle in laughter. "Just one more bite?" I moved to nip at her hair, but was instead fed a round of sushi.

That was overloaded with wasabi.

"Mmmm!!!" I closed my eyes tightly, trying to swallow it without screaming. My mouth burned hotly, eyes watering. Damn it Nanoha, why did you give me one of yours!? You Japanese people and your cursed wasabi! I can't handle those things!

Nanoha held her drink up, pulling away lightly when I moved for it. She grinned at me, moving it out of the way again when I reached for it a second time. "Say please," She told me.

"Mmm!" I couldn't open my mouth. "Mm! Mmmm!!!! MMmmmm!"

"Such naughty sounds," She cooed, making my face match the fire in my mouth.

"MMHHHHMMMMMMNNNGGGHHHH!!!!" I panted out finally. "Puhwheaze!"

"Okay," She handed me the bottle of water and I chugged almost half of it before taking a breath. "Feel better?"

"Finally," I leaned back and wiped the sweat from my forehead. "I thought I was going to die."

"You should try things more, you might find something you like." Nanoha plucked another bite from her side of the bento. "Try this?"

"I don't like cherry tomatoes..."

"Have you ever tried one?"

I sank back. "well, no, but..." She pressed forward. "...Don't want..."

"Eat," She demanded, placing it on my lips. Her eyes were determined so I opened my mouth lightly and allowed the feeding. "Chew thoroughly." She advised me as I bit down into the weird tasting thing. "How was it?"

"Not bad," I mused. Her face read my expression and I received a knowing look. "Okay, it was good." I fumbled with my hands. How many foods was this now that Nanoha forced me to try? Oh well, at least this one was fed to me.

"Aw, Fate-chan, you're sweating." Nanoha fumbled through her pack and pulled out a handkerchief. "Here," To my amazement she started dabbing my forehead and running it along my neck while fanning out my shirt. "Maybe we should have eaten in the shade on the grounds..."

Her hand trailed to the back of my neck and wiped it there. I felt like I had wasabi again, throat tight and unable to speak. Her face was right there. She apparently noticed as well because she suddenly shot back and blushed. "tha... Thank you," I stammered.

Nanoha laughed lightly, still too shy to look at me again. "Welcome." She finally gave me a small glance, lips turned up just enough to see. Her chopsticks went back to the food, and she took a bite.

Rice on her cheek! I've seen this so many times! Calm down, Fate! I took a mental deep breath to force myself to stay calm. "Na-nanoha, you have rice on your cheek." Her hand went to the wrong cheek, wiping it. "N-no," I leaned forward. "Let me," I kissed her cheek, slowly licking where I could, and nipped it from her.

Nanoha was stiff. Was it too much? Did I scare her? Oh no, I shouldn't have-

She giggled.

I felt releif wash over me. She turned away, fidgeting, and smiled again. Her cheeks were so dark that even her ears were red. "Silly Fate-chan," She scolded me for the bold move. "How long were you waiting to do that?"

Busted. "Um," I looked away as well. Fortunetly the bell rang, keeping me from answering. "Come on, we'll be late if we don't hurry." I stood up and offered my hands to help her stand as well, even getting a panty shot of aqua blue for my troubles.

It was a great day.

Fate starts slow, even though she has only 7 days
really nice and cute again
looking forward to more

Originally Posted by Satashi

Yup ^^ I love that scene. Glad you like it!

I like the immediatly following scene's too or a little better from love-love

Originally Posted by Satashi

It should be about 30 parts long. going to try for around 3 parts per day, Morning, noon, and night. Then the ending. Since this is a "short" and not a real fic, I'm only going to write on this at work. So no updates over weekend

*goes to start SbtB*

you really have some freetime before work and so on
must be nice too be your own boss *but really bad, when you are sick *

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Gillian

you really have some freetime before work and so on
must be nice too be your own boss *but really bad, when you are sick *

Actually work is really hard and stressful. We work 8-10, then a 15 minute break, then 10:15-12:00, hour lunch. 1:00-3:00, 15 minute break. 3:15-5:00 go home.

Being your own boss sucks hardcore, don't let anyone fool you

[edit]

*headdesk* My hand is on strike........can't write.......

[Gillian]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Actually work is really hard and stressful. We work 8-10, then a 15 minute break, then 10:15-12:00, hour lunch. 1:00-3:00, 15 minute break. 3:15-5:00 go home.

Being your own boss sucks hardcore, don't let anyone fool you

hard day, but nice of you to have 15minutes work breaks *thumps up*
we only have a lunch break, normally

and I can imagine the thing with "be own boss"*the paper work *

Originally Posted by Satashi

[edit]

*headdesk* My hand is on strike........can't write.......

happens to everybody

[Dr_Tom]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Actually work is really hard and stressful. We work 8-10, then a 15 minute break, then 10:15-12:00, hour lunch. 1:00-3:00, 15 minute break. 3:15-5:00 go home.

Being your own boss sucks hardcore, don't let anyone fool you

[edit]

*headdesk* My hand is on strike........can't write.......

Wow, I kind of wish I got all the breaks you give. I get one half hour lunch break then it's back to tending to the people with questions and getting their games for them. Don't get me wrong I love my job at Gamestop but it gets really hectic and overwhelming at times. Especially when you have a high profile game release *cough*Super Smash Bros. Brawl*cough*

Is your hand part of a union? If it is then start negotiations immediately! If not, fire it's ass and hire a new one.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Dr_Tom

Wow, I kind of wish I got all the breaks you give. I get one half hour lunch break then it's back to tending to the people with questions and getting their games for them. Don't get me wrong I love my job at Gamestop but it gets really hectic and overwhelming at times. Especially when you have a high profile game release *cough*Super Smash Bros. Brawl*cough*

Is your hand part of a union? If it is then start negotiations immediately! If not, fire it's ass and hire a new one.

We had to fire someone at work yesterday. I was going to turn it into a short but I didn't have time. Someone screwed up and blamed me for it. When my brother told him to take responsibility for his actions he said "I can get a higher paying job" so we said "Go get it then, sign your time card."

The short was going to be Fate in her office space and someone misplacing a folder of important information that she needed to convert into data on their system. Lots of yelling and finger pointing.

On a semi-same note, I was going to do another "Fate's day" type of story today because I was having a really nice day today, but had no time to spare.

Thank you Angel, for making my day nice <3 ( and grats on your finals being over!)

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by Satashi

????

The message I send you?

[Enraptured]

Hey all
Been stalking this forum for days now, finally decided to create an account and post xD Now I need to figure out the controls, argh.
Anyway, nanofate all the way! xP Satashi, your stuff are awesome (: (Got redirected here from ffnet) Since I haven't figured out how to quote yet (facepalm), I'll just comment that Week pt 1-4 have been awesome, they made me laugh out loud xD
Fate is -so- cute
Anyway, keep up the awesome writing! (:

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

The message I send you?

Eva was having trouble sending my PMs too.....

Originally Posted by Enraptured

Hey all
Been stalking this forum for days now, finally decided to create an account and post xD Now I need to figure out the controls, argh.
Anyway, nanofate all the way! xP Satashi, your stuff are awesome (: (Got redirected here from ffnet) Since I haven't figured out how to quote yet (facepalm), I'll just comment that Week pt 1-4 have been awesome, they made me laugh out loud xD
Fate is -so- cute
Anyway, keep up the awesome writing! (:

Hello and welcome! Glad to have you aboard. Send me a PM if you have any questions. To quote someone, just click the "quote" or "+quote" on the lower right of their post. A "quote" will take you to the reply screen, and "+Quote will add it for you later, so you can quote more than one person. You can also highlight text and click the quote icon above the text field. Same with spoilers.

Thanks for the compliments! I'm happy you've liked them so far. We have a few other N/F writers here as well. Ashlikesnow and Junkedcat have recently started writing as well.

[Dr_Tom]

Originally Posted by Enraptured

Hey all
Been stalking this forum for days now, finally decided to create an account and post xD Now I need to figure out the controls, argh.
Anyway, nanofate all the way! xP Satashi, your stuff are awesome (: (Got redirected here from ffnet) Since I haven't figured out how to quote yet (facepalm), I'll just comment that Week pt 1-4 have been awesome, they made me laugh out loud xD
Fate is -so- cute
Anyway, keep up the awesome writing! (:

Alright another newbie!! A lot of us have been joining lately...

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Eva was having trouble sending my PMs too.....

OMG, I suppose you didn't recive that cards I send you. Did you?

Well, I just wanted to ask you what do you mean when you said that I post mi comics in a post for you?

Because my doujinshi isn't ready (From the 30 pages of chapter 1, I only have ready 21) And I just have post 3 comic parodies and 2 short storyes of what's before my doujinshi.

I am really confussed

[Wild Goose]

Aw, man, that's bad Sata-nyaa. *pats satashi comfortingly*

So, what line are you and your brother working in?