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Khu · 2009-09-09, 09:21

Yeah, usually a good sized chapter would be...around 2k. maybe 3.

Kogetsu Shirogane · 2009-09-09, 09:53

Okay, after reading it, I've only got two problems...

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We're going in first to secure a possible LZ for more troops, then moving up to establish Alpha Base. It's a covert insertion, if you can call dropping from the sky into a forest 'covert'.

The last bit here doesn't really sound like something Haruhi would say. That's more of a Kyon thing.

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Anyway, Haruhi ordered us to each take M7S, except obviously for Nagato, who's sniping skills were awesome to behold.

The "who's" should be whose.

Aside from those two things, it's pretty good.

Khu · 2009-09-10, 01:24

I had to look up a whole lot of stuff to try and make it as accurate as possible. And now I realise about the last sentence XD I thought you were talking about the technical military stuff. Yeah that does seem more like Kyon. I'll edit it after I get past some stuff that should round it off for quite a bit.

Kogetsu Shirogane · 2009-09-10, 08:57

I probably should've been a bit more specific with that, huh?

Khu · 2009-09-10, 09:39

New chapter up. Will edit out mistakes and other stuff once I get to my checkpoint XD

Kogetsu Shirogane · 2009-09-10, 09:46

Spoiler:

Khu · 2009-09-10, 09:49

Spoiler:

Khu · 2009-09-13, 09:16

Double post but meh. UPDATED.

Kogetsu Shirogane · 2009-09-13, 10:01

That link doesn't work.

Joe4evr · 2009-09-13, 11:44

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Originally Posted by Kogetsu Shirogane

That link doesn't work.

Works fine for me.

Roger Rambo · 2009-09-13, 11:53

When I first clicked the link, it worked. When I clicked it after K.S. mentioned it didn't work, it didn't work.

Now that I clicked it again after Joe said it worked, it worked.

What the fuck?

Kogetsu Shirogane · 2009-09-13, 13:06

The site keeps saying there's only the prologue and first two chapters. I don't really know what to make of this.

Khu · 2009-09-14, 03:35

Whaaat the EFF.

I'll look into this guys.

Aight TRY THIS.

Kogetsu Shirogane · 2009-09-14, 11:52

... I figured it might have been a problem with my browser, so I tried it in a different one. Still nothing, so I tried a third. Still nothing. I honestly have no clue what's happening here. Fanfiction.net must dislike me, as I can't think of any other reason for this.

On the plus side, your profile is at least acknowledging that there are four entries in the story.

*e* It's working now. Will either edit this to avoid a double post or... well, post if someone else responds first.

*e2* Ewww... poor Haruhi. (Poor generic enemy, too...)

*e3* For the record, it seems to be down again.

PrincessFrani · 2009-09-14, 17:45

Okay, I've been working on this story since a year ago even though there are only a few chapters. WARNING: Some characters will be OOC or gender-bent. It mainly stars Yuki since we all love her the most.

The Sorcery of Yuki Nagato:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5373061/...of_Yuki_Nagato

Tornadium · 2009-09-14, 17:47

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Originally Posted by PrincessFrani

since we all love her the most.

I beg to differ good sir!

Oh and thanks for the link, Going to have a looksee now. I'll post feedback when i get done.

PrincessFrani · 2009-09-14, 17:51

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Originally Posted by Tornadium

I beg to differ good sir!

Oh and thanks for the link, Going to have a looksee now. I'll post feedback when i get done.

I'm a girl actually.

Tornadium · 2009-09-14, 17:53

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Originally Posted by PrincessFrani

I'm a girl actually.

Oh well,

um. Good Ma'am?

PrincessFrani · 2009-09-14, 17:57

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tornadium

Oh well,

um. Good Ma'am?

That works!

Kogetsu Shirogane · 2009-09-14, 23:14

Quote:

Originally Posted by PrincessFrani

The Sorcery of Yuki Nagato:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5373061/...of_Yuki_Nagato

Forceful Nagato is nice. Archer girl Kyonko is good, too.

... Not sure what to make of Haruki the Bard, though.

2009-09-10, 08:57	Link #324
Kogetsu Shirogane The Blade of Courage Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I am right here. Except when I'm not. Age: 28	I probably should've been a bit more specific with that, huh? __________________ WARNING: Kogetsu Shirogane cannot be held accountable for any actions taken by someone else. Potential side effects of communicating with this user include headaches, mild confusion, insanity, delirium, and jumping into fires. Do not expose this user to sunlight or water or feed this user after midnight. ... one, two, three, four, fly...

2009-09-10, 09:46	Link #326
Kogetsu Shirogane The Blade of Courage Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I am right here. Except when I'm not. Age: 28	Spoiler: Haruhi stripping a captured alien... totally in-character. __________________ WARNING: Kogetsu Shirogane cannot be held accountable for any actions taken by someone else. Potential side effects of communicating with this user include headaches, mild confusion, insanity, delirium, and jumping into fires. Do not expose this user to sunlight or water or feed this user after midnight. ... one, two, three, four, fly...

2009-09-10, 09:49	Link #327
Khu そんなやさしくしないで。。。 Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: NSW, Australia Age: 18	Spoiler: Of course...I had to add it in XD

2009-09-13, 10:01	Link #329
Kogetsu Shirogane The Blade of Courage Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I am right here. Except when I'm not. Age: 28	That link doesn't work. __________________ WARNING: Kogetsu Shirogane cannot be held accountable for any actions taken by someone else. Potential side effects of communicating with this user include headaches, mild confusion, insanity, delirium, and jumping into fires. Do not expose this user to sunlight or water or feed this user after midnight. ... one, two, three, four, fly...

2009-09-13, 11:53	Link #331
Roger Rambo Rosen Ritter Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Iserlohn	When I first clicked the link, it worked. When I clicked it after K.S. mentioned it didn't work, it didn't work. Now that I clicked it again after Joe said it worked, it worked. What the fuck? __________________ DEEP WITHIN A PARALLEL UNIVERSE WHERE GENESTEALERS ARE MADE OF F***ING RUBBER!

2009-09-09, 09:21	Link #321
Khu そんなやさしくしないで。。。 Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: NSW, Australia Age: 18	Yeah, usually a good sized chapter would be...around 2k. maybe 3.

2009-09-10, 01:24	Link #323
Khu そんなやさしくしないで。。。 Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: NSW, Australia Age: 18	I had to look up a whole lot of stuff to try and make it as accurate as possible. And now I realise about the last sentence XD I thought you were talking about the technical military stuff. Yeah that does seem more like Kyon. I'll edit it after I get past some stuff that should round it off for quite a bit.

2009-09-10, 09:39	Link #325
Khu そんなやさしくしないで。。。 Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: NSW, Australia Age: 18	New chapter up. Will edit out mistakes and other stuff once I get to my checkpoint XD

2009-09-13, 09:16	Link #328
Khu そんなやさしくしないで。。。 Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: NSW, Australia Age: 18	Double post but meh. UPDATED.

2009-09-13, 13:06	Link #332
Kogetsu Shirogane The Blade of Courage Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I am right here. Except when I'm not. Age: 28	The site keeps saying there's only the prologue and first two chapters. I don't really know what to make of this. __________________ WARNING: Kogetsu Shirogane cannot be held accountable for any actions taken by someone else. Potential side effects of communicating with this user include headaches, mild confusion, insanity, delirium, and jumping into fires. Do not expose this user to sunlight or water or feed this user after midnight. ... one, two, three, four, fly...

2009-09-14, 03:35	Link #333
Khu そんなやさしくしないで。。。 Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: NSW, Australia Age: 18	Whaaat the EFF. I'll look into this guys. Aight TRY THIS.

2009-09-14, 11:52	Link #334
Kogetsu Shirogane The Blade of Courage Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I am right here. Except when I'm not. Age: 28	... I figured it might have been a problem with my browser, so I tried it in a different one. Still nothing, so I tried a third. Still nothing. I honestly have no clue what's happening here. Fanfiction.net must dislike me, as I can't think of any other reason for this. On the plus side, your profile is at least acknowledging that there are four entries in the story. e It's working now. Will either edit this to avoid a double post or... well, post if someone else responds first. e2 Ewww... poor Haruhi. (Poor generic enemy, too...) e3 For the record, it seems to be down again. __________________ WARNING: Kogetsu Shirogane cannot be held accountable for any actions taken by someone else. Potential side effects of communicating with this user include headaches, mild confusion, insanity, delirium, and jumping into fires. Do not expose this user to sunlight or water or feed this user after midnight. ... one, two, three, four, fly... Last edited by Kogetsu Shirogane; 2009-09-14 at 13:14.

2009-09-14, 17:45	Link #335
PrincessFrani TsuruyaxMikuru Worshipper Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: In a kingdom where I drive everyone insane!! Age: 20	Okay, I've been working on this story since a year ago even though there are only a few chapters. WARNING: Some characters will be OOC or gender-bent. It mainly stars Yuki since we all love her the most. The Sorcery of Yuki Nagato: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5373061/...of_Yuki_Nagato __________________ FanFiction Story: The Sorcery of Yuki Nagato