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Old 2009-11-02, 15:39   Link #421
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Well, it's not impossible that I'd have it updated late tomorrow night, but I'd say Tuesday is more likely.
Just read Chapter 1. A few observations. Spoiler space proceeding for those who haven't read it yet...

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Edit: Went back and tightened up some grammatical and word-choice errors, but on the whole don't feel inclined to change much. I'm rather happy with this first chapter. The second will probably catch most of your by surprise, I think.
Most definitely...
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Old 2009-11-04, 13:57   Link #422
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UPDATE: http://forums.animesuki.com/showthre...24#post2749124 The finalized Episode 2. Enjoy.
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Old 2009-11-04, 15:45   Link #423
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Posting here so you don't have to delete another post. Will probably edit this with a review later.
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Old 2009-11-04, 15:53   Link #424
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I again love your writing style and your characterization, but I have to admit that

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Old 2009-11-04, 16:41   Link #425
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Guess I don't have to edit, huh?

Loved your jab at a certain shonen series, and the ending was rather amusing.
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Old 2009-11-04, 16:51   Link #426
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Just read Chapter 2. A few observations. Spoiler space proceeding for those who haven't read it yet...

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Old 2009-11-04, 20:34   Link #427
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Not much to add to the above, but I will say I think you nailed this one.
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Old 2009-11-05, 07:45   Link #428
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I've FINALLY updated! Let me know what you guys think. It's a pretty important chapter.
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Old 2009-11-05, 08:40   Link #429
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I've FINALLY updated! Let me know what you guys think. It's a pretty important chapter.
I can't find your fic on fanfiction.net, could you direct link to it?
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Old 2009-11-05, 11:15   Link #430
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Its up now. My thoughts are in my review, but in short it was worth the wait.
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Old 2009-11-05, 13:56   Link #431
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I've FINALLY updated! Let me know what you guys think. It's a pretty important chapter.
I was halfway with reading and found this:
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There are a lot of other spelling/grammar issues as well, it would read a lot better if fixed.

Other than that, keep up the good work.
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Old 2009-11-05, 17:45   Link #432
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Oops, this is what I get for proof-reading at five in the morning.

I'll have to look it over again later. I'm glad people are enjoying it, though.
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Old 2009-11-06, 02:18   Link #433
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Dude man.

Great work.

Impressed by your great dedication.

Awesome stuff man. Awesome stuff.
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Old 2009-11-06, 03:27   Link #434
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Thank you. It was a tough chapter to write, but totally worth it. Now I have to think about contacting James Randi himself. I'm not sure if I'll be able to, but I'll try nevertheless.

Someone told me that writing about a non-fictional person violate fanfiction.net's ToS agreement. I went and looked at it and didn't see anything that looked like that. I'd been under the assumption that as long as I'm not using the fic for commercial reason, that it was okay.

In any case, if I had contacted Randi and he told me he didn't want to have his character portrayed in the fic, I would respectfully make sure he wasn't in it (and likely change all references to his character in previous chapter). I do respect the man greatly, and I would respect his wishes, even if there's no legal reason to do so.
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Old 2009-11-06, 10:40   Link #435
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You could not write the actual meeting and refer to that in dialogue that happens later.
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Old 2009-11-07, 06:40   Link #436
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Thank you. It was a tough chapter to write, but totally worth it. Now I have to think about contacting James Randi himself. I'm not sure if I'll be able to, but I'll try nevertheless.

Someone told me that writing about a non-fictional person violate fanfiction.net's ToS agreement. I went and looked at it and didn't see anything that looked like that. I'd been under the assumption that as long as I'm not using the fic for commercial reason, that it was okay.

In any case, if I had contacted Randi and he told me he didn't want to have his character portrayed in the fic, I would respectfully make sure he wasn't in it (and likely change all references to his character in previous chapter). I do respect the man greatly, and I would respect his wishes, even if there's no legal reason to do so.
Dude...your work is just...inspiring. That's all I really need to say. It's simply...exquisite. (And you shall get my full review soon)

With non-fictional people and fics, I think only a certain list of real people can not be used or their properties. It mostly detains to rock stars and famous authors, so I think you'll be fine.
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Old 2009-11-07, 16:20   Link #437
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Dude...your work is just...inspiring. That's all I really need to say. It's simply...exquisite. (And you shall get my full review soon)

With non-fictional people and fics, I think only a certain list of real people can not be used or their properties. It mostly detains to rock stars and famous authors, so I think you'll be fine.
Thank you very much. And thanks for the advice. And BTW, do you know if Kerose has read it, too? I wanted to know his opinion on the chapter as well.
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Old 2009-11-07, 16:40   Link #438
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Thank you very much. And thanks for the advice. And BTW, do you know if Kerose has read it, too? I wanted to know his opinion on the chapter as well.
Oh no worries, I'll get him to read it.

By the way, some of the reviews you are getting are funny. Some people didn't know that James Randi really existed. XD That does make me wonder though, do you have a time limit where you will wait for him to respond and if he doesn't...you'll post the chapter?
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Old 2009-11-07, 17:30   Link #439
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If I can't contact him, I'll simply do what I can to get his character right. I'll go and watch a few videos on his youtube channel where he's done some speeches and try my best. I'd prefer if that didn't happen, but I'm prepared if I have to.

*edit* Oh, and yes, I was quite surprised that people thought he was fictional.
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Old 2009-11-07, 18:54   Link #440
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Haru, Chapter 3. I finally put in some of those fashion descriptions I mentioned, and this chapter's a bit longer than the previous two, but I'm still trying to keep it all relatively compact. The general idea is to keep the story moving in digestible bits that each have a proper arc and a value all their own, which is why each episode ends on kind of "Oh hey, we learned something, but wait, what's that shiny new thing?" note.
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