Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[bhl88]

Erio the lucky bastard.... as for the latest post in the fic that makes me hate Avalon....

Aria.... Lotte... *barrfffff* What have you done, Kotomine?! (now I really hate him more than ever)

[Lhklan]

Can anyone help me with a birthday scene? I'm planning to write one for Nanoha, but I've been stuck ever since.

[Mr Coin]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

Anything in particular you're looking for? Romance, action, etc?

Action, Sci-fi and Drama...NO ROMANCE, I read to much romance for me to handle! I don't know why would people read the same pairing over and over again, I'm already sneering at the bloody sheer loads of Romance of Nanofate... Really...

Originally Posted by Craxuan

Lawl, would I sound conceited for recommending my own fanfic?

I already read yours, Hayate is the beast!

Sorry for the lack of reply. I was contemplating if I should give your story some review...

Don't get me wrong...it's just that I would be giving an unnecessary review that won't give much constructive feed-back...

I'm the type who gives: "OMG OMG OMG! UPDATE!" or "HAYATE DID WHAT! SHE"S EVIL!"-ish reviews.

Originally Posted by Craxuan

I suppose you can get it here then, since I just completed a revise on Chapter 12 Part 1 yesterday and updated it.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7633280/..._Two_Goddesses


Though of course, be advised that it is pretty dark, and a reviewer once told me he had no idea what the hell I'm writing about LOL.

I haven't read the re-writes though... *READS*

Originally Posted by darkhalo191

By redemption2;
StrikerS: Pursuit of perfection
Leyline Expedition Force (the sequel, ongoing?)

By Harouki;
Devil Arms: LegendS
Devil Arms: StarS (the sequel)
Devil Arms: ReturnerS (sequel to the sequel but I think he stopped working on it)

By Satashi;
6th Division: Rebirth
6th Division: Reminisce (the sequel)
6th Division: Redemption (sequel to the sequel but i think he stopped production as well)

I've already read those stories sometime ago...as for Satasha a long time ago, for your information, lkhan. Satashi is a woman... I just wonder what happened to her.

[Rising Dragon]

Well, Coin, you can always read The Collared. :k

[Lhklan]

*blink* I never asked about Satashi. I need help with my works.
Before my muse start acting up and produce random snippets again.

[Craxuan]

As long as you've enjoyed it I am satisfied, Coin.

And well, Satashi probably retired or something? It has been forever since she's been active. Some of her fanfics I enjoyed, some not so much, but overall still a great writer.

Speaking of which, we'll probably never get to see Eagle8819's work again, she hasn't turned on her Gtalk for ages now. T_T

[darkhalo191]

Originally Posted by Mr Coin

I've already read those stories sometime ago...as for Satasha a long time ago, for your information, lkhan. Satashi is a woman... I just wonder what happened to her.

Oh, I didn't find them on tv tropes so i thought they would be new to you. I assumed they were guys since the stories were quite bloody... Especially Satashi's since there was quite a bit of NanoFate in it

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Good news, after months of trying, I FINALLY have a job again. Yay!

StrikerS

Numbers

SSX 1-5

SSX 6

SSX 7

SSX 8

SSX 9

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - SSX 10:

A few moments ago...

"Sector K267," the Mariage on the roof spoke before stopping as she was suddenly wrapped up in extremely tight binds. "Interesting." She turned her head to see a young woman with long orange hair pointing a gun at her while four gems on her belts glowed lightly. "Powerful binding magic."

"I am Teana Lanster and you're under arrest for suspicions of murder, arson and..."

"It doesn't matter." The Mariage said and looked away from the girl. "I now know where to go, a small group shall converge on that point soon, and if Tredia Graze or any of his associates, they shall fall for keeping us away from our king."

Teana's eyes widened as the Mariage's body seemed to become a thick oil and she started to dissolve into a puddle. "Sector K267," the Mariage said with its last breath, before the liquid erupted violently, sending flames roaring across the roof and Teana crossed her arms in front of her as she was blasted back and towards the edge.

Grunting, Teana shook her head to get the spots out of her vision as well as the ringing out of her ears. "Something's not right here." She muttered to herself. She may not have trusted Due at all, but if she was right and Tredia really was dead, why would his name come up twice? It was possible that Tredia cloned himself using Project F. Between Fate and Erio, she knew about it, though she didn't know too many details, since talking about it wasn't easy for either of those two. There were other ways for a dead person to be running around, of course.

Still, something about that was just wrong in her mind, Teana hadn't heard nor seen any hints that Graze was behind the problem, not until Runessa found that information.

"Lanster," Teana blinked and looked over to see Sette, Mr. Snuggles and Cinque floating in mid-air. "Are you harmed?"

"A little scratched up, but I'm fine," Teana said and blinked as she saw Sette relax, or at least Sette seemed to relax at those words. It could have just been her imagination.

Sette nodded at that. "Good, it would... Not be good if you were harmed, like Ginga and Nove were."

Teana's eyes widened as she heard that. "Nove? Ginga? Are they okay?" Cinque nodded at her and Teana sighed, glad for that.

"Ginga's leg is injured but she should be able to recover normally. Nove won't be able to help us for at least a week, however." Cinque bit her lip lightly, Nove wasn't one to get injured easily, she couldn't imagine how dangerous things were going to get soon. "Wendi's getting them to a doctor right now." Her eye widened as she saw Subaru come through the door to the roof, looking a bit melancholic. "Subaru, are you okay?"

"Huh?" Subaru blinked as she tried to clear the thoughts running through her mind. "Sorry, I was distracted by something. What's going on?"

"I need you to go somewhere for me." Teana nodded to the cyborg. "There was something that woman said that has me thinking. Do you know any sector called K267?"

Subaru scratched her head. "Isn't that near that old ship yard where they dump broken ships to be used as scrap metal and spare parts?" Teana nodded at her. "And you want me to go there, why?"

"I'm thinking that the cause of this whole mess is somewhere there. Just go and see if you can find any life forms out there, okay?" Subaru nodded and took off in the direction of the ship yard. "Cinque, Sette, Mr. Snuggles, we need..." She was cut off as a beeping sound was heard. "Now what?"

"Teana, are you busy right now?" Caro asked as her image popped up on a view screen. "Because, if you aren't, Erio and I could use a little help here."

"Are there others with you?" Teana asked as Caro nodded before turning and firing a beam of energy off screen.

"There was a fire that broke out down town and we were woken up by Sein who asked us to help. But now there's a lot of women who look exactly the same and they're strong and fast!"

Teana's pupils shrank as she heard that. "We're on our way, just hang on." When the view screen turned off, Teana's eyes widened as Sette grabbed her from behind and took off flying, with Mr. Snuggles on her shoulder and Cinque following right behind.

"Cinque left orders for the Ground Forces to get those fires under control, there were no more life signs in the building, so the fire will not be a big problem anymore."

Teana nodded, hoping that Erio and Caro were okay.

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Erio panted as he landed on the ground and looked up, staring as those masked women continued to walk towards him. "Damn it." He jumped out of the way as over ten of them fired some sort of arm cannon at him, unfortunately, the wall behind him was not quite as adept at dodging and ended up with a giant gaping hole in its side.

"Ragudo Mezzagis, pierce them!" Erio called out as he ignited the magic spear in his hands and thrust forward, a solid beam of destructive energy lashed out, running through at least six of the Mariages in one shot. Erio turned his head and his eyes widened as he saw four Mariage suddenly appear less than a foot from him. "Chain Lightning!" He called out, a Belkan triangle forming under his feet as daggers shot out from the array and slammed into the four, electrocuting them instantly. Taking a deep breath, Erio spun the Lance of Light as he got back into a defensive stance and gawked at the fact that even though he had just killed ten, there were at least twenty more coming after him. "What's going..." What he was about to say was cut off as the building behind him groaned and started to collapse. Sparing a quick look behind him, his eyes widened as he saw someone falling from the top floor. "Hang on!"

Spinning, Erio jumped straight up and, using Levitation magic, grabbed the falling body before the person could get hurt by debris and flew to a different building. "Are you okay?" He blinked as he got a look at the body. The person was a woman with bushy red hair that seemed to cover her eyes completely. She wasn't too tall, Erio found out as he put her down so she could stand up, coming to only about a head taller than he was, her frame was fairly average, and her breasts weren't too large, though Erio mentally slapped himself as he found himself staring at them. "Uh, miss?"

She suddenly smiled at him and nodded. "Quite." The next instant surprised the heck out of Erio as she leaned in and kissed him on the cheek. It didn't last long, but it was still enough that Erio's face quickly matched his hair in color. "I shall not forget this, my hero." She turned and started to walk away, her hips swaying in such a way that Erio quickly found that he had to swallow to get his mouth moist again. "If you must know, little hero, my name is Lyla."

Erio nodded and shivered slightly. "Beautiful."

"ERIO-KUN!" An angry female voice shrieked from behind him. Turning, he started sweating heavily as Caro glared at him from on top of Fried's back. "There's an army of masked women destroying everything and you're flirting with some floozy?!" Caro wasn't sure if she was a floozy, but kissing Erio and then walking off like that had to make her one.

Right?

"Kurr!" Fried snorted and launched a gout of flame down at the Mariages, hitting some and causing them to explode, but missing most as they effortlessly dodged out the way.

"Dang it!" Erio called out as he created several blades of lightning and sent them out into the quickly forming crowd. "This is going to take forever!"

Caro nodded as she sent magic spells down at the crowd, covering Fried and providing barriers for Erio and her Dragon when the Mariages fired cannon blasts at them. Caro made the mistake of looking up to see just how many there were coming and nearly wet herself in fright.

The streets, from what she could see, were completely full of these weird women.

Me: Xiaomu.

Xiaomu: Yes?

Me: It's no longer a wall of boobs.

Xiaomu: I just noticed it that it's already an ocean of boobs.

Odin: And are we expecting another love web as Erio began to attract ladies?

[Mr Coin]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

Well, Coin, you can always read The Collared. :k

That was rather short... Any thoughts of updating?

Originally Posted by Lhklan

*blink* I never asked about Satashi. I need help with my works.
Before my muse start acting up and produce random snippets again.

Ah, sorry about that. It was an accident...

Originally Posted by Craxuan

As long as you've enjoyed it I am satisfied, Coin.

And well, Satashi probably retired or something? It has been forever since she's been active. Some of her fanfics I enjoyed, some not so much, but overall still a great writer.

Speaking of which, we'll probably never get to see Eagle8819's work again, she hasn't turned on her Gtalk for ages now. T_T

I don't know why did Eagle removed her stories... T_T

I was a follower of hers.

Originally Posted by darkhalo191

Oh, I didn't find them on tv tropes so i thought they would be new to you. I assumed they were guys since the stories were quite bloody... Especially Satashi's since there was quite a bit of NanoFate in it

You can't just assume a author's gender by the way it writes.


I'm really reluctant of what I'm about to do...

A few days ago my long time best friend and author GaoGar went over to my place briefly and gave me his drafts before he left for abroad, though all written in a notebook, the contents displayed a promising story. The story is only a chapter long...

Spoiler for Spoiler:

About Takamachi Shiro meets Yuuno first, changing everything.

He only allowed me to read the drafts and I'm waiting for his reply of permission to grant me rights to type it and upload it here.

That bastard keeps on writing drafts on paper memos and he just won't bother to upload here. Some friend he is to not inform me about this.

[Rising Dragon]

Originally Posted by Mr Coin

That was rather short... Any thoughts of updating?

Trying to get chapter 3 finished; I'm on the last scene. Unfortunately said scene is long and fighting me.

[Craxuan]

Did she remove her stories? o_O

[Mr Coin]

Yes, she did. T_T

[Craxuan]

*flips through fanfiction.net* eh, she's just moving them to AO3, that's not exactly 'removing' them.

[darkhalo191]

Originally Posted by Mr Coin

You can't just assume a author's gender by the way it writes.

Ah, sorry for forgetting my manners. I'll try to remember to use he/she when I'm not sure.


Anyway, here's the author's notes of chapter two of my fanfic. I also added in a tiny thing

Spoiler for Author's notes and edits:

Author's notes: Hey guys/girls, my school decided that your were awesome enough to get an early update so they didn't bombard me with work today.

On another note, I noticed that the number of viewers dropped. But I don't mind. I'm having the time of my life phrasing my ideas into words so entertaining others is a bonus. As I said before, the whole thing is actually done, but I would like to see if I should make any changes before uploading the chapters. Although, I am thinking of adding an epilogue but I'm having trouble writing it (not due to writer's block, I can't seem to project the ideas properly). Due to that, there's a high chance it will either not be added here or be extremely short (few hundred words?).

Now then, let the story continue.

Disclaimer: I do not own anything related to MGLN StrikerS, whether it is the anime, manga or sound stage.
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(Front part)
At ten thirty in the morning Kiran took the two items back and Watch went back into standby mode. As he was leaving he saw another grave with a familiar name at the corner of his vision. Half of him wanted to obliterate it while the other half wanted to mourn. In the end he decided to head back into town when Watch started to beep. A video chat from Lat Cartos was received.
(Rest of it)
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Author's notes: Yeah, that's it for now. Again, please go to my profile page for progress checks. On the rare occasion that you do not know how to, just click my name at the top of the page.

There were two thing's about Kiran's abilities I didn't address the last chapter because I decided that the 'notes' had gotten too long. These are completely supplementary so I add them only to clear any confusion.

-Although his weapons are made of ice, there are no effects (like freezing somebody after hitting him/her) other than damage.
-Cartridges work on him by overloading his linker core. The excess magic then reacts explosively with his elemental liquid, amplifying it's power and strain.

Well, until next time then. Thank you for your attention.

[Craxuan]

Originally Posted by darkhalo191

Ah, sorry for forgetting my manners. I'll try to remember to use he/she when I'm not sure.

Use 'they'. I've read in a recent article in Cracked.com (Btw you guys should check it out the articles there are HILARIOUS, and quite professionally written) that now, when you're unsure how to refer to an unknown person you can use 'they' instead of he/she.

[biodude711]

Originally Posted by Craxuan

*flips through fanfiction.net* eh, she's just moving them to AO3, that's not exactly 'removing' them.

What's AO3? Is it some sort of fanfic site?

[darkhalo191]

I'm sorry but I'm having trouble wrapping my mind around that. 'They' doesn't seem to fit in my sentence (since I'm referring to one person)... I think I'll stick to he/she

Wow fanfiction.net updated mega fast, here's the direct link to the full chapter.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8075925/...ndoned_by_love
Maybe I should just place the link whenever I upload, although people may get the 'chapter not found' error... (not likely if fanfiction.net keeps up its speed )

[Craxuan]

It's an archi

Here you go. It's an online archive for fan creation of some sort.

[biodude711]

Originally Posted by Craxuan

It's an archi

Here you go. It's an online archive for fan creation of some sort.

Thank you!!

[Craxuan]

Btw I had always wanted to ask, is it just me or you can't actually find the link to your own stories from your profile in FF.Net?