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Old 2004-02-25, 17:47   Link #1
calavera spain
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ok here u have another drawing... i hope u like it. a... as allways when commenting, be as harsh as possible . thanku

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Old 2004-02-25, 18:31   Link #2
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that's pretty cool. Something about the head on the bottom figure doesn't seem to work quite right for me. The hair just seems like this strange shape stuck on the back of a body. Is he tilting his head backwards or is the head a little too short? It's a little tough to tell. Other than that though. I like it alot. Especially the greenish text shapes.
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Old 2004-02-25, 18:48   Link #3
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yeah, its almost as if he's tilting his head back. I think that if he had really short hair, it'd look like he had no neck. Just consider it next time. Other than that I really like it. I especially like how you kinda forget about digitally lining it and just go with what you have, and you do a good job with it.
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Old 2004-02-25, 19:37   Link #4
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wahhhhhhhhh i can't see it...
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Old 2004-02-25, 23:17   Link #5
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It wont come up , i was really looking forward to seeing, since i love your drawings so much.
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Old 2004-02-25, 23:56   Link #6
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*cries* where is the beautiful drawing *Cries and assumes fetal postions*
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Old 2004-02-26, 03:04   Link #7
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u dont see?. ok i post it again and also the web page........mmm yea that head also look strange to me... i thought it was too big :P.next time i will draw it better



http://www.deviantart.com/view/5479788/
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Old 2004-02-26, 03:17   Link #8
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nice pic...
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Old 2004-02-26, 04:15   Link #9
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GRRR, I had a whole long nice crit written and then it crashed, so here's the short, excuse me for being blunt:

I love all your work, and this one stands out above the rest, so keep this in mind for the rest of the crit.

crits on the anatomy: looks really good, maybe the feet could use some definition?

crits on composition: good sizes, but I would have moved the middle character to the right more as the picture's weight leans to the left. also, too flat, a snippet I've picked up from some comic book pros is to use saturation and warmth to pull a character forward, since you're in a monochromatic scale here you would have to stick to using lightness for comp, which would work out ok.

also, the name at the top works, but having that little splash of color again at the bottom skews the balance of the picture. your eye should be drawn to whatever is central to the picture, and my guess would be either the face in the back, or the "hai! punch-u!" pose. color in a monochromatic picture ALWAYS will draw the eye. so, either colorize the picture or desaturate the text, methinks.

not much else springs to mind.

here's a super quick 'over-paint' (as the folks in the comics biz call 'em... I'm sure others do too) to show you what I might have done with it. of course, with it being quick, it's highly un-artistic. it's a guide, not a fix :P

very slightly colorized the 2 fore characters to give them pop, moved the mid pose, nixed the bottom text and desaturated the name.
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Old 2004-02-26, 10:48   Link #10
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Hmm... the side view, one of the fringe looks like its bitten away. The ear needs refining.
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Old 2004-02-26, 10:54   Link #11
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zillford: uoooo that is nice.if you dont mind i will continue a bit with your retouch to see what can come out
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