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Old 2010-08-11, 21:44   Link #241
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"...They will stun his emotional growth! It'll be a tragedy if such a brilliant mind is damaged in his formative stages!"

That's the only mistake I saw, a small thing really, unless you meant to say stun instead of stunt..."Haruna! That's gross even for you!" I'd agree with Yue there, although, is she missing a comma? You don't really need it though. Late hours are making me picky.

Otherwise, brilliant. I need to speed it up.
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Old 2010-08-11, 22:46   Link #242
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That's the only mistake I saw, a small thing really, unless you meant to say stun instead of stunt..."Haruna! That's gross even for you!" I'd agree with Yue there, although, is she missing a comma? You don't really need it though. Late hours are making me picky.

Otherwise, brilliant. I need to speed it up.
Yeah, I meant 'stun'. It's all okay, don't worry. Thanks for the observations.

Part 3 of Chapter 2. The guest star here will pop up from time to time to make small cameos, but this won't be a fully fledged crossover. Sorry for those who don't know Sayonara Zetsubou Sensei, but in any case, it's a great series and you should give it a try.

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Old 2010-08-12, 20:43   Link #243
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Part 4 of Chapter 2.

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Old 2010-08-13, 00:23   Link #244
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PotM: Protoge's Honeymoon is up now. I hope you guys will read it. Now, I gotta plan a raid on the Ilithids.

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Old 2010-08-13, 13:09   Link #245
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An omake piece for Unequally Rational and Emotional: FIGHT, BAAAAAKA RANGERS! Part 1.

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Old 2010-08-13, 22:58   Link #246
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Chapter 2, Continuation:

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Old 2010-08-14, 22:32   Link #247
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Old 2010-08-15, 13:41   Link #248
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Some more focus on the OCs, with Asuna showing up too.

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Old 2010-08-15, 14:49   Link #249
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Old 2010-08-15, 17:00   Link #250
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Just got back from...putting my computer back in to rights. Talk about a way to slow down someone's writing. I'm behind schedule now...anywho, I saw something in "Now What."



"Shut up, Hakase" Chisame mumbled, putting on her thickest boots. "It's just, if I'm going to do this, I want to do it like normal people does".


Sentence bugs me on the last bit, grammatically...do you mean: "like a normal person does." or "like normal people do."?


Only thing I saw. I'm a bit tired. Although, I do have this to show for the time I've been inactive...


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I have more than that, but this is what I'm certain won't be changing.
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Old 2010-08-16, 18:49   Link #251
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Thanks for the correction. I'll take it in account.

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Old 2010-08-16, 22:42   Link #253
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Very good, I'm glad I wrestled with my internet to see that conclusion, I am. Oh! I am not being left behind, no I'm not. I updated Alternate Blossoms with it's third chapter. Alternate Blossoms.

As for Resistance Hertz, I'm looking for inspiration, and trying to gather some kind of force. It'll come, eventually. Mainly, I'm trying to find a way to bring the characters home after a final bid of insanity in the labs...but I haven't gotten much father than describing Satomi's crash.
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Old 2010-08-17, 19:12   Link #254
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A new chapter starts!

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Old 2010-08-17, 22:18   Link #255
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Current work on Alternate Blossoms, yes I'm continuing that one again... although, I really do warn you...if you have any qualms on gore or general, maniacal insane violence, don't read.

If there is a time to be afraid, it just might be...now.

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Old 2010-08-18, 18:45   Link #256
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Old 2010-08-19, 18:50   Link #257
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Continuation. Again.



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Old 2010-08-19, 20:31   Link #258
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I finally managed to write a new chapter of 'Taken Day by Day'. Happy day.

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Prologue
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Day 2
Day 6
Day 7
Day 11
Day 12

Uh... fair warning? I suck at writing action. Just.... really.

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Old 2010-08-19, 20:53   Link #259
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It was actually rather good action.

I'm just eager to write my first action scene at my end, actually. Setup is fine to write, too, but I wait eagerly for a moment to try and cut loose.
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Old 2010-08-19, 21:31   Link #260
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I feel like a word program, having only grammar or odd words to point out as feedback...I don't like that, my mind is being lazy...

"Here you have." The first sentence... It confuses me....
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