Oh don't worry Shelter, I was referring to you being the literary equivalent of Michael Strahan:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U-J9NvAalco "Trust me, I've sent people to the doctor!"
After you sent chapter 8 to the doctor, I found it was necessary to "perform life-saving 'surgery'" on chapter 8. Of course chapter 8 came out looking a lot better, so maybe it was a good brush with death. Chapter 9 is now looking much improved, at a much healthier 15 pages and a few lines rather than 18 1/2 pages the prior version had. It is easier to follow, less tedious, more to the point, more "fairy tale", and I personally guarantee it's a much better read. You see Shelter, good things do come to those who wait (for their feedback to produce results)
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You can go ahead and do a review of the Epilogue, which could probably use your constructive criticism. In the meantime I'll clean up chapters 1, 2, & 3, then head over to chapters 6, 7, and 8 for some more comprehensive edits. I'm aiming to cut around half a page in needless details from each chapter, so I can only hope you prefer the results to the old stuff. I may cut more or less, it just depends on whether the chapter needs it. Many thanks on your fine feedback, which, if my story is any guide, would better be deployed fixing Yagi's story-telling in this most recent chapter. Hey, I know it's his work, but honestly, I preferred Claymore for being more "understated" than "shock and awe".
FYI-I updated the portrayal of Galatea after hearing Weird D's take, and also worked on fixing the Claire/Raki plot hole. Both critiques will be completely addressed once chapters 6, 7, and 8 are finally polished. Once you review the Epilogue and I've got all the chapters ready, you may want to do your "final recommendations" on each chapter. I suppose once those final recommendations are acted on, it'll be time to "shock and awe" the fanfiction.net crowd. I can only hope they like the result a lot, as we've spent quite a bit of time into creating one hell of a story. I remembered what you said about Yosei's "Imperial Fire" being in its own category. Having realized my story doesn't read at all like his, I can only hope it too will merit its "own category".