FinalDusk: ¿Plot?
Some of you might remember a game I was creating a while back called
FinalDusk. Anyways, I finally made a semi-version of a plot. Spoilers are there for no reason... [it spoils the game, but oh well ^^"] still some plot holes, but here it goes. [just a quick version, write the full one later] Spoiler:
*sigh* beta version, will change tommorrow, don;t have much time to type, sry ^^" |
I don't remember, but shouldn't this have been posted in the ChibiWorkshop? :D
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Ne?
No, it shouldn't. Well, I don't think it should have been... |
Cant judge, you got some big plot hole.
Af for now if I did wanted to judge, id say it got some elements that are overdo in the amateur rpg world (hell even in anime). Its a pretty weird combination of many major plot twist that people could figure out way before it happens wich doesnt make a good plot twist. Its also a big combination of primary rpg element with close to none secondary stuff ( the girl having the tatoo, the end of the world, the guy she loves being the key, etc..) wich can actually make a good story. So in my humble opinion once you fill some more gap it could produce a really good story, or you could mess up and turn out with something really bad. |
I liked it, until I read the final paragraph. Maybe you should change that a bit, unless you want a very sad ending......which is pretty cool if done properly, and usually a good twist rather then the usual.
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That was a beta of my plot, and not described well
because of the time I had to write it. Ill fix it up some very soon. |
well i think it sounds kool!, i neva knew ya was making a game?!!? thats kool ^__^ i wish you luck on it :D
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Spoiler:
This is a cliche and you are already boring yourself typing it... when you come up with something that you can type without "etc., etc., etc.", despite it being a rough draft, that will be a good plotline. |
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