[PhoenixFlare]

Originally Posted by Melodius Trueheart

Since there are hundreds of magical styles, would it be too out of line to think up "new magical styles" willy-nilly?

No. In fact, it is encouraged, as long as you toe the line of HAXX. A lot of the magic systems for the OCs seem to be original (if ripped off slightly from other anime) and adapted seamlessly into Nanohaverse.

Originally Posted by Melodius Trueheart

Okay, let me try again with Xalinth. I made his backstory a little better (I hope) and it should at least be more palatable to viewer tastes...

One thing: would a shooting attack that can "strike through" other magical damage attacks like SB and DB be too over the top?

Uh, exactly what do you mean by "strike through"? If you meant that an attack is capable of overpowering another attack and burst through it, then it is quite possible if there is a distinction between the strength of the attacks. Comparably, Trident Smasher and Divine Buster are almost equal in strength, so it gives little chance of "striking through". Between Divine Buster and Plasma Lancer, though, it is possible (that is, considering Plasma Lancer wins in terms of number of attacks, not attack strength).

Still, writers commonly use "same-strength" attacks between characters, because it is assumed that mages do have a knowledge of what are the appropriate counters for certain types of attacks. For example, a bombardment type is often countered with a bombardment type, with little possibility of "striking through".

That is what I think, anyway.

Originally Posted by Melodius Trueheart

Spoiler for Xalinth Tamerlan Personal:

Name: Xalinth Tamerlan
Age: 19
Affiliation: TSAB Armored Division
Magic Colour: White/Dark Red/Black
Magic Type: Neo-Belka
Home Planet: Midchilda
Device: Weisenfangkreuz (White Fang Cross)

Is there a reason for that many magic colors? :3

Spoiler for Xalinth Tamerlan Appearance and Persona:

A juvenile looking, "scruffy" young man, tall and lean at 6'1, 175 pounds. He usually wears all white uniforms, with black shoes and buttons. He has short blonde hair, green eyes, and a small dusting of facial hair.

His Barrier Jacket consists of a white "breastplate" with red and black Belka cross on the shoulders, black gauntlets, a black belt on white pants, and black shoes.

Even though he tends to look "serious", in reality, he has a very playful side to him. He has no shame about partying and having fun, is very confident (sometimes to a fault) with the ladies, and is sometimes a troublemaker when he's not actually doing something important. He is known in his unit for being able to hold his drink like a man twice his age (which got him in the good graces of O'Neill immediately, though those good graces are tested with his occasional antics).

At the same time, when something is happening, he is always the first to take up his weapon and head to the battle, he will mix it up in the front lines despite that not being his skill, and he has a way of finding weaknesses in opposing sides and attempting to exploit them. He is very idealistic, despite his sometimes frivolous appearance, and that was part of the reason while he took to Belka ideals - he considers himself a knight at heart, with all that entails.

Nothing too bad for background, though for someone of his explosive attitude, his commanding officer would be expected to issue a restraining order to keep him in line?

Spoiler for Xalinth Tamerlan Spells:

Engelflügel (Angel Wings)

Essentially the same sort of move as Flier Fin, etc, it produces a quick burst of speed to supplement the speed he already has.

Lichtenpfeil (Light Arrow)

Power: AAA
Speed: AAA
Range: AA
Accuracy: A
Casting Speed: AA
Using his device, a single magical shot is fired.

Blendenlichtpfeil (Blinding Light Arrow)- This spell sacrifices power to increase range, accuracy, and speed.

Power: AA
Speed: S
Range: AA
Accuracy: AA
Casting Speed: AA

Aufflammenlichtpfiel (Blazing Light Arrow) This sacrifices range, and speed to increase power.

Power: S
Speed: AA
Range: A
Accuracy: A
Casting Speed: AA

Glänzender Angriff (Meteoric Assault) - A bombardment attack that loads a large amount of energy into the device (requires a cartridge load), fires into the sky, and the energy bombards everything in a 150-250m radius.

Power: S (in terms of total output, not per shot)
Speed: AA
Range: AA
Accuracy: N/A
Casting Speed: B
Area of Effect: B


Rustenbruch (Armor Breaker) - a shot specificially designed to break the barrier magic of an opponent. Does not do physical damage.

Power: N/A
Speed: AA
Range: AAA
Accuracy: AA
Casting Speed: AA
AOE: N/A

Dreiäugigerengelform (Three-Eyed Angel Form)

Weisenfangkreuz's Full Drive Mode - Xalinth transforms into an angelic creature with a third eye in his forehead. This increases his ranged accuracy and power, as well as his defensive abilities. However, this consumes a great deal of mana, and strains his Linker Core greatly. As such, he prefers not to use this form except in emergencies.

Power: N/A
Speed: N/A
Range: N/A
Accuracy: N/A
Casting Speed N/A
AOE: N/A

It seems that by sacrificing one mere rank in power, Blendenlichtpfeil gains quite a powerful increase in speed and accuracy. While it doesn't seem much, an S-ranked speed attack sounds like it travels at Sonic Move speed (give or take a little), and with AA accuracy, quite impossible to evade. A nerf, perhaps?

And with Glänzender Angriff, the description seems to say that Xalinth is only firing one shot each time, not several, and each of those shots gives an S-ranked damage output? Is that a different version of Hraesvelgr I see? A quarter kilometer is quite big, to say the least.

Spoiler for Xalinth Tamerlan Background:

Xalinth Tamerlan was born to a rich Midchildan family who had great influence in politics and policy. As a child, he adored his older brother, Paulus Tamerlan, who was a member of the TSAB Spec-Ops unit, and from that adoration, was born an intense interest in the TSAB and warfare in general. He was fascinated with the military, both due to his upbringing and his natural interest. He read about magical theory, military strategy, and idolized the great mages of the Bureau forces - Nanoha, Hayate, Fate and so forth - not only for their ability, but for the fact that they were not much older than he was. He believed in his heart that he could be as good if not better than them.

He had early magical training, starting at the age of six. He was far ahead of the curve for his youth, and it was apparent that he was a child with a great deal of magical potential.

Because of his latent magical talent, and because of his training, he was already an AAA class mage, and ended up joining the TSAB as a trainee at age 10.

Due to the fact that his family thought highly of the newly rediscovered Belka magic, he was encouraged to study that style rather than the Mid-style his brother specialized in.

Because of friendly donations by his family to the Saint Church, he was able to get some of the best Belka training available, from high ranking Ancient Velka practitioners like Hayate and Carim, and received the gift of Weisenfangkreuz from K. A. Testarossa, another elite Belka mage.

He was diligent, nearly obsessive in his training, training 6-8 hours a day, either in mock battles, physical training, or book study. He even became an apprentice in the Infinite Library under Yuuno Scrya in order to glean more knowledge about history.

He first saw action at the age of thirteen, in a short campaign to put down a distant rebellion. This rebellion was Tamerlan's first combat experience, both in real combat and in the command of troops. He performed admirably, after initial failure (to which he attributes the unlocking of his Full Drive form) and received a promotion. However, he was not involved in the StrikerS campaign a year later, as he was evacuated from Midchilda by his family during the Cradle incident (despite his personal objections - he wanted to fight with Sector 6.)

He took the S-rank exam at 16, and passed, and with that, he asked to be assigned to the new TSAB Armored Division. He served mostly in tactics and logistics, and has not seen real action since.

Quite possibly, a prodigy in everything: battle, philosophy, sciences, magic, wealth, and prowess.

And evacuation from Mid-childa during the Cradle incident? Where did he go? Was it considered an abandonment of duty?

Spoiler for Xalinth Tamerlan Ratings:

Strengths: Exceptional ranged attacker. Great versatility and range. Very intelligent and cerebral mage, who is very precise in the way he consumes his magic; therefore, he can fight for a long time. Excellent at taking out opposing individual personnel. His ability to break defensive barriers with a single shot is very rare among mages and is incredibly useful as a support option. Can evade enemy fire with ease with his quickness and evasion. Can increase his power greatly with Dreiäugigerengelform.

Weaknesses:

Mediocre melee fighter. Will mix it up because of his personality, but struggles in that area. Can at least block and parry, and knock enemies away to create distance for his arrows. Doesn't emphasize defense - he can take a hit sort of, but does not like to take any sort of attack head-on, prefering to dodge and weave. Is almost useless in support.

Attack Stats:
Melee: C
Range: S
Wide-Area: D

Defense Stats:
Speed: AAA
Physical Defense: B
Magical Defense: B

Support Stats:
Barrier Magic: F
Healing Magic: F
Binding Magic: F

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These stats, while inaccurate, does give us a hint of how you view Xalinth to be. He seems to be some overly-buffed archer with great evasive capabilities. Since the spell list contains nothing resembling a "defensive" spell (with the exception of Dreiäugigerengelform), where does his B-ranked magic and physical defenses come from?

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

And in other news, to avoid Contradictions and screw-ups, I would like to know how many OC departments/divisions in the TSAB do we have here?

BUT!

I'm only looking for those that were not created recently like Keroko's rogues. To be more exact, I want those that are already in the system and not put together in the "last moment" by a single character.

aka, NO RF6.

State their:

1. Designation
2. Function/Speciality/Responsibility
3. Affiliation (Ground, Air, Naval, others...)
4. Authority/Jurisdiction
5. Estimated manpower size
6. Equipment (If any, this includes vehicles.)

Beforehand, when are you basing your timeline? If it's post-StrikerS, I can give a bit of information about the Investigation Corps that Leona is in.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Lack of upcoming Teana is severely lacking Although upcoming Ginga and Subaru moment is WANT

We can't let Teana get too many spotlight.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Going all out to make up for her mistake is good. And I'm sure Grandis has much much more to show.

I have no part in drawing up the Signum's battle against Grandis, though I'm surely pushing for her to be at least a worthy foe for him.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

At the very least, I still have two short pieces before that. Though how does an attempt to pull off a Class One dimensional dislocation sounds like? With Yuuno and Nanoha possibly being caught in it all?

Sounds exciting enough. Yuuno and Nanoha trapped in a solitary dimension syndrome?

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Aurion x Chrono and Leona x Chrono looks good for relevations.

I'm giving a lot of space for Aaron to develop the first interaction, the second will be mostly reminiscences of the past.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Ah. Leona might have some clue about the identity of the Princess then.

Tee-hee, nope.

Originally Posted by Liingo

Interaction list looks good. Doesn't look like Signum's going to be very happy in the next chapter, what with conversations with Telas/Hayate and then Hayate/Chrono....

No, the General doesn't feel too good there, but she's determined to make up for it.

Originally Posted by Liingo

I'm already on her list of "I'm not very happy with people" due to the smack down that she received in my last chapter... Let's hope that she doesn't find out that I was one of the ones that get's her into this verbal assualt next chapter..

Liingo: You should have asked Tesla for help, Signum!
Signum: Huh, do I know you? I don't think I've seen you anywhere in GuardianS before ...
Liingo: I am the one who sends the anonymous divine punishment of justice.

Originally Posted by Liingo

The snippet looks good.... although with holding crucial information like this is going to get her blasted by TK...... Actually me as well... Yes it is a vow, but this is one vow that if kept has the potential to be absolutely devastating..

I'm trying to figure out why the hell Chrono is silent on this matter as well... THIS IS CRUCIAL INFORMATION!!!!!!!!!

Leona does provide information as much as possible to the crew, with detailed explanation of their skills and abilities and other related things that are necessary to be known so that they are better prepared against them in the future.

What she (and Chrono) hides are their origins, as well as how they came to know about it. These things are considered "classified information" by the High Command.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Other than that, their military power would come in handy but erm... For my sake, could anyone explain simply and clearly the term 'paramilitary' ? Does it mean that they operate outside and around Midchildan Territories?

Paramilitary supposedly means a group of people that acts like or functions to aid another military group. For example, paramedics are considered a group of medical officers/personnel that are not part of the main medical unit, but gives aid anyway, either voluntarily or privately funded. Of course, different countries have different definitions of the word.

For things like this, TK is your salvation.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Hoh? Nice! More examples to go by in my project!

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Interesting. Aurion's talk with Leona and Chrono will surely be interesting. I also expect the ones with Tesla, Nanoha and Fate to be quite fun!

Aurion will basically try to "spy" on Leona, while with Chrono tries to "steal information". Though, the first part will become the basis towards Leona becoming Aurion's fourth niece.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Don't run. Because that's just what the producers did.

But then, we can rectify that here in Outer Cadia, right?

We are here to give Hayate her rightful unshafting!

Originally Posted by Keroko

Signum/Tesla/Hayate interaction? Meeting of the Wolken leaders? And Aurion/Tesla? What about?

Curiosity burning.

Post-mission heart-to-heart talk between Signum, Tesla, and Hayate, and the reason for Signum's renewed determination.

For Aurion and Tesla, they are attempting to "dissect" Leona. Tesla is an exceptional observant, even if she does not look like it.

Originally Posted by Kha

The problem with all the OCs is...

...how the heck am I supposed to pull a Towards the Terra?

But I'll try! FOR MY PEN IS THE PEN THAT WILL PIERCE THE HEAVENS!!!

BELIEVE IN US, WHO BELIEVE IN YOU!

Originally Posted by Kha

Greatness is to be expected.

No Khate? Khayate? Kharoko? Khanoha?XP



*runs*

I don't make relationship scenes in here, with the exception of those I already have in mind. Side-stories though, you have no-holds barred for it.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Signum/Tesla/Hayate = scolding that leads to smiles?

Aurion/Tesla = likely something not serious.

I'm getting curious as well...

Tee-hee, look above for the little spoiler.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

As usual, you fit a lot into one chapter. Interesting...

Seems to be one for the veterans though this time.

I seem to have that bad habit of voluntarily writing long stuff. >.> FieryAeon noted that a long time ago.

Still, if only I could extend Vivio's time of death past your timeline for DestinyS (if I remember correctly), I could include a Leona x Hayate x Nanoha x Fate x Vivio part. What say you?

Originally Posted by Nightengale

"Are you sure it's alright for us to be doing this, Hayate?"

Not bothering to lift her head, Hayate smiled as she proceeded to continue with what she was doing then, completely concentrating at her task on hand while replying, " Of course, it's not like we haven't done this a million times already."

"I know," Grandis replied as he made his move responding to Hayate's, breaking his way inside, her brow slightly contorted to that move by Grandis. "but tomorrow you'll be going on a mission. Even if you're with your knights, it's natural that I'd be worried. I’d hate it if you're not at your best because I drained you of all your energy tonight."

Hayate giggled, while Grandis's blank look invited wonders from her. He's probably the only one who can say that with a straight face and not realize the potential double meaning behind those words, before the game of chess they're playing.

A short crack is a big one indeed!