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Old 2012-09-23, 11:52   Link #236
Tempy
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Join Date: Apr 2008
Location: Hotsprings Resort
Age: 37
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Originally Posted by Wild Goose View Post
....Niiiice. I like.

Only quibble is that dialogue seems a bit stilted, most obviously with Coach's wingman. I'm guessing he's not a native speaker of English, hence he's taking more pains with the language?
Language is not his strong suit.

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Originally Posted by MrTerrorist View Post
Very good Tempy. Keep up the good work.

Meanwhile, i'm still working on my fanfic idea. Needs more brainstorming.
Thank ye kindly.

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Originally Posted by wellis View Post
Tempy, are your mercenaries original or is this some sort of crossover?
They are original characters, as is the Stray Dogs squadron.
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