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Old 2011-02-19, 01:30   Link #125
Ricky Controversy
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Join Date: Oct 2009
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Originally Posted by idiffer View Post
oh, and after reading your poem like 10 times...i couldn't find the trick. do u mind sharing? ...
Basically, I use fluid sentence structure to create layers of possible reading within the poem. For example, probably the most immediately obvious reading of the first two segments would go like this:

"Rain is in my eyes, and in me finding a disused umbrella there is nothing profound enough to change my mind, engraved as it is. Do you think that it falling apart means a thing?"

But it could also read

"Rain is in my eyes, and in me, finding a disused umbrella in a tree, where now we watch trains passing. There is nothing profound enough to change my mind, engraved as it is there, where you sit. Or do you think that it would ever fall apart?"

Get the basic gist of it? I like doing this because it's just as much fun seeing people come up with readings (some of which I hadn't even thought of) as it is building them myself.
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