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Old 2013-02-27, 22:50   Link #24
Obey the Darkly Cute ...
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: On the whole, I'd rather be in Kyoto ...
Age: 61
I actually like descriptive text, it helps the reader visualize the scene. Mostly I just meant the formatting. If you compare the first and last chapters - the first one has all the text crammed together. It is just hard to read. The last chapter makes good use of white space to help group dialog and descriptions.

Yeah, you shouldn't have to repeat descriptions after the first few times. You might say what the character is wearing or if they've changed their hair but otherwise you should only need facial expressions.

I'll admit I'm more prone to Tolkien style writing - I say what the weather is like, the dust in the air, etc. For action writing, that doesn't work quite as well. The only thing I don't like to see is a page of dialog where I lose track of who is saying what - there's a happy medium.
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