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Originally Posted by Miitan
Well after lurking moar since about page 300 I thought I'd attempt to contribute something to the thread.
I got lured here originally by Satashi waxing lyrical about the wonders of this forum and this thread on Fanfiction.net (there's another story regarding how I found out about Satashi's fanfics  ) and decided to investigate and since then I've spent many a day at work trawling the thread in search of new shiny things. 
I'm not going to attempt a review of the last 250 pages so you can breathe a sigh of relief.
I also bring my first fanfic attempt ever.
It's a bit dark and probably cliched so be aware. 
Spoiler for Loss:
It had happened again.
The one thing that still haunted her nightmares had been born to reality again.
They had been tasked with investigating ancient ruins on a distant planet that had shown signs of harbouring a lost logia. A standard mission, no different from the countless others they had worked together, and certainly no challenge for the Ace of Aces and herself.
It had happened too quickly.
She had been unable to react in time as the droid, which had seemed no different from the rest that they had mown down, had fired a barrier-breaking blast which had caught her companion off-guard. Magical Shields, Barrier Jackets and anything else in it's way had been ignored as the blast had continued it's unwavering course to it's destination of the wall on the other side of her close friend.
The lost logia-equipped droid had not stood a chance after that, it was dispatched instantly and emotionlessly as she raced towards the wounded, hoping that she would be in time.
This was the reality she was faced with now.
As she cradled Nanoha in her arms, she could only stare in horror at the scene before her.
No. This was just a dream, another nightmare like before.
No. This was impossible.
No. It had happened before, it would be OK just like before.
No. It wasn't like before....
Uncountable tears already covered the charred and bloody Barrier Jacket that lay before her, she could not remember how long she had cried for, too long it seemed.
A twitch.
She could only stare as Nanoha's eyes twitched open and watch on in hope as a small smile appeared on the face of the one she had admired for so long. "I'm sorry for scaring you like that, I guess I got careless again" Nanoha's voice came haltingly "This seems strangely familiar for some reason, it's like we've been here before." A cough racked the remains of Nanoha's chest as thick red liquid stained her lips. "I guess I'll have to let you take it from here, and I guess I've got more rehabilitation time ahead of me" she attempted to giggle but only managed another racking cough, staining her jacket further with red. "But first I think I'll take a short nap, it's been a long day...". She could only watch in horror as Nanoha's eyes closed once again.
"No!" she cried "You can't sleep now!" for she knew what the result would be if she let those eyes close again. She shook Nanoha, she had to keep her awake until help came. No response answered her efforts. "No! You have to wake up! We have to get you to safety!" but the body in her arms only response was to relax. "You can't die now! I never told you I loved you! Stupid!" Her final cry echoing through the ruins that day as she wept over the body of her lost loved one.
She could never tell if her eyes had been playing tricks on her that day, but she was sure a hint of a smile had reappeared on that serene face below her just before the end. To Vita, however, it would be a smile she would remember for the rest of her days.
If anyone wants to R&R it would be greatly appreciated, I don't think it's that good but it'd be nice to know what I can improve. |
You came here because of me? XD that's spiffy. Come to our chatroom sometime too, hte link's under my signature. ^_^ Welcome to the thread.
Tasty angst as well. Keroko will love you for sure. ^_^ pretty well written as well.
Sorry for my lack of presence lately. WoW and all :3 I'm only level 74 >.< I have a whiles to go. Also college starts December 1st so that'll kill my time as well. *sighs* oh well, incoming PS!Vivio