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Lol, same, I'm going to the city. Every year, around this time, we have a great big get together and PARTY! We all met at University and we were all first year students and became friends... then we found out the strangest thing...
There's like 6 of us and we're all Gemini's lol. So, instead of celebrating each ones birthday throughout the month, we all meet up in the city and have a Gemini birthday bash, for all of us at the same time :P.
ANYWAYS! I was giving your Franca+Nichol fanfic some thought and nearly all of it has been changed with what I've come up with.
Spoiler for Franca fanfic changes:
The Feast of all spirits is coming up, and after all the months that have passed since school started and after he's confessed who his love interest is to Avan, Nichol has finally decided that this, the feast, is the perfect time to finally tell Franca how he feels.
With this in mind, he's spent the last few days writing, re-writing and editing the love letter, which includes a lovely poem. Now, on the day of the festival, Nichol is going off to find Franca. After a short search, he spots her, talking to some girls from class G. He's so flustered that as he rushes over to her, he bumps into Sofia. In the process, and as she's getting up and yelling to 'watch where he's going', she happens to pick up the letter, unfolds it and reads it.
But, after a quick read through, she can't believe what its contains. She then repeats the whole love confession out loud, so that everyone, including Franca can hear. Everyone in the area is either shocked, thinks its funny or wrong and laughs out loud.
Franca is so mad, she stomps over to Nichol and picks him up off the ground and scolds him, asking him whats wrong with his head! Nichol apologizes, but tells Franca that he loves her just the same. Franca slaps him, as what he just said causes more laughter or gasps from everyone crowded around them.
Nichol turns to her, teary eyed and screams that it's ok for him to love her, because they aren't related by blood or something to that sort to get his point through. Franca is shocked to hear this, and doesn't believe it at first. But, before she can say anything...
Sofia the proceeds to tease the two bickering siblings with the classic, "Franca and Nichol sitting in a tree, k-i-s-s-i-n" Then gets punched out by Franca as she retorts with a "Learn some respect" or one of her classic lines.
But in striking not only Sofia, but Nichol repeatedly, its caught the attention of Professor Brixy. And it's against school policy to perform any acts of violence within the academy grounds. And it doesn't matter whether or not it was brought on by Sofias teasing. So, for the rest of the day, Franca is told to report to solitary confinement in the old building holding cells.
Now, Franca's furious that not only has she been publicly humiliated by her brother, got into a scrap with Sofia, but now she's forced to spend the one day of the year thats most important to gallians, locked in a cell. She tells Nichol that she 'won't forget this' or that she'll never forgive him, something to that sort.
Nichol also goes into hiding, somewhere on the academy grounds, possibly the roof and thinks about what he's done. That's when the GRA invades by way of blimp, as in the game. Nichol has the worst possible spot, on the roof, and is nearly crushed by the falling bell tower, but also gets knocked out in the process.
When he comes to and from his high observation point, he spots a squad of V2s heading for the old building, where his sister and the woman he loves, is imprisoned. So he sets off to go rescue her.
It's what I decided to change so far.
Last edited by Snowman24; 2011-06-17 at 01:22.
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