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Old 2008-09-05, 20:20   Link #26
Langus
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Join Date: Feb 2008
Location: Japan/Canada
Age: 34
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Originally Posted by Hari Michiru View Post
Yay! I'm finally done the first chapter of my story.

Enjoy.

Unnamed Story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4513007/1/Unnamed_Story
I finally got time tonight to give this a read. You have presented an interesting perspective on Rukia's character. I didn't expect some of what you put in there but it certainly brings new light to her character and her desire to emotionally detach herself from others. There were a few grammar slips but apart from that I thought it was well written. You should definitely continue with chapter two
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