[Kaijo]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

GWAH! I still say that it's Quattro's fault, but now I'm thinking that she was following orders.

But still...

Quattro sent the bomb back in time that killed Nanoha and sent this whole sequence of events into motion and Seikou is the catalyst.

And you still have some interesting theories. :P

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

I already had an idea as to what I think the ending of this will be, and you keep justifying it. I love this fic.

Heh, either I'm a bit more transparent than I hoped, or I might be sending off the wrong signals. We shall see. ;p But thanks for your support!

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

Spoiler for There's some spoilers for people who haven't read the chapter...:

Another darned good chapter. The (ahem) Tournament Arc is rapidly drawing to a close, Tea and Givo are in trouble, Due and Quattro continue to be up to no good (I still wonder about their Master Plan with Young!Jail, but hey, that'll surely come in time, probably with a high HSQ). I have to say, though, that I found the Isis fight more distracting than engaging--it seemed like an exercise to work her into the fic somehow and have some Force shout-outs than anything else (but then again, it's a non-final battle in a Tournament Arc, so of course it's filler, and since Force mostly leaves me yawning the shout-outs don't have the value that they would to a fan of Isis who'd be happy to see her strut her stuff). I appreciate the fact that rather than devote whole episodes to filler, you're instead balancing that with outside scenes of a more serious note...and of course, that one definite plot complication came to light, namely Clone!Nanoha's possibly abbreviated lifespan a la Zest. Keep 'em coming!

Spoiler for Spoiler for those who haven't read the chapter:

Technically, I might have been able to cut her out, but I do have some important plans in mind for her, and cutting her when necessitate cutting something out farther on(so not technically filler, although it might seem that way; and that's all I'll say for now^^). And like I said in the notes, it was either Sieg or her, as I didn't want to do another OC, like with the three I did last chapter. I'll admit a part of me likes the shout-out, but it's only a small part of it.

But thanks for the comments!

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Errors, quote, etc.

To be honest I was kinda bored with this chapter. Took me several hours to read it because I kept wandering away to do other things. Isis's appearence just feels out of place, like she doesn't really belong in there. The Teana/Givo stuff was a bit more interesting, but it seems you've overlooked the fact that Teana can turn invisible. I know the one area had an AMF but otherwise she can just use that and not have to worry about being caught. Maybe she'll use it next time.

I didn't forget about it, but there are a few things to keep in mind, the most important being that magic is detectable. Teana's Optic File is merely an illusion, and even at the end of StrikerS, it was shown that cyborgs can see through the illusions. So using magic would essentially give her away. Also, she's not too worried about being caught; she can sneak around and hide easily as she knows the area intimately. The problem is to expose what Quattro is up to. It's still a useful ability in the right situation, though.^^

Anyway, perhaps I didn't make the Isis stuff interesting enough, so I'll look it over and see if there are any improvements I can make Thanks for your comments and corrections as always, though! I should have some stuff in the next few chapters that you might find interesting.