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Originally Posted by RadiantBeam
I was experimenting a bit with the feeling and flow for this one, I admit.  I didn't really want there to be this major revelation every section, but kind of this gentle, steady push that ultimately led up to the conclusion of the piece. So I was trying to keep it repetitive, with maybe a few changes in wording and such to indicate her mindset was starting to shift.
Guess it's something I'll have to tinker with to get it right.  |
Naw, it's fine!
I like how it's not DRASTIC MAJOR CHARACTER CHANGE PER SECTION!!! I guess, on a very crazy and wispy level, it feels like it's great that each section has a similar style and mood, but that maybe if each section had a different....
colour, then it would show a slight progression/shift per section that might make it feel less repetitive?
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Gaah, I suck at expressing this!
Really, it's good....maybe I'll get it better upon re-reading
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*still wants to write a Chachamaru/Chisame story* Oh goddammit.
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*whistles* There's no one stopping you
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