View Single Post
Old 2011-04-03, 22:26   Link #816
DezoPenguin
Beta by Accident
*Author
 
 
Join Date: Oct 2008
Location: Maine
Age: 52
Quote:
Originally Posted by Moczo View Post
Hey, remember me?

Well, I know you remember this...

Spoiler for Chaos Theory, Chapter Ten:
Whoa, big fight scene! Now I know why this chapter took so long to write...Nonetheless, this scene contained the customary 100% of the recommended monthly allowance of Awesome. And as a bonus we get the maids being cute and Zouken suffering (which is always fun)! So...Caster Alter can be shortsightedly smug. This is good to know. Though if they drive her off, Lancer had better keep a very close eye on Assassin or things will end up right back where they started before Caster interfered. Loved Archer dealing with Rin!

One typo in the first section; you wrote "walked him" instead of "walked in." (I might also suggest "literally true" instead of "exactly true" in the same section, but that's more of a style thing.)
DezoPenguin is offline   Reply With Quote