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Originally Posted by TinyRedLeaf
You're not expecting me to do your homework for you, are you? 
My advice? Too many numbers crammed into one paragraph, enough to cause any reader's eyes to glaze over.
Start with the key finding. What's the story? Is business good or bad at the bookshop and cafeteria? Why? That should be your opening sentence.
Everything else will follow from there. |
Of course not. I prefer to do my homework myself unless it gets too annoying for me to handle. And unlike other homeworks which I can simply ignore if it gets irritating, this accounts for a huge proportion of my marks. Therefore I have to find a way to do it without screwing up.
Thanks for the advice. Looks like I have to rewrite the entire section.