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Originally Posted by Hagoshod
in the corner of her screen
spanning the top of her screen
appeared on her screen
every pixel on her screen
vanished from his screen
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Except that TSFs don't use screens for display of HUD and outside views.
With that said, the kind of contrivance that would have to go into an Imperial Royal Guardsman nobody somehow ending up in or even accompanying a top secret UN task force that only draws from rigorously pre-screened candidates at Yokohama, on a mission where the plan explicitly arranged for them to do it alone, simply boggles the mind.
And TSFs deploying sentry turrets with bombs having yield a third of the size of a standard S-11? The XG-70's main guard unit somehow managing to end up on the "other side of the hive"? Granted, making up virtually impossible scenarios and breaking continuity willy-nilly is kind of par for the course where fanfiction in general is concerned, but.
No offense, it's your fanfiction and you're free to make up whatever you like to contrive your own preferred scenario.
By the way, the first two episodes are, in my opinion, by no means irrelevant at present, but you're entitled to your own opinion on that, since your views are already practicaly on public record at this point, and there is nothing that can be said on that topic that has not already been said.
I don't mean to be a killjoy.
