Quote:
Originally Posted by Craxuan
“Until you have the ability to fend off any aggressors, wear this and you do not need to hide it anymore.”
I think it's, 'wear this until you do not need to hide it anymore'?
As of now I don't have much to say about the chapters sorry, I guess maybe fifty chapters in I'll have something to comment about.
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Hi Craxuan
Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. This helps me to improve the sentence structure, and makes it easier on the eyes/brains/fingers
(I get cross eyed reading too many times, and editing becomes seriously tough, how I wish I have my own proofreader and editor)
Actually both your sentence and mine do not convey what I have in mind.
The 'anymore' is extra, I should edit it out.
It is referring to the 'S' badge she gave him. He doesn't need to hide it.
It is unlike the 'SS' badge, where she made him hide it, and he took it off when meeting his group of friends.
Yes, by all means. Its your prerogative to decide when you want to comment
(although I am not sure if a feedback is a comment or a comment can be a feedback )
Thanks once again,
Cheerios and happy reading
WT