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Old 2010-04-05, 23:15   Link #30
isagrimorie
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Join Date: Oct 2009
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Originally Posted by deathcurse View Post
Ah, a few details first that I didn't mention before...this story takes place when Konoka, Setsuna and the gang are 21, and follows mostly the manga canon, although parts of the magical world arc may be ignored .

Here's the prologue again, and Chapter 1!

Love and Duty Come in Chains

Spoiler for Love and Duty Come in Chains, prologue:

Spoiler for Chapter 1:
I really like the first chapter, especially after the angst of the prologue... its not that this didn't have some pain but its like there is some easing of it and I like how you added in the talk between Asuna and Konoka showing their friendship and sometimes you need a friend like Asuna, someone who's willing to talk with you without pressure but still willing to talk some sense to you or, if you can take it, shake it into your stubborn head.

Mana was also a bonus, anytime there's a Mana I celebrate, she is such an awesome no nonsense character. All the drama is just white noise to her, she has a job to do and she'll do it really well.
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