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Old 2012-09-08, 09:42   Link #37196
Mr Coin
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Join Date: Sep 2011
Location: Under a pebble
Age: 32
It's good to see you update your work rather then advertising and uploading the work of others. And yes, the picture worked like a charm, I think.

I love the dynamic relationship between Yuuno and Signum, and you've nailed humor in this chapter really well - with Yuunno's devotion in his work and Signum's strict demeanor, it's like a girlfriend trying to stop her boyfriend's addiction with video games. There is also mention of Hayate's trip to boot-camp that made me chuckle like a Hyena. Don't forget Nanoha, she's good at exploiting other people in their embarrassing moments - she's the white devil after all.

I also have the feeling that Yuuno has a great potential to be an main-character in an harem based game or something. Thanks to Nanoha for quoting Signum's words in the last scene break about Yuuno being a "conqueror".

Spoiler for A minor mistake:


I really hate my inner grammar-nazi-radar for spotting this small mistake. It ruins my fun for reading.
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