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Old 2013-05-10, 01:02   Link #43012
ZeroXSEED
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Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
My intention is not clear enough it seems, Ichika already knew it from the get go in the previous chapter (he's being sardonic than flat out scowling), and Lingyin don't show any fear at all, on the other hand, Madoka, Cecilia, and Charles is flat out disturbed.

I suppose the transition needs to be reworked indeed. I felt like the last part of chapter 14 is not... gripping enough, and yes, this part is quite abrupt and too sudden.

Need to consult blitz, but he's nowhere to be seen. Can you help
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