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Old 2013-07-09, 01:00   Link #3847
demino_hellsin
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This indictes for me that you are well attatched to those concepts. Just keep in mind that not everything important to you is important to the plot. If your drabble is some form of theme or foreshadowing for the whole chapter then it should be okay. But you do this for every scene change and Chouka's fight which was supposed to be highspeed kind of died out in hype at the wordiness.

Just sayin' you should analyze those maybe
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