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Nice scene. Both Kyon's are really selfish aren't they?

Originally Posted by September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- Pitiful

I don’t, by the way.

I loled with that one. Best line this time. It is soo Kyon. Btw, in the subscene, I missed he using the fact Girl A fleed from his helping hand the first time he tryed to help her.After that is more or less natural just go away.

Originally Posted by September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- Pitiful

[Note: I’m kind of wondering if it’s a good idea to drop this suggestion on him this early, but that’s why I post these things here in the first place.]

Hmmm, why did she denyed latter? Wasn't she going to tell him last night? I can understand she cowering in the last minute (like how she did earlier), but after doing, why would she deny? It is simpler for her if he know, I guess.

Anyway, it might work. But then, it should be a variable there right? A so important hint must be remembered latter.

Originally Posted by September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- Pitiful

I was actually scared for a minute there. Still, who comes up with crap like that, other than Haruhi? Maybe this girl is a cousin or something.

Amuzing. If bloodheated!Kyon is somewhat similar to Haruhi, a imprudent Kyonko should be similar to Haruhi as well. And she still on character after all, I can see Kyon behaving in a similar way if their roles were reversed. Very good.

Originally Posted by September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- Pitiful

Kyon: You are, aren’t you? You kleptomaniac! I should change your name to “Thief!”

This is a Zelda reference? If so, very good. I laugt here too. However, it shouldn't be "THIEF" then?

Originally Posted by September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- Pitiful

Kyon: Fine, fine. Let’s just stick with “Girl A”, then.

Girl A: …?

Lol breaking of the 4th wall. It is not unrealistc tough, so it is OK.

Originally Posted by September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- Pitiful

Kyon: Sigh, fine, I’ll carry it. I expect to be paid that seventy yen in full, though.

Lol again. I didn't expect he was really going to that that 70 yens.

Originally Posted by September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- Pitiful

Girl A: We all promised to meet up later, so I guess that’s where she’ll be… Yeah, you’re done. Thanks for your help, by the way. Here’s your seven yen.

Hey, did Kyon get fooled? It shouldn't be seventy? That Kyonko...

Originally Posted by September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- Pitiful

And we ran out the gates and down the hill, carrying that monitor and looking like idiots. I’ll be surprised if someone (like that poor Computer Society) doesn’t report us to the police.

Err, good point. If they are going to back to school later (Day 7 right?) shouldn't be a variable here? The CCP knows Kyon, after all.

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Bah, crappy ending.

I don't even know how this turned out. Tell me, please.

How I would know? I liked it, however. Really funny.

Originally Posted by DJ_RockmanX

Ah the computer society. We need more of those guys.

I agree. We also need more of Computer Loli. She is even funier. Any change of her showing again?

PP:
Lol, I really liked this scene. It been a while since I have made so many comments in a single one.