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Originally Posted by 00-Raiser
Any suggestions on how to make the line better?
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Well here's a (roughly written) alternative if you're interested:
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“I don’t know about that.” Hayate chuckled bashfully. “I was freaking out for a moment there…” Hayate shifted to a serious tone. “Tell Vivio that if she wants to submit a request for vacation time, or a transfer, I’ll sign off on it right away.”
There was a pause for a moment, images of a crying Vivio flashing in Hayate's eyes. The next sentence began with a stutter. "...and though I sincerely hope it wouldn't come to that, I will understand if she wants to resign."
“I’ll tell her.” Nanoha smiled before leaving. “Thanks again, Hayate-chan. I’m glad it was you.”
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Something bugs me though. Hayate considers herself to a mother, yes? But had any of the Wolkies ever went through puberty during her time?
