[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Sorry about the MASSIVE delay.

Rising Dragon, my pre-reader, had some major RL problems (he can tell you if he wants to), so, it's understandable.

Previous chapters can be found via my sig.

Day in the Life

Chapter 38

Spoiler for Escape PT IV:

before groaning and grabbing her bucket, before trying to expel the contents of her stomach. (Delete the second 'before' and make it "bucket, trying")

to swerve out of the was. (way)

he laughed, the little redhead (as the)

as he looked at the downed form of Pyro. (remove this entire bit because you're just repeating)

Still, he wasn't going to let this opportunity leave him, suddenly charging forward, before leaping up into the air and spread his arms out, magical energy gathering in them before he snapped his hands down, letting out a powerful air blast that tore through the roof that Teana was standing on, causing her to abandon the roof. (Um... Ouch. Break this up into separate sentences.)

she saw Rudal, in only his pants, which were in tatters and falling apart, he had no shirt on, (if you say he's only wearing his pants, you don't need to tell us he had no shirt on. We know that already)

Some corrections in the quote.

Certainly an action packed chapter and ends on yet another cliffhanger The mini-boss squad seems to have been taken down a bit too easily, but maybe that's just to lull us into a false sense of security.

Well, keep up the good work.

Originally Posted by Kaijo

A small one-shot, simply because DC's fic had me thinking.... and that's never a good thing...

Spoiler for An Unfamiliar Feeling:

Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha
An Unfamiliar Feeling

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Fate's eye's snapped open and she took inhaled deeply, as if she hadn't been breathing for quite awhile.

"It's okay, Fate, you're okay!" Shamal's voice soothed as her hands steadied the patient.

Fate glanced around at the people surrounding her, wondering why she felt strange. "Where... what happened?"

She blinked, her voice sounding a bit odd to her. She also felt quite weak, almost numb, unable to move her body; had she just come out of surgery?

"You were badly injured, and thanks to Nanoha and Shari, we were able to save your life," Hayate explained, Rein floating beside her master while giving Fate an odd look.

Fate found Nanoha and Shari on the far side of the room, looking rather weak, guilty, and ashamed while a pair of Enforcers apparently kept them under guard. "Injured? What happened? I vaguely remember a fight, then it went black..."

Shamal and Hayate glanced worriedly at each other, some secret passing between them.

"You were chasing some criminals, but walked into a trap," Hayate explained sadly. "They brought you to the hospital, but you weren't going to make it."

"But I'm alive," Fate noted, somehow feeling a bit different, but unable to figure out why. "So why are Nanoha and Shari under arrest?"

"I'm sorry, Fate-chan," Nanoha apologized, tears in her eyes, barely able to meet Fate's gaze. "I couldn't let you die... I had to.... It was all my fault; I was the one who-"

"No!" Shari denied forcefully. "It's more my fault than yours!"

"They worked all night to save you, but what they did wasn't legal, and they have charges they'll need to answer to," Hayate explained, while still leaving important details out.

A sickening feeling began to make it's presence known in Fate's gut, as she glanced down at her hands, slowly starting to realize something was very wrong. "What... what did you do to me...?"

"There will be some... changes and adjustments," Shamal soothed again. "And we'll get you all the help and counseling you need..."

Rein floated down and landed, giving her a hopeful-yet-sorrowful smile. "But at least you're alive, and it's not so bad."

It was then that Fate noticed that Rein appeared larger than normal, as the little girl took her hand; in fact, everyone else appeared a bit larger than normal. [No no no no no no! It couldn't be!]

Fate immediately got up and stared at Rein, then at her own, small body. "I'm a... I'm a... I'm a... no no no NO!"

Nanohda twiddled her fingers. "Sorry, Fate-chan, but it was the only way to save you..."

Shari merely chuckled nervously. "Heh hehe heh...."

Chibi-Fate-chan, the newly born unison device, fainted.

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Author's notes:

Figured Nanoha could get some revenge for what happened in DC's fic.^^;; Revenge is a dish best served... small.

And just because I've recently watched the Shana-tan and Index-tan OAV specials....

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Bonus ending:

Nanoha sighed as she walked through the streets, crumbs continuing to accumulate in her hair as people on the street stared. "Do you really have to do that?"

"Shut up! Shut up! Shut up!" Fate-tan declared from the top of Nanoha's head, still rather put off by her miniature size as she continued to pull melon bread after melon bread from subspace to munch on. "This is all your fault! And if you protest, I'll.. I'll... do something bad!"

"Okay, okay, I'm sorry!" Nanoha quickly offered as Fate-tan started to concentrate, breathing a sigh of relief as she stopped.

Fate-tan harumph'ed, and then resumed her munching while mumbling darkly, "And Shari's fault, too. Can't believe you got her to do this to me..."

Nanoha twiddled her thumbs. "Well, actually... she really didn't need much convincing..."

Haha! Next thing you know Fate'll be pulling out Nanoha's hair and telling her to go bald

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Spoiler for More Changes:

"Hmm..." A woman with long green hair stared at the monitor in front of her. "Dangerous games these children play."

"M...Mother!" A young boy with blue hair by her gasped in shock. "How can you say that?"

The woman turned to her son and smiled. "Because I don't think either of them are trying to hurt each other. It would be nice if they were just trying to collect the Jewel Seeds and got a little too competitive with each other. Besides, they are cute, ne?" She winked and held up a finger, causing the boy to look away as his face turned red.

A girl with brown hair turned to the woman and gave her a look that bordered between exhasperated and irritated. "Admiral, wouldn't it be a better idea to get the Jewel Seeds ourselves?"

The Admiral turned to her and nodded. "Oh, it would, I admit, but we have no idea just how much damage the Jewel Seeds have done." She looked at a new video window. "Well, it seems that they've started fighting again. Chrono, perhaps you should go down there and see if they'll be willing to listen to us."

"Of course." The boy bowed his head and walked off to a tube at the back of the room.

"Oh, and Chrono..."

"Huh?" He looked at his mother as she grinned in a way that had him tremble slightly with worry.

"Do try to be diplomatic in this situation. I'd hate to have a fight start due to a misunderstanding again."

The boy's face flushed. "That wasn't my fault." Really, it wasn't. How was he supposed to know that accidentally knocking over a house of cards was considered a criminal offense on that last world?

She giggled at him and nodded. "Of course, good luck, dear."

After watching Chrono disappear, the girl turned to the woman. "Admiral Lindy, was that really neccessary?"

Lindy smiled at the girl. "Amy, sometimes it helps to be constantly reminded of small failures. It helps us avoid big ones in the future."

"So..." Amy's face took on an annoyed bent at that point. "Why bring up that those girls were cute to Chrono?" Sure, she was a couple years older than Chrono was, but she still liked him. Now if only he'd stop being so stiff and formal all the time.

Lindy shrugged as she watched Chrono interrupt the fight between the two girls. "To be honest, I just want him to interact with more people close to his age. It's not good to be around adults all the time, even if one of them is just a teenager." She winked at Amy, who just shook her head and looked back at the screen. "Well, that was a bit unexpected." She hadn't expected the redheaded familiar to attack her son like that. "Amy, can you track them?"

"Already on it, ma'am." Amy's hands flew over the keyboard in front of her before she grimaced and sighed. "I'm sorry, but they did multiple teleports in quick succession, tracing them would take so long that by the time we caught up with them..." She trailed off, disappointed.

Lindy shook her head. "No, it's okay. No one's perfect after all." She smiled as it looked like Chrono was able to talk the other girl into at least coming on board. "At the very least, we should be able to find out what's been going on on this planet."

Amy nodded, though, deep down, she wondered who was going to get in trouble for what was going on. Non-Administered worlds just didn't have powerful mages laying around after all, and Lost Logias didn't just pop up on those worlds either.

So, why were two mages of such power actually fighting on the planet?

Um... Sorry that it's basically canon again.

You showed things differently, so reusing canon events is fine. Now to wait and see how things change further.