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Undercover Mole
 Graphic Designer
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: ~Floating on the edge
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So it's amazing how much writing can come up in 8 pages. So be warned about this seriously long post of comments.
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Originally Posted by Satashi
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It was sad but it was nice to see the ending. It made me cry. Poor Fate, at least she tries. But very nice job.
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Originally Posted by Satashi
Spoiler for Lyrical Days:
I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.
'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.
“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.
Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”
“Starving.” My reply seemed to make her happy. “Something smells good.”
“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”
“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”
“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”
“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”
“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”
“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”
“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”
“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”
“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.
“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”
“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”
“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”
“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”
“Hmmm....” I hopped on the kitchen counter instead and watched her. “It's quiet tonight, where's Fate at?”
“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”
“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.
“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”
“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”
“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”
“...I really will if you say that.”
“Then do it.”
“...I'm not in the mood.”
“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”
“Yes?”
Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”
“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”
“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”
“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.
“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”
“I look at you all the time.”
“Not when I'm naked.”
I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”
“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”
Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”
Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”
“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”
Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”
“Thank you,” I teased back.
“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”
“You want a next time?”
“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.
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Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...
A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.
(that was last one. Let's get a new vote count. BOLD AND RED please. If you want the rest of Lyrical Days, I will post it later probably. For now, everyone feel free to vote. |
I'm going to guess that voting is still going on and say C
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Originally Posted by Satashi
For Angel, who's taking exams.
Spoiler for Disney World Pt.5 I think:
Nanoha screamed bloody murder as the roller coaster flew around the tracks and made clinking sounds that she just knew were bolts unscrewing. Vivio was next to her, happily holding onto the safety rail and cheering. Fate was on the other side of the little one, also crying out happily. When the minute and a half long ride was finished the two blonds looked at each other and smiled while Nanoha slouched down, trying not to throw up.
"Congratulations!" The operator told them happily after spinning a wheel. "You have all won another ride without waiting!" Several people cheered, making Nanoha shoot bolt upright.
The ride started moving again and Vivio hopped in the seat happily. Fate took her hand again and lifted them in the air. The brown haired girl grasped the guard rail firmly, screaming out how life was unfair.
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"Uguuuu..." Face down on the table, Nanoha allowed Fate to rub her back soothingly. "I'm going to be sick..."
"No you're not." The blond laughed, keeping an eye on Vivio who was ordering something a few feet away. "You can handle flying so you can handle this."
"It's different when you're bolted down and can't control it..." With a slow breath she sat up and calmed down. "I'm okay now..."
"Mama!" Vivio ran over to them holding a cold beverage in her hands.
"Vivio went to get you something to calm down with, "Fate explained happily as their daughter jogged. "Careful Vivio, don't-"
Fall.
Vivio landed face first, cushioning the landing with her hands but also making the drink cover her head completly. "Vivio," Nanoha knelt down and lifted her daughter up, Fate's influence becoming obvious. "Are you okay?"
"Mm..."
Fate started wiping the girl off. "Not hurt?"
Vivio shook her head. "I'm sorry."
"Don't be," Nanoha shook her head. "Hey, Vivio, what do you want to do now?"
"Another roller coaster!" She answered at once.
"Sounds fun!" Fate agreed instantly.
Nanoha sank back. "Why me...?" Looking around, she pointed. "I'm going to go shopping, so you two behave alright?"
"You behave," Fate countered playfully. "We'll be back soon, meet here in half an hour?"
"Okay," Nanoha shouldered her purse and gave Fate a quick kiss on the cheek. "Call me if you can't find me."
"Right," lending down Fate scooped up Vivio. "Come on ,Vivio! Let's go ride another!" Her neck was hugged happily.
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This series is so cute. I'm glad I don't get too sick on roller coasters.
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Originally Posted by TheShinySword
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oh wow. That was pure win.
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Originally Posted by Thesinwithin
Undercover, Chapter Seven, "Because a battle rages inside of me"
Chapter Seven Link
Spoiler for Notes:
-Title is from "Kiss!^2 Bang!^2 by Komatsu Ayaka. Anyone familiar with Pretty Guardian Sailor Moon (which has eaten my soul, again -sigh-) will know that this is by far one of the most catchy songs ever written.
-Fate and Nanoha, after a week of Fate getting used the the idea of the new bond that they share, are finally starting to just be cute together.
-I figure that even though Nanoha hates Fate worrying over her, she will worry about Fate's condition. They care so much for each other. Its cute.
-Fate is very torn between action and nonaction here, mostly because she knows that she is still injured, but at the same time; she desperately needs to fight something.
-Point Me Spells are (c) JK Rowling. I modified it to work within a Nanoha-setting, and I firmly believe that a spell like this must exist on in Mid-Style magic, because they're so damn useful.
-When Fate changes her barrier jacket to her old, original one (from the first two series) she's doing it because when she uses Impulse Form she's sacrificing some of her speed in order to have more defense. In order to do well in the fight, Fate reasons that she's going to have to be faster than Subject A, who is easily as fast as she is when she's using Impulse Form for her Barrier Jacket.
-"Who the hell do you think I am?" Well, this isn't Gurren Laggan, but I couldn't resist the reference. Takeshi is rather insulted
-Protection Powered and Round Shield are both of Nanoha's stronger protection spells. I figured that she would be the sort to combine them when Fate was threatened.
-Nanoha giving Fate part of her barrier Jacket was something that is actually part of the original plans for this story. I always thought it strange that Impulse For of Fate's barrier jacket came with a white over coat that looked ... a lot like Nanoha's barrier Jacket. So I created an explanation.
-So if you completely destroy someone's linker core, they die.
-A lot of police officers, after their first shooting, require someone to talk to. I think that the TSAB might not have shrinks on staff, however, because that would have been the first thing that I would have suggested Nanoha do, had I been Chrono.
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Very nice! I like how you used the point me spell. That was cool. It was nice to see fate feeling insecure about her powers. And her doubting Nanoha's power as well. Good angst at the end. Not annoying and you could see Nanoha's feelings.
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Originally Posted by Junkedcat
A small tease of the next Landscaper!Fate
Spoiler for snip:
“Ne, Sis?” One blond hummed to the other that was combing her hair.
The questioned one slowed down. “What is it?” she asked in a gentle tone.
“Do you think mommy will ever get better? She’s hasn’t been herself for a long time.” She looked back at her sibling.
“I don’t know,” an honest answer as her hand brushed a few strands of hair from her sister’s face, “I think she could get better, someday.” With that she gently nudged the other’s face to look forward again to resume her work.
“I wish dad was here… Things were nicer when he was here…”
The brush was set down in order to pick up a hair tie. “I wish he was here too…”
A minuet passed in silence.
“Sis... I’m hungry…” Sympathetic arms reached around to hold her from behind.
“I’m hungry too…”
Landscaper!Fate
“Sister”
Got a ways to go on it but its getting done…
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I can't wait to see this. It sounds a bit sad. Poor Fate and Alicia!
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Originally Posted by Evil Rick
Chapter 30
Vatican Knights
Spoiler for Los Ganados:
A chilly air blow in that field covered with skelletons, Alphonse, Helga and me remained silent while hearing those giant steps that were making the land trumble, I slowly standed up and pulled out my gun preparing myself for wathever was coming
An inmense shadow appear inside the cave, it was descomunal, like 20 meters, it slowly came out to the sunlight, a colosal Slave, it has the apearance of a bull, like a minotaur, it was holding a inmense Axe, for that thing was the axe that we saw in that armery, it was to arm this monster, he noticed us, making some strang noises from his mouth, we remained petrificed and silent, If you think that saw a big creature like that was something terrifing,image our surprise when we saw a second one coming out of the cave too, the two titans were no other than Los Ganados
"Uh... Vivio?" Helga was petrificed, Alphonse has hiden her behind him, I didn't knew wath to do, the monster of the lake was one thing, this two giants were something totally diferent, I though there was no way to defeat them, the first Ganado rise his axe and charge it against us, we reactionate and evade it, when the descomunal weapon touch the ground, it was like if the land was tearing apart
"Fire! Fire!" I screamed while shooted my own gun against Los Ganados
The slaves meerly feel the bullets, they started to cahse us, one go behind Alphonse and Helga and the other went against me!
The onlt thing I was doing was to evade him, he was fast and strong, the Axe were falling just a few mteters away from me, plus he was also trying to crush me with his feets, just like if I were a little ant! Helga and Alphonse were under the same situation
Los Ganados hitted the ground, smashed it and crushed it, trying to get us, I knew we were not going to last long, still in the ground, I rolled myself and shooted against his head, he coveret it with his hand, like were you do to scare the flyes, I aprovechate and ran away
Alphonse washolding Helga aginst the ground, in a little hole that was out of the reach of the enormus hands of the other Ganado, it was furius, smashing the ground trying to get my friends out of there, I shooted against him with the intention of call his atention, it worked... by my disgrace, now the two Ganados has their sights over me, I ran and grabed my Inquisitor's Axe, when I turned I saw that one of the slaves was going to catch me with his hand, I quickly swinged my Axe and ripped out one of his fingers, the slave made a horrible chill, the othert one charge his axe gainst me, I evade it and keep runing until I reacha high ground who leave me at the alture of their chests, the two slaves wereaproaching to me, the one with the finger ripped looked quite mad, From their position, Helga and Alphonse shooted against them, they call the atention of one that turn, the one with the finger ripped don't turn and raise his axe ready to slash me, I saw an oportunity there
The Ganado launched his axe in a vertical slash, I thro my self to the floor to evade it, the axe stabbed in the backof the other Ganado who falled dead inmediatly mading a horrible last roar, the other one turn to saw what had he done, I quickly jumped at his back, with one hand I grabed myself from his hairs, I pulled out my gun and shooted against his neck, the slave throw his axe and tryed to reachme, but I was out from his range, soon my face was covered with his blood, I quickly reloaded and keeep firing against his neck, I think I shoot like 5 rounds of bullets against him from the back of his neck wehn he finally started to stagger and finally falled to the ground aparently death
I was totally exauthed, Alphonse and Helga helped me to got up
"Hey Vivio! You got him all by yourself" Alphonse sayed while cleaning my face with his own cloth, I couldn't help but laugh, we were walking away from the corpses when I feelt that something was moving behind us, I turned and saw the Ganado I though I was killed rising his head, I try to scare but before I could do anyting he catch me with his hand
"Vivio!!!" Helga screamed, the Slave opened his mouth, he was going to ate me! Just when He was going to bite me a shoot came from the distance, the bullet got inside his eye, a second one in the same place, and a third one who finally finished him, this time, the Ganado was really dead
I realised myself from his hand, Alphonse and Helga helped me, at the distance I saw Raphael holding his Sniper Rifle, curius, he had saved me, behind him came several regulators, and Sky, Jasper and Karil too, in a fe minutes they all were at our point
I remained there like 15 minutes recovering my strenght, Karil was really worried about me, I told her I was allright, Sky came out from the cave followed by some regulators, they had gone inside to inspectionate it
"God news" He said "These two slaves were not here just for casuality, there is a pasage at the back of the cave, they were guarding it"
"So... these two cows were protecting the entrance to something... Something tells me that is our dear friend Nanoha. Grab you guns people, we are moving" Raphael comanded, we all standed up and gone inside the cave, bue before we got in, I noticed something in Raphael, his sniper rifle, the image came to my mind as a flash... it wa sthe same gun that the strange shadow used to kill Jack Velorius
Hey guys, some problems here, I was working on the guion of Chapter6 of Rise of Techno - Union and noticed that it was too big, I calculate more than 50 pages, thing that will made it a bit dificult to download. Do you think I should divide it in 2 chapters making a total of 14 chapters of Rise of Techno - Union instead of 13? |
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Originally Posted by Evil Rick
Chapter 31
Vatican Knights
Spoiler for The De la Huerta Family:
We gone inside the enormus cave from were Los Ganados had came out, the smell inside it was like hell, I still don't want to know what my feets were footing, our only light was a torch that Sky was carrying up ahead, I was looking at the sniper rifle of Raphael,yes... it couldn't be another, it was the sniper I saw, the one that that strangue shadow used to kill Jack Velorius, Raphael was the traitor, I just knew it
"Look that!" A regulator spotted a little passage, the one that Sky had saw, we all go inside it, it was very small,a large tunel, like a mine, the passage was very largue, we walked fora long until we diviced the sunlight at the end of the corridor, when we go out we discovered that we were in an enormus gray garden, some stone chairs, statues of angels, even a little water spring, and in front of this... an enormus mansion, a big one, bigger tath Edmund's one
"Wow! Check this out" Karil sayed while pointing at a strangueplaque in the mansion's main door, it sayed
Mansion de la Familia de la Huerta
Of course, I couldn't understand it so I called Jasper to help us, he readed it and told me
"Here says: De la Huerta Family's mansion" We knew what does it means, Alastor had told us that if we killed Beatriz de la Huerta and Salazar dela Huerta, he shall asist us to kill Nanoha
Sky interrupted
"De la Huerta? Are not this the last name of the town mayor? Salazar de la Huerat. Right?" I saw an oportunity here
"Yes..." I said "So those two demons were actualy guarding the De la Huerta family... wich means"
"Wich means that they are conectedsomehow with Nanoha... and this may explain the strangue status of the villagers. Exellent Vivio!" Sky said, the things were going well
We opened the inmense doorsand enter in the mansion, it was certanly big, floor and columns of marble, a golden lamp in the top, beautifull paints in the wall, I even saw works of Goya in that colection
"Spread up!" Raphael comanded "Search every single corner of the mansion, now!"
Of course Karil, Jasper, Helga, Alphonse and Me gone together, we gone upstairsand trough several passagues, when I was sure no one were hearing I said to my comradess
"O.k this is our oportunity, we know Nanoha is not here, we must focus into find and kill Beatriz and Salazar"
"This mansion is enormus, were do will find them" Alphonse asked, I didn't knew what to answer, but then we hear a little voice, a voice that Helga and I knew very well"
"They are in the music room"
"Who said that?!" Jasper quickly pull out his weapon
"Could it be... Nanoha, it's you?" I asked
"Nanoha?!" Karil asked terrified
"Calm down, it's not the Nanoha that we... she is..." Helga din't know exatcly how to explain it, but before she could end, a little figure appear among us, the same little kid, with her japanese dress, her point nails and her purple ball, the little child Nanoha that Helga and me saw in the mansion of Edmund Testarrosa
"Salazar and Beatriz are in the music room right now" She said again "Just take the stairs at the end of this corridor and follow the passage full of paints"
"Are you sure, sweety?" I asked, she just noded
I standed up and looked at the corridor that ended with the begining of the stairs that this Nanoha had mentionated
"Just be carefull" She added "They are like... the others"
"The others?" Jasper asked but by our surprise, the little Nanoha had disapeared,ignoring that succes I answered him
"I think you know what does she means" I pulled out my gun and reloaded it, my friends do the same, we followed the corridor and gone upstairs,when we reach the top, we noticed a melodie, music played from a piano, in front of us there was the largue passague fulled of paints and at the end of it, there was a single door, from were the music was coming, for every step that putted us closer to the door, the music sounded harder and harder, finally,my hand reach the door, I opened it and...
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Well it seems like they passed another obstacle, but it looks like another one is coming up. All the slaves are becoming really big. Oh I like nice little Nanoha, she's cute. Huge cliffhanger! Please continue!
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Originally Posted by Satashi
Redone to make it more.....believable. I like this version better 
Spoiler for Version 2.0!:
Chrono nodded lightly towards them. “Glad to have you all here again.” Leaning forward, he got to the points. “As you may have guessed, we have a mission for you three. This is one that will really push what you have learned.”
Nanoha crossed her legs to try and get comfortable in the stiff chair. “What is it?”
Lindy drank from the small cup of tea in front of herself before replying to the question. “We detected a great power resonating from an non administrated planet near where one of our last missions took place. We sent a team to investigate and got very interesting results back.”
“What we found out,” Chrono continued where his mother left off. “was that this planet is inhabited by humanoids. Their technology seems to vary from place to place but the main area we are interested in seems to be quite advanced. I would place them slightly above Earth's current state.”
Nanoha's interest was perked at hearing that. “So is it Logia class items that make up for the differences in technology in different areas?”
Lindy placed her cup back onto the saucer in front of herself. “We are not yet sure if it is, but from our reports it seems that there are not only multiple power readings, but there is a training facility that teaches people to use a type of gem to fight.”
Hayate thought about what was said while Nanoha and Fate looked at each other questioningly. “So it is a military operation?”
Chrono gave her a light smile. “The data given to us implied that the people being trained there, all female, are being used as a type of 'super weapon' for high ranking officials. Kings and Queens, if you will. Their power is so great that just one of them is enough to take on a small army.”
“Compared to our mage ranks, how would they be classified?” Fate's red eyes moved to question her brother.
“We are not sure,” Lindy revealed reluctantly. “We have not been able to see them in action, as our team was recalled when they were needed to be elsewhere. We have data of everything they learned while there and you all will be given a copy to study before deploying.”
“What task are we going to agree to?” Fate pondered aloud.
Chrono waved his hand to bring up several monitors for them. “Going by the reports, this training facility also seems to be a school.” The images showed different places around a campus with several people walking around. “If what we were told is true, and a single one of these students possess the ability to become powerful enough to take on a small armed force by themselves, then the T.S.A.B would benefit greatly from this type of training. We want you three to infiltrate and observe first hand what is going on.”
Nanoha frowned lightly, making Lindy question her reaction. “Well,” She spoke nervously. “I'm not really keen on the idea of stealing people's ways of life just so the T.S.A.B can teach people ways to fight...”
The male of the room sighed lightly. “Nanoha, we are not going there to steal their ways of life.” This earned him a questioning look. “Once you three have been there long enough we will go by your reports to see if this planet is capable of making a treaty with our bureau. If so, then in exchange for their training system we will give them technology to better enrich their planet, as well as give them the rights of all others governed by us.”
“Oh!” Nanoha blushed, sinking down in her chair lightly as Lindy covered a small smile behind her cup. “I'm sorry.”
“Anyway,” Fate spoke up, using her fingers to move the monitors around to inspect them all. “This school... you need us to get in, observe, and do reports on what we find out?”
“That is correct,” Lindy told her happily. “Chrono and I both think that a mission like this would be great for your first secluded deployment.”
“Secluded...?” Nanoha laughed nervously when she was looked at by everyone in the room. “Nya haha...”
Hayate answered the question in place of the leaders across from them. “It means we will be dropped off and picked up later. We will be in charge of ourselves.”
A small nod. “That's right.” Chrono slid an envelope over to Hayate. “You will be in command. You job will be to make sure that Nanoha and Fate have an easy job going about their mission. You will be in charge of everything from getting them into the school, ensuring they are able to survive, to getting them out at any moment. You may assemble a team of no more than two helpers of your choice to ensure you are able to do this.” He got a small nod and turned his attention to Fate. “Your job will be to throughly test the training system they undergo. While there you will be forbidden to use any technology that would be considered 'suspicious' while in public. In other words, you will fight using their tactics and refrain from using your barrier jacker or Bardiche. I'm sure you are aware of the strict rules of using technology on an underdeveloped planet?”
“Yes,” The blonde nodded lightly.
“And finally, Nanoha,” Blue eyes met each other's. “You will be Fate's assistant, but your main focus will be on understanding exactly how this training goes. If brought into the bureau, then you will be the one teaching it to others. You could say that this is your first step to becoming a full fledged instructor. Learning by observing and the ability to break apart everything to better understand it is a key factor is being a teacher. This is your first real test on that ability. Fate will rely heavily on you to guide and teach her during this.”
“Yes,” This time Nanoha nodded at him seriously.
Lindy spoke up again, placing two cubes of sugar into a fresh cup of tea. “Hayate, do you know who you need as your assistants?”
The brown haired girl stared at an image of children playing with an animal that closely resembled a dog on the streets of the town by the school. “I have: I would like to request that Zafira act as my personal bodyguard during this, as well as Yuuno Scrya for his abilities in data manipulation and archiving.”
The older woman smiled over her cup. “Granted.”
Chrono stood up and got saluted by his two friends and sister when they got to their feet as well. “You will depart in two days. Please make arrangements and inform your families of your extended leave from Earth.”
“Sir!”
Going to do the otome section of chapter 1 shortly and post it for approval/suggestions as well. After that I will combine the two with the other small things and then go about only releasing the teasers for each chapter.
Thanks to Sinwithin for lots of information about Otome that I needed for this ^^
Also thanks to TSS for Zafira love  |
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Originally Posted by Satashi
Not really a place I want to be mentioned.... (people tend to insult with no good reason there) Though I do feel flattered someone mentioned me. Thank you, whoever that was.
BTW, probably need to edit your posts. It's against the rules to link to pages with adult material.
Anyway, Dream Wing Otome starts:
Spoiler for Dream Wing, Otome section:
“Natsuki!” The name made a blue haired girl turn around to see a fiery red head running up to her. “We're assigned room again this year, isn't that great?”
“Mm,” The female known as Natsuki nodded lightly, a small grin on her lips caused from the energetic one next to her. “This will be our last year as Corals. Soon we will be Pearl rank.”
“Getting ahead of yourself?” Mai ran in front of her friend and walked backwards, leaning forward just a bit. “Don't slack off now and let someone pass you, number two.” The last two words were said a little teasingly, igniting a spark of fire in the green eyes of her friend.
“I will beat you to the number one spot before we are promoted,” she declared firmly. The two girls glared at each other a small moment before going into a light grin. “What do you think of the new ones?”
"They seem to be interesting." Mai opened the door to their shared dorm and tossed her duffel bag down onto her bed. “Thinking on it, it would be silly for us to be split up since we're already in this room together, huh?”
Natsuki started unloading her bag quickly. “Mm.”
“In a hurry?”
“Shizuru onee-sama probably needs help unloading her things from our three week break.”
Leaning back on her bed, Mai looked up at the ceiling. “Ahhhh, you're lucky. You know how many want to be her helper?”
“I don't care.” Natsuki tossed her bag into the corner of the room once it was emptied. With that, she hurried out of the room.
Mai looked at the almost closed door leading out into the hallway thanks to Natsuki's hurry. “Don't be so jealous, Natsuki.” She told the empty room with a small smile on her face.
In the halls, Natsuki walked among the other students until she came to another section of dorm rooms. Stepping up to one of them she rapped lightly with her knuckles. “Come in,” An accented voice floated gracefully from within. The door was opened and Natsuki stepped inside, closing it behind herself softly. “Ah, Natsuki.” Shizuru smiled at the girl knowingly. “Nice to see you again.”
“Shizuru onee-sama,” She greeted back while walking over to her. “How was your break?”
“Very nice, and yours?” The older girl sat down on her bed and patted her legs. “Come?”
“Yes?” Natsuki was ushered to sit on her friend's lap sideways. “Shizuru onee-sama...”
“My, you've grown.” Shizuru brought up her hand to Natsuki's chest and slipped it under the shirt quickly. “But,” She cooed at the blushing face before pulling out tissue. “You don't need to stuff.”
Blushing hard, the girl on top mentally debated standing up and changing the subject or to stay seated as her onee-sama requested. Her delima was solved for her when a loud mouthed blonde walked into the room as well. “We're together again, I see.” Haruka Armitage complained loudly. When her eyes spotted the two on the bed her finger went out instantly in an accusing manor. “We haven't been here four hours yet and you're already seducing someone!?”
Natsuki felt her ears burn as warm arms encircled her stomach. “Busted,” Shizuru whispered seductively. “We'll have to continue later...” Her eyes looked up into her underclassman's and lips turned up into her famous gentle smile.
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I'm loving this cross over already! Shizuru is pretty fast isn't she. Already acting up in the first chapter.
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