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The japanese are pretty proud for being a 'pure' race. They won't play the immigration card unlike us if tech can do it too (and hence smart cars and neuro linkers).
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Thing is, from the prologue, their society is on the verge of collapsing due to the labour shortage. They may be proud, but they are not stupid.
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I mean, have you read the other fanfics?
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Comparing your own fanfic to other fanfics isn't exactly the best way to improve. It's like comparing your own drawing to something a kid drew in kindergarten with a crayon then after that a Picasso.
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A writer's aim is to show you that the story he's writing is more interesting than the story you have in mind, to encourage you to step into his world and follow the plot. This may not be the strongest point in my fanfic, but it's minor conpared to the rest of the plot and I'm okay with letting it be.
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At the end of the day though, it really is your story and you should be the one deciding what you will be happy with. Write for yourself, not others.