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Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Anyone ever thought of adding in the legions from Chaos Legion? (You know, taken in the Nanoha forums' context, that sounds so weird and wrong on so many levels. )

Chaos has his own legion already. Well somewhat. From Cataphracts to Destroyers up to Sipher and Loki.

Bears?

Bear runs are suppose to refer a sluggish pace, in stock markets iirc.

I actually want to see a continuation...*runs from Sturmfalke*

It's hard to balance between things. More so when there are so many distractions and the backlog threatens to drown you.

Too many people underestimate staffs, and think it's a lousy weapon. Used right, she can turn bladed weapons away. Or she can use a barrier if someone closes in, Barrier Burst, and get back to a distance where she can start nuking again. There are lots of strategies for her. Though sometimes you might feel that melee is essential, you can always work around it with what you have. That said, making her at least not such in melee and to at least know how to use it to deflect attacks is not a bad idea. (whoa that came out longer than I thought....)

Reminds me of what I have planned for the fight with Katrina wielding her staff, Mastema, in the works. Sad to say it's even further along than others.

Do it! We'll pay you anything! Like Chaos! Or Lowe's sexy Belkarangers! *sees 3 hot chicks charging down after long and elaborate henshin sequence*
Oh shi- *runs like hell*

I only ask for more time.

Well you know, what comes next is what's fun.

You mean Aurion's response? Or what he does to the bound subdued young girls?

*RUNS*

And who are Jag and Jat?

Part of the The Jacks, a team of hired-guns under the Prize that I created along the way as well.

A quick one on the fly!? UNPOSSIBLE!!

Depends on how 'quick' Grandis is 'on the fly'.

Originally Posted by Kagerou

Ironically, I have something along those lines... well, sorta.

At any rate, here's the final two scenes of and the ED for Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Alpha. This is Episode 1: My Magical Incantation...

Spoiler for MSLN Alpha, Scenes VII and VIII:

In the Takamachi household, the front door opened. Inside stepped a tall figure, draped with long blonde hair and wearing a tight black uniform. Closing the door quietly, she took off her shoes and walked up to the couch, where Nanoha slept with the Sankt Kaiser report tucked between her head and arm. Sighing, the blonde walked past her and up the stairs, heading for Vivio's room. Knocking gently, the woman slowly opened the door. "Vivio? Are you awake?"

There was no answer. Peering in, the woman couldn't help but smile. Vivio was asleep, using an arm as a pillow with the other stretched across the desk. Amidst the chaos of her room, Vivio was the pinnacle of peace, a whirlwind that was abated. Walking slowly up to the girl, the woman pushed gently on Vivio's shoulder. "Vivio, wake up... mama's home."

Vivio stirred, slowly. Opening her eyes, she looked up to the soft and gentle face of her mother, Fate T. Harlown. A small smile came to Vivio's face as she sat up and stretched. "Uwah~ ...hi, Fate-mama..."

"Just a 'hi'?" Fate asked, acting hurt and standing up straight, looking away. "After not seeing me for all this time? Mou..."

"Oh, please, it was only for two weeks," Vivio said, standing up and nearly tackling Fate, giving her a tight hug. "...but it's still good to see you, Fate-mama." Fate's heart warmed at the gesture as she returned the hug. "I've missed you."

"I've missed you, too," Fate told the girl. "You and Nanoha-chan." Vivio stiffened a bit in Fate's embrace, but said nothing. "Are you two still not getting along well?"

"Well it's only been a month," Vivio said as the two let go. The younger girl grabbed one arm with the other as she stared down a bit. "I mean, I am trying, Fate-mama, I really am... but some days, I just get so frustrated..." I want to be a good girl to my mothers... but there's something...

"I understand," Fate nodded. "When... some things happened, a long time ago, I latched on to Nanoha, but at the same time I found it difficult to really trust her, though I'd never admit it. Enforcer Training actually helped me solidify my feelings for Nanoha, and I definitely trusted her after I got out of that hell." She smiled and put an embarrassed palm to her face. "Oh, my, I'm saying those things that embarrass you again."

Vivio smiled back. "It's okay when no one else is around, Fate-mama, you know that." Putting a finger to her lips, she thought for a bit. "Hm... when do you leave again?"

Fate's expression darkened a bit. "...Three days," She sighed. "I'm to help Kha's unit on another world... something about hunting a violent criminal and fighting off monsters of all things." she chuckled. "Sounds like something out of a bad thriller, ne?" Vivio snorted a laugh at that. "I'm sorry I can't stay longer, Vivio."

"It's okay, I understand," Vivio replied almost too quickly. "I'm just glad I can see you while I can."
"That's good," Fate nodded. "I know things have been difficult these past several years, but together, we can all build something better. I can see myself and Kha, Nanoha and-" Fate blushed and stopped herself. "Oh, nevermind." When Vivio tilted her head and gave her a questioning look, Fate rapidly changed the subject. "Eto... how about you get started on dinner, and I'll wake up Nanoha?"

"Uh... sure," Vivio said, seeing through the weak effort. She nodded nontheless. "I'll get to it."

Together, the two walked back downstairs, Vivio slightly trailed behind. Fate and Vivio got along far better than Nanoha and Vivio; the two kept some form of contact over the years, as sometimes Fate's missions would send her off for months at a time. As Vivio's home life spiraled downward and out of control, taking her with it, Fate was one of the things keeping her from jumping over the edge.

But there was a wall; Vivio knew it, and she wasn't sure Fate did - but the two would never really be as close as they would like. Years of nothing but letters and phone conversations would do that. They could laugh, talk, and love each other dearly... but Vivio would never tell Fate of her days at school, or how she was feeling, or anything like that... well, not willingly.

Vivio, lost in thought, made her way to the kitchen and grabbed some veggies to make dinner with. Without any clear indication on what to make, she instead focused on a particular vegetable and listened in on the conversation behind her as she cut it.

Fate knelt at the side of the couch, gently pushing Nanoha's shoulder. "Hey, Nanoha-chan... time to wake up..." The body stirred, slowly, much like a tired adolescent, as Nanoha slowly rolled over, her uniform wrinkled as she moved about on it. Slowly, Nanoha opened her eyes and stared dully at Fate. "Ah, hello, Nanoha-chan."

"...hello, Fate-chan," Nanoha said quietly. "It's nice to see you again." Nanoha smiled in such a way that Fate couldn't tell if she was forcing it or not. "How... are things?"

"Same as usual," Fate told her, grabbing one of the Takamachi woman's hands and squeezing it gently. "How are you? Feeling any better?" Nanoha shook her head. "Worse?"

"..." Nanoha didn't answer, instead staring at the report in her hand. "Eleven years..." she whispered. Fate sighed. "What?"

"Why do you have to stare at that, every night?" Fate asked her. "Why do you have to remind yourself of that?"
"..." Nanoha looked away. "I... I don't know... because when I do... it lets me know that..." she shrugged. "There's nothing I can do..."

"I just... don't get it, Nanoha-chan." Fate stood up. "Because of one thing, you let yourself go... do you even care about her, anymore?"

"I do!" Nanoha blurted. "Really! I... But I..."
"Ow!"

Fate's head snapped up. "Shit..." she cursed under her breath, nearly toppling over herself to check on her daughter. Nanoha simply continued to lay there, her mind shutting down by reflex.

"It hurts!" Vivio whined. The knife she was using to cut with lay on the kitchen floor, spattered with blood, as Vivio's own right index finger bled rapidly, a clean cut along the top from just below her fingernail to just above the middle knuckle. Fate opened the cabinet and tossed stuff around, searching quickly for a bandage while simultaneously handing Vivio a clean dish towel.

"Apply pressure," she said. "It'll stem the bleeding till I find- ah!" Finding a set of large bandages, she pulled them out and ripped one open rapidly. Taking Vivio's hand, Fate wrapped up the finger with the bandage, applying pressure on it as she did. "We might need to take you to a doctor, Vivio; that's a large cut." she told the girl. "Are you feeling alright?"

"I... I think so..." Vivio stared at her finger as Fate let go, sighing with relief. Staring at the bandage, she couldn't help but feel amazed that Fate had literally dropped the conversation to help Vivio, despite being such a small part of her life. "Fate-mama, you didn't-"

"Oh, bother," Fate chided, patting her daughter on the head. "Look, I'll make dinner, you relax, okay?" Vivio nodded, looking ashamed of herself. "Look, Vivio-chan, it's nothing to be upset about, okay?"

"I... I guess..." Vivio sighed. "Hey, I'm gonna call one of my friends before dinner."
"Okay. I'll shout for you when its ready."

Vivio turned and walked out of the kitchen, cradling her injured finger and wondering why had she done what she did. When she had heard Nanoha's cry that she did care about Vivio, it was like... like something snapped, the young mage decided. Like she needed to see if Nanoha was telling Fate the truth. So she raised the knife into the air and-

Vivio's eyes met Nanoha's.

Nanoha's were full of fear and regret.
Vivio's... were simply disappointed. Huffing, Vivio stalked back up to her room. Nanoha watched the girl go before burying her head under her hands, disappointed in herself. In the kitchen, Fate sighed, feeling the tension behind her swell. I'll help them fix things. she vowed as she began dinner preparations. Even if it's the death of me, those two will reconcile, and we can close this chapter of their lives. They're my family, too!

=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=

TSAB Headquarters, Unknown Room

"It appears that things are nearly set."
"Indeed."

A room of the HQ cloaked in shadows. Only the lights of monitors and a faint blue glow emanating from a shard of glass hanging from the ceiling illuminated the room. Within the room, six figures draped in Barrier Jackets shaped like cloaks sat on a hexagonal table, each one a different color.

The green one spoke first. "The outbreaks are getting to the point where we can't contain it."
The blue one was next. "So what? Let the Spawn spill out. The chaos may serve our purpose in the long run. If we can bring it out sooner, then all the better."

"There's still a problem," The violet one interjected, bringing an image of three familiar girls. "These two, Takamachi and Yagami, may pose a threat if they find out."

"You can forget about Takamachi," One in white said. "But Yagami is powerful, and Georashi is also a threat..."
"Indeed, as is Testarossa's daughter," An image of Fate was brought up. "I will compile a list of other threats to our Project."

"Very good," Their leader said: a mage cloaked in yellow. "Project OMEGA must go off without a hitch if we are to acheive total control," Looking at one of the others, he said, "Do you have it?"

"Yes, sir," The one in brown answered, pulling out a cage. Inside, with gnashing teeth and bound arms, an Infection Form hissed at the group. "We are in the process of studying it. If we can control the Abomination..."

"Then we will be one step closer to acheiving our goals... and it will be ours!" The one in yellow said. "The Belkan Prophecies spoke of the mythical City on the Hill, and soon, with the help of the monsters and Project OMEGA, we will be crowned its kings!"

"...or better than kings... Gods."

Spoiler for ED: Koiji Romanesque:

00:00: Black and white intro. Stylized version of Nanoha sitting at a table by herself, before showing a curtain with an IV, then a stylized version of Keroko with her back to the wall. A quick shot of a bandaged arm, then a cracked Raising Heart sitting on a table. Finally, Nanoha resting her hand on her chin before looking off to the side.

00:09: Ano toki deawanakenya yume de
00:09: Fate with her eyes closed, her hair spilling about her shoulders. She moves her head and lets more hair spill downward. Her neck is expsed.
00:15: Unasarenaide irareta
00:15: The Wolkenritter, all bandaged up, stand against the wall, looking away, with the camera panning up.
00:21: Anata ga kono yo ni umarenakereba
00:21: Nanoha stands with her back to the camera, also heavily bandaged. The camera zooms in, and she turns to look at it.
00:26: Netami nante itami nante shirazu ni sunda
00:26: Emili opens her eyes and jerks her head to the camera; Hayate jerks up her and and grins wickedly; Vivio stands with her back to the camera as its vision becomes fuzzy and blurs out.
00:33: Anata ga hoshigatta no wa
00:33: Syn sits on the floor, draped in bandages, staring off into space. The camera slowly pans right.
00:39: Watashi to mattaku gyaku no hito
00:39: A view of Vita, sitting on the floor and looking downcast.
00:45: Makka na ito de tsunagiau no ga mieru…
00:45: Shamal's hand stretches out and traces the wall before she pulls it back to herself.
00:53: Watashi wa aoi ito
00:53: Caro stretches her arms to her side; bars go in time with the music.
00:58: Sawatte mite yo kono kokoro wa ima
00:58: Far off shot of Signum standing against a wall before it zooms up on her face as she looks sidelong at the camera.
01:03: Katte ni koi o shite katte ni kizutsuiteru
01:03: Nanoha slowly walks down a hallway. First it shows her feet, then her head/shoulders as she looks off to the side.
01:09: Sawaranaide yo kono omoi kanawanai no nara
01:09: Fate sits on a chair by herself, blinks, and turns around in it.
01:20: Massao na aza mune no naka nokoru dake de
01:20: A shot of an empty hallway; finally, a color shot of Nanoha standing atop a TSAB Tower spire...

Find the OP, ED, and all of Chapter one Here and Here.

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The tone does get darker with chapter but I'm liking it all. Vivio cutting herself to get Nanoha's attention, who is still unable to overcome the events of the past. Still, makes for better conflicts and drama later on. And traitor elements within the TSAB? Not good.

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Leena: "Mou, I don't want to harrass your pilot, I just want her BURNING HEARTO~"
Franz & Glen: *facepalm*
Psycho: If Leena's doing anything it's with me. We're partners in harassing.
Leena: Oh, no, I don't harass girls.... I just bring them to new heights of pleasure. And let Psycho take seconds. *angelic smile*
Psycho: Indeed, this is our divine calling.... to blow shit up and to have much fun. *angelic smile*
Franz: *sighs* And the irony is that Psycho isn't a fan of the Aces. And that Leena is a girl."
Glen: I'm the only sane man in the Order.
Id: Ironic, huh?

Ah the dynamics of the OFM are undoubtedly awesome as always. And BURNING HEART 'Leeroy' Leena is always welcomed.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Because Flags are made of GOD and WIN

It's the MAN behind it that makes it so.

Turing made the Flags? Or is he Prof-

*shot*

I thought so too. And I thought it'd be cool if SERGEI got OCfied

OFM recruited from Earth?

Besides, we got TK the Bear here!

*runs like hell again*

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

A nice retrospect for what's been happening in the Chaos. That part abot Lutecia was very natural as well.

Nice.

It's interesting to look at the under-used characters sometimes. My attempt at un-shafting, in this case Lutecia. It's nice to see my portrayals of Lutecia felt natural at least.

For the next part, a closer look at both Signum and Lutecia.

Hayate, need mana-replenishment?!

XD XD XD That's a good one! Oh no, it's more about spellcasting...

Erm, sure.

good thing Aaron is innocent XD

Well... We need a leader. Some rationale caused by events from the past... A group of planned protagonists for proper scaling of the threat to be used...

I'm interested. I'll give my input whenever I think I can.

Well backstory is always important for introduction of new elements.

LOL!

Luckily I brought Jat at the end, otherwise..

If you ask me, that's one of the more conclusive and still very-well done scenes I've seen yet...

Precisely so that the heartache becomes even more so. It's wonderfully pulled off at showing the heartache that it's pure .

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Okay, time for tonights work.

Tonight is dogfight engagement part two. First duel exhange, Nanoha VS EDI.
I strung links to the intended BGM song I wrote for dogfights into it. And song cue points. (I've been writing the scene to the rhythm.)

Spoiler for White Demon VS Drone Killer:

Last time! On Crash the Test Dummy!


EDI was already over three kilometers away and bleeding off speed by the time Fate turned to his departure angle.
"I have buzzed the targets," he informed. "Begining engagement procedure."

(BGM with Melody http://www.sheezyart.com/view/1312910/ )
(BGM with no Melody http://www.sheezyart.com/view/1435564/ )

(Begin Song)

"Roger that," Crash snapped, dropping into a dive and configuring a little more attack power with his MAD system. "They got barriers up, so your run didn't knock them out of the sky like we wanted."

"Their temporary Tinnitus should last perhaps a minute," EDI toned. "I advise we hit as hard as we can now, since we won't have a second oppertunity."

"Already in a dive," Crash informed the AI. "I'm going to engage unit LIGHTNING, she's specialized more for close combat, so I should stand a better chance in my heavy armor than your airframe. You take STARS unit."

"Affirmative," EDI responded.


Crash was almost on them, the switching to full auto, he quickly took aim, EDI bled off the last of his speed in a high G turn no organic lifeform could have managed and came around hard.

(Song + 0:16)

"Here they come!" Fate shouted.
"WHAT?!" Nanoha shouted back. Hearing loss was a pain...
'Here they come!' Fate responded again, this time psychicly.
'Oh,' was Nanoha's mental reply.

EDI and Crashed opened up at once, unleashing streams of moderately effective magical bolts.

[SONIC MOVE!]
[FLASH MOVE!]

Nanoha and Fate bolted in opposite directions just before the stream of attacks hit. EDI immediately calculated trajectory and chased after the pink contrail. Crash managed to keep his eyes on the yellow contrail left by Fate's departure and tracked his weapon along her trajectory, but she quickly outpaced his ability to lead her movement.

"You're not getting away," Crash muttered to himself. Battery redirected energy to speed and he accellerated, thundering up close to supersonic as he chased after his target Ace.

(Song + 0:39 )
Nanoha came through a cloud in a dive, bolting through several thousand feet as she evaided fire from behind. EDI had locked on, and engaged in twin rotary cannon fire, sending quick bursts of orange magic at her, with a snap turn, she evaided, but the super-fast calculations of the AI controled aircraft weren't as predictably easy to fool compared to the drones Jail had used.
Going fully evaisive, she dove straight down towards the water, EDI following in her high speed dive.
They broke the sound barrier as she dove. Inertia meant she would be able to stop sooner in a little game of ocean chicken than the drone chasing her.

EDI calculated that among many possible end results of the dive, and decided not to let her get that position. His underside internal bay snapped open and the rotary rack spun into position, and deployed a weapon mechanism. In two seconds it formed an orb of orange magic on the forward end.
"HORNETS NEST," he droned.

'BAM!'

[MASTER!]

(Song + 1:02)
Nanoha barely heard Raging Heart over the ringing in her ears, but the shout of warning was enough. With a fast glance over her shoulder, she spotted eight fast moving orange streaks diving at her in a corkscrew as EDI pulled out of his dive.
Nanoha, in her surprise, almost forgot the water below her, but instantly came up with a counter move. Pulling out of her dive to skirt the water close enough to send a jet of spray into the air, she shot paralelle to the waves at high speed, throwing up a barrier behind her as the orange shots arced to follow her path. Three of them arced too shallow and exploded against the water in towers of spray, the remaining five slammed into her barrier with a little more force than she expected from an unmanned magic vehicle. Above, and still slightly behind, EDI prepared a second volley, intending to knock her into the drink.

Thinking fast, Nanoha deployed a barrier directly into the water, creating drag, and slowing her down rapidly enough to cause EDI to overshoot. Nanoha brought Raging Heart to bear and launched her counter attack.

[AXCEL SHOOTER]

In her oppinion, THIS was how you did multi-shot attacks

"SHOOOOOOT!"

'BAM!'

Sixteen pink streaks blasted from Raging heart into the sky.

(Song + 1:27)
Calculating the trajectory of the shots, Edi immediately pulled back, and began to roll, corkscrewing through the air in a loose, high speed, barrel roll. She shots missed and began to twirl in an attempt to hit the MADCAP. Nanoha's excelent control of them meant that even this evaision would fail eventually, but EDI accounted for that. As the first one managed score home, it smacked against a barrier that flickered up just long enough to deflect it. EDI broke his corkscrew and came around hard, losing most of Nanoha's shots again while a second one scored. Gunning the engine power, he accellerated directly at the stationary mage, unleashing another firestorm of magical energy from the twin cerberus IIs at the stationary mage.

'SNAP!'

[BUSTER MODE, DRIVE IGNITION]

(Song + 1:50)

Raging Heart discharged a cartridge as Nanoha took aim at her target, her barrier shimmering from the hundreds of weak magical bolts that pelted it.

"DIVIIIINE..."

But then she noticed EDI's internal bay was open again and the rotary rack deployed. There was a brief glow and suddenly an orange beam lashed out at her. Perhaps a low powered buster of his own.

[FLASH MOVE!]

Raging Heart got her out of the way as it tore past her, and she quickly retrained her staff to attack...
Then EDI broke off, and she realized there were still a good fourteen bolts from her Divine Shooter attack chasing him, and now they were coming right at her... Clever decoy tactics, but Nanoha had absolute control of them, and they broke their chase and traveled right around her before she willed them away.
Coming about as the Drone Hunter thundered past her, she brought Raging Heart to bear again, getting a reassuring pink glow as she began to prepare her specialty once more. Bands of magical markings appeared at the end as she steadied her aim to take down her target.

"Deploying Iron Curtain," EDI droned in acknowledgement of the magical energy spike he detected. He needed immediate defense from this attack.

'CRACK!'

Nanoha paused from her shot to assess this new threat. A single red orb had just launched from EDI's upper midsection. Why was it so familliar?

'CRACK!'

One became two.

'CRACK!'

Two became four.

Then she remembered. It looked just like-

'BOOM!!!'

With a roar and a blinding flash of light, Nanoha's chance of tagging EDI with her Divine Buster evaporated instantly.

(Song Fade and Pause at + 2:15)

"Wait, that's MY technique!" Vita shouted. She practically would have pounced on the MSM display showing EDI rocketing for the upper atmosphere with Graf Eisen, if Signum hadn't managed to clamp a hand down on her fellow knight.
"It may have been your technique," Cooper stated from his own chair. "But I IMPROVED IT!"
"As if..." Key sniped, but Cooper kept going.
"The new version there is called the Iron Curtain, producing an order of magnitude more light and turbulance for the same amount of magic, making it more effective at blinding the opponent for a longer period of time over a wider field of view."
"And what's with that corny name?" Vita glowered at the chubby engineer.
"Because in Soviet Russia," Roland interjected, balling his fist. "Spells name YOU!"
Everyone in the room, including the Maidens virtual resprisentations, simply glanced dumbfounded at the Major General. Tough audience tonight. He glanced at Fox, who silently rolled her eyes before he waved it away.
"Earth Joke."

(Instrument track solo mode, song drum beat only.)

Nanoha blinked away the tears that had formed in her eyes in response to the temporary flash blindness. The ringing in her ears had redoubled in intensity from the roar, and she could feel the magic boost from her cartridge already dropping away, completely wasted. This battle may just turn out to be quite fun.

'Fate,' she broadcasted telepathicly. 'Keep your eye out for EDI, he can launch Vita's Iron Howl, and it splits up.'

'Where is he now?' Fate broadcasted back.
'I lost him for the moment,' Nanoha responded. 'I think he was heading up. How are you doing?'
'Crash isn't half bad actually,' came the response. 'Sloppy, but fast reflexes.'

Nanoha took a look around, but didn't see anything moving in immediate sight, but kept up her scanning.
'What kind of attack methods is he using?'
'High velocity projectile,' came the telepathic response. 'Accurate, but weaker.'
'Okay so that-'
Nanoha felt it as Raging Heart delivered a warning.

[MASTER!]

(Break beat, Song Resume at + 2:14)

She leaned in and shot forward as a orange beam twice as wide around as she was tall slammed into the waves from above her, blasting a collumn of water a hundred meters into the air.
'Nanoha?'
Putting on as much speed as she could, she managed to clear the attack as it was followed up with another cluster of eight orange streaks.
'Nanoha?!' Fate's telepathic broadcast was slightly more urgent.
'I'm still in the game,' she responded. 'EDI just tried to snipe me with a full power buster.'
'At what range?'
'Beyond Visual.'
'BVR? NICE!' Fate seemed pleased. Nanoha looked off to her left as the telltale thump of a sonic boom gave away EDI's position. She could see a glint of sunlight off something moving through the cirrus clouds at ten thousand feet, and immediately took off after it.
'I'm reengaging the MADCAP,' Nanoha broadcasted.
'Roger,' Fate returned.

(Song + 3:03 )

Scene then cuts to Fate VS Crash fight (Yet to be written.) And it will continue with Cosmic Furball.


Oh, and in Soviet Russia, Spells name YOU!

The duo might have been a tad too wise with earth-style fighting but nothing I didn't enjoy.