[Mystique]

Finally taken some time to sit and read the stuff here, I can only offer opinions for original fiction mainly. Fan fiction typically needs the reference and poetry it subject to interpreation, but i may comment a few if it strikes a chord with me.
Anyways, first off...

Spoiler for Sol Badguy:

Originally Posted by Sol Badguy

I can write, but I have the attention span of a goat. Unless it's a really good day, nearly anything I try to write seriously winds up degenerating into total madness within a few paragraphs.


A chill filled the night air, and the bare trees swayed noiselessly in its rhythm. Spheres of light interspersed the line of houses, but their orange glow offered no warmth.

The cold gnawed at his ears and fingers; sleep hung on his eyelids. Darkness folded inward on him. The world seemed bent on ejecting his irregularity, and he was not particularly enthused to resist.

"I feel like shit."

He held up his hand to block the wind as he lit the cigarette dangling from his lips. The flame from the match warmed his face, offering him a momentary pleasure. His pupils dilated in spite of its light.

Dark, unkempt hair swung hapazardly over sunken eyes and sallow features. Stubble lined his cheeks.

He shook out the match and flicked it out into the road. This was literally nothing to him, a motion he had had many opportunities to practice, and he executed it with a certain aesthetic grace that would likely be spoiled by any awareness of it. Tendrils of smoke flowered from his nostrils as he seated himself on a nearby wooden bench.

This wooden bench was smooth and hard; made of wood, as it so happened. He leaned down and took a deep sniff. Pine, probably a couple decades old. Yes, this was a good bench. A very good bench indeed. He began to unzip his pants.

lol i dunno man

Heeeeeey!
He unzips and then what, i can't leave the rest to my imagination, it just summons a whol bunch of *censored* bars, wooden bench and all *cough*.
So go figure, lol.
But good start, nice use of sensory description to set the scene, we got the temp, the sounds, the smells and how it all affects him at that point in time.
(For some reason i had some random shounen long ranger, stubble faced dude stand in some place at night, lighting a ciggie kinda image in my head, lol)

Next being Usuratonkachi's "Last Kiss" story (I've only read your first post, dunno if you've re posted after that...)

Spoiler for last kiss:

It being a snippet, i figure that's just the start.
Good character description in there, to tell the audience were her place is in her school society (or her class) - some moments, i couldn't help but picture a scene from an American high school, i'm sure the stereotypes exist in most places though, i can see your point was to emphasise just how 'ordinary' she was, so to have someone pay special attention kinda throw the equilibrium of her daily life.

Next one i glanced at was black monster's story.

Spoiler for black monster:

I noticed that it was written in script form, but it'd make it easier on my poor blind eyes if you seperate the text every few lines, space helps to make things flow and read easier, so try to immerse that in your next piece.
I see the sentiment of Allen's dead pet, however if you were to expand it, you may wanna try to write a little about the relationship of the two like:
- where pipo came from,
- how long they'd been together,
- how pipo enhances Allen's life, cause by the time it gets to the scene i read, it'll be more touching for the audience since you've stated just how much Pipo means to Allen.

But it's a sweet tale, makes me think of that freaky looking cat series (Chii) that's on at the moment >.>

Originally Posted by shelter

I can infer with the title "Water Solidified", but the link is not too strong.

For one, I think your story's close to effortless. It's got everything from perspective to detail; I think the only thing that's lacking is the lil mirror's character. But, then again, judging from all those cartoons like "Brave Little Toaster" etc etc where inanimate things someone start speaking & having emotions, perhaps leaving your mirror as a something solely defined by its description isn't a bad thing after all

Me and titles are at a never ending war with each other, lol.
Titles rarely come to me while i write and i hadn't (still haven't) finished that story, so it'd probably just be called 'The Lil Mirror' for simplicity's sake since the tone is alike a child's story.
I think that came to me in terms of water (like a lake or pond) is the only other way we humans can see our reflection clearly, or a natural feature that "reflects" other things.
And glass is "solid" so go figure
Water solidifed = A Mirror

It is just a snippet, i'll try to getting to posting more in the 'dead poet's society' thread later on, but glad you liked
EDIT:
(read a few more so since DP is frowned upon, spoilered each comment for length's sake and have carried on)

Checking out Spectacular_Insanity's "The Mystic Emblem"

Spoiler for The Mystic Emblem:

Originally Posted by TinyRedLeaf

It's not bad actually. Don't mind WanderingKnight (even though I largely agree with him). Everyone has to start somewhere, including writers.

You migt want to touch up paragraphs nine to 13. A bit too much repetition of "He". You might also want to tone down the exposition to sharpen the pace. Is there a reason for your characters to use "ye olde English"? Using archaic phrases such as "thou", "hast" and so on has the tendency of making speech sound stilted and artificial, unless that is your intended effect.

The reason speaks for itself, infact it's a little bit of a cheat to set characterisation and a sense of a time period. In this case they're gods in a world that prob follows different set of rules in terms of time and space.
SI uses terms like "ten thousand millennia" - i doubt these immortals pay much attention to the recent modern register that us 'mere mortals' use, so it does give that sense of 'ancient age' to the Elders there.
As for toning down the exposition, the danger with that is, it's a scene that immeaditely throws us in the midst of an event, without any warning, so it's like 'woah...okay, what's going on here, with who and why?'
The detail answers those questions and puts things into perspective I find, however to speed up the pace, there were sentences that were superfluous, but that can be tweaked in editing to help speed up the pace of the story. Also if we were to try to sharpen the first scene even more, then things like the description of his weapons could be ommited to a scene where its existance is noted by another character or needed for himself.
- the only part that confused me a lil was the god of chaos, the keepers and the symbol he now carries, which obviously isn't a good thing, but it's signifance is known only to you (as the writer) and him, i was thinking 'why is he cursing his father in relation to it?'

These are some of the thoughts that passed my mind as i read it, pardon the esay of info, lol
The story has potenial, it obviously involves a range of characters and history associated with them, a web of relationships to explore, so if you keep with it, come show us the rest sometime

Usuratonkachi...
The girl entering the bar story?
More. Now. Please

Spoiler for Usuratonkachi's prologue:

But then, im a little biased, lol.
I spent many a day in my teens reading tales like that, so i love the typical couple of a meek, kinda woman (sometimes with gumption and a temper) to the wise cracking, couldn't care less about others, cold, indifferent guy, who under the pressure of their situation, must learn to get on with each other (or eventually end up together for most part)
It's a simple common formula, i think the reason i love it is case of the innuendos or the really harsh harsh razor tongue insults the guy deals to the woman, each character had their own style and i liked to see as many examples as poss, lol (Author: Sandra Brown, she's a master at this kind of thing)
Your writing for setting the scene as well as the actions of the characters and their feelings, is well expressed, i could mentally invision everything, so well done, thumbs up from me ^^