I've been sort of absent, I know, but I recently managed to pick up a copy of Grandia.
Imagine me falling out of my bed in surprise when I saw my
name come across the screen not even a few minutes into play.
Of course, that just
begs for an OC-fication. :3
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Originally Posted by stormturmoil
Rebuild of Turmoil
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While this is very similar to the most recent version posted, I've made a few things more overt and concrete in this version, and taken steps to ameliorate certain otherwise overpowered aspects.
one obvious change is that David is now an explicit Rare Ability user, with a special skill linked into his background called Savant. In practical terms, this reflects the fact that David has been using magic unconsciously and near constantly for a long time without realising, until it is pretty much reflexive for him. Because of this, David's casting times are exceptionally fast; as mentioned, often the spell is fully cast before he's even thought of it fully. Also because of this, David's spells are much less precise than a normal mage's, and can vary wildly dependent on his subconscious mental state.
Because he's not only an unclassified mage, but also a Rare Ability user, it makes his acceptance by and rise through the Bureau that much more likely, and so sets the scene for him to be included in major story arcs (hint hint), without seeming out of place next to the much more (directly) powerful main characters.
Another obvious change (or at least one that sets the Haxbuster alarm bells ringing) is the fact that he now has THREE, yes count 'em THREE Devices: Two heavily altered Boost Devices and His armed device.
This obviously requires Justification. The story behind them is this:
The Boost Devices serve to manage and regulate specific areas of David's unpredictable Savant powered spells. Each is keyed to a specific area, and prevents spells of that type getting out of hand due to subconscious mental issues or vagaries of unconscious spell forming. This is explained in their own profile entries. Basically, they are used as a form of 'Smart' limiter that keeps things under control, but still allows his full power to be used when necessary. The armed Device, then simply becomes the primary offensive implement.
The other part of it is that I wanted to produce a Black and a white device to add to the Grey one, and so emphasize the dichotomy of David's role: as a Battlefield medic, He is expected to heal, but also to kill if needed, and so he is a kind of paradox. Hence we have the two coloured aspects, which reflect these two roles, and then the grey which reflects his acceptance of such dichotomy.
I think I'm fairly happy with this as it stands...it's got some power behind it, but not too much as to upset the applecart, or dethrone aces and major frontliners, but at the same time, he's there to fight with all he's got, and to pick up the pieces afterward if need be...
He may not be Awesome, but he's got your Back...
Or should that be (and for the original owner of this phrase too, for those that recognize it...)
That: He IS awesome BECAUSE he's got your back?
Mahou Shounen Medical David, Hajimarimas |
I like what you did with it. The Savant abillity has H4XX potentional, but that is mostly negated by his B-rank.
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Originally Posted by Comartemis
Shortly after being placed in the SAFA, Xiro was partnered with Takamachi Nanoha. While his “partner in crime” was more interested in training new recruits than in testing new weaponry, Xiro took the opposite route, becoming a test pilot for a wide array of new advancements, including the prototype of the Blaster System, which he recommended to Nanoha under the condition that she exercise extreme caution in its’ usage.
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Hmm, I'm agreeing with the others here, I have no problems with him being in the SAFA, but it doesn't make much sense for him to have tested the Blaster System, much less adviced Nanoha to have used it (on another note, Nanoha too participated in the testing of new weaponry, there is nothing to indicate she prefered training above her other duties).
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Originally Posted by Comartemis
It was during this brief time, however, that Xiro also began to develop strong feelings for his coworker. Attracted to Nanoha by her eternally-upbeat attitude and positive outlook on life (among many many other reasons), Xiro managed to ask Nanoha out on several “friendly outings” together, which Nanoha accepted under the belief that she was merely spending time with a friend. It wasn’t until several weeks into their one-sided relationship that Xiro happened to catch Nanoha and Fate in the middle of a private moment, shattering any illusions he’d had that Nanoha returned his feelings.
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*blink* Uhm... what? Oh, wait, this is another character that is for private use, isn't it? Because... you know... Nanoha and Fate aren't like that canonically.
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Originally Posted by ghazghkull
This isn't even HAXX. Your execution on this particular trait of Xiro is nothing but sheer stupidity.
How does one jump from the Ground Forces AKA the ARMY to the AIR FORCE?! Explain to me, how exactly does one, who has been trained in the art of war meant for the Ground, suddenly jump into training for something meant for the Air Force?!
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Because that's how the TSAB works, Ghaz.
Unless you're A-ranked or above, you can't start flight training, which means that 90% of the Air Force mages will start in the Ground Force. Even Teana is in the Ground Force with the idea of rising to the Air Force once she has enough experience. Xiro's bio is nothing out of the ordinary in that regard.
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Originally Posted by Comartemis
The entry I read for the SAFA says that they "test new weapon systems and tactics". To my way of thinking, the Blaster System is something Nanoha is essentially putting through a rather rigorous field test.
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While you could look at it that way, doesn't that also mean that it is Nanoha, not Xiro, that participated in its testing?