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Originally Posted by KurayamiLeader
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Okay I'm back, and with some better rebuttals.
I did notice from when I created the group up until now, if you want to make comparisions on subtle motifs, you could compare Kuromeru & Shiroi to Zabuza & Haku. I'm trying to make Raiu different from Naruto in the aspect that the choices and plots are different yet similar in the feeling and the action. The entire backstory of Hakumei is a spoiler and I will not reveal it at this time, however since they are going after sacred artifacts I should think that they would need no less than 2-men at any which time, considering the shinobi villages wouldn't just hand them over like they did jinchuuriki. Did you suspect that there maybe more to Hakumei than meet's the eye, their overall plot has yet to be revealed so it is too early to make assumptions, I posted Hakumei Role Call merely to show what may come in future's time, it is not an official critique.
The only conceivable resemblance to Zabuza I can detect is the greatsword Ryuuk wields, besides that he uses Katon primarily NOT Suiton, and he hails from Konoha NOT Kirigakure. Ryuuk and Zabuza are on two different worlds and levels, Ryuuk's sword absorbs large portions of blood from the victim, where as Zabuza's saber does not have any special qualities. I honestly don't know why you compared these two they look nothing alike aside from the greatswords, and I have yet to see a rule stating that only nin from Kiri could possess one.
What, because he has long bangs and likes to blow stuff up? Unlike Dei, Kag's specialty IS transforming things into bombs, not chewing up clay and using a jutsu to make it into C4. Kagerou was Kumogakure's ariel bombadier specialist, and a tinkerer before that, and he even rides a cloud he can summon. Besides his long hair has no resemblence at all to deidara in this case, it looks more like Ryoko. Not to mention Kagerou is more of a trickster/playful than just a crazed bloodthirsty villain.
I was going for the Dosu look as far as the furry cape thing goes, and a little Kakuzu in the mask. I don't know what his face shall look like yet.
To put it, the extension "Maru" is ever present in shounen manga and anime everywhere and I will give you some examples in Naruto: "Shikamaru', "Yashamaru", "Konohomaru", "Genyumaru","Kidomaru", and of course "Orchimaru". Notice that I had at least five names listed before I even listed Oro's name. Kagemaru is also a popular name, but not in Naruto. And as far as his personality goes, Koujoumaru is not much like Orochimaru, if anything he's more Posion Ivy, if you judge solely on appearances you might as well compare Dosu to Zabuza, they looked like they could be brothers. Koujou = plant; Koujoumaru = plant type not snake freaky pedo type.
Why, because he hails from Mist, or has the teeth? Everyone we have encountered from the hidden mist so far has had the same shark-like teeth: "Zabuza", "Kisame", and "Suigetsu", with the exception of Haku.
Right, but obviously whatever distinct similarities exist are apparent to the author (i.e. Ryouga/Kakuzu (or Dosu) was a dead give away). It wasn't necessary to go through and individually point them all out to me in a post, obviously there are going to be some unavoidable similarities this IS Naruto and not Full Metal Alchemist, the laws/techniques are different in Naruto and it's difficult coming up with a decent S-Class villain with entirely unique abilities who can't get pawned by let's say: Ino Yamanaka. I was amused at how you made it seem like I was trying to cover-up a crime scene or something.
Don't get me wrong I value criticism and even more so, constructive criticism. However, when there's nothing being made but comparisions on the appearances of said individuals its not really criticism. You probably didn't mention any of their skills or kekkai-genkai's in your critique because alot of them haven't been revealed yet, and I simply don't wish to spoil the future I merely want to give a snippit of things to come and do be warned that these all may change within time (i.e. names - everything).
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Jeesh dude, I can't believe you got all defensive on me. I wasn't trying to be a critic in the least. I just saw some similarities in facial features other aspects of the drawings, I wasn't even comparing the details about the character's history, skills, and all of that other stuff. I didn't meen for it to seem like I was saying that you were trying to cover up that the characters were similar. I'm sorry you took it that way, I was just pointing out some similarities. I also can't believe you spent all that time coming up with those rebukes. lol
, they were very good though, even if I was saying that you were copying characters, you would have blown me out of the water, good job
By the way, since we're talking about your creations at the moment. I've read up to chapter 4 of Raiu, It's awesome. I love the detail you put into the story, and the one fight I've read so far was great.
Quzor: Just finished chapter 5. I think that may be your best chapter yet, with all of the detail put into the way you told the history and how everything went down. Anyways great chapter can't wait for the finale.
Spectacular_Insanity: Awesome story so far, I felt like I was reading from a published book, because of how well it is written. Keep on writing.