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Originally Posted by Satashi
Spoiler for Porn Star!Vivio:
Vivio laughed at the joke that was just told and shook her head in an amused manor. Her friends were all drunk and were currently having a contest to see who could eat the most spicy wings in a row without drinking anything. As to not get caught up in the contest herself, the girl excused herself from the table and walked to the bar of the nightclub. She sat next to a blue haired girl and ordered a strawberry daiquiri to sip on while the harder stuff settled in her stomach.
"Hey," The girl spoke to her after a few moments. "What brings a pretty little thing like yourself here?"
Vivio looked to the side and grinned, slightly tipsy, at the mis-matched eyes looking at her. One red, one blue, the heterchromia was pronounced fully. "Are you hitting on me?"
"Yup." The woman propped her cheek up on her palm and looked at Vivio with an amused smile. It was obvious she was crossing onto the drunk side but the cheerful expression on her face made Vivio stay at her seat.
"I'm celebrating a new DVD release," Vivio answered the first question asked of her.
"Oh? Favourite movie come out?" A smile came paired with a giggle. "I'm Syn, by the way."
"Vivio," she introduced herself. "And no, I work for a company that just finished one. It should be on the market in a few weeks."
"Hmmmmm," Syn hummed while chewing on this information. "Better than me."
"What do you do?"
Syn suddenly looked a little sad and crossed her arms on the bar before resting her chin on them. "I got fired today."
"Oh, I'm sorry..."
The blue haired one closed her eyes. "My boss was hitting on me earlier and I turned him down... A few days later I'm fired for something so stupid it doesn't even make sense..."
"I see..." Vivio felt sad for the girl sitting next to her. 'Such a pretty little thing too... No wonder she's drowning her woes.'
"...and I don' know how I'm going to pay my bills," Syn was still talking, eyes lightly glazed. "I'm already a month behind on my rent...." She looked lightly as the bartender came to her, giving the look of if she wanted another glass or not.
Vivio took the bottle the man was holding and filled up Syn's small glass with it. "Go ahead, it's on me."
"...Thanks." She took a drink and gave it an apreciative look. "You said your name was Vivio?"
"Mmmhn."
"Pretty name." Syn turned to face her once more.
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Alright Syn is in the picture! I can't wait for more.
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Originally Posted by TerranReaper
Just to ask your opinions, should i continue my story? seems like i have more nays than yays. not that i have anything to complain or unsatisfied, it's just that i want to write a story appealing to all. I you dun want me to, i have a second story which is better.
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I think you should do it. I mean it's not like we don't like your story, well I like it. Just take in the critique and improve the story. You can even ask someone to Beta for you if you really want. A lot of us like helping out. Oh and don't spoil the story, like what happened to Vita. You should slowly reveal what happened, it makes it alot more exciting and interesting. You should talk to EvilRick, he is
good at making surprises.
@XenahortCharybdis: Lol, what else did you expect? It's the Nanoha FF thread! It's 75% crack, 90% fluff, 25% angst and about 10% bloody.