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Nanoha(loli) Linker Core = 20 pages = around 1,270,000 YnS = 666 pages 1,270,000 X (666/20) = 42,291,000 (AROUND FORTY-TWO MILLION, TWO HUNDRED NINETY-ONE THOUSAND magic units) I'd give Hayate at most 1/4 42,291,000 / 4 = 10,572,750 A bit rough... But whiffy. Unless you want to say that Hayate has forty-two million as well but doesn't have Reinforce's HAXX ALLSTATs perfect... Quote:
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ESTAVALIAN HAYATE'S ONEE-CHAN IS ARCHER-KO?!?!?! APPROVED!!! The concept is fine. And the tracing limitations is much welcome. unlike someone who can trace EVERYTHING here... (>.> at Kha) And her master seems like Archer as well... Nice profile! I can't wait to see them in action! Quote:
As far as I can tell. The plot is heading for something big. I find no problems with regards to Verossa's, Schach's or Yuuno's characterizations... Except that maybe Acous could use some more PIMP in his talking... As for the grammar. I ran it over and found no typo or other grammatical error. So no problem there. Laura and Luna reminds me of Tsukasa and Kagami, except that their personalities are very different. The pacing feels right, neither rushed nor too slow; allowing me to digest the details properly. And the plot itself is very interesting; and just like I said, promises something really big. Are you by any chance including more of the Canon characters here? Overall. It's a *thumbsup* from me. Nice work. A fine and dandy old guy if you see one. Not bad at all. I'll be looking forward to some of the action in the futute. though Ryotaro is a little confident here, huh? Quote:
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For some reason, I was really reminded of Navy NCIS while I was reading this, or maybe The Unit.
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Oh, and also, Glen was a True Ancestor, had the power to control shadows, and only kept Franz around as "spare rations". Moving on, Finished Scene 1 of Episode 2, here we go: Spoiler for Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Alpha, Episode 2: Sora wo Okutta mono, Scene I:
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MUST HAVE ADULT EXIA-TAN NAO *runs* @ Horo Pic: It reminds me of Maren... and speaking of which, where is FSZ? Can anyone summon him?
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2008-02-22, 02:51 | Link #20364 | |
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Damn. Damn, man, you really know how to pull the heartstrings, don't you? I don't think you have anything to worry about as far as in-characterization goes...everyone fits well, even with all the angst mixed in...can we have more???
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*crow flies past* The Rider is strong with this one. :3 And the sheer richness does blow some minds... *Artei clamps Arisa down before she says something about how poor Mayura is* I said some. Quote:
More below! I'm updating Foy's profile with much more meat! Very effective combo attack by trap!Nadleeh and Dynames! ...... ...... It says here that Mike Meyers was considered to be your VA once. *runs* Quote:
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Another episode capable of rending the heart! And the "Voice" does spook me quite a bit; reminded me of ol Arthas/Ner-Zhul for some reason. We got more details to the past, but at the same time more questions are raised! It's all been very planned out and I give my . ~~~New Intelligence Data Updated~~~ We interrupt this brilliant post by Kagerou with this message: Foy Rokker's problematic post has been beefed! I realized I classified too much data, and that hurt the post really badly. Managed to shift more down, and added more that I forgot. The impetus behind Foy was actually to make a character atypical of a hotblooded Macross pilot, and so I went with challenging myself to make a real schzophrenic gender-confused sentokijin. AND... I fell on my face, and am still fighting fires. Any more comments? Criticisms? Flames? Divine Busters? Btw, while now it's NadleehxFoy, the ultimate ship I'm working to is FoyOtto. Trap for Trap! Computes?! Meanwhile, I'm still working on the Cleric-Knight class skills and that's gonna take a while, but stay tuned! For those who have trouble with links, here's a repost: Spoiler for Justicar Foy Rokker:
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AaronCrispin, LoweBasilio... nasaan na kayo? *runs from Guardia Civil* Saint X: you will know soon enough this Nanohaverse permutation of Dizzy blonde hair... light pink colored funnel wings that have different personalities and functions... pink colored motionslit-based suit- still keeping the typical Dizzy- but having the 'tail plug' instead of the usual tail... since if she becomes unplugged from 'Exile' without unlocking, she will die in exactly 27minutes and 36 seconds if not replugged within that time. Just thinking about it (Dizzy in that kind of suit) makes me go and drool... and between those wings, the pack that holds them contains T3H DRIVE But... she is only an observing character so far- i have no plans for her to fight- yet. < --- Was tired from summoning two people already.... Quote:
Random Techie: Yes Admiral, since we've cleared out most of the weapon collection and sent them to the Conservatory to be displayed, we have a lot of space... Kyla: Even the ICBM that I've managed to buy from some Midchildans working secretly in Earth's Pentagon? Random Techie: Yes, even that... you asked for funding so that the Weapon Conservatory of Midchilda could expand, and it happened- that's the new Gallery Wing called "Earth's Madness"- fitting right? Kyla: Maybe so... I have to finish my materials on my upcoming Lecture on Dei and Linear Type Magic- so if anyone from CB, OFM or any other group wants to talk with me for some 'trade', tell them to use the channel... Random Techie: Roger that Admiral... Kyla: And just one more thing... ask anyone if they have info on Class 3-A of TSAB Class 75... and specifically on Eika Ichiryu, Karen Itsumiya, Kotoha Sei Momone, Eliza Dietrich, Yu and Colette Farandole and especially "Bridget" from the Special Class that was with them during the attack... === @ Lowe... the Flag somehow messes up the context of the text below it... And who do you think in our country is fitting to be Graham's VA?
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Got two more fight segments written tonight. Once again, I hope I accurately portrayed style, personality, and tactics (or lack therof) of chracters.
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One thing I've noticed about fate, at least in the first two seasons, is her use of a projectile decoy shot to cover her body rushes. I also noted her tendancy to retaliate from just about any angle as long as she can see the target. Spoiler for King of the Hill, at the Top of the Sky:
An aspect of air combat no one probably has ever thought of. Just how high can those mages fly before they can't fly any higher? Personally, I think that while barrier jackets are good for filtering the air, and controling the air around the mage, they aren't exactly space suits. And Oxygen deprivation can be an underestimated foe. That's it for tonight. EDIT: Incidently, for atmospheric calcs: http://exploration.grc.nasa.gov/educ...et/atmosi.html Last edited by AdmiralTigerclaw; 2008-02-22 at 05:35. |
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This is almost too much! Everything's falling apart for Nanoha AND Vivio!!! And the music makes you feel worse!!! And now that I've thought about it... Maybe Raising Heart was destroyed in Adraine? And finally, it's a good thing Syn is there for support. Oh man... EPIC story after EPIC story in one day! Want MOAR!!! Quote:
[Filipino stuff]You got me wrong. I meant Maria Clara as in the stereotypical ideal woman of our country in the old times (just as Yamato Nadeshiko goes for Japanese people). Demure, dignified, and sophisticated in poise. Just so you've noticed, I made Hayate hide her face behind the tome instead of the usual folding fan, right?[/Filipino stuff] Quote:
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Though are you planing to kill everyone with the thought of Foy cosplaying as either Yoko or Nia? SI SISA YAN!!!
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She should. Hayate needs some hotblood only the Colwell can provide!
Right ... not like I can't get my "revenge" now, Matt. I think it's more satisfaction than pride. I rechecked my inbox, and it's Aaron who provided it (during one of our more serious discussions ). Well, and the current calculation he just made doesn't seem to be too far off. :3 Quote:
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I don't know why, but I seem to lack some organization in the story department, where if everything's planned out nicely (a simple draft, actually), I'd prefer them to be included inside, regardless of the length. Throughout writing, I sometimes get additional plotlines which I think are appropriate, and they are included as well. Hence, the overarch and flow break. The glaring example would be this chapter, where there's actually only five planned scenes. The rest came some time later. (And truly, I could've just introduced more chapters than planned, though I don't know why I opted to write this insanity >.>) Signum seems too "perfect" to be expanded further, though as realistic as it can get, nobody could be that way. The one way that I have to change that is to introduce her silent insecurities, which is actually part of her becoming more human and less program. The justifications given in the chapter do not sound very convincing, I admit. I actually planned to have Aurion finish the line of a poem, though it changed partway into a song, and er, so he "sang". Admittedly, his musical talent isn't that good, and what he did "sing" was just actually an inflection of tone that didn't become a song. (More like him "speaking" the song than anything. ) *runs from Aurion* Quote:
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I'm going to need some help to get it moving. Having made her this way in Chapter Six actually makes me feel afraid to change her more. The Canon Cannon is watching ... *Canon Cannon turns swiftly* Still, it doesn't mean that it's impossible ... just need some extra-powerful dose of crack. --------- With backlog done ... Looks at list-to-do: * Lowe's Sentailicious profiles * Kagerou's Alpha * USB's Tears of the Northern Wind * dkellis's Lyrical Melancholy * Evangelion's Settling In * Khatastic Rebuilts * ... going to scrounge backlog for more. ... busy, busy. Introduction to GuardianS probably coming around on Sunday. |
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Aurion: Ah, Mai. Here's your Astaroth. Now much more efficient and powerful. Mai: Arigatou... *turns to Lowe* Anata wo... Shoumetsuru
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Yes yes. An orgasmic experience. *runs like hell* Looks a lot more balanced. Ding ding! Part 1 backlog breaker complete. Gotta work first. Do the rest when I have time.
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Oh my gawd, so much stuff to read. If only I wasnt interrupted every minute while at work, I could have read all of that already.
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