Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Nagumo]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

@Keroko & Satashi: Hell, 95% of Americans themselves don't care.

Point I tried to make, which apparently got overrun, was simply that fluff isn't the end all be all of love. It's been said, "Greater love hath no man than this, that he lay down his life for his friends." That's a sort of love that I try to show in my writing (nevermind that I haven't gotten up to that point in the story yet).

Yes, that is a spoiler for my TF6 project. People are going to die in it. (Though not like the bucketloads in Alpha... like almost 85% of all OCs died, no less than 9 CCs died, Signum was killed and zergified and resurrected as the Queen of Blades (unholy fusion of Kerrigan & Signum), even the dead weren't spared; Precia was revived and killed, Alicia was revived and killed, I think we killed Vivio somewhere along the line, ditto Nanoha... let's not get into Erusia getting glassed, Mid-Childa being fucked up, and Earth ending up as a last bastion of safety due to the Almighty Badass of the United States Marines and the TSAB Marines.)

"Regret...regret...regret..."

"Catchy. Any idea what it means?"

"Dear humanity: We regret being alien bastards. We regret comin' to Earth. And we most certainly regret the Corps shooting up our raggedy-ass parasite fleet!"

Huh? Why just US Marines? There are plenty of other special forces.

You know, one day I would really really like to see a Russian Spetnaz vs Nepali Ghurka vs US Marines vs British SAS all go at it in a knife fight. And maybe add in the Israeli special forces because of their Krav Maga...

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

So basically, you consider yourself more important than your friends, and if your death means that you will save others, you will instead save yourself and let the others die, due to the value you place on self-preservation.

I honestly think that 99.99% of civilians wouldn't sacrifice their life for others. That's not counting policemen, military, army, firefighters, ect. I mean just the average joe-schmoe standing in line at starbucks.

Originally Posted by PhoenixG

I wouldn't say mainly military. It's just I think 4 or 5 that mainly about pure military. Others are more about interaction between the cast in TSAB and around it.

Yeah, what Phoenix said, that's what I meant ^_^ thanks for making that more clear <3

[Tempy]

Originally Posted by Vivio Testarossa

So in order to be a good story in your book, there can be NO FLUFF, only death in as much scenes as possible? How could you kill Vivio!

So in order to be a good story in your book, there must be fluff, a yuri pairing, and a happy ending? If such stories bother you this much, then write your own. I've seen you do nothing but beg for translations and complain about fics. You are in no position to demand anything from another author.

I'm placing in a vouch for Self-preservation, above all else.

While the instinct to live is strong, the survivor's guilt of knowing that your friends, family, and loved ones are dead due to an event you could've prevented could be far worse.

I have this feeling you have me on ignore, as you've never responded to any post I've done. If this is true, I'm prepared for that situation. If this is false, I'd appreciate some sort of response.

Originally Posted by Nagumo

Huh? Why just US Marines? There are plenty of other special forces.

You know, one day I would really really like to see a Russian Spetnaz vs Nepali Ghurka vs US Marines vs British SAS all go at it in a knife fight. And maybe add in the Israeli special forces because of their Krav Maga...

You must understand that Goose has a raging boner for the US Marines
All other military special forces are cool, but not as cool.

Originally Posted by Satashi

I honestly think that 99.99% of civilians wouldn't sacrifice their life for others. That's not counting policemen, military, army, firefighters, ect. I mean just the average joe-schmoe standing in line at starbucks.

Hmm I feel Goose is referring to a closely knit group such as a military squad, rather than a random group of people. Most people may not throw themselves into the fire to save a random person, but they're far more likely to do so if it's involving a loved one.

[Sheba]

Originally Posted by Satashi

The OC thread is mainly military people who go for war. The fanfic thread is mainly fluff addicts who go for love.

We both like different things, so generally the war stuff is accepted on OC thread (even if it really isn't OC much) and the love stuff is more accepted here ( even if , for example, Syn shows up)

I beg to differ. Targetted audience with different expectations would describe the both threads more accurately. While the core audience of FFC would lean more toward fluff and CC x CC interaction (with a small portion of CC x OC), the core audience of OCT is more interested in the worldbuilding (some people like me), how the world around the characters lives (ironically, allquall's "name of war" is the first exampe in mind), the widened CC x CC/OC x CC/OC x OC interactions and they are open to a wider range of stories. In defense of FFC, this opening to other kinds of stories is happening for a while now.

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Hmm I feel Goose is referring to a closely knit group such as a military squad, rather than a random group of people. Most people may not throw themselves into the fire to save a random person, but they're far more likely to do so if it's involving a loved one.

Keiichi Maebara's circle of friends in the Higurashi series is the best non-military fictional example.

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by Satashi

I honestly think that 99.99% of civilians wouldn't sacrifice their life for others. That's not counting policemen, military, army, firefighters, ect. I mean just the average joe-schmoe standing in line at starbucks.

I think it was missed, since I made a reply on the page previous, but I was talking about a close group of friends/relatives/team. Reread what it says: "Greater love hath no man than this, that he lay down his life for his friends." (Emphasis Mine.)

Yeah, what Phoenix said, that's what I meant ^_^ thanks for making that more clear <3

Hey, I said it too, it just got ignored with PG's post. I always miss page claims.

Originally Posted by Nagumo

Huh? Why just US Marines? There are plenty of other special forces.

I've always wanted the join the Marines since I was like a chibi.

Chibi Goose: "Mommy I'm gonna walk through the jungle and go to the sea and join the Marines!"

Mom: "That's nice dear." *absently does medical things*

You know, one day I would really really like to see a Russian Spetnaz vs Nepali Ghurka vs US Marines vs British SAS all go at it in a knife fight. And maybe add in the Israeli special forces because of their Krav Maga...

Spetsnaz is overrated, but Gurkha/USMC/SAS/SEAL/SBS/IDFSF would be interesting alright.

AFSOC would just call airstrikes on everyone.

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

So in order to be a good story in your book, there must be fluff, a yuri pairing, and a happy ending? If such stories bother you this much, then write your own. I've seen you do nothing but beg for translations and complain about fics. You are in no position to demand anything from another author.

Agreed. VT, I wasn't happy with how things went in StrikerS, so I wrote TF6 as an idea of how subtle changes could affect and improve RF6.

Like Tempest said, you are in no position, mon Legionaire.

You must understand that Goose has a raging boner for the US Marines
All other military special forces are cool, but not as cool.

More like the Marines are badass at the grunt level, and badass all the way to the top Where else can you get guys like Chesty Puller, or O.P. Smith, who fought his way out of a siege and brought back every single Marine with him, dead or alive?

And let's not forget Iwo Jima, the Crowning Moment of Awesome for the Marines.

Hmm I feel Goose is referring to a closely knit group such as a military squad, rather than a random group of people. Most people may not throw themselves into the fire to save a random person, but they're far more likely to do so if it's involving a loved one.

Squad. In a flashback to Franz's past, his two best friends died saving him. He has survivor's guilt because he couldn't save them. A wounded Uruz Team member also throws himself over Vivio, shielding her with his body, taking the brunt of an explosion that kills him but keeps her alive.

As for love, the love I write is happy, monogamus het couples and not-related-by-blood-incest with somewhat shy older brother and tsundere imouto.

[Satashi]

Spoiler for Previously:

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.30:

Vivio slowly climbed out of her bed and stumbled across her apartment. The world blurred around her but the hope that Syn was behind the knocking on her door gave her the energy to make it the rest of the way. Once she managed to reach the door, she leaned against the frame and unlocked it. Instead of a young blue haired girl waiting to talk to her, she instead found a more mature woman looking at her with a mix of shock and pity. "Hey Allquall," Vivio mumbled, eyes closing and letting her head fall against the frame.

"Eyes, you look like hell, what happened!?" The woman quickly helped the blond walk back to her bed, where she slowly crawled into it and laid face first. "Are you okay? you never came back for your checkup and when I asked I was told you haven't even come to work all week or updated your webpage! I was worried!"

"Ah." Vivio stayed silent after the short mumble but reluctantly allowed herself to be rolled over and sat up on the bed. "I want to lay down..."

"You need me to check on you." The woman sat down on the bed and started giving her a one-over. "How do you feel?"

"Dead."

"Be more specific please."

"Throwing up, my throat hurts, my eyes sting, my chest s tight, I don't care about anything."

Allquall looked at the girl a little closer. The normally shining gold hair was dull and lifeless, and instead of the faint sweet smell of perfume, she smelt sweat and neglect. "Eyes, why didn't you come in? Your cold got worse, I'm certain you have the flu now. Didn't you get pills to prevent that?" Vivio looked away. "Are you eating okay?"

"I'd just throw it up."

"Are you taking care of yourself? When did you last shower and change your sheets? You need to stay clean, you will feel better."

Vivio shrugged. "I dunno..." The hands keeping her up left and she laid back down on the bed, cheek on her pillow. "I don't really care."

"What's wrong with you?" The woman asked softly. "I've never once seen you not smiling and bouncing off the walls."

Staying quiet a moment, Vivio finally opened her eyes again and looked up at the woman. "Syn left me... After that I... I just got sick." She once again looked away and faced her pillow, fighting back the urge to cry again.

"You can't not take care of yourself because your girlfriend left you. If you don't get better you'll be in trouble."

"I know but...I don't know..."

Allquall stood up and tucked the girl in. "I'm going to prescribe you something and get your pharmacist to deliver it. She's your friend right?" She got a small nod. "Okay, I'll do that... Vivio, take a shower, you smell like ten kinda of ass." She got a small smile, but it was enough for her. "Really. I'll be back tomorrow to check up on you. May I leave your door unlocked for a few hours?"

"Yes."

"Okay, Angel will be by shortly. If she can't, I'll take it to you."

"...Thank you." For the first time in a few days, Vivio felt as if laying in bed and dieing wasn't the only solution to how she felt at that moment.

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.31:

Syn felt a small shake on her shoulder and jerked slightly in shock, blinking and turning to the side to see Riyuu looking at her oddly. "Huh?"

"You're spacing out again." The girl told her in a matter-of-fact tone. "You've been like that the past few days, what's up?" Her accented voice came casually while she stirred the dish in front of herself. "Are you having problems?"

"Yes." Syn sighed and went on auto pilot, once again disregarding the recipe she was supposed to stick to and going by what she wanted to add to the meal she was preparing. "Girlfriend issues."

"Oh, I'm sorry to hear that. I hope it works out okay."

"Already broke up." Syn declared her task done and walked away to plate it before anymore questions could be asked. "Wan, order up." The next ticket was taken and she went about making it along with one more on the side. 'I wish I could just go a day without having to think about this crap again.' Her mind went off again as she moved around, purposely trying to avoid the pity looks she was getting from her boss. 'It's already been a week and two days for crying out loud.' While her current orders were cooking, she stared at the food and thought to pass the time. 'She's probably with some guy right now, getting a load on her face.' The bitter thought both pleased her and pissed her off at the same time, leaving her with a knot in her stomach. 'Bastard touching my girlfriend...'her motions got rougher while tossing the contents of a skillet around. 'I have have half a mind to... damnit Syn, stop thinking about it!'

The girl angrily kicked the bottom of the stove and huffed out. "I thought I saw a bug," she spoke, voice clearly mad. "It wasn't, so we're okay." Her eyes closed and a breath was taken, images of Vivio having sex with faceless people invading her against her will. 'Damn it! Why am I so mad!?'

"Syn," Wan's voice came, snapping the girl back to the present. "I have a customer out here who would like to speak with you."

"With me?" Syn tried to figure out who she knew that would request to see her. "A girl?"

"A guy."

Syn wiped her hands and walked out along with Wan, being left alone at a table where a tanned man was looking at her. "Miss," he began. "Did you prepare the meal I just had?"

Looking down at the mostly cleared plate, Syn nodded. "I did."

"I heard that this place recently hired a new chef and that the food here was suddenly a lot better. The newspaper even reported complaints about people parking next door because your parking lot was full."

"Well... We have been busy lately." Syn tried to think where this was heading.

"Miss, My name is Tempest, I own The Shiny Sword downtown. I would like to hire you as my new chef."

Syn blinked again. "Wait, the really fancy place?"

"Yes, miss." He nodded. "I could offer you three times what your pay would be here, and even creative liberty on creating new dishes."

"Sold." Syn stated before the man could even start his next sentence. "When can I start?"

"Tomorrow."

"What time?"

"One PM to nine PM." He stood and shook the girl's hand. "I look forward to it."

"Me too," Syn smiled and walked back to the kitchen. 'Finally! Something good in my life!' She looked at both wan and Riyuu giving her questioning looks. "Sorry girls, I just got hired on at another restaurant because I kept changing your recipes." The dissapointed looks on their faces made her soften just a little. "I'll leave my changes with you, too." She got smiles and a few words of encouragement, and even a promise fora good reference if thy called.

With a grin, Syn started finishing the day. 'I can't wait to tell-' Her hands stopped, hovering above what she was reaching for. '... Like she would care.'

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.32:

Vivio smiled at the camera pointing to her bed and moved her hand back from the record button on it. "Hello, everyone," she greeted with her normal opening. "I'm sure a few of you are looking at your screen right now and thinking: 'A week of no updates and all we get is a video diary?'... Well, sorry, but yes for now..." She sniffed and laid her cheek back on her pillow, pulling the covers up to her neck. Her hair was still a little messy and her face was still stained a splash of red from her sickness. "I have the flu it seems."

After pulling her sheets up to cover her mouth, she let out a cough that she had been trying to repress. "I'm doing better, but I still can't get out of bed. I'd love to take some pictures or something for everyone but...Yeah, I'm really sorry. I know you pay for my site, and I should have some type of spare pictures incase of emergencies but... I never thought about doing that before. To make up for it, I promise I'll do a video every day for a week."

The sick girl sniffed again and exhaled a ragged breath. "Well, for the past week and some days, I haven't done much to really tell you about my life... I've stayed in bed for most of it... and..." She closed her eyes. "Remember my girlfriend? She found out about my job... No, it didn't go well... She dumped me and I haven't heard from her since. I know it is my fault for not telling her, but..." Again she sighed. "I won't talk about that anymore. I'm feeling a lot better than I did since I first fell ill, so I'm going to try and start updating the page in a day or two. Please send me emails if you have any ideas on what you would like to see updated. I'm sorry again for the lack of updates."

Reaching down to the floor, Vivio picked up a sheet of paper. "I couldn't sit at my desk long enough to print out all the emails I wanted to reply to, so I just wrote down what I remembered. I'm sorry if it's not your exact question." clearing her throat, she began. "First, another one that has been asked many, many times. What fetishes do I have? Not many. I like it when the person I'm with moans, I'm not sure why. Besides that... I like tight clothes. I wouldn't really say 'bondage gear' but something like that. Latex, too tight zip upped leather, and...well, being gagged. Please, don't ask."

Offering a smile, she felt her spirits lift when she thought about all of her fans spazzing out over that information. "Next, I wrote... I can't read it, hahaha." Her giggle calmed her down and she squinted. "I need to learn how to write better... oh, this one! I laughed so hard!" Her lips stayed in a smile. "Someone asked what I saw my male co-workers eat to "Sweeten the load" so to say." She giggled again and shook her head as best she could. "Lots of things, but mainly there is a little packet that they put in their drinks that supposed to make it taste sweet. I'm sure people will ask so I'll answer: No it doesn't work. Honestly, I'd be scared out of my mind if I was going down on a guy and got a mouthful of strawberry flavored splooge. I don't know what I would think!"

"I got a few questions not about work, I want to spend some time on these. Let's see, we have... My favorite food? Fajitas." Her gave a small bittersweet smile at a memory. "Also, what is my favorite movie? I'm not really sure on that one, so many good ones. I like the new comic-book movies that are coming out lately, so I'll just say that genre is my favorite." Sniffing again, she covered her mouth and coughed. "Someone else asked what I do in my spare time. That's easy, I watch a lot of movies, but I read the most. I have some reading glasses that I wear, I'll take a picture in them sometime."

She sniffed yet again and looked back at her list. "Let's see...Am I satisfied with my life? Honestly... Yes and no. As far as my general life is concerned, I am happy. I have a lot of loyal fans, who send me kind emails, I am starting to get enough money to eat a little better, and all-in-all it's pretty good. Besides that... I'm not really happy with my love life... I'm still..." She shook her head. "I don't want to ruin this by crying about my ex-girlfriend. I'm going to move on, okay?"

Vivio skimmed her paper. "What do I do to relax? Reading relaxes me, but so does eating. I love chocolate, chocolate is salvation. Other than that, I'd kill for a massage to relax me, but that's really expensive....let's see... If I could change anything in my life, what would it be?" She gave the camera a gentle smile. "I'd have been more honest with her...Okay, I'm starting to ramble. I'll upload this after I take a small nap. I hope everyone out there is having fun. Remember, my new movie is coming out this Firesday, so pick it up okay? Please send in the comments and vote for me, ne?" She winked and blew a kiss. "This is Eyes, signing off."

The camera was cut off and Vivio fell back into her pillow. 'I hope I was cheerful enough...' A knock on her door informed her that her friend Angel had stopped by again to check up on her and she pushed herself up and out of bed to go answer the door.

[Raging Heart]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Previously:

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.30:

Vivio slowly climbed out of her bed and stumbled across her apartment. The world blurred around her but the hope that Syn was behind the knocking on her door gave her the energy to make it the rest of the way. Once she managed to reach the door, she leaned against the frame and unlocked it. Instead of a young blue haired girl waiting to talk to her, she instead found a more mature woman looking at her with a mix of shock and pity. "Hey Allquall," Vivio mumbled, eyes closing and letting her head fall against the frame.

"Eyes, you look like hell, what happened!?" The woman quickly helped the blond walk back to her bed, where she slowly crawled into it and laid face first. "Are you okay? you never came back for your checkup and when I asked I was told you haven't even come to work all week or updated your webpage! I was worried!"

"Ah." Vivio stayed silent after the short mumble but reluctantly allowed herself to be rolled over and sat up on the bed. "I want to lay down..."

"You need me to check on you." The woman sat down on the bed and started giving her a one-over. "How do you feel?"

"Dead."

"Be more specific please."

"Throwing up, my throat hurts, my eyes sting, my chest s tight, I don't care about anything."

Allquall looked at the girl a little closer. The normally shining gold hair was dull and lifeless, and instead of the faint sweet smell of perfume, she smelt sweat and neglect. "Eyes, why didn't you come in? Your cold got worse, I'm certain you have the flu now. Didn't you get pills to prevent that?" Vivio looked away. "Are you eating okay?"

"I'd just throw it up."

"Are you taking care of yourself? When did you last shower and change your sheets? You need to stay clean, you will feel better."

Vivio shrugged. "I dunno..." The hands keeping her up left and she laid back down on the bed, cheek on her pillow. "I don't really care."

"What's wrong with you?" The woman asked softly. "I've never once seen you not smiling and bouncing off the walls."

Staying quiet a moment, Vivio finally opened her eyes again and looked up at the woman. "Syn left me... After that I... I just got sick." She once again looked away and faced her pillow, fighting back the urge to cry again.

"You can't not take care of yourself because your girlfriend left you. If you don't get better you'll be in trouble."

"I know but...I don't know..."

Allquall stood up and tucked the girl in. "I'm going to prescribe you something and get your pharmacist to deliver it. She's your friend right?" She got a small nod. "Okay, I'll do that... Vivio, take a shower, you smell like ten kinda of ass." She got a small smile, but it was enough for her. "Really. I'll be back tomorrow to check up on you. May I leave your door unlocked for a few hours?"

"Yes."

"Okay, Angel will be by shortly. If she can't, I'll take it to you."

"...Thank you." For the first time in a few days, Vivio felt as if laying in bed and dieing wasn't the only solution to how she felt at that moment.

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.31:

Syn felt a small shake on her shoulder and jerked slightly in shock, blinking and turning to the side to see Riyuu looking at her oddly. "Huh?"

"You're spacing out again." The girl told her in a matter-of-fact tone. "You've been like that the past few days, what's up?" Her accented voice came casually while she stirred the dish in front of herself. "Are you having problems?"

"Yes." Syn sighed and went on auto pilot, once again disregarding the recipe she was supposed to stick to and going by what she wanted to add to the meal she was preparing. "Girlfriend issues."

"Oh, I'm sorry to hear that. I hope it works out okay."

"Already broke up." Syn declared her task done and walked away to plate it before anymore questions could be asked. "Wan, order up." The next ticket was taken and she went about making it along with one more on the side. 'I wish I could just go a day without having to think about this crap again.' Her mind went off again as she moved around, purposely trying to avoid the pity looks she was getting from her boss. 'It's already been a week and two days for crying out loud.' While her current orders were cooking, she stared at the food and thought to pass the time. 'She's probably with some guy right now, getting a load on her face.' The bitter thought both pleased her and pissed her off at the same time, leaving her with a knot in her stomach. 'Bastard touching my girlfriend...'her motions got rougher while tossing the contents of a skillet around. 'I have have half a mind to... damnit Syn, stop thinking about it!'

The girl angrily kicked the bottom of the stove and huffed out. "I thought I saw a bug," she spoke, voice clearly mad. "It wasn't, so we're okay." Her eyes closed and a breath was taken, images of Vivio having sex with faceless people invading her against her will. 'Damn it! Why am I so mad!?'

"Syn," Wan's voice came, snapping the girl back to the present. "I have a customer out here who would like to speak with you."

"With me?" Syn tried to figure out who she knew that would request to see her. "A girl?"

"A guy."

Syn wiped her hands and walked out along with Wan, being left alone at a table where a tanned man was looking at her. "Miss," he began. "Did you prepare the meal I just had?"

Looking down at the mostly cleared plate, Syn nodded. "I did."

"I heard that this place recently hired a new chef and that the food here was suddenly a lot better. The newspaper even reported complaints about people parking next door because your parking lot was full."

"Well... We have been busy lately." Syn tried to think where this was heading.

"Miss, My name is Tempest, I own The Shiny Sword downtown. I would like to hire you as my new chef."

Syn blinked again. "Wait, the really fancy place?"

"Yes, miss." He nodded. "I could offer you three times what your pay would be here, and even creative liberty on creating new dishes."

"Sold." Syn stated before the man could even start his next sentence. "When can I start?"

"Tomorrow."

"What time?"

"One PM to nine PM." He stood and shook the girl's hand. "I look forward to it."

"Me too," Syn smiled and walked back to the kitchen. 'Finally! Something good in my life!' She looked at both wan and Riyuu giving her questioning looks. "Sorry girls, I just got hired on at another restaurant because I kept changing your recipes." The dissapointed looks on their faces made her soften just a little. "I'll leave my changes with you, too." She got smiles and a few words of encouragement, and even a promise fora good reference if thy called.

With a grin, Syn started finishing the day. 'I can't wait to tell-' Her hands stopped, hovering above what she was reaching for. '... Like she would care.'

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.32:

Vivio smiled at the camera pointing to her bed and moved her hand back from the record button on it. "Hello, everyone," she greeted with her normal opening. "I'm sure a few of you are looking at your screen right now and thinking: 'A week of no updates and all we get is a video diary?'... Well, sorry, but yes for now..." She sniffed and laid her cheek back on her pillow, pulling the covers up to her neck. Her hair was still a little messy and her face was still stained a splash of red from her sickness. "I have the flu it seems."

After pulling her sheets up to cover her mouth, she let out a cough that she had been trying to repress. "I'm doing better, but I still can't get out of bed. I'd love to take some pictures or something for everyone but...Yeah, I'm really sorry. I know you pay for my site, and I should have some type of spare pictures incase of emergencies but... I never thought about doing that before. To make up for it, I promise I'll do a video every day for a week."

The sick girl sniffed again and exhaled a ragged breath. "Well, for the past week and some days, I haven't done much to really tell you about my life... I've stayed in bed for most of it... and..." She closed her eyes. "Remember my girlfriend? She found out about my job... No, it didn't go well... She dumped me and I haven't heard from her since. I know it is my fault for not telling her, but..." Again she sighed. "I won't talk about that anymore. I'm feeling a lot better than I did since I first fell ill, so I'm going to try and start updating the page in a day or two. Please send me emails if you have any ideas on what you would like to see updated. I'm sorry again for the lack of updates."

Reaching down to the floor, Vivio picked up a sheet of paper. "I couldn't sit at my desk long enough to print out all the emails I wanted to reply to, so I just wrote down what I remembered. I'm sorry if it's not your exact question." clearing her throat, she began. "First, another one that has been asked many, many times. What fetishes do I have? Not many. I like it when the person I'm with moans, I'm not sure why. Besides that... I like tight clothes. I wouldn't really say 'bondage gear' but something like that. Latex, too tight zip upped leather, and...well, being gagged. Please, don't ask."

Offering a smile, she felt her spirits lift when she thought about all of her fans spazzing out over that information. "Next, I wrote... I can't read it, hahaha." Her giggle calmed her down and she squinted. "I need to learn how to write better... oh, this one! I laughed so hard!" Her lips stayed in a smile. "Someone asked what I saw my male co-workers eat to "Sweeten the load" so to say." She giggled again and shook her head as best she could. "Lots of things, but mainly there is a little packet that they put in their drinks that supposed to make it taste sweet. I'm sure people will ask so I'll answer: No it doesn't work. Honestly, I'd be scared out of my mind if I was going down on a guy and got a mouthful of strawberry flavored splooge. I don't know what I would think!"

"I got a few questions not about work, I want to spend some time on these. Let's see, we have... My favorite food? Fajitas." Her gave a small bittersweet smile at a memory. "Also, what is my favorite movie? I'm not really sure on that one, so many good ones. I like the new comic-book movies that are coming out lately, so I'll just say that genre is my favorite." Sniffing again, she covered her mouth and coughed. "Someone else asked what I do in my spare time. That's easy, I watch a lot of movies, but I read the most. I have some reading glasses that I wear, I'll take a picture in them sometime."

She sniffed yet again and looked back at her list. "Let's see...Am I satisfied with my life? Honestly... Yes and no. As far as my general life is concerned, I am happy. I have a lot of loyal fans, who send me kind emails, I am starting to get enough money to eat a little better, and all-in-all it's pretty good. Besides that... I'm not really happy with my love life... I'm still..." She shook her head. "I don't want to ruin this by crying about my ex-girlfriend. I'm going to move on, okay?"

Vivio skimmed her paper. "What do I do to relax? Reading relaxes me, but so does eating. I love chocolate, chocolate is salvation. Other than that, I'd kill for a massage to relax me, but that's really expensive....let's see... If I could change anything in my life, what would it be?" She gave the camera a gentle smile. "I'd have been more honest with her...Okay, I'm starting to ramble. I'll upload this after I take a small nap. I hope everyone out there is having fun. Remember, my new movie is coming out this Firesday, so pick it up okay? Please send in the comments and vote for me, ne?" She winked and blew a kiss. "This is Eyes, signing off."

The camera was cut off and Vivio fell back into her pillow. 'I hope I was cheerful enough...' A knock on her door informed her that her friend Angel had stopped by again to check up on her and she pushed herself up and out of bed to go answer the door.

Ok so far i love the story but i still wonder what are planning to do, the two of them; Syn and Vivio try to act normal which it's not easy to do.

i will be waiting for the update, keep going, i wanna know how it will work out between Syn and Vivio

[Knight of L-sama]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Previously:

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.30:

Vivio slowly climbed out of her bed and stumbled across her apartment. The world blurred around her but the hope that Syn was behind the knocking on her door gave her the energy to make it the rest of the way. Once she managed to reach the door, she leaned against the frame and unlocked it. Instead of a young blue haired girl waiting to talk to her, she instead found a more mature woman looking at her with a mix of shock and pity. "Hey Allquall," Vivio mumbled, eyes closing and letting her head fall against the frame.

"Eyes, you look like hell, what happened!?" The woman quickly helped the blond walk back to her bed, where she slowly crawled into it and laid face first. "Are you okay? you never came back for your checkup and when I asked I was told you haven't even come to work all week or updated your webpage! I was worried!"

"Ah." Vivio stayed silent after the short mumble but reluctantly allowed herself to be rolled over and sat up on the bed. "I want to lay down..."

"You need me to check on you." The woman sat down on the bed and started giving her a one-over. "How do you feel?"

"Dead."

"Be more specific please."

"Throwing up, my throat hurts, my eyes sting, my chest s tight, I don't care about anything."

Allquall looked at the girl a little closer. The normally shining gold hair was dull and lifeless, and instead of the faint sweet smell of perfume, she smelt sweat and neglect. "Eyes, why didn't you come in? Your cold got worse, I'm certain you have the flu now. Didn't you get pills to prevent that?" Vivio looked away. "Are you eating okay?"

"I'd just throw it up."

"Are you taking care of yourself? When did you last shower and change your sheets? You need to stay clean, you will feel better."

Vivio shrugged. "I dunno..." The hands keeping her up left and she laid back down on the bed, cheek on her pillow. "I don't really care."

"What's wrong with you?" The woman asked softly. "I've never once seen you not smiling and bouncing off the walls."

Staying quiet a moment, Vivio finally opened her eyes again and looked up at the woman. "Syn left me... After that I... I just got sick." She once again looked away and faced her pillow, fighting back the urge to cry again.

"You can't not take care of yourself because your girlfriend left you. If you don't get better you'll be in trouble."

"I know but...I don't know..."

Allquall stood up and tucked the girl in. "I'm going to prescribe you something and get your pharmacist to deliver it. She's your friend right?" She got a small nod. "Okay, I'll do that... Vivio, take a shower, you smell like ten kinda of ass." She got a small smile, but it was enough for her. "Really. I'll be back tomorrow to check up on you. May I leave your door unlocked for a few hours?"

"Yes."

"Okay, Angel will be by shortly. If she can't, I'll take it to you."

"...Thank you." For the first time in a few days, Vivio felt as if laying in bed and dieing wasn't the only solution to how she felt at that moment.

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.31:

Syn felt a small shake on her shoulder and jerked slightly in shock, blinking and turning to the side to see Riyuu looking at her oddly. "Huh?"

"You're spacing out again." The girl told her in a matter-of-fact tone. "You've been like that the past few days, what's up?" Her accented voice came casually while she stirred the dish in front of herself. "Are you having problems?"

"Yes." Syn sighed and went on auto pilot, once again disregarding the recipe she was supposed to stick to and going by what she wanted to add to the meal she was preparing. "Girlfriend issues."

"Oh, I'm sorry to hear that. I hope it works out okay."

"Already broke up." Syn declared her task done and walked away to plate it before anymore questions could be asked. "Wan, order up." The next ticket was taken and she went about making it along with one more on the side. 'I wish I could just go a day without having to think about this crap again.' Her mind went off again as she moved around, purposely trying to avoid the pity looks she was getting from her boss. 'It's already been a week and two days for crying out loud.' While her current orders were cooking, she stared at the food and thought to pass the time. 'She's probably with some guy right now, getting a load on her face.' The bitter thought both pleased her and pissed her off at the same time, leaving her with a knot in her stomach. 'Bastard touching my girlfriend...'her motions got rougher while tossing the contents of a skillet around. 'I have have half a mind to... damnit Syn, stop thinking about it!'

The girl angrily kicked the bottom of the stove and huffed out. "I thought I saw a bug," she spoke, voice clearly mad. "It wasn't, so we're okay." Her eyes closed and a breath was taken, images of Vivio having sex with faceless people invading her against her will. 'Damn it! Why am I so mad!?'

"Syn," Wan's voice came, snapping the girl back to the present. "I have a customer out here who would like to speak with you."

"With me?" Syn tried to figure out who she knew that would request to see her. "A girl?"

"A guy."

Syn wiped her hands and walked out along with Wan, being left alone at a table where a tanned man was looking at her. "Miss," he began. "Did you prepare the meal I just had?"

Looking down at the mostly cleared plate, Syn nodded. "I did."

"I heard that this place recently hired a new chef and that the food here was suddenly a lot better. The newspaper even reported complaints about people parking next door because your parking lot was full."

"Well... We have been busy lately." Syn tried to think where this was heading.

"Miss, My name is Tempest, I own The Shiny Sword downtown. I would like to hire you as my new chef."

Syn blinked again. "Wait, the really fancy place?"

"Yes, miss." He nodded. "I could offer you three times what your pay would be here, and even creative liberty on creating new dishes."

"Sold." Syn stated before the man could even start his next sentence. "When can I start?"

"Tomorrow."

"What time?"

"One PM to nine PM." He stood and shook the girl's hand. "I look forward to it."

"Me too," Syn smiled and walked back to the kitchen. 'Finally! Something good in my life!' She looked at both wan and Riyuu giving her questioning looks. "Sorry girls, I just got hired on at another restaurant because I kept changing your recipes." The dissapointed looks on their faces made her soften just a little. "I'll leave my changes with you, too." She got smiles and a few words of encouragement, and even a promise fora good reference if thy called.

With a grin, Syn started finishing the day. 'I can't wait to tell-' Her hands stopped, hovering above what she was reaching for. '... Like she would care.'

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.32:

Vivio smiled at the camera pointing to her bed and moved her hand back from the record button on it. "Hello, everyone," she greeted with her normal opening. "I'm sure a few of you are looking at your screen right now and thinking: 'A week of no updates and all we get is a video diary?'... Well, sorry, but yes for now..." She sniffed and laid her cheek back on her pillow, pulling the covers up to her neck. Her hair was still a little messy and her face was still stained a splash of red from her sickness. "I have the flu it seems."

After pulling her sheets up to cover her mouth, she let out a cough that she had been trying to repress. "I'm doing better, but I still can't get out of bed. I'd love to take some pictures or something for everyone but...Yeah, I'm really sorry. I know you pay for my site, and I should have some type of spare pictures incase of emergencies but... I never thought about doing that before. To make up for it, I promise I'll do a video every day for a week."

The sick girl sniffed again and exhaled a ragged breath. "Well, for the past week and some days, I haven't done much to really tell you about my life... I've stayed in bed for most of it... and..." She closed her eyes. "Remember my girlfriend? She found out about my job... No, it didn't go well... She dumped me and I haven't heard from her since. I know it is my fault for not telling her, but..." Again she sighed. "I won't talk about that anymore. I'm feeling a lot better than I did since I first fell ill, so I'm going to try and start updating the page in a day or two. Please send me emails if you have any ideas on what you would like to see updated. I'm sorry again for the lack of updates."

Reaching down to the floor, Vivio picked up a sheet of paper. "I couldn't sit at my desk long enough to print out all the emails I wanted to reply to, so I just wrote down what I remembered. I'm sorry if it's not your exact question." clearing her throat, she began. "First, another one that has been asked many, many times. What fetishes do I have? Not many. I like it when the person I'm with moans, I'm not sure why. Besides that... I like tight clothes. I wouldn't really say 'bondage gear' but something like that. Latex, too tight zip upped leather, and...well, being gagged. Please, don't ask."

Offering a smile, she felt her spirits lift when she thought about all of her fans spazzing out over that information. "Next, I wrote... I can't read it, hahaha." Her giggle calmed her down and she squinted. "I need to learn how to write better... oh, this one! I laughed so hard!" Her lips stayed in a smile. "Someone asked what I saw my male co-workers eat to "Sweeten the load" so to say." She giggled again and shook her head as best she could. "Lots of things, but mainly there is a little packet that they put in their drinks that supposed to make it taste sweet. I'm sure people will ask so I'll answer: No it doesn't work. Honestly, I'd be scared out of my mind if I was going down on a guy and got a mouthful of strawberry flavored splooge. I don't know what I would think!"

"I got a few questions not about work, I want to spend some time on these. Let's see, we have... My favorite food? Fajitas." Her gave a small bittersweet smile at a memory. "Also, what is my favorite movie? I'm not really sure on that one, so many good ones. I like the new comic-book movies that are coming out lately, so I'll just say that genre is my favorite." Sniffing again, she covered her mouth and coughed. "Someone else asked what I do in my spare time. That's easy, I watch a lot of movies, but I read the most. I have some reading glasses that I wear, I'll take a picture in them sometime."

She sniffed yet again and looked back at her list. "Let's see...Am I satisfied with my life? Honestly... Yes and no. As far as my general life is concerned, I am happy. I have a lot of loyal fans, who send me kind emails, I am starting to get enough money to eat a little better, and all-in-all it's pretty good. Besides that... I'm not really happy with my love life... I'm still..." She shook her head. "I don't want to ruin this by crying about my ex-girlfriend. I'm going to move on, okay?"

Vivio skimmed her paper. "What do I do to relax? Reading relaxes me, but so does eating. I love chocolate, chocolate is salvation. Other than that, I'd kill for a massage to relax me, but that's really expensive....let's see... If I could change anything in my life, what would it be?" She gave the camera a gentle smile. "I'd have been more honest with her...Okay, I'm starting to ramble. I'll upload this after I take a small nap. I hope everyone out there is having fun. Remember, my new movie is coming out this Firesday, so pick it up okay? Please send in the comments and vote for me, ne?" She winked and blew a kiss. "This is Eyes, signing off."

The camera was cut off and Vivio fell back into her pillow. 'I hope I was cheerful enough...' A knock on her door informed her that her friend Angel had stopped by again to check up on her and she pushed herself up and out of bed to go answer the door.

Vivio, I'd vote for you!!



She's so cute, despite what she does for a living. Still somehow manages to keep hold of the essence of innocence.

[Ryand-Smith]

Christ, α is full of BAD END, but then again, you sound like Tomino when he's in a bad depression. Anyway, Final Review Special Time. One. PS!Vivio Reviews.

CH31 is Meta. Fucking Meta as hell, but it still works as a crossover chapter. It makes the reader demand more, and as a mid chapter that's good. Chapter 32 is nice, the video camera/journal technique to allow character introspection normally is forced, but in this context it is not as cheap of a plot device as it should be.

On Duck Story. THIS is why short stories still exist. We get to have fun with random WTF style moments, the classic twi t of a "Duck End" still shocking to most readers. It was a nice little fluff work, although it felt highly reactionary. Why?

On the story issues in general. I feel that the best stories have characters that are properly developed, settings that are real BUT they can be fantastic (It is an art I feel to make a good fantasy story, as the rules are much more harder than people think). and an ending that works with the context of a story. A bad ending would be something like care bears ending in a grimdark bloodbath (unless you are a TWIST ending writer like M Knight Shamlaan) or the GRIMDARK adventures of the Badass Men ending in loving hugs (unless you want to make some sort of odd war message) Then again, a story's ending is up to the author, and we as readers simply interpret it.

Disclaimer: I am a film student, so deconstruction is what I do best.

Goose: Now you know how I feel when you don't understand my passion about a man (or woman's) burning spirit! The passion of flames burning forth! Hot blooded effort and guts balls out kicking conventional reason to the side!

[Nagumo]

Originally Posted by ryand-smith

christ, α is full of bad end, but then again, you sound like tomino when he's in a bad depression. Anyway, final review special time. One. Ps!vivio reviews.

Ch31 is meta. Fucking meta as hell, but it still works as a crossover chapter. It makes the reader demand more, and as a mid chapter that's good. Chapter 32 is nice, the video camera/journal technique to allow character introspection normally is forced, but in this context it is not as cheap of a plot device as it should be.

On duck story. This is why short stories still exist. We get to have fun with random wtf style moments, the classic twi t of a "duck end" still shocking to most readers. It was a nice little fluff work, although it felt highly reactionary. Why?

On the story issues in general. I feel that the best stories have characters that are properly developed, settings that are real but they can be fantastic (it is an art i feel to make a good fantasy story, as the rules are much more harder than people think). And an ending that works with the context of a story. A bad ending would be something like care bears ending in a grimdark bloodbath (unless you are a twist ending writer like m knight shamlaan) or the grimdark adventures of the badass men ending in loving hugs (unless you want to make some sort of odd war message) then again, a story's ending is up to the author, and we as readers simply interpret it.

Disclaimer: I am a film student, so deconstruction is what i do best.

Goose: Now you know how i feel when you don't understand my passion about a man (or woman's) burning spirit! The passion of flames burning forth! Hot blooded effort and guts balls out kicking conventional reason to the side!

Yes burning justice!!!! Burning friendship!!! Hot blooded manly gar!!!

[Advent000]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Previously:

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.30:

Vivio slowly climbed out of her bed and stumbled across her apartment. The world blurred around her but the hope that Syn was behind the knocking on her door gave her the energy to make it the rest of the way. Once she managed to reach the door, she leaned against the frame and unlocked it. Instead of a young blue haired girl waiting to talk to her, she instead found a more mature woman looking at her with a mix of shock and pity. "Hey Allquall," Vivio mumbled, eyes closing and letting her head fall against the frame.

"Eyes, you look like hell, what happened!?" The woman quickly helped the blond walk back to her bed, where she slowly crawled into it and laid face first. "Are you okay? you never came back for your checkup and when I asked I was told you haven't even come to work all week or updated your webpage! I was worried!"

"Ah." Vivio stayed silent after the short mumble but reluctantly allowed herself to be rolled over and sat up on the bed. "I want to lay down..."

"You need me to check on you." The woman sat down on the bed and started giving her a one-over. "How do you feel?"

"Dead."

"Be more specific please."

"Throwing up, my throat hurts, my eyes sting, my chest s tight, I don't care about anything."

Allquall looked at the girl a little closer. The normally shining gold hair was dull and lifeless, and instead of the faint sweet smell of perfume, she smelt sweat and neglect. "Eyes, why didn't you come in? Your cold got worse, I'm certain you have the flu now. Didn't you get pills to prevent that?" Vivio looked away. "Are you eating okay?"

"I'd just throw it up."

"Are you taking care of yourself? When did you last shower and change your sheets? You need to stay clean, you will feel better."

Vivio shrugged. "I dunno..." The hands keeping her up left and she laid back down on the bed, cheek on her pillow. "I don't really care."

"What's wrong with you?" The woman asked softly. "I've never once seen you not smiling and bouncing off the walls."

Staying quiet a moment, Vivio finally opened her eyes again and looked up at the woman. "Syn left me... After that I... I just got sick." She once again looked away and faced her pillow, fighting back the urge to cry again.

"You can't not take care of yourself because your girlfriend left you. If you don't get better you'll be in trouble."

"I know but...I don't know..."

Allquall stood up and tucked the girl in. "I'm going to prescribe you something and get your pharmacist to deliver it. She's your friend right?" She got a small nod. "Okay, I'll do that... Vivio, take a shower, you smell like ten kinda of ass." She got a small smile, but it was enough for her. "Really. I'll be back tomorrow to check up on you. May I leave your door unlocked for a few hours?"

"Yes."

"Okay, Angel will be by shortly. If she can't, I'll take it to you."

"...Thank you." For the first time in a few days, Vivio felt as if laying in bed and dieing wasn't the only solution to how she felt at that moment.

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.31:

Syn felt a small shake on her shoulder and jerked slightly in shock, blinking and turning to the side to see Riyuu looking at her oddly. "Huh?"

"You're spacing out again." The girl told her in a matter-of-fact tone. "You've been like that the past few days, what's up?" Her accented voice came casually while she stirred the dish in front of herself. "Are you having problems?"

"Yes." Syn sighed and went on auto pilot, once again disregarding the recipe she was supposed to stick to and going by what she wanted to add to the meal she was preparing. "Girlfriend issues."

"Oh, I'm sorry to hear that. I hope it works out okay."

"Already broke up." Syn declared her task done and walked away to plate it before anymore questions could be asked. "Wan, order up." The next ticket was taken and she went about making it along with one more on the side. 'I wish I could just go a day without having to think about this crap again.' Her mind went off again as she moved around, purposely trying to avoid the pity looks she was getting from her boss. 'It's already been a week and two days for crying out loud.' While her current orders were cooking, she stared at the food and thought to pass the time. 'She's probably with some guy right now, getting a load on her face.' The bitter thought both pleased her and pissed her off at the same time, leaving her with a knot in her stomach. 'Bastard touching my girlfriend...'her motions got rougher while tossing the contents of a skillet around. 'I have have half a mind to... damnit Syn, stop thinking about it!'

The girl angrily kicked the bottom of the stove and huffed out. "I thought I saw a bug," she spoke, voice clearly mad. "It wasn't, so we're okay." Her eyes closed and a breath was taken, images of Vivio having sex with faceless people invading her against her will. 'Damn it! Why am I so mad!?'

"Syn," Wan's voice came, snapping the girl back to the present. "I have a customer out here who would like to speak with you."

"With me?" Syn tried to figure out who she knew that would request to see her. "A girl?"

"A guy."

Syn wiped her hands and walked out along with Wan, being left alone at a table where a tanned man was looking at her. "Miss," he began. "Did you prepare the meal I just had?"

Looking down at the mostly cleared plate, Syn nodded. "I did."

"I heard that this place recently hired a new chef and that the food here was suddenly a lot better. The newspaper even reported complaints about people parking next door because your parking lot was full."

"Well... We have been busy lately." Syn tried to think where this was heading.

"Miss, My name is Tempest, I own The Shiny Sword downtown. I would like to hire you as my new chef."

Syn blinked again. "Wait, the really fancy place?"

"Yes, miss." He nodded. "I could offer you three times what your pay would be here, and even creative liberty on creating new dishes."

"Sold." Syn stated before the man could even start his next sentence. "When can I start?"

"Tomorrow."

"What time?"

"One PM to nine PM." He stood and shook the girl's hand. "I look forward to it."

"Me too," Syn smiled and walked back to the kitchen. 'Finally! Something good in my life!' She looked at both wan and Riyuu giving her questioning looks. "Sorry girls, I just got hired on at another restaurant because I kept changing your recipes." The dissapointed looks on their faces made her soften just a little. "I'll leave my changes with you, too." She got smiles and a few words of encouragement, and even a promise fora good reference if thy called.

With a grin, Syn started finishing the day. 'I can't wait to tell-' Her hands stopped, hovering above what she was reaching for. '... Like she would care.'

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.32:

Vivio smiled at the camera pointing to her bed and moved her hand back from the record button on it. "Hello, everyone," she greeted with her normal opening. "I'm sure a few of you are looking at your screen right now and thinking: 'A week of no updates and all we get is a video diary?'... Well, sorry, but yes for now..." She sniffed and laid her cheek back on her pillow, pulling the covers up to her neck. Her hair was still a little messy and her face was still stained a splash of red from her sickness. "I have the flu it seems."

After pulling her sheets up to cover her mouth, she let out a cough that she had been trying to repress. "I'm doing better, but I still can't get out of bed. I'd love to take some pictures or something for everyone but...Yeah, I'm really sorry. I know you pay for my site, and I should have some type of spare pictures incase of emergencies but... I never thought about doing that before. To make up for it, I promise I'll do a video every day for a week."

The sick girl sniffed again and exhaled a ragged breath. "Well, for the past week and some days, I haven't done much to really tell you about my life... I've stayed in bed for most of it... and..." She closed her eyes. "Remember my girlfriend? She found out about my job... No, it didn't go well... She dumped me and I haven't heard from her since. I know it is my fault for not telling her, but..." Again she sighed. "I won't talk about that anymore. I'm feeling a lot better than I did since I first fell ill, so I'm going to try and start updating the page in a day or two. Please send me emails if you have any ideas on what you would like to see updated. I'm sorry again for the lack of updates."

Reaching down to the floor, Vivio picked up a sheet of paper. "I couldn't sit at my desk long enough to print out all the emails I wanted to reply to, so I just wrote down what I remembered. I'm sorry if it's not your exact question." clearing her throat, she began. "First, another one that has been asked many, many times. What fetishes do I have? Not many. I like it when the person I'm with moans, I'm not sure why. Besides that... I like tight clothes. I wouldn't really say 'bondage gear' but something like that. Latex, too tight zip upped leather, and...well, being gagged. Please, don't ask."

Offering a smile, she felt her spirits lift when she thought about all of her fans spazzing out over that information. "Next, I wrote... I can't read it, hahaha." Her giggle calmed her down and she squinted. "I need to learn how to write better... oh, this one! I laughed so hard!" Her lips stayed in a smile. "Someone asked what I saw my male co-workers eat to "Sweeten the load" so to say." She giggled again and shook her head as best she could. "Lots of things, but mainly there is a little packet that they put in their drinks that supposed to make it taste sweet. I'm sure people will ask so I'll answer: No it doesn't work. Honestly, I'd be scared out of my mind if I was going down on a guy and got a mouthful of strawberry flavored splooge. I don't know what I would think!"

"I got a few questions not about work, I want to spend some time on these. Let's see, we have... My favorite food? Fajitas." Her gave a small bittersweet smile at a memory. "Also, what is my favorite movie? I'm not really sure on that one, so many good ones. I like the new comic-book movies that are coming out lately, so I'll just say that genre is my favorite." Sniffing again, she covered her mouth and coughed. "Someone else asked what I do in my spare time. That's easy, I watch a lot of movies, but I read the most. I have some reading glasses that I wear, I'll take a picture in them sometime."

She sniffed yet again and looked back at her list. "Let's see...Am I satisfied with my life? Honestly... Yes and no. As far as my general life is concerned, I am happy. I have a lot of loyal fans, who send me kind emails, I am starting to get enough money to eat a little better, and all-in-all it's pretty good. Besides that... I'm not really happy with my love life... I'm still..." She shook her head. "I don't want to ruin this by crying about my ex-girlfriend. I'm going to move on, okay?"

Vivio skimmed her paper. "What do I do to relax? Reading relaxes me, but so does eating. I love chocolate, chocolate is salvation. Other than that, I'd kill for a massage to relax me, but that's really expensive....let's see... If I could change anything in my life, what would it be?" She gave the camera a gentle smile. "I'd have been more honest with her...Okay, I'm starting to ramble. I'll upload this after I take a small nap. I hope everyone out there is having fun. Remember, my new movie is coming out this Firesday, so pick it up okay? Please send in the comments and vote for me, ne?" She winked and blew a kiss. "This is Eyes, signing off."

The camera was cut off and Vivio fell back into her pillow. 'I hope I was cheerful enough...' A knock on her door informed her that her friend Angel had stopped by again to check up on her and she pushed herself up and out of bed to go answer the door.

Good to see that Vivio is still soldeiring on.

[krisslanza]

So after saying I'd write this well... A looooong time ago. I just now did it!
This crack contains nudity so don't read it if you're offended by that kind of stuff. Nothing explicit or detailed so I think it's AS safe.

Spoiler for An Ace of Lyrical:

An Ace of Lyrical
- A harmless, innocent game… Right?

Rune took a sip of her drink, a soda (she preferred something alcoholic but Keroko wouldn’t have any of that with Vivio and Syn around), and looked over the cards in her hand with a studying gaze. The silver-haired woman had managed to get Keroko, Vivio, and even Syn to play a game of poker with her in her apartment. It really was quite the achievement considering her rather… Poor reputation with females of any degree of attractiveness had them certain she had something else in mind, at least eventually. It took quite a bit of reassuring and promises to get them to agree to the game. Each of the four had agreed to bring, and use 2,000 yen as money for the game with the winner taking home a sweet 8,000 yen, netting a good 6,000 yen profit. Not too bad really. Of course Rune really did have something else in mind then just an innocent game of cards…

So far the game was going rather poorly for her. She had about 200 yen left and was going to be broke in the next two hands, even if she didn’t bet. Keroko still had her original 2,000 in addition to about 1,000 of Rune’s yen. Vivio and Syn meanwhile had their original 2,000 along with 400 of Rune’s each. Of course Rune was actually losing on purpose. After all how could she enact her plot if the other three lost first? None of them would be willing to suggest it and her losing a few times would be more likely to get them all overconfident. It was such a simple, yet devious plot. A quick check of the other girl’s faces and another at her cards Rune tossed the rest of her yen into the small pile in the middle of the table.

“I’ll call for 200 then. Let’s see what we’ve all got?”

Rune laid down her hand, sporting only a simple pair of 8’s. When the other three laid down their hands Vivio had somehow managed to get herself a three of a kind with 3’s and easily won the round quickly scooping up the various coins and bills in the middle of the table to fatten up her bankroll. The silver-haired woman sighed and slumped her shoulders, shaking her head for effect. Keroko was the first to note.

“Looks like to me you’re broke Rune.” the redhead stated the obvious

“Oh?” the heterochromatic girl took notice of the lack of any money in front of Rune, “Oh! Sorry Rune-sempai… I didn’t think you’d be broke after that!”

“Aren’t you supposed to be good at this game yet you’re the first one to lose?” pointed out the blue-haired Syn

“Aw come on now Syn, just because I’m good at it doesn’t mean the cards can’t be cruel to me. Skill only goes so far.”

“So… Are you just going to sit there and watch then Rune?” asked Keroko as she shuffled the cards for the next round

“But that would be so boring!” Rune gasped in horror for the added effect, “I think I have another idea in mind…”

“Why did you just saying that me the chills?” said all three of the girls in unison as Rune groaned

---

Keroko drummed her fingers on the table absentmindedly as she did a mental recap of the rules they had just sorted out.

“I suppose I could stand playing with that rule if you just don’t go breaking any of the rules…”

It had taken the other girls about thirty minutes or so to flesh out the rules. Well the rules that Rune had added to their little game. Rather then just a simple, harmless game of poker… She turned it into strip poker. Keroko, Syn, and Vivio had all refused at first, suspecting Rune had some horribly naughty up her sleeve until she gave them her reassurance the game would be over as normal… Only this time the winner netted not only 8,000 yen but also got to remain clothed for the game. Losers had to be naked, and broke, until the end of the game (the clothing had to be returned at the end of the game of course). Though the silver-haired woman did end up having to fork over more of her own personal money to finance the ‘bank’ that would be where the losing players would withdraw the money to after ‘selling’ it.

Ironically each of the players had come to this game wearing the same amount of clothing - seven a piece. Well except Rune who was now down to six as she had to sell her jacket to the ‘bank’ to stay in the game. But it didn’t matter to her - now that she didn’t have to lose on purpose things were going to get a lot more interesting… And even if she lost, she wouldn’t mind. After all that was the fun of the game!

“So I think it was Keroko’s turn to deal…?” spoke up Rune

---

“You know if you just folded once in a while Syn…” offered Rune as she scooped up the money from the table, “You might not be broke right now.”

The blue-haired girl stuck her tongue out defiantly at Rune as she slipped off her jacket and received a bit of yen in exchange.

“At least I wasn’t the first one to lose at her own game.”

“Ah but the first one to lose doesn’t mean anything! It’s only the first one to take off their panties that does.” winked the silver-haired woman teasingly

“Oh quiet you and deal.” grumbled Syn as she cautiously poked at the few yen coins at her disposal, after all the first articles of clothing netted very little money

Vivio patted her friend on the back to calm her down a bit as they continued to play their game, a few rounds passed by and money was exchanged until it came down to Keroko betting the last of her yen and losing it on a horribly done bluff. She slumped slightly as Vivio took the money off the table and had already handed over the black and red blazer she wore to the ‘bank’ in return for a small amount of yen.

“Looks like only Vivio has so far avoided losing anything…” pointed out Syn as she dealt the cards out

“You haven’t played before have you?” asked Keroko

“Well not poker… Maybe just Go Fish or Solitare. Rune-sempai taught me it actually…”, she blinked as Syn and Keroko glanced to her and then to the innocent-looking Rune, “Ah! No we didn’t actually play strip poker though… She just taught me it when she caught me playing Solitare.”

“Yup. Solitare is so boring. Remind me to teach you Blackjack sometime Vivio.”

The red and green eyed girl nodded in agreement as Keroko could only imagine teaching the blonde Blackjack would just make her able to play STRIP Blackjack instead… Rune really was a horrible pervert and was pretty well-known for it. As the hand came to an end Syn frowned in dismay as she had to pony up the last of her meager yen and was again broke when she lost, Rune smiled teasingly.

“Looks like you’re the first to strip twice Synnie.”

Syn again stuck her tongue out as she unrolled her stockings and handed them over to the lecherous Rune in exchange for yen. The silver-haired woman peeked under the table at Syn’s bare legs and grinned.
“Nice legs Synnie.”

Rune laughed as Syn stood up and looked like she was about to slap Rune until Vivio again calmed her friend down and the game continued as normal, though Syn was still a bit red in the face. Either from embarrassment or anger, maybe both.

“Looks like I won again Keroko-chan… Gomen.” the blonde giggled nervously as Keroko was again broke and had to remove the red ribbon she was wearing to the bank

Syn took a look at the amount of money Rune and Vivio had with a look of dismay.

“Why am only I and Keroko keep losing? Geez…”

“I have to admit Vivio is either really good or… Lucky. Like when she had that four of a kind there.”

“I think she’s just lucky more then anything really… Always has been.” added Keroko as she dealt the cards

A few more hands and Syn was again turning red as the last of her yen was scooped up my Keroko, she groaned and rubbed her temples.

“Why do I keep losing all the time? I swear it’s like a pattern. I lose, Keroko loses, I lose, Keroko loses…” the girl complained as she undid her belt and cashed it in for money

“Oooooh another loss by Synnie and she’ll be the first one to start showing some real skin!” teased the silver and blue eyed woman

“You really shouldn’t provoke her Rune. You know she’s a better mage then you are…”

Rune shrugged as Syn merely motioned for Vivio to start dealing out the next hand. Which by the end of Syn was turning a darker shade of red as she had blown all her yen on calling Rune’s bluff… To discover it wasn’t a bluff as her two pair got crushed by the other’s three of a kind. Rune smiled as she started counting out yen from the bank as Syn quickly and without compliant pulled her shirt off up over her head.

“A white shirt and a white bra. How very simple.” commented Rune as she started dealing the cards, “Though it’s not exactly hiding much is it?”

Syn looked like she was on the verge of strangling Rune but merely sat in silence as she stared at her cards with renewed vigor. Another round and another loser - and it was again Keroko who had removed her stockings in exchange for yen. Rune again peeked under the table at the exposed legs.

“Oooh nice legs too there Kero. And liking that short skirt if you just sat a bit differently, ehehehehe…” chuckled the perverted merrily as Keroko blushed slightly and adjusted her seating

The game continued on, probably because both of the losing girls were far too stubborn to weasel out of the game, and to everyone’s surprise no one lost for several rounds… Until Vivio’s pool of money had finally been distributed to the other girl’s and the blonde had suffered her first bankruptancy of the game. The loss of course was minor and only cost her the vest she was wearing and netted her a bit of money (which everyone figured she’d magically turn back into a big pile).

Several rounds later Rune’s own pile of money had been depleted somehow and the other girl’s piles were getting much larger. She sighed and shrugged.

“Oh the bitter taste of defeat and stripping.” bemoaned the pervert as she undid her belt

“Riiight… Bitter…” grumbled Syn who was the most naked person at the table

With Rune’s defeat it came as a surprise she managed to not lose again and instead Vivio lost next, though it took a few rounds to whittle down her yen supply. The cost was only her hair ribbon, which of course only let her hair down, but Rune didn’t complain. She preferred girl’s with their hair down anyway, plus it was one step closer to nudity… More surprises continued as Rune lost next after betting high to Vivio, assuming she was bluffing, only to watch as the girl had a four of a kind.

“… Vivio you really ARE one lucky girl.” said Rune in surprise as she pulled her shirt off up over her head revealing a lace black bra

“W-whoa Rune! You still have your TIE on why are you - “ gasped Syn in surprise

“It’s not we said we had to strip in some kind of order… Besides I always thought the naked but with a tie was a good look so maybe I’ll keep it to the last…” answered Rune aloud with a grin

As she took the money from the bank she noticed Vivio and Syn, well mainly Syn, looking at her. She looked at them in return.

“… Why are you staring so much Synnie? Vivi?”

They mumbled incoherently to themselves and didn’t answer.

“Oooooh. I see. Don’t worry, I’m sure one day you can have a nice healthy busts too girls.” teased Rune laughing as the two young girls blushed and focused on their cards instead of the lace black bra covering Rune’s ample breasts

---

“Ugh… I can’t believe this…” groaned Keroko as she slumped in her chair

“Looks like now three of us will be showing off our bras. When will Vivi join in I wonder hmmm?”

The girls had taken a quick break after Rune’s lose to get more snacks and drinks then when they came back Keroko had managed to pull off an impressive defeat and blew all her yen in a single hand. The Nanoha-lookalike unbutton her white blouse and handed it over to Rune who in exchange gave her some yen.

“Oooh nice a black bra Kero. Nice and simple but yet a sexy color! Heehee.”

The redhead blushed and pretended to not hear as Syn seemed to be dying of embarrassment at her flat-chest compared to Rune and Keroko’s. A few hands later and Rune was frowning as she was broke again, and she had been doing so well before!

“You know Synnie I think you’re right. This game is sounding like a pattern… Earlier it went you then Keroko… Now it keeps going me and Vivio! Ah… Oh well… Losing is still fun right?” grinned the woman as she stood up and wriggled out of her jeans sporting a black lace thong

The other girls turned bright red as Rune was now left with only lacy black lingerie and a black tie. Rune had relatively pale skin, not to mention the silver hair, and in her half-naked state had a very unique… Looking appearance. Not to mention her skin looked smooth as could be and her curves in every single right spot, AND a large bust that could probably rival, or possibly beat, Fate’s. Her lecherous and perverseness (and womanizing) aside Rune was very much a role model of beauty for some of the other female mages and a lust object for the men. Though a few knew it wasn’t all good, while she was certainly good looking Rune was actually heavily on medication due to a severe and rare illness she had as a result of her inherit Rare Skill, she’d probably be dead without them. (But hey, that’s a story for another time!)

To everyone’s surprise Rune suffered bad hand after bad hand and was again broke not too long later.

“Well look who is losing now!” stated Syn triumphantly, “Guess you’ll soon be losing that br-”

And before she finished Rune had already reached behind her back and unclasped her bra, adding it to the growing clothing pile on the ground, fetching her money from the bank, and her large breasts free from their lacy confinement. The other girls nearly jaw-dropped at the silver-haired woman’s lack of any modesty opting to strip her bra over something insignificant as a tie. Syn looked nearly like a tomato in the face at eyeing the plump bosom of Rune, or maybe she was just feeling so very flat now that Rune’s were exposed and she barely had anything.

“Boy oh boy it’s rather drafty and chilly in here now isn’t it?” commented Rune offhand with a tone of voice that screamed she literally didn’t care about the effect the cold air was having on her topless naked body

As the game continued on, probably reaching nearly two hours in length by now, the next to lose was Syn whom quickly removed her jean skirt from under the table before Rune could say anything and took her money quickly.

“Aww Synnie not even going to stand and show off? So shy, so shy! Oh well. We’ll all find out once you lose your panties~”

And a few hands later that little comment was coming closer to true as Syn was again broke. She groaned.

“This can’t be happening…” the blue-haired girl moaned as she stripped her bra and got some yen in exchange, but was now of course left in only her panties

Rune refrained from commenting but her smile was all it took to know she was enjoying this game immensely. Vivio went bankrupt next but no one was really cheering or commenting about it, after all, the blonde had only lost her socks as a result while two were near naked (one just a single loss from it) and another was on near equal footing.

---

“Oh my… Looks like I’m broke again aren’t I?” mused Rune aloud as the last of her yen was drained away

“So now are you going to take off that ridiculous ti-”

And again Rune cut Syn off mid sentence by standing up and casually slipping off her thong and tossing it away like it was worth nothing.

“Nope. Told ya naked but with a tie left is certainly sexy.” grinned the naked pervert

The tie certainly looked lonely nestled between Rune’s large breasts while the rest of her body was as bare, as bare could be.

“Rune-sempai is so… So… Uhm…” stuttered Vivio nervously

“Unmodest?” offered Keroko

“A tramp?” retorted Syn

“I think I’ll take Keroko’s.” stated Rune dryly

With Rune and Syn both on the last of their yen (they’d be force to sell the last piece and then be out of the game) neither wanted to lose… And neither did. Instead Keroko lost and had to remove the short skirt she had on, leaving her in just a set of simple black panties and black bra. The game was certainly turning interesting with only Vivio left mostly clothed and the others left in either their underwear, a single piece of underwear, or just a tie.

“You know I’m kind of surprised none of you wanted to stop or anything…” mused Rune aloud as she started to deal the cards

“W-Well it’s not like we’re doing it for the reasons YOU are… It’s just a harmless game of fun.” countered Keroko stubbornly

“Yeah. Exactly. Not like any of us have anything we haven’t seen…”

“Though some of us have things in bigger quality then others.” teased Rune

Surprisingly Vivio managed to get some bad, bad hands and actually got bankrupt (despite having most of the money on the table at one point) and ended up having to take off her shirt, showing off a simple cotton bra as well which, like Syn, didn’t really cover much… She seemed to be taking it better then Syn though. (Though Syn WAS left in only panties). The tension in the room was growing as the each of the near naked girls was determined to carefully monitor their money in an attempt to not lose (well except Rune who merely sat around with a happy smile on her face) but lose one of them must… And it was Keroko having to now surrender her bra to the rapidly filling bank. She sighed and removed it as quickly as possible, to spare herself the teasing from Rune, and focused on her cards and money instead of Rune’s widening smile.

---

They all knew it’d happen eventually. One of them was going to have to lose. Keroko just didn’t expect it to be her - to lose twice in a row and it also resulting in her total defeat. She groaned and slumped in her seat shaking her head.

“Out 2,000 ryo and modesty…” she sighed, “Better just get it over with.”

The redhead got up out of her seat and slipped off her black panties as she waltz on over to take a seat on the couch, grabbing a few pillows for covering.

“Just hurry up and finish before I get too cold alright?”

Rune smiled and waved, “Sure, sure Kero. Wonder who’ll join you next?”

A few hands later and everyone had their answer as the last of Syn’s yen was used up and the blue-haired girl was getting up out of her seat to strip off the black panties she wore (a clashing match with her white bra earlier) and taking a seat on the other couch, also fetching pillows to cover up the important bits. Her face was red as she spoke, likely from embarrassment.

“You better not let that perv beat you Vivio!”

And, unexpectedly, Syn was correct. A few hands later Vivio was the proud owner of over 8,000 ryo (she got the bank Rune had set up) and Rune took off her tie and standing up to show off her nude form. She shrugged.

“Ah you win some and lose some. Good game Vivio. You’re getting’ pretty good at this. Guess you can all get your clothes and I’ll just go take a shower…” she sauntered off looking over her shoulder, “This was fun. Maybe I’ll organize another one eh? Ehehehehehe…”

*Flees*

[TheShinySword]

hmm... much to comment on... and holybejebuskrisswrotesomethingwillreportonlater

On Duck: Wow... and I thought I took crack as serious buisness.

On Goose: I do in fact 100% agree. Self-sacrifice is perhaps one of, if not the greatest, forms of love, as long as it's used sparingly in fiction to keep it from becoming really really cheesy.

On the FFT v. OCT: Anyone can post here. Everything's read just not commented on. Though I agree that the OCT is the better place to head for well... I'm not quite sure how to explain it but I go there whenever I need a military/explosions fix.

And finally.... [warning: major fanswording ahead]
http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost...postcount=2143

Go read this now. Tempest posted it in the OCT (I'm not sure if it was posted here too as I'm ashamed to say I kept putting reading this off) It's called The Gospel of Judas and it is quickly turning into an epic tale. It's the kind of story that had me gripping my head in agony two pages in because I didn't understand why I put it off. I don't want to say anything more but if you have any interest in action, and adventure, at least give it a try, it won't be for everyone but you might just like it. There are only two parts out at the moment (You can find the second by clicking in Tempest's signature).
I'll PM you a full real review later Tempest and I'm sorry for fanning so much but I fully enjoyed it and am now waiting for part 3 anxiously and I couldn't help but share it with anyone who might also like it.

[Evangelion Xgouki]

DIVIDED DESTINY
Two People, Two Paths

Spoiler for Divided Destiny, pt. 18:

Afternoon sunlight streamed in through the windows of the Eden structure. Life after the mass evacuation had slowly started to return to normal. An increase in common ore mining yielded enough raw materials for non-critical structures like Residencies to be built. While there were not enough for everyone to live as spread out as they had before, it was better than staying in the tubes. However there was still unease in the minds of the colonists. The reason for their rushed evacuation was never fully explained and many worried that whatever it was might strike again. Fate, however, was one of the possible few who knew the truth about it. Sometimes she wondered if that really was such a good thing.

"Fate!"

Hearing her name, the blond scientist turned her head in an attempt to find the source in the crowded cafeteria. Being lunch time didn't help her in her search.

"Over here, Fate! To your left!"

Following the directions of the voice, her eyes catch a hand waving just above the sea of heads. Making her way over to the hand was another thing. It took a few turns and some close calls but she would reach her goal with lunch still intact on her tray. When she reached the table she was greeted by a familiar smiling face with short hair and signature crossed hair clips.

"Long time no see, Hayate."

"Well maybe if you stopped working so much in that lab," her friend joked.

Lunch was lively with conversation between the pair. Having not seen each other since the evacuation they had a lot to catch up on in the short lunch break they had from work. Topics freely jumped around from their 'exciting' days at work to the latest gossip around the colony. Fate was thankful that the topic never strayed towards the evacuation or the reason behind it. She didn't want to risk disclosing what her mother had told her. Not to mention what might happen if others overheard and started to spread it around the colony.

"...should have have seen Vita's face when she found out the last cookie was gone."

"She always has been quite attached to her snacks."

A round of laughter was exchanged. More stories were told between the two but soon their lunch break came to an end.

"I should probably start heading back to the lab."

"Ah yes. Your love slaves in there must be missing you by now~"

Fate went red at the comment. "Hayate!"

"Well with how much time you spend in there, you never know," she replied with a giggle.

"You and your wild theories. I don't want those kinds of rumors to spread around. Especially if mom heard them."

"Ooo...maybe it can be a mother-daughter bonding thing. Bonding...and whips!"

The blond found her palm connecting with her face as she sighed. Hayate was a great friend but sometimes her imagination was a bit too much.

"No, Hayate. Just no."

"Fine, fine. It was great to see you again, though. We need to get together more often."

"Yes, definitely. Well see you later."

"Oh, Fate."

She stopped mid-step. "Hm?"

"Uncle Gil said that he wanted to meet with you when you were free."

"He did? Um, do you know when?"

Hayate shrugged. "He said whenever. Just head up to his office."

It was a bit odd to Fate. Their families were close back at the original Eden colony. Her mother was friends with Gil Graham before he was elected to the Council. They had met up for dinner on several occasions but this was the first time he had requested to meet him in his office. The request lingered in Fate's thoughts for the rest of the day, constantly coming up for theories for the meeting. Finally her work was over and she found herself standing in front of his office door. She wasn't sure why she was so hesitant. It was only Uncle Gil after all, right? Shaking her head to clear her thoughts, she kicked on the door.

"Come in."

The door slid open, granting her access to the modest office. At the opposite end of the room, the older gentleman looked up and smiles as he set down some papers he was reading. "Ah, Fate! I hope I'm not inconveniencing you."

"Not at all, sir."

He paused for a moment and set his hands on his desk with a stern look. "Fate Testarossa. What have I told you about addressing me?"

"But, sir..."

"I do not see anyone else in this office."

Fate took a quick glance around, finding this to be true. "...yes, Uncle Gil."

The older man's stern face brightened up with a smile. "Much better. Now, have a seat. There's something I want to take to you about."

Closing the distance, Fate sat down on one of the chairs in front of his desk.

"As you know, the database reconstruction recently finished and we now have a much larger supply of common ore at our disposal. That allows us to turn our attention to other projects and concerns. Do you have any guesses as to why I called you here?"

She shook her head, "Not really."

Gil leaned back in his chair. "I've known you and your mother for quite some time, Fate. Both of you are hard workers and people I can trust. Recently the Council has green-lighted the construction of new Advance Labs and I want you to help work on those projects."

Fate blinked once. Then twice. "Y-you want me to work in the Advance labs?"

"Correct. You'll get upgraded security clearance, access to all the equipment they have to offer, as well as your own Savant computer. So what do you say?"

A) Accept the offer
B) Decline the offer
C) Change to Nanoha's PoV

Please post your choices BOLD and in DarkOrange

Previous Installments
-Intro
-Chapter 01
-Chapter 02
-Chapter 03
-Chapter 04
-Chapter 05
-Chapter 06
-Chapter 07
-Chapter 08
-Chapter 09
-Chapter 10
-Chapter 11
-Chapter 12
-Chapter 13
-Chapter 14
-Chapter 15
-Chapter 16
-Chapter 17

[RadiantBeam]

Good news!

I'm working on another Lutecia/Vivio one-shot and the next chapter of Bless the Broken Road.

Bad news.

The one-shot's shaping up to be long, and the chapter's kind of fighting me.

[TerranReaper]

Spoiler for Chapter 7:

Chapter 7

The Martian Nation of the Republic of Orinca became a battleground after the Belkans launched an attack against the power reactors that powered Earth’s orbital cannons. The soldiers and marines did all they can to defend the reactors but the Belkans were swift in their attacks and the military had no time to prepare. However, word got out that Earth has sent reinforcements to reinforce the defense line. “They’re coming. We don’t have to fight alone after all,” said a marine to his friend. Nanoha was picking off the anti-aircraft guns quite leisurely when a sniper shot flew past her head by mere inches. She turned to the source of that shot and found a marine wielding an energy blade in one hand, a sniper rifle in the other. The sniper rifle was smoking, indicating a recent shot.

“Nanoha Takamachi…you are not what I expected you to be. I’ve read Colonel Johannes’s experience on Mid-Childa and he said that you people are smart and advance. Advance is one thing but smart? You were told that the Belkans were using you for their fighting force and yet you refuse to believe that they were the culprits who caused 490 years of global unrest and strife?” the marine said. Nanoha shook her head.

“The Belkans are righteous and they would never attack a weak nation. You must have done something to offend them,” said Nanoha defiantly. The marine scowled at her. “You are a stubborn lot. If it weren’t for the Belkans, we Terrans could have reached for the stars. Instead, we’re confined to only two planets we’ve known for so many centuries, not those outside of the Sol System we wished to be living on. The Belkans were giving us so much trouble that we’re stuck on Earth and defending her from the Belkans. Have you not considered that?” the marine asked.

“But…it can’t be true…can it? On Mid-Childa before the mutant invasion, Mid-Childan archaeologists love looking for ancient Belkan artifacts and we’ve learnt much about their life. They came before the Mid-Childans and their way of life is highly respected…that is why I refuse to believe that they were the culprits,” said Nanoha softly. She seemed suspicious of the Belkans now but the marine can’t be sure.

“Look, Nanoha, if I were to bring you to Earth, you’ll be surprised at our living conditions. We’re living in ruins! Our global funds were directed to military only and the basic needs for the people were neglected. There are about 3 billion lives on the planet, half of what it used to be. We live on grown crops and fishing to sustain ourselves and we’re doing it like those peasants of the ancient world. We have made scientific advances but couldn’t carry it out in a large scale because we lack the money. All funds were used to research military weaponry and ways to counter Belkan magic. We could have built anti-matter power stations instead of anti-matter bombs. We have at least one of that bomb aiming at Mid-Childa should things go very wrong. One bomb like this can obliterate an entire planet,” the marine said.

Nanoha scratched her head. “Why did you not launch it?” she asked. “Are you that naïve? You and your friends are on that planet and we’ve built this bomb 100 years ago. We could have launched it and destroyed them because you Mid-Childans were in cryo sleep and are still on that planet, the government ordered us to not launch the bombs. They cared about you all and look how you repay us. I can tell you this, Nanoha, everyone on Earth has read about the Mid-Childans after Colonel Johannes returned and published his experience. It was a worldwide phenomenon. We know little but 10 years before the Belkans attacked and 2 years after you destroyed your own colony, we’ve sent expedition teams to collect historical data on the Mid-Childans and blueprints on how to build magical devices like that one you’re using. We’ve found a lot when we’ve stumbled upon the Infinite Library. Everything we need to know and even forbidden technology, we’ve unearthed only less than one percent of the info there is in that library.”

The marine smiled. “I marvel your technology. Some on Earth tried to do that but we can’t build infinite things without magic, which was what we can’t do. All findings were archived in the Global Science Centre and Mid-Childan histories were even learned in school. Our society has given you all so much respect because what you left behind was useful to us. That is why we don’t have the heart to destroy Mid-Childa again,” the marine said.

Nanoha hesitated to attack this time. She suddenly felt like turning against the Belkans but there were still some of her friends on Mid-Childa. “You know, I’m not sure what you say is true or not but I’m willing to come to Earth and see things personally. However, let me go get my friends,” she said to the marine. Nanoha took to the sky again. The marine keyed his COM and contacted Martian HQ. “We have one now and she’s gonna go get her partner. Direct anti-air shots away from Nanoha and Fate and aim specifically at the Belkans,” the marine said.

So, the guns fired at the Belkans instead of Nanoha and Fate. The attack planes in the air also avoided shooting Fate but she didn’t know why so she destroyed them instead and sent pilots ejecting from their seats. “Fate-chan, don’t attack the Terrans! We’re joining them!” Nanoha yelled to Fate. Fate looked at Nanoha with surprised eyes. “But I thought you said the Terrans-,”

“Forget what I said one day ago! Lets get out of this fighting zone and I’ll explain everything,” said Nanoha. “Wait, I’ll go get Signum,” said Fate. Nanoha nodded and flew down to the ground again. She was welcomed by the marines and soldiers and she was sent to Martian HQ to report herself. In the sky however, Fate couldn’t pursue Signum to defect and what Signum said dawned a new trouble.

“I can’t, Fate. I serve a new master now,” Signum said emotionlessly. Fate was taken aback. A new master? That means someone has taken the Book of Darkness from Hayate! “Surely you could do something about it, can you?” asked Fate. Signum just shook her head. “I’m sorry, I can’t. Whoever has the book shall be master of the Wolkenritters and all the powers in the book as well. If you refuse to fight for the Belkans, then as my master decrees, you will fight the Belkans,” said Signum. She pointed her sword at Fate and slashed at her. Fate had no choice but to fight back. It was evening on Mars now and two moons were seen in the sky. “Just like old times, eh?” said Fate with a weak smile. Signum smiled back. “Just like old times,” Signum said.

Hayate looked around for the hooded man described by Subaru. Again she felt the dizziness but this time she felt her magic diminishing. “Subaru, Teana, can you feel anything?” she asked. The two of them shrugged. “Feel what?” Subaru asked. Hayate looked around again to look for the stranger. She saw a hooded man entering an alleyway, clutching something. Hayate chased after him and entered the alleyway. “Come out, I know you have my book! Return it to me!” she yelled. There was no one though. Suddenly, someone knocked her down to the ground. Struggling to look behind, she saw three figures. Two men and one woman. The woman spoke. “Look at her, all powerless. Not so tough now are you?” the woman mocked.

Hayate couldn’t make out anything through her blurred vision. Her vision swam about, as if she was about to faint. Then, before she fainted, she heard the man in the middle mentioned a name that scared her out of her wits. “Quattro, take her back to the lab. Let’s see what we can make her into. When we do, her friends won’t recognize her anymore,” the man said.

“With pleasure, doctor,” Quattro said. She grabbed the now fainted Hayate and teleported back to an undisclosed location. Before she did that, she ripped off the listening device on Hayate’s dress and crushed it into pieces. “They won’t get anymore info from here on end,” Quattro said with an evil smile.

The man who commanded Quattro laughed his iconic evil laugh. “The Belkans appreciate my projects and have given me the go ahead to find a carrier for the embryo of a super soldier that will destroy the Terrans forever! I, Jail Scaglietti, am the greatest scientist of them all!” he said with that psychotic look on his face. Just when Subaru and Teana arrived, no one was to be seen. “This is trouble. Miss Hayate is gone. Subaru, lets go and report to Chrono now,” said Teana.

In their hideout, the stranded Terran soldiers lost contact with Hayate. “Major, this isn’t good. Hayate might be in trouble. What should we do?” one soldier asked. The Major tapped his cigar and thought about it.

What would you do?
A)Stay put and wait for help from Earth
B)Go undercover and search for Hayate
C)Go undercover and get help from Chrono

Spoiler for Unrelated Belkan Army:

This is from Ace Combat Zero: The Belkan War (Wow, everbody loves an alternate Germany )

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by TerranReaper

What would you do?
A)Stay put and wait for help from Earth
B)Go undercover and search for Hayate
C)Go undercover and get help from Chrono

D) Nuke the site from orbit. (It's the only way to be sure.)


What's with the annoying choose your own adventure around here? Do I need to clean house with liberal use of otherwise banned mass based weaponry? I will you know.

[Seraph42]

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

DIVIDED DESTINY
Two People, Two Paths

Spoiler for Divided Destiny, pt. 18:

Afternoon sunlight streamed in through the windows of the Eden structure. Life after the mass evacuation had slowly started to return to normal. An increase in common ore mining yielded enough raw materials for non-critical structures like Residencies to be built. While there were not enough for everyone to live as spread out as they had before, it was better than staying in the tubes. However there was still unease in the minds of the colonists. The reason for their rushed evacuation was never fully explained and many worried that whatever it was might strike again. Fate, however, was one of the possible few who knew the truth about it. Sometimes she wondered if that really was such a good thing.

"Fate!"

Hearing her name, the blond scientist turned her head in an attempt to find the source in the crowded cafeteria. Being lunch time didn't help her in her search.

"Over here, Fate! To your left!"

Following the directions of the voice, her eyes catch a hand waving just above the sea of heads. Making her way over to the hand was another thing. It took a few turns and some close calls but she would reach her goal with lunch still intact on her tray. When she reached the table she was greeted by a familiar smiling face with short hair and signature crossed hair clips.

"Long time no see, Hayate."

"Well maybe if you stopped working so much in that lab," her friend joked.

Lunch was lively with conversation between the pair. Having not seen each other since the evacuation they had a lot to catch up on in the short lunch break they had from work. Topics freely jumped around from their 'exciting' days at work to the latest gossip around the colony. Fate was thankful that the topic never strayed towards the evacuation or the reason behind it. She didn't want to risk disclosing what her mother had told her. Not to mention what might happen if others overheard and started to spread it around the colony.

"...should have have seen Vita's face when she found out the last cookie was gone."

"She always has been quite attached to her snacks."

A round of laughter was exchanged. More stories were told between the two but soon their lunch break came to an end.

"I should probably start heading back to the lab."

"Ah yes. Your love slaves in there must be missing you by now~"

Fate went red at the comment. "Hayate!"

"Well with how much time you spend in there, you never know," she replied with a giggle.

"You and your wild theories. I don't want those kinds of rumors to spread around. Especially if mom heard them."

"Ooo...maybe it can be a mother-daughter bonding thing. Bonding...and whips!"

The blond found her palm connecting with her face as she sighed. Hayate was a great friend but sometimes her imagination was a bit too much.

"No, Hayate. Just no."

"Fine, fine. It was great to see you again, though. We need to get together more often."

"Yes, definitely. Well see you later."

"Oh, Fate."

She stopped mid-step. "Hm?"

"Uncle Gil said that he wanted to meet with you when you were free."

"He did? Um, do you know when?"

Hayate shrugged. "He said whenever. Just head up to his office."

It was a bit odd to Fate. Their families were close back at the original Eden colony. Her mother was friends with Gil Graham before he was elected to the Council. They had met up for dinner on several occasions but this was the first time he had requested to meet him in his office. The request lingered in Fate's thoughts for the rest of the day, constantly coming up for theories for the meeting. Finally her work was over and she found herself standing in front of his office door. She wasn't sure why she was so hesitant. It was only Uncle Gil after all, right? Shaking her head to clear her thoughts, she kicked on the door.

"Come in."

The door slid open, granting her access to the modest office. At the opposite end of the room, the older gentleman looked up and smiles as he set down some papers he was reading. "Ah, Fate! I hope I'm not inconveniencing you."

"Not at all, sir."

He paused for a moment and set his hands on his desk with a stern look. "Fate Testarossa. What have I told you about addressing me?"

"But, sir..."

"I do not see anyone else in this office."

Fate took a quick glance around, finding this to be true. "...yes, Uncle Gil."

The older man's stern face brightened up with a smile. "Much better. Now, have a seat. There's something I want to take to you about."

Closing the distance, Fate sat down on one of the chairs in front of his desk.

"As you know, the database reconstruction recently finished and we now have a much larger supply of common ore at our disposal. That allows us to turn our attention to other projects and concerns. Do you have any guesses as to why I called you here?"

She shook her head, "Not really."

Gil leaned back in his chair. "I've known you and your mother for quite some time, Fate. Both of you are hard workers and people I can trust. Recently the Council has green-lighted the construction of new Advance Labs and I want you to help work on those projects."

Fate blinked once. Then twice. "Y-you want me to work in the Advance labs?"

"Correct. You'll get upgraded security clearance, access to all the equipment they have to offer, as well as your own Savant computer. So what do you say?"

A) Accept the offer
B) Decline the offer
C) Change to Nanoha's PoV

Please post your choices BOLD and in DarkOrange

Previous Installments
-Intro
-Chapter 01
-Chapter 02
-Chapter 03
-Chapter 04
-Chapter 05
-Chapter 06
-Chapter 07
-Chapter 08
-Chapter 09
-Chapter 10
-Chapter 11
-Chapter 12
-Chapter 13
-Chapter 14
-Chapter 15
-Chapter 16
-Chapter 17

First to Vote!
I pick A naturally.

A Savant computer? I think Bardiche (Spelling?) is about to arrive

[Kagerou]

Originally Posted by TerranReaper

Spoiler for Unrelated Belkan Army:

This is from Ace Combat Zero: The Belkan War (Wow, everbody loves an alternate Germany )

Arguably a better Belka.
Then there was that one time I fused this fictional Belka and Nanoha Belka :x

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

I'm Army, Rick. THINK about it.

In the game they say "HU-RA!" XP

Originally Posted by Satashi

The OC thread is mainly military people who go for war. The fanfic thread is mainly fluff addicts who go for love.

We both like different things, so generally the war stuff is accepted on OC thread (even if it really isn't OC much) and the love stuff is more accepted here ( even if , for example, Syn shows up)

Wait... it means that...

I can't be here then!

"Runs to a corner and cries"

EDIT: Page claim in the name of...

Spoiler for :

Vita



All hail Queen Vita!