2011-04-10, 00:55 | Link #61 |
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I'm not sure I comprehend what you're doing. You want to make a 'corruption story' on a series you haven't seen? Using about three characters? What's the point in writing that? Well whatever the case, this is the basic outline. The Hueco Mundo arc pertains to the time point you're interested in. http://bleach.wikia.com/wiki/Template:Story
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2011-04-10, 01:00 | Link #62 | ||
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2011-04-10, 06:11 | Link #63 | |
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I find it difficult to believe that you could do the characterizations any justice knowing nothing about the characters or the series, but I guess that sort of thing isn't important to everyone. Good luck.
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2011-04-10, 11:36 | Link #65 |
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He doesn't really have one (I wouldn't even call Rukia a 'second in command'). The closest thing in that arc would be Nel who becomes important for about 10 minutes. Why don't you just watch the series? It's not like it's horrible.
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2011-04-10, 15:24 | Link #66 |
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It's just a rule of mine. I don't watch anything that drags on for longer than 26 episodes unless it's Gundam or Fushigi Yuugi.
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2011-04-10, 21:29 | Link #71 |
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I read it. It's about as much as I expected in detail considering you don't know much about the series. As for subject matter (corruption as you put it), I don't find it attractive or enjoyable. I am however a romanticist and an Ichigo x Orihime shipper so I am not without bias. But in general I don't like the idea of corruption because its purpose seems to be to play out some sick twist on a series I would normally enjoy (if I didn't enjoy it, I wouldn't watch it in the first place!). If this is a hobby of yours that you like, then don't let me stop you. But I myself like to write fanfics based on something I've grown to enjoy in a more optimistic fashion. Our fundamental approach is different, so take that into consideration.
If you want tips on how to improve, here's a big one: watch or read the series, it will help considerably with details. Not willing to put in time to do that, shows in your writing.
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2011-04-11, 03:51 | Link #74 | |
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As for Rukia, she's on the verge of death in a pool of her own blood after being gutted by her dear Kaien-dono. Ichigo's "second in command" would be Nel, maybe? But since she's basically a cling on toddler I doubt she'll be much help to you. I would read your fic, but I avoid reading fics written by people who know nothing about a series. Gomen!
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2011-04-11, 07:55 | Link #77 |
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At this point it would make no difference. The concept is not something that would entice me to read it and Alchemist007's review wasn't exactly inspiring. Alchemist007 is wise. I will trust their judgment in this.
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