2012-09-01, 00:02 | Link #37061 |
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Keep up the good work. I thought it was rather amusing...and looking forward to the others you hinted at.
It was a very cute scene...Reinforce getting sick due to roller coasters was rather amusing. Wasn't to sure about the "overly concerned about the diet"...seemed a little harsh from a parent. It does make one wonder though...can someone who's element is ice get an ice cream headache? The world wants to know. I would have commented earlier, but I wasn't near a keyboard. |
2012-09-01, 12:22 | Link #37071 | |
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Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Delusion world
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My specialty anyway....
First one: Basically, a rehash of Fate being trapped in Dream work except.... It's real because some idiots decide to make it possible by extensive memory modification. A serious dystopia: >A world where no magic...(because the Memory mage has serious inferior complex.... having ZERO combat ability compared to those kids at sport game...) >There is no death.... (because your dead relative get replaced by new one) >Everybody goes to school and the masterminds behind it is part of the popular/"Elite" (again inferiority complex in play). In a way, ultimate Escapist's fantasy....that is so wrong in many level that it is better not to think about it. (Also to demonstrate that you don't need Nanoha's firepower to be a serious threat....) Quote:
In a way. That smile is not fake but the problem is the reason behind that smile.... ==== The OC villain..... I always wanted to do a villain who is an epic mind-screw troll-er (AKA Terumi from Blazblue)..... == Last Section Case File: Dark Matter..... is technically Magical drug abuse.... Family Unfriendly Aesop?: >No matter how much you try, you can't be as good as somebody who have both hardwork and talent....(not to mention being trained by the very best while you have to struggle to learn everything on yourself own.....) >In someway, Level Upper arc?
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2012-09-01, 13:13 | Link #37072 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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WHAT. THE. FUCKING. HELL.
Stop mindraping the readers and fellow writers, Age! (and fueling potential NTR material) EDIT: Also, the ultimate take that, thumbs up.
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2012-09-02, 14:33 | Link #37077 | |
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And if you think you did horribly on it, then retool it and think about where you went wrong after reading it yourself a few times. A good beta can help greatly, particularly with larger stories. And have some confidence in your work. If you don't, then how are readers supposed to have confidence in your writing. Besides, when you fail, learn from those failures instead of wallowing in some sort of self-inflicted muck of despair. Sometimes you can fix a story. Sometimes you can't. Hell, I had all sort of hopes for I Stand Alone: Aftermath and those went right out the window when it became clear that I'd screwed myself over with all sorts of angles for the story. So... I failed. And I couldn't fix it. Now I've got a better idea on how to approach a story's creation and writing by learning from that failure.
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2012-09-02, 14:44 | Link #37080 | |
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Join Date: Dec 2011
Age: 32
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http://forums.animesuki.com/showthre...54#post4320454 Put it back with the first. I enjoyed writing both the first and the new snippet for the idea. Just hoping that others like it...
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