The Genderbending of Haruhi Suzumiya [Spoilers Aplenty]

[edkedkedk]

I have read a few of the scripts and I'm a little confused as to the nature of this project. Is this going to be a fan-made anime? Or a game? I thought it was written as a very good piece of fan-fic, but what with all the sprites, artwork and even CG shots have proved me wrong

[Iaevuous]

It will be a visual novel written on the Ren'Py engine.

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Originally Posted by s07195

so all this work is for a DEMO?

Sure hope the real thing will be for free....

Everything that's been posted so far will be in the full version, the demo is just so that there will be something to show for all the effort that's going into this. And as far as I know, this is going to be free. At the very least, I know I won't be getting any money for this.

[edkedkedk]

Originally Posted by Kogetsu Shirogane

Everything that's been posted so far will be in the full version, the demo is just so that there will be something to show for all the effort that's going into this. And as far as I know, this is going to be free. At the very least, I know I won't be getting any money for this.

Oh my. If this is gonna be anything like Suzumiya Haruhi no Yakusoku for the PSP, I'll have to say that this is impressive. It's gonna need awesome game programmers, story writers and artists to pull this off, which from the looks of things, is already a given

If there's anything I could do I would offer my help, but seeing how I don't have much expertise in those areas, I won't be of much help

[Tyabann]

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Itsuko: Riverside- Bello Resurrectio:

Bello Resurrectio

I said “wake up” because what I simply did was regain consciousness... my eyes have been open all this time.

It's a very strange feeling, like being instantly transported from one place to another. A moment ago, I was seeing the ceiling of some dark room, and now... I'm looking at the river. Also, my cheek hurts a lot.

...Wait, hold on, let's take stock of the situation here. What happened?

a) I decided to sell Haruhi's demon-possessed headphones.
b) I ran into a beautiful woman who turned out to be a kitsune in disguise.
c) She shot me.
d) I passed out for headphone-related reasons and had a dream I can't remember.
e) I'm now sitting on the ground facing the river, under the shade of a cherry tree.
f) It's nearly sunset, and my head is resting on a comfortable pillow.

Sounds like a normal day by my life's standards.

So, what happened while I was out this time? Who laid me down and put this pillow under me? I doubt it was the kitsune-- wait, this isn't a pillow. I can feel a strong heartbeat reverberating in the back of my skull, and it's far softer than any pillow I've ever slept on. Therefore, this must be a


Kyon: Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!


I yell, roll forward, and flip around. Yamada, the kitsune, was sitting there, smiling, like always.

I am strongly reminded of Ryoko Asakura.


Itsuko: You're awake, I see. Please, calm down... I would like to apologize.


And that's when her face finally changes. It becomes... ambivalent.


Itsuko: I'm... ashamed of how I acted earlier. I hope you can forgive me.


My first instinct was to run far away, but it's that expression which halts me. She seems... sincere.

I'll stay and listen, even thought this might just be another trap.


Itsuko: I-I am sorry for many things I have done to you today, but especially for the damage to the side of your face...

Side of my...?

I reach up and touch my right cheek, which had been covered by a bandage... it hurt like hell.


Itsuko: Ah, you shouldn't worry, it's only a graze... it should heal up fine in a couple of days... but please, don't remove the bandage, whatever you do. And, ah, h-how does it feel?


I'm very confused. First the woman tries to seduce me, then she shoots me, and now she just spent the last...

(I check my watch. I've been unconscious for two hours.)

...Two hours treating my wound and then letting me sleep on her? I will never understand this girl.

I might just be falling into her trap again, but at the least, I'd like to know what's been going on.


Kyon: I don't mean to be rude, but I'd like to begin a Question Period of my own... and I'd like some answers.


Yamada stares at me as though to gauge my intentions.


Itsuko: ...I have no right to refuse, but... after I explain everything... would you answer my final question?

Kyon: Deal.


...So... what should I ask first?

I felt like teasing her a little to get back for everything she did today. It's a childish form of revenge, but it's also a satisfying one.


Kyon: Hmm, Question One:


Let's see, something embarrassing...

I hear a very faint noise from what seems like very far away.


Kyon: How many guys have you kissed?

Itsuko: Huh?


Did... did she just blush a little? ...Must have really caught her off guard.


Itsuko: Well, let me see...


Wait, she's answering seriously? T-that was a joke, Yamada-san.


Itsuko: There was the three back then... and the time when I did when he was asleep... and I suppose today counts... so... five?


...Hm. Well, a lot less than I expected, to be honest... hold on, today? What happened today?


Itsuko: Could I, ah, have the next question, please? I don't mean to rush you, of course...


...


Kyon: Sorry... that last one was a joke...


And one in fairly poor taste, come to think of it.


Kyon: I'll seriously start now. Question Two! ...What's your true identity?

Itsuko: ......Eh?


Are you going to act surprised at all my questions!?


Itsuko: No, it's nothing. ...I am who you think I am: Itsuko Koizumi, an esper, your close friend Itsuki's cousin, and a member of the Agency.


...Close friend? Is that what he's telling people?


Kyon: ...I kind of doubt the Agency would order you to hold me up at gunpoint and threaten to shoot me if I didn't comply.


Unfortunately, I think I'm far too important for that. Very unfortunately.


Itsuko: ...I was not under orders. I was acting on my own.

Kyon: So I guess that brings me to my Question Three: What were your intentions back there? Why did you trap me like that in the first place?


I should probably be a lot angrier, but Yamada's face is defusing my indignation... Am I really this weak to pretty girls?


Itsuko: I did say before, but... perhaps it was too stressful a time for you to be paying much attention. No, I will rephrase that, it definitely was. ...My intentions involved these.


She holds up my headphones, which I guess she'd taken off while I was asleep.


Kyon: ...You wanted to steal my headphones?


She shakes her head.


Itsuko: To begin with, they're not your headphones. They belong to a friend of mine. The English inscribed inside it is his, shall we say, signature.


...Huh. I guess I was off completely about it representing kanji characters, then.


Itsuko: ...He's a very important person to me, and to all my friends. He is... missing... right now... and when I saw you in that store, wearing his headphones, and even dressed like him, I... became a bit paranoid... perhaps too much so.


Well, the scar that's going to form on my cheek is a testament to that.

At my words, Yamada stands up and... bows to me. H-hold on, that's a bit...


Itsuko: ...Please forgive me for my foolishness... At least, I hope you can...


...

[INDECISION POINT HERE]

1)Forgive her.
2)Of course I'll forgive her.


I stand up too.


Kyon: Of course I'll forgive you...


I still don't really understand, but I guess that's enough.


Itsuko: ...Thank you.


And she smiles for the first time.


Itsuko: Is that all the questions, or...

Kyon: Nope, I'm finished.


I think I can be satisfied with this.


Itsuko: Well, then, I think I will--

Kyon: Wait, I still haven't answered your final question.

Itsuko: No, no, it is fine, you may have your secrets.

Kyon: It's only fair this way, right?

Itsuko: ...Hmm, yes, that's true.


...She doesn't need to hear about the hallucinating and comas... she hasn't even asked about why I passed out earlier... she must think it was due to shock or something.


Kyon: The headphones and that music player were delivered to my room with a note saying “Happy Birthday” on it.

Itsuko: ...Was it your birthday that day?

Kyon: No, my birthday is--


A large truck passed by on the nearby road, drowning out my next words. I wish that would stop happening.


Itsuko: How odd...

Kyon: You're telling me.


Yamada holds out the headphones, urging me to take them, but...


Kyon: You keep them. They're important to you, right?


I don't ever want to see them again to be honest.


Itsuko: That's correct, yes. Hmm, I suppose I must give you something in return, then.


She reaches into her pocket and throws me... a shiny silver tube!?


Itsuko: Trade?

Kyon: Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!


Yamada holds her ears.


Itsuko: Please don't yell like that, Kyon-kun. You'll scare the passing lovers.

Kyon: What... what...

Itsuko: It's only an ordinary tube of lipstick... there was no gun to begin with. I was only pretending to be a femme fatale. It's a dream I've held since I was little... I'm sorry.


I pick it up off the ground, and gingerly open it. ...Just like she says, a perfectly ordinary tube of lipstick.

...It doesn't look the least bit threatening. I was nearly wetting myself over this?


Kyon: Why are you giving it to me?

Itsuko: A souvenir?


Both of us burst out laughing.

When we recovered, it was about time to separate.


Itsuko: I do have a final request, if you'll listen.

Kyon: Sure... what is it?

Itsuko: I'm tired of fake names. ...Please, call me by my real one.

Kyon: ...Well, I can't call you “Koizumi”, since that's what I call your cousin.


And it'd get pretty confusing if I was talking to both of them at the same time.

Ah, I've got it.


Kyon: How about “Koizumi-san”?

Itsuko: ....................................

Kyon: ...No good?

Itsuko: Ah! Er, no, that's fine. It's perfect. I am “Koizumi-san” from now on. ...Well then, I bid you good day, Kyon-kun.


But just as I turn away...


Itsuko: Oh, it almost escaped my mind... Since we'll be schoolmates from now on, would you like to eat lunch together on Monday?

Kyon: ...Yeah, sure. Why not? I'll see you then.


Although we'll probably have to do it somewhere Haruhi won't be.

Good day to you too, Koizumi-san.


---


I got home far earlier than the rest of my family, so I was able to disguise the fact that I had gone out at all... except for the bandage on my face, which I inconveniently forgot about until right before they walked in the door.

I made up some lame excuse about falling down the stairs, but my mother's worrywart mode was still activated.

As a result, dinner was a nightmare. It consisted of my mother telling me over and over that I need to be more careful, while my sister casually mentioned that she hoped my wound would turn into a big scar, since it'd “look cool”.

I managed to get away by saying that I had homework to do (which is true), but both a horrible realization and a horrible feeling were waiting for me at the door to my room.

The horrible realization was this: If Koizumi-san's lipstick gun was just a tube of lipstick she pretened was a gun... why do I have a bullet wound on my face?

The horrible feeling was this: Dread. Dread that something even more horrible would be waiting for me when I opened the door in front of me.

I was depressingly correct.

Those headphones were sitting neatly on my pillow, the xPod sitting just as neatly next to them, alongside a note, written in curving, girly characters.

“Kyon-kun,

Sorry for breaking into your house, but I figured you'd be better off holding onto these. After all, you need to have your sweet dreams every night, right?

Right?

Itsuko <3”

Ohohohohohohohoho.

I'll get around to answering the backlog of posts I need to respond to tomorrow. For now, please enjoy the scene.

[edkedkedk]

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Itsuko: Riverside- Bellus Resurrectio:

Bellus Resurrectio


Unfortunately, I think I'm far too important for that. Very unfortunately.

Kyon finally admits his importance as the center of the universe. This part made me smile

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Itsuko: Riverside- Bellus Resurrectio:

Bellus Resurrectio



The horrible realization was this: If Koizumi-san's lipstick gun was just a tube of lipstick she pretened was a gun... why do I have a bullet wound on my face?

The horrible feeling was this: Dread. Dread that something even more horrible would be waiting for me when I opened the door in front of me.

Yet another mystery, yet another cliffhanger. Boy oh boy, you sure are good at 'em!

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Itsuko: Riverside- Bellus Resurrectio:

[INDECISION POINT HERE]

1)Forgive her.
2)Of course I'll forgive her.

Normally, I'd complain about something like this, but it's probably in character in this case.

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Itsuko: Riverside- Bellus Resurrectio:

Kyon: The headphones and that music player were delivered to my room with a note saying “Happy Birthday” on it.

Itsuko: ...Was it your birthday that day?

Kyon: No, my birthday is--


A large truck passed by on the nearby road, drowning out my next words. I wish that would stop happening.


Itsuko: How odd...

Kyon: You're telling me.

Funny.

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Itsuko: Riverside- Bellus Resurrectio:

I made up some lame excuse about falling down the stairs

Silly Kyon, that only results in comas... or broken bones.

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Itsuko: Riverside- Bellus Resurrectio:

“Kyon-kun,

Sorry for breaking into your house, but I figured you'd be better off holding onto these. After all, you need to have your sweet dreams every night, right?

Right?

Itsuko <3”

Well this is certainly an amusing twist on these.

[Aebliss]

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Yuki: Nagato's Apartment- No Way To Get Away:

No Way to Get Away

I wake up to the sound of a shower somewhere close by.

I'm... still in Nagato's apartment... and I have no idea what just happened.

...The headphones! Of course. It's always the headphones. Curse those things.

They're not, however, on my head at all... in fact, they're nowhere in sight. Neither is Nagato, although given the sound in the background, she's... probably in the shower.

As I sit up, a wool blanket slides off my shoulders. She must have put this on me after I passed out.

...

It's getting dark outside ...How long was I out for...? I check my watch.

Six twenty-three. ...Four hours!? I have to get home! ...Except that, if I leave now... I can see Nagato tracking me down out of misplaced concern.

I'll just wait for her to finish and-- oh look, here she is now. Wearing nothing but a bath towel.


Kyon: ...Uh.


...Well. That's uh. Huh.

She blinks.


Yuki: You are awake. ...I apologize.

Kyon: ...For what?


Seriously, you haven't done anything wrong at all. I mean it. Everything's perfectly fine right now. Seriously.

Argh.


Yuki: ...For many things.


...

Nagato heads into her room, sliding the door shut behind her. She returns only a few minutes later, clad once again in her school uniform. She sits opposite me, as though nothing had happened at all.


Yuki: Your headphones were emitting a powerful spatial distortion of the type detected on September the Fourth. I was unable to completely identify them until they were placed upon my head.

Kyon: Wait, wait, hold on. Who did that?


Blink.


Yuki: You did.

Kyon: ...?


I don't remember doing anything like that at all, but I wouldn't be surprised. In that case, I should be the one making apologies...


Yuki: In the interests of safety, the headphones and their music player have been destroyed. That is one reason why I am apologizing.

Kyon: Oh thank god.


I've been looking for a way to get rid of those for ages. Thank you, Nagato. What can I possibly do to repay you?


Yuki: ...Stay for dinner...

Kyon: Huh? What was that, Nagato?

Yuki: You have no need to thank me. It was simply in the interests of--

Kyon: Safety, yeah.


Silence.


Kyon: Well, I... it's really late, and... I need to be going. I'll see you around, Nagato.


Even if you don't want it, I'll still give you my thanks.


Yuki: ...


She nods. I show myself to the door.

I get the vague sense of a wasted opportunity, a possibility that could have been.

Looking back, Nagato seems lonely.

...Deja vu.


---


I missed dinner. My mother, although not visibly upset, still made me clean up the kitchen while my sister mocked me. What a wonderful family life.

Afterward, I dragged my sore body upstairs, only to find a horrible surprise waiting for me.

Those headphones were sitting neatly on my pillow, the xPod sitting just as neatly next to them, alongside a note, written in characters so perfect they look like a computer printout.

“Not even she can save you now.”

Yeah, most of these need some work, but that's why I post them up here, and I have good news!

We're over the bloody hump! Now I can write about the characters I actually care about.

I've been away from this thread for too long, and now I need to play catch-up. ^^; But while I am catching up, I wanted to compliment you on your excellent writing. The ending is very creepy; I loved it.

[bhl88]

Kyon: How many guys have you kissed?


Itsuko: There was the three back then... and the time when I did when he was asleep... and I suppose today counts... so... five?

OMG she kissed him while he's sleeping (@Itsuko: Good job)

[edkedkedk]

Originally Posted by bhl88

OMG she kissed him while he's sleeping (@Itsuko: Good job)

I don't think she did... See, there was three she definitely kissed, then she said 'and the time when I did when he was asleep' to Kyon, which most probably meant she kissed another guy while he was asleep, and finally the incident today, making a total of 5 guys (Three dudes, Asleep guy, Kyon).

[Stormwhite]

Pretty sure Kaisos said that one of said three guys is Mori o_O

Would the asleep one be Haruki? Or am I reading too much into this?

[scify]

Originally Posted by Stormwhite

Pretty sure Kaisos said that one of said three guys is Mori o_O

I don't know that it was ever explicitly stated, but it has been pretty heavily implied, given Mori's (m) obsession with Itsuko and the Power of Love.

Originally Posted by Aebliss

I've been away from this thread for too long, and now I need to play catch-up. ^^; But while I am catching up, I wanted to compliment you on your excellent writing. The ending is very creepy; I loved it.

Yes, you have been. The thread calls for more excellent Setsubuun!

[Kogetsu Shirogane]

Originally Posted by bhl88

OMG she kissed him while he's sleeping (@Itsuko: Good job)

You forgot already? Here's a reminder

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Itsuko: Riverside- Lipstuck:

...Her lips are only a centimeter away...

Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the Sixth, Day 5, Itsuko: Riverside- Lipstuck:

I put my arms around her and close the gap that's a centimeter wide.

[Tyabann]

Comments time.

Also, I did update the KOIZUMI Memories and 'Supermodel', if anyone's interested.

Originally Posted by Ricky Controversy

'Dolus of Honey' is something you could expect someone to understand without knowing lots of Latin, whereas Dolus Mellis...is not.

It's actually sort of a play on words. "Dolus" is literally "fraud", but the word can also mean "trap". A honey trap, in this case.

Originally Posted by Heatth

So, as you can see, I just made a new archive post. CandaAotS vanished suddenly, so I took his place. Sorry, Canada, if you come back you can back to it if you preffer. J I copied shamelessly his post, because it was really good, and pretty. Just added the spoiler tags to make it shorther.

Heatth, you're a badass. Thanks for all the hard work.

Originally Posted by Heatth

Also, about Itsuko's scene, I fell Kyon over describe her. It is a VN, so it is not really necessery as she have a sprite. Specially now Kaisos said he changed his plans for them. I also think she should say at last "hi" to Kyon first.

Kyon's overdescription emphasizes how hot he is for her. It stays.

Originally Posted by Heatth

Of course this can change eventually in the course of the NV (this for all girls, I guess)

As soon as he's in a real relationship with them, yeah. Although he starts calling Kyonko "Nayuki" right off the bat...

Originally Posted by Sute443

Of course, it could just be artistic license. Or that the Kiss of Death fires at subsonic speed (I was unable to find any information on its firing speed).

I don't normally do artistic license, except in the Memories sequences where I can do whatever I want, given who's narrating them.

And I'm relatively sure that, as an old and unwieldly weapon, the Kiss of Death is subsonic. Not that it matters.

Originally Posted by luap1138

I don't know what to say...

And I live for reactions like this.

Originally Posted by Iaevuous

Or maybe it's not a firearm at all. Not sure how you'd sneak one into Japan.

Mori is paramilitary, Arakawa is retired military. It wouldn't be hard for either of them to get ahold of something like that.

It's Mori's, by the way. Why he has something that feminine I don't know, but...

Originally Posted by Heatth

Anyway, yeah, cliffhanger sucks. Trolling authors are even worse.

Aren't they, though?

Originally Posted by Heatth

I am pretty sure we are going to have a Tiger Dojo of sorts. Last time I heared something about it Kaisos and Danchou were still discussing who would actually be in there.

First death is on Day 6. And as for a Dojo-of-sorts, I'm currently considering Disappearance Itsuki and Haruhi. In fact, that's what I'll probably go with.

Originally Posted by Heatth

For the "distinctive", I guess he was talking about the sound guns do in movies. I know it is not the same sound, but chances are Kaisos just don't care.

Don't real guns sound something like fireworks? In any case, Kyon DOES know what a real gunshot sounds like. He knows the most random things.

Haruki, on the other hand...

Originally Posted by Kogetsu Shirogane

I'm sure if the writers of the various routes had their way, he'd make it a lot farther than that.

I do believe I mentioned PG-13 sex, right? I think the only women Kyon DOESN'T sleep with are Mori and Big Mikuru.

Originally Posted by Binjovi

Itsuko was probably only using a regular tube of lipstick.

This. Perhaps.

Originally Posted by worldruined

I really love your Haruki, Kaisos. I may have to send him chocolates for Valentine's Day.

Make sure they're good chocolates. And try to get some shaped like alien heads.

Originally Posted by Heatth

Oh, yeah, your Haruki is awesome, but I think it is a good thing he don't exist. He is complete dangerous jerk. You can't defenestrate people just for doing what you told them to do.

Sure you can. That's the Suzumiya way!

Originally Posted by edkedkedk

But I really doubt Haruki will kill himself straight after he found out his gender change. I mean, this is a mysterious event, one that he has been looking for all his life, and he immediately throws it all away by offing himself? A little weird...

You're correct, but that scene is fake anyway.

I still added a bit more justification to it, though. Give it a look.

Originally Posted by otai

Here, I have to applaud your restraint from making Itsuko yandere.

I will probably never ruin Itsuko.

Originally Posted by otai

Maybe the Sunday supernatural hunt scenes could be extended to Haruki discussing music with Itsuko, if you know what I mean. But then again, things might be too obvious.

There'll be a flashback scene later in the Esper route dealing with Itsuko and Haruki, actually.

Originally Posted by Kogetsu Shirogane

I should hope that most are quite a bit longer than the first week, seeing as this is supposed to span most of the month. Saying the script is anywhere near 15% completed is probably too generous.

Most of the routes have less content per-day than the first week does. The first week is ALL flagbuilding and setup, which is why it's so bloody dense.

Originally Posted by s07195

Sure hope the real thing will be for free....

This is a doujin. We can't sell this, as the copyright owners will kill us. It'll be free, although I hope to create an original VN in the future.

Originally Posted by Stormwhite

Would the asleep one be Haruki? Or am I reading too much into this?

It's Haruki. Remember that time he was sleeping on the roof in Endless Eight? Yeah.

Originally Posted by edkedkedk

Yet another mystery, yet another cliffhanger. Boy oh boy, you sure are good at 'em!

Thanks. This isn't normal, by the way. I was just inspired.

Originally Posted by scify

I don't know that it was ever explicitly stated, but it has been pretty heavily implied, given Mori's (m) obsession with Itsuko and the Power of Love.

It was Mori, yeah.


Anyway, it would be great to see more speculation on where all of this is going and what it all means, but it's fine either way.

Working on the Kyonko scenes eventually.

[Aebliss]

Apologies for the non sequitur, but ... HOLY QUOTE POST, BATMAN! o_o ... ^^ Impressive.

[Iaevuous]

From what I can tell, resurrectio is feminine, so shouldn't it be "Bella Resurrectio"?

[Tyabann]

Originally Posted by Iaevuous

From what I can tell, resurrectio is feminine, so shouldn't it be "Bella Resurrectio"?

I have no fucking idea, I just stuck latin words I translated online together.

Sounds good, though. Thanks.

Changed.

[Ricky Controversy]

Resurrectio would be a masculine ending, but that's not the real issue here. The real issue is that the word for 'resurrection' in actual Latin instead of Latinese would be Resurgum.

So you'd want Bellum Resurgum.

[Iaevuous]

Originally Posted by Ricky Controversy

Resurrectio would be a masculine ending, but that's not the real issue here. The real issue is that the word for 'resurrection' in actual Latin instead of Latinese would be Resurgum.

So you'd want Bellum Resurgum.

Huh. My source calls it "Ecclesiastical Latin 3rd Declension Feminine". It also offers "resurgum" and "anastasis" on the subject of "resurrection".

Anyway, what Ricky says is probably better. I'm still just learning the language.

The only dead-tree Latin sources I have are ones from school, which --- to paraphrase my teacher --- are illegally outdated.

[Tyabann]

I was after another word entirely, not "resurrection". "Resurrectio" just happens to mean "awakening", but looks like a certain English word... completely intentional, I assure you. Of course, I don't know how the language works, but...

Thank you both anyway.