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But with Ichika, if he's an ISper, than the answer is that in 80 years when ISpers make up 75% of the world population and hence eliminating war from history, that's a lot of male IS pilots. Quote:
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"In the infinite reach of space, where resources no longer matter thanks to IS, and conflicts can be resolved easily." Quote:
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IE, only MPIS not linked to Three Diagram can be used in a war, and Obama's plan has allowed that to happen. His attempt to rein in IS only served to corrupt it. Or maybe that was the point, to eventually give the US military a war machine unlike any other? This was why, when Shooting Star first appeared, they attacked a base in Area 51, Nevada, revealing the nation having experimental IS weapons deployed outside of the ISA, which contravened the Alaska Treaty. Quote:
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You don't have to; the bunny!Tabane is as real as the Tabane gets. In fact, each of my fics deal with a different side of Tabane such that you see 2-3 people with the same name.
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2011-10-04, 19:24 | Link #2203 | |
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Irish WAS a terrorist early in the story, I'm already done with chapter 4 and once chapter 5-6 hits he'll be beaten and forcibly detained by FRACTURE. Instead of killing him they'll give him a chance at freedom: Do missions for them and they'll let him and his teammates go and have a second chance at life. FRACTURE itself is an organization that makes sure that the IS can never be abused by one country and avoid a war. The problem is Irish's pathological hatred of the IS screwing over his mission priorities The biggest part of Irish's story is how he grows to accept that the first impression he received from the IS pilots he first saw as a child doesn't apply to all the IS pilots in the story itself, considering the fact that his partner is an IS pilot then if he doesn't improve over the story then he'll be dead before I reach the halfway mark What are your theories on how IS are formed and how does this prevent Irish's backstory from happening? I'm very curious about it. I said that he was abused by pilots and forced to do manual labor in camps, I never said that they were using cores made by Tabane did I? Thats what he's gonna be trying to prevent in his portion of the story. Also, Irish isn't Misogynistic, He thinks that if both genders could use the machine it would end up in more conflict while if only men could use the machine then the exact same thing would happen only with the opposite gender instead (He isn't very Idealistic is he?). He believes that the Infinite Stratos should be destroyed and not the pilot themselves, you'll see this once I post chapter 4 and 5. Karon lives on the moon!? I thought she lived in singapore? how the hell is she on the moon? I'm gonna be merging a crapton of original OC's later so far I have: Kyuukai Tokiwa (Combat engineer/soldier) from Heart of the machine, Class 1-2 (Batshit insane classroom) from the animesuki forums, and possibly <Ren> (axe crazy ninja) from wavehawks fic. Gonna have to find a way to merge all canons without breaking the universe. I'm also gonna focus most on Talia L. Curious (Sadistic artificial human girl) and Gou Karon (ISper). I'll focus on the rest of the class as well. Like I said, that class is chock full of enemies for the three males In my fic Ichika won't be an ISper, will that be alright with you? I have a reason for this since I already made a dark background for him, if you read chapter three and read his dream sequence you can probably figure it out Is it possible for me to change character traits of characters to fit in with the canon I'm using? For example: A Karon who grew up knowing about the IS war or her just being a regular student enjoying life with her older brother? |
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2011-10-04, 19:29 | Link #2204 |
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I'm not going to use crack fanon anymore, not the one Babylon have at leas
Now I see that the back-story is conflicted from what I planned ..too bad Chapter 9 is sent to Blitz, waiting for correction....
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2011-10-04, 19:31 | Link #2205 | |
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2011-10-04, 19:36 | Link #2206 | |
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EDIT: sorry, I thought you meant the previous email. I am looking at the new one right now. Sorry for the mistake.
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2011-10-04, 19:41 | Link #2207 | |
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Plus I didn't have internet connection at home currently, therefore, I went to internet cafe if I can. EDIT: I Guess Jak is screaming in agony now that V5 is finished....but he had no time reading it...
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2011-10-04, 21:05 | Link #2211 |
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And thus, ZeroXSEED & Blitz1/2 announced
INFINITE STRATOS SACRED TWINS
CHAPTER 9: HEARTS OF THE GENTLEMEN
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2011-10-04, 21:34 | Link #2212 |
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How do you write a fight scene in first person view?
3rd Pov: Ichika yelled and charged towards the muscular man, seemingly uncaring of his physical disadvantage. 1st Pov: I yell in rage and charge towards the muscular man, ignoring the fact that he was obviously stronger than me. Are these correct? |
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Never doubt his ability to build a harem. Jokes aside, turning the whole world into ISpers with IS was part of the Tabane plan. Or at least I think its part of her plan. I mean... Look at Ichika's mind-melds. Quote:
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So making them in a workshop in the middle of a cave doesn't work. But its just my theory extrapolating from the concept of making a Black Box device like an IS core. Quote:
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I mixed up the characters. She's born and raised on Singapore Island; Riselle and Ginjyo were from Singapore Metropolis, the 3 lunar colonies. The latter 2 were created by a crack author who said that "during the turmoil of White Knight, Singapore Island was destroyed and everyone was evacuated to the Shinonono/ST Engineering Lunar Base." I then expanded it to: "Fast forward to the present. It has been 6 years since the White Knight incident, and almost a decade since IS was first proposed. 10 years of research and coping with limited resources, plus a rise of strife within Asia, and yet she produced the first functioning space colony complete with former fantasies like near-Earth environments, forcefields and artificial gravity. Singapore pulled off another miracle like herself half a century ago." This paragraph details what the 3 cities are: The current I-type AI was born on the Moon, Sector D-3, at Metropolis-3, a giant colony the size of Western Australia carved into the moon’s crust beneath Mare Insularum. As per protocol, it was transferred to the industrial city Metropolis-2 at Crater Copernicus for stress testing, before being moved to Metropolis-1 at Erasthostenes, the seat of Three Diagram’s computer core. It was part of a handful of IS sent down to Singapore Island for the annual ISA trials held by the National Cadet Corps (Commando). The bold names are actual lunar features. If you look to the moon, its one of the big gray spots always facing Earth. I also modified that author's fanon that the Island was not destroyed in the turmoil, but is gradually being depopulated to be turned into an orbital elevator. Karon will be one of the last Singaporeans born on the island. Quote:
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So while I think its a tad more tame, I recognize I crammed in as many Gundam shoutouts as I could because the author started it.
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2011-10-04, 22:26 | Link #2214 | |
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I guess I'll throw in an example. 3rd person view. With careful precision, Ichika drew out his Yukihira and slashed across the enemy across the chest, the enemy recoiled and kicked the Byaku Shiki in the chest. 1st person "Take this!" I activated the Yukihira, with my intended target staring straight at me. I slashed horizontally, heavily grazing her chest. She snarled at me. Not good... She recovered faster than I thought. I felt the harsh impact as the enemy kicked me in the chest.
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2011-10-04, 23:18 | Link #2215 |
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Crap. Shit.
In Singapore, our main defense technology manufacturer is ST Engineering. It was also used as a producer for much of the equipment used by Metroids in the old fanon when Malaysians and Singapores were dominant. That influence carries on in SISTER (Singapore Infinite Stratos Technologies EngineeRing) in the current incarnation as a subsidiary of STE. You know ST also stands for? Shinonono Tabane. *fleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeez*
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2011-10-04, 23:36 | Link #2216 |
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@Blitz- Thank You! This should help a lot in the scene rewriting later.
@Meister- I'll mention Karons home being changed into a space ladder or something later in the story. Is Karon perverted or have any boys love fangirl tendencies at all? If she is then I can add some humor between her and Irish since he's sexually clueless and when he crosdresses he looks like this (just change the eye color from red to yellow): http://danbooru.donmai.us/post/show/...swap-gun-hair_ http://danbooru.donmai.us/post/show/...enderswap-hair http://danbooru.donmai.us/post/show/...oker-convenien I'll probably have Karon and Irish act like some kind snarky brother sister pair throughout the story, his planned romance is with someone else. Is it okay for them to act like this? How did Karon come to meet Ichika and get attached to him? I can include this later. Is she friends with everyone in her class? Does she have any enemies? I plan to change the ISper concept so that she's naturally empathic even outside the suit and borderline psychic when she's in one. Karon works for a T.V show right? Do they know her civilian status or is it kept a secret? How adept is she in live combat? Is she willing to kill people to get the job done or never kills anyone at all? Does she have any combat capabilities outside of the chassis? If she does then where did she learn them? Other than terrorists are there other things that really bother her or irk her? Last edited by Eratas123; 2011-10-05 at 02:11. |
2011-10-05, 02:21 | Link #2219 | |
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I mean, what's the closest city to IS Academy? |
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2011-10-05, 03:13 | Link #2220 |
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First Review in Sacred Twins
Spoiler for Hayabusa Lin lazy to log in:
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I owe Blitz, MeisterBabylon, and Eratas for your effort helping me achieve the plan. @ Darkjak The closest town to I.S. Academy? Odaiba. Tokyo. As Shown in Episode 9 during the shopping scene... Spoiler for Real Place:
Fun thing, Odaiba ALSO an Artificial Island (it used to be a war fortress). In Sacred Twins, Ichika's hometown is located 'somewhere' in rural area of Tokyo.
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