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Old 2010-09-10, 12:47   Link #26941
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thanks for the response !


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Chapter 3 of "A Familiar Life..." is now on Fanfiction.net ^^. Sigh, and I only barely resisted the temptation of ending the story there...
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Old 2010-09-10, 15:41   Link #26942
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So yeah, I don't even know what this is. I just had the urge to write Hayate and Verossa in my 'verse, so I did. Lots of dialogue, but I liked working on it. Set after LDG as a whole, in terms of timeline.

Spoiler for Shadow's Contradiction:


The ending line bugs me, but I couldn't think of anything better. Always fun to poke around and figure out Lutecia's mind from the perspective of other characters, though.
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Old 2010-09-11, 12:26   Link #26943
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So yeah, I don't even know what this is. I just had the urge to write Hayate and Verossa in my 'verse, so I did. Lots of dialogue, but I liked working on it. Set after LDG as a whole, in terms of timeline.

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The ending line bugs me, but I couldn't think of anything better. Always fun to poke around and figure out Lutecia's mind from the perspective of other characters, though.
I loved the ending line. So there.
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Old 2010-09-11, 16:33   Link #26944
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I loved the ending line. So there.
Then that means it worked better than I originally thought!
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Old 2010-09-11, 18:37   Link #26945
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Soooo... I sat down to write, just on the off-chance that something would happen. And what do you know, something did!

Spoiler for Center Ring, Part 8:


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Old 2010-09-11, 18:51   Link #26946
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Soooo... I sat down to write, just on the off-chance that something would happen. And what do you know, something did!

Spoiler for Center Ring, Part 8:


Spoiler for Author's Note:
*Scratches head* I'm currently trying to figure out who I should feel sorry for...

Oh! I know! I know!

I feel sorry for Bootsie!

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Old 2010-09-11, 20:41   Link #26947
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Soooo... I sat down to write, just on the off-chance that something would happen. And what do you know, something did!

Spoiler for Center Ring, Part 8:


Spoiler for Author's Note:
The more I read, the more I feel that we are truly witnessing the beginnings of an epic romance rooted in clown auras, questions of sanity, women who love to tell dramas that put Shakespeare to shame. And in it all we see Vivio's true clown aura beginning to emerge, and all I can think to ask is... will Lutecia truly be able to handle Vivio's power?
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Old 2010-09-11, 21:18   Link #26948
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*Scratches head* I'm currently trying to figure out who I should feel sorry for...

Oh! I know! I know!

I feel sorry for Bootsie!

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Somewhere, I think Chrono is sputtering in useless fury before walking off to find a stiff drink.

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The more I read, the more I feel that we are truly witnessing the beginnings of an epic romance rooted in clown auras, questions of sanity, women who love to tell dramas that put Shakespeare to shame. And in it all we see Vivio's true clown aura beginning to emerge, and all I can think to ask is... will Lutecia truly be able to handle Vivio's power?
The more I write, the more I wonder how much this story is truly 'rooted' in anything .
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Old 2010-09-11, 21:45   Link #26949
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So yeah, I don't even know what this is. I just had the urge to write Hayate and Verossa in my 'verse, so I did. Lots of dialogue, but I liked working on it. Set after LDG as a whole, in terms of timeline.

Spoiler for Shadow's Contradiction:


The ending line bugs me, but I couldn't think of anything better. Always fun to poke around and figure out Lutecia's mind from the perspective of other characters, though.
The opening line really reminds me of "Sailor Nothing", in its utter deconstruction of a magical girl heroine . Of course, it's not Hayate who is being deconstructed in Shadows-verse, but Lutecia, so I had lots of fun making neat parallels in my head ^^.

Er....back to the story .

I'm delighted to see Hayate and Verossa mention the parallels between Lutecia and Nanoha , it's something that I love for the heartwrenching-ness and the irony XD: Lutecia wants to be like Nanoha, but fails...and yet Nanoha disapproves of her, for the fact that she fails!

I have to wonder, and it's totally not important for the story, but...what are Hayate and Verossa's sons' names? I'm so oddly curious since I don't believe that's ever been mentioned....(Not that it matters to the series....but I'm curious!)

The ending line seemed fine to me, but I see what you mean--I think, that if the short was about Hayate and her POV of the whole Shadows/Sunrise/LDG events, then the ending fits. If this short was to deal with Lutecia's issues from a different perspective, then yeah, the ending line might not be the best one to use since it doesn't leave an impact about Lutecia.

Nice short! ^^

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Ah, did Vivio go all Sankt Kaiser at the end there? XD The pseudo-psychology is awesome, it's so over the top that it's absolutely hilarious.

Wendi's rant was funny, especially since she blew their whole lie in such an epic fashion XD. I liked her version of things much better!

Great chapter! The humour wasn't quite as fluffy as previous chapters, but still funny nonetheless ^^.
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Old 2010-09-11, 22:23   Link #26950
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Ah, did Vivio go all Sankt Kaiser at the end there? XD The pseudo-psychology is awesome, it's so over the top that it's absolutely hilarious.

Wendi's rant was funny, especially since she blew their whole lie in such an epic fashion XD. I liked her version of things much better!

Great chapter! The humour wasn't quite as fluffy as previous chapters, but still funny nonetheless ^^.
The only thing certain is that Vivio has tapped a deep and potentially terrible well of clownish energies. What will become of her? Will she harness this clownery, Or be destroyed by it? Am I having too much fun with this?

I think Wendi relating a crime scene report like it was a dramatic reading was my favorite idea for this chapter. She and Nove are both lousy actors; it's just that only Nove realizes this.


For those interested in a less forum-based read, the chapter is up on FF.net as well.
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Old 2010-09-12, 04:38   Link #26951
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Hello people.

Back from the dead ( hopefully ), and with a lot of catching up to do.

Just posting to say that. ^^
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Old 2010-09-12, 09:17   Link #26952
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can anyone recommend any LONG FeiNano fics with a lot of Vivio in em ? as in - Nanoha & Fate raising Vivio .. Vivio can be any age & it can be WAFFY-fluffy or angsty-wangsty, BUT LONG fics - I've read shorts & Satashis especially were very good but haven't seen any long-fic with NanoFei+Vivio family
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Old 2010-09-12, 10:35   Link #26953
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So yeah, I don't even know what this is. I just had the urge to write Hayate and Verossa in my 'verse, so I did. :heh: Lots of dialogue, but I liked working on it. Set after LDG as a whole, in terms of timeline.

Spoiler for Shadow's Contradiction:


The ending line bugs me, but I couldn't think of anything better. :heh: Always fun to poke around and figure out Lutecia's mind from the perspective of other characters, though.
Well, the ending line got a chuckle out of me, so I'd say it's pretty much fine - it does tie up a cute moment between Hayate and Verossa. Mind you, I can also see deathcurse's reasoning that it depends on who's meant to be the focus of the story... if you get a better idea, then go for it, but the current one doesn't particularly detract from the fic either, IMHO.

On a more general note, looking into the characters' psyches is always an interesting read - and the Shadowsverse is a rather spectacular exercise in digging into Lutecia's head as the poor girl is gradually broken by her job. I'm not quite sure whether to expect an eventual sorta-happy ending or a descent into tragedy; I do hear that you have something of a reputation for being, ahem, somewhat fond of angst, but on the other hand, there have been glimmers of hope, mostly in the form of Vivio serving as emotional support for Lutecia. Now to decide if you're just being a cruel tease with that, or not... :P

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Soooo... I sat down to write, just on the off-chance that something would happen. And what do you know, something did!

Spoiler for Center Ring, Part 8:


Spoiler for Author's Note:
Okay... I'm not certain if this fic can be described as anything but pure, distilled crack. Not that that's a bad thing.

I mean, the sheer bizarreness of the concept contrasted with the dramatic presentation is ample fodder for parody and absurd humor. Clowning as Serious Business and auras of clownish rage... it's all just too damn funny.

Some characters are far more exaggerated here than in Infinity, but... well, this is crack; it's forgivable here. Not to mention that ditzy!Subaru and clueless!Verossa/Vice are highly entertaining. And the Numbers' lousy acting. And Shari's Mad Scientist tendencies. And Lutecia's blatantly unfair psychological profiling. And... and I better stop before I list every single joke in the fic.

And as a closing comment, bonus points for the Monty Python reference.
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Old 2010-09-12, 14:17   Link #26954
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Hello people.

Back from the dead ( hopefully ), and with a lot of catching up to do.

Just posting to say that. ^^
Dude! Welcome back! I was wondering where ya went off to for so long. I hope to see more Decisions in the future
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Old 2010-09-12, 15:11   Link #26955
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Dude! Welcome back! I was wondering where ya went off to for so long. I hope to see more Decisions in the future
I had to go to a trip that turned into a temporary transfer on my job. I'll start working again on the story as soon as I settle down again.

Not to mention I have a lot of catching up to do.
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Old 2010-09-12, 17:39   Link #26956
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Soooo... I sat down to write, just on the off-chance that something would happen. And what do you know, something did!

Spoiler for Center Ring, Part 8:


Spoiler for Author's Note:
I can't believe I actually feel sorry for Quattro, even if it's just a bit. Even if everybody knew it was her, she at least played her part.
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Old 2010-09-12, 19:03   Link #26957
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So yeah, I don't even know what this is. I just had the urge to write Hayate and Verossa in my 'verse, so I did. Lots of dialogue, but I liked working on it. Set after LDG as a whole, in terms of timeline.

[SPOILER="Shadow's Contradiction"].
Sweet, always good to see new stuff when I get back from a break.

On sNoble's comments, I kind of see the Shadowverse as one long break the cutie moment with regards to Lutecia. In a way I'm surprised it took as long as it did for the inevitable to start happening, but then the agents might not have that high a mission frequency either.

[QUOTE=Moczo;3240452]Soooo... I sat down to write, just on the off-chance that something would happen. And what do you know, something did!
Spoiler for Center Ring, Part 8:


And completely on the other end of the emotional scale, we have this. For the record, I'm of the opinion the Chrono is the most awesome character in the room during the beginning scene, but that is in no way a slur against Wendi.
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I have to wonder, and it's totally not important for the story, but...what are Hayate and Verossa's sons' names? I'm so oddly curious since I don't believe that's ever been mentioned....(Not that it matters to the series....but I'm curious!)
The sons are named Light, Kage, and Justice, respectively. Yeah, corny names, I know. I have it in my head of a short for Vivio and Lutecia baby-sitting them and Nami (Miyuki and Yuuno's daughter), I just never got around to actually write it.

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Hello people.

Back from the dead ( hopefully ), and with a lot of catching up to do.

Just posting to say that. ^^
Welcome back from the dead!

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Now to decide if you're just being a cruel tease with that, or not... :P
Am I really that infamous for my cruelty?

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I kind of see the Shadowverse as one long break the cutie moment with regards to Lutecia.
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Would anyone believe me if I honestly said that it wasn't supposed to turn out this way for Lutecia?
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Would anyone believe me if I honestly said that it wasn't supposed to turn out this way for Lutecia?
No.

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Hello people.

Back from the dead ( hopefully ), and with a lot of catching up to do.

Just posting to say that. ^^
Welcome back!

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Am I really that infamous for my cruelty?
Yes. Yes you are.

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Would anyone believe me if I honestly said that it wasn't supposed to turn out this way for Lutecia?
Hey, I was around for most of the planning-phase discussions and ideas you had about all this so I know you didn't initially work it out like this...and yet I still have trouble believing you!

(Of course, that might be because I also know that you also juggled around the idea of "Sunset" being the true ending for a bit, there. )

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