2007-10-16, 18:05 | Link #3223 | |
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And my offer still stands, if you'd like. I think this fic has a lot of potential, technical and emotional-wise, which could definitely be improved or perfected. And I imagine what other fics that you may come up with would be the same, if not better. |
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2007-10-16, 18:47 | Link #3224 | ||
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I'm glad you think so about the story. Any help you'd like to offer would be greatly appreciated. |
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2007-10-16, 20:29 | Link #3225 |
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Taking a small break from Redemption, I'm working on Spinel Heart. It's a NanoFate get-together fic, but done in a more realistic way ( Like my Ruby Eyes fic ). The point of this one is complete casualness with the drama our girls discovering a part about themselves they are unsure of.
Spinel Heart Length: 3.1k words progress 30%ish Genre: Casual/Suspense (wow, what a combo!) ETA: Trying to get done before this weekend.
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2007-10-16, 21:22 | Link #3226 | |
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Saludos, Haru |
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2007-10-17, 01:30 | Link #3229 | |
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Yeah! Before this week end *___* I reaaaaally impatient to read it (It's like that for all of your work ^^) |
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2007-10-17, 18:15 | Link #3231 | |
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On another note, I've been toying around with the idea for another sequel to the 2 one-shots I have up so far . Any opinions, especially on the second one, My Master, would greatly help me flesh out my ideas for the new fic |
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2007-10-17, 19:10 | Link #3232 |
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2100 words per day? Never mind the quality (which is generally very good) of the writing, just the sheer progress rate is pretty impressive - Coming up with that many words after the exhaustion a day of work or even school is not easy, at least for me.
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2007-10-17, 19:15 | Link #3233 |
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Eh, depending on the day I can do a lot more. normally I get anywhere from 1k to 4k done when I sit and write. My real delay is when I re-read my stuff before posting, I normally edit a whole lot during it. If you could read a before edit/after edit chapter of 6th Division you'd be amazed lol. For every 1k words, I normally change/add/subtract 100 words during revision
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2007-10-18, 14:50 | Link #3235 | |||
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The first part with Vita seems a little hard to read. We get "Vita is visibly pissed, shes expecting a great vacation from Keith Kurogane, only to be ruined by an energy surge from the Destroy Gundam's Beam Barrage." Since that is one sentence it could be worded a little easier, such as "Vita was seriously pissed; her vacation plans, promised by Keith Kurogane, were just ruined by a surge of energy released from Destroy Gundam's Beam Barrage." That's just putting it in my 'style' of writing, and I'm not implying that's the only way of doing it. Just suggesting to make it a little easier to flow. The rest was broken up a little too much, in my opinion. One liners break reading flow by giving it a sort of choppy feel, so it's something to try and avoid. This will also force you to detail a little more and give the story a better overall feel. Quote:
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"Hey you!" Vita exclaimed angrily as Stellar continued it's rain of Chaos with her Gundam. Taking out her hammer, she looked a bit shocked when she was suddenly looked back upon and had lasers fired in her direction. "Graf Eisen!" Moving the four lines together, you combined what was happening around Vita and kept it to her paragraph. Since Stellar didn't actually speak, and his/her/it's action were on Vita, it can stay in the same section. Also, try and avoid the same words in a single paragraph: Vita taking out Graf Eisen and then calling it's name. That's all right now, gotta go somewhere right fast. Please remember that those are just my comments tailored to my style. Developing your own style is very important too, so only take what I said at face value and not something from another author that should be set in stone. Also, quick note, my style tends to over use commas. If you're not comfortable with colon and semicolon then you may need someone else trying to give comments lol
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2007-10-18, 15:05 | Link #3236 |
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Double Post FTW!
This post is for everyone, the more people reply to it the better! Authors: What's one "flaw" that just nags you in your style of writing? One that you do and then hit backspace to try and keep from doing it. Readers: What's something that just annoys the hell out of you when reading? Can be anything: Misuse of honorifics, the use of honorifics, typos, badly written sentences, OOC-ness, too much/too little of something, anything at all. Mine: 1.) I use commas WAY too much. Most of my sentences tend to kind of have the same style of wording a little too much. I always try to vary things up to avoid it but I still find myself doing it. 2.) Too...Much...Talking... 90% of my lines have some type of speech in them. True my style of writing focuses more on character interaction than environment, but it still annoys me. Back in the past I wrote "Emerald Dream" to try and get myself into more details than speaking. Maybe I should do another story with the sole purpose of avoiding speaking again....
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2007-10-18, 15:20 | Link #3237 | ||
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-Mechanical errors to the point of near unreadability more so in a story that looks like it has some interesting ideas if only the author could put them into text in a decent way. -Total ignorance of or disregard for canon in both technical and character aspects, I don’t expect you to be an encyclopedia, but I DO expect you to have a vague knowledge of what you’re writing on and to stick to the rules and facts canon lays out. -Pointless shipping fics I’m really not interested in reading about two random fictional characters getting together for the 5 millionth time, more so if it’s canon already. Can I get a plot and a point to the story besides an author cooing over their favorite paring please? -Fanboy Japanese: if you can't speak it fluently don't use it at all you just look like well... a fanboy. The English language has words for cute, stupid, and “okay” allot of them in fact, use them please. Hell even if you can speak it fluently it's stupid half the time. I don't want to need to get out a fucking Japanese to English dictionary to try and read a sentence in your fic, and it dosen't make you look cool or smart it's just annoying. That can be an issue for me too, I used to barely use them at all now I've swung the other way and I use them to much. |
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2007-10-18, 15:27 | Link #3238 | |
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*Pops in* I never post here much, but these little questions piqued my interest.
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Barring the usual "for the love of- USE A FRIGGING SPELL CHECK!" type of fics, what annoys me the most is people slightly or totally disregarding canon just to push out their little ideas. I hold nothing against new material, but suddenly, say pull out mages that don't have Linker Cores, or have everyone and their dogs have Unision Devices (Mid-Childa ones, even) without viable explanations annoys me. And also people who grossly overpower characters for no other reason then 'because its cool' being a h4xxbuster in the OC-thread, this is particular pet peeve of mine. |
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2007-10-18, 15:43 | Link #3239 |
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I agree there totally. I try to keep all my characters in check as best I can, or at least make the ultra strong ones the enemies. To counter it I make it a situation where it's possible to overcome ( no matter how strong or ultra cool powerful you are, if you get ran through with a weapon, you're gonna down.) Or in my case, Skeith, the ultra high powered haxxorz, can only be called in certain situations when certain needs are met, and only to progress the storyline.
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2007-10-18, 15:59 | Link #3240 |
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I don't even have H4XX. Keroko, for example, has a Fate-like Barrier Jacket/Device combo (though in her case a defensive/offensive boost at the cost of mobillity). However, using this mode puts horendous stress on Keroko, as it basically allows thined corrupted energies to flow through her. Sounds like Limit Break stress? I was using that during A's already. I find creating a balanced character to be much more fun. Having weak points makes for more diverse scenarios. It gives your characters a sense of mortallity, and allows them to be defeated in battle without pulling the 'omg h4xx opponent' card.
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