2011-07-19, 20:21 | Link #33041 | |
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2011-07-19, 20:28 | Link #33042 | |||
Beta by Accident
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Join Date: Oct 2008
Location: Maine
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2011-07-19, 20:56 | Link #33046 | |
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It was a nice twist. I didn't see it coming. so, keep it.
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2011-07-19, 21:03 | Link #33047 |
Overgrown Kid
Join Date: Sep 2006
Location: Under a rock...
Age: 44
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It's interesting if you left it as is, but since, for most people, it'll fly over their heads about who Yuuno could be talking about, it would be an almost straight pairing fic. (I for one, didn't realize you could twist it, even using the last line)
Yep, I'm shallow, so what?
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2011-07-19, 21:10 | Link #33049 | |
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I liked it as is. It is always nice to see her get some love too. |
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2011-07-19, 22:51 | Link #33056 | |
"Bi?!" BI?!
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Join Date: Oct 2007
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Great twist though when I did realize it, I was left going, "Huh? Hey? What?"
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2011-07-20, 01:40 | Link #33057 |
Queen of Tragedy
Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: Place of rocks and trees, and trees and rocks...and water.
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Popping in to say, I've edited Chapter 2 of "Prerogative of the Brave" to address some of the issues that people have brought up about it .
The new version should hopefully better convey Hayate's motivations, and make Nanoha and Fate's reactions more realistic and not mis-interpreted into things that I did not intend . Tons of thanks to Dezo for helping me with the editing!
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2011-07-20, 01:44 | Link #33058 |
Under Death by College
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Join Date: May 2010
Location: Where you least expect me
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A good twist on that there, didn't see it coming until the last line and even then it was ambiguous at best. That lent it a very nice dualitiy of meaning and it wiould be interesting to see how more people react to that kind of thing.
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2011-07-20, 07:02 | Link #33059 |
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Join Date: Aug 2009
Location: Alberta, Canada
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Well, I'm back to lurking, having enough free time to do so again. Read the past couple dozen pages of content and caught up on some of the new stuff people have tossed up. Just happy to be back.
@Raiser: I say leave it as is, because the ending can be read either way, as you never actually say who Yuuno is going after. I read Nanoha's remark at the end to mean that Shiro has done this to every one of his daughters' suitors. Either way, I like it.
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