2012-10-20, 06:59 | Link #37661 |
That one guy
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well Energy destruction is what Reiraku Byakuya does. Which is applied to all of canon Setsura's functions. Energy Destroying particles sound better than Energy Destroying Energy... Also this Second Shift is a lot smaller than the canon one. Much like the ShenLong Ssu-Li The Yukihira blades also get tweaked but I don't want to confuse you any further. |
2012-10-20, 07:07 | Link #37662 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
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Well ByakuShiki has two fanon route in it's incarnation
For ST > 2nd Shift: A hybrid of novel and anime, Setsura do not exist, but it's function has been integrated to the standard gauntlets. > Overshift: Full release of weapon and abilities (impossible in normal condition) include Seven Sword Module and PDE system For TLR > 2nd Shift: No second shift > Overshift: as said before, more like a deranged, giant pistol shrimp that fly Also, first ST Draft after 4 month hiatus Spoiler for Sacred Twins Chapter 13 Part 1:
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2012-10-20, 07:12 | Link #37664 |
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I'll still be using most of the stuff I discussed before as special moves Ichika develops using his IS' functions.
Mudou is interesting as it emulates a short range teleport. Though it actually doesn't. Merely concentrating Reiraku to an extent that it nulls light energy and all other external eneries. Rendering the unit practically non-existent. Though if spread over a wide area, you can see it as a blurb of nothingness on your screen. Kinda like the GN particle effect, except it even negates energy fire. |
2012-10-20, 07:37 | Link #37666 |
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@ Senpai - You need to add character actions. It feels like once dialogue starts your characters simply stand in place and utter their lines.
For example: They're supposedly running when they're snarking at one another, right? So why do they make no turns, jumps, or any other actions at all? Are they simply running a straight line?
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2012-10-20, 11:52 | Link #37669 |
Just another Idiot
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Question:
Moral Dilemma: Enter ISA (And have a chance to restore social order) or return to his old boring life but be laden with 2 million dollar debt as fine A guy look outside and saw a woman insulting and beating up a man. What do you think he will choose? (Quick survey to find out the typical response )
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2012-10-20, 19:43 | Link #37672 |
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Well, for me. It's important to list details as it helps the readers to understand what's happening. Because a common mistake is too much dialogue and it forces the reader to needless interpret their actions.
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2012-10-21, 00:24 | Link #37675 | |
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when I read/write the story... Tone of "voice" of the story is monotonous and boring...... I really need to learn how to write a story with an excited tone. === Which is prefer: Be laden with 2 million dollar debt or going into a world of pain you would never want to experience?
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2012-10-21, 01:06 | Link #37679 |
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Not really, it shares the same weakness as original RB after all.
Since it's still vulnerable to kinetic impact, good luck facing pesky shrapnel weapon that could very well filled the sky (totally useless normally).
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2012-10-21, 11:01 | Link #37680 |
Just another Idiot
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Okay....
End result: The guy don't want to go to ISA and rather be laden with the two million dollar fine. Mostly because he is abnormal.... Game Addict nearly on-par with Keima. Not like it matter much because going into ISA is the only option for him anyway... To put it simple: "It is not a choice, Mister. We are forcing you there." Thankfully that contract(going into ISA), doesn't include being expelled. So he is desperately trying to get expelled by being extremely Hot-blooded and perverted (the latter will land him in hospital where he can play his game in peace, so....win-win situation?).....opposite of his real personality and he has to act like that every time somebody from ISA is nearby so they wouldn't suspect that it is an act. = On the drones: Spoiler for Kyrios:
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