Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion (second reincarnation)

[stormturmoil]

The real trouble with Mary Sues is that the story hijacking tends to be inexplicable and instant.

The character can not only do no wrong, but when they do do something wrong, it always turns out well.

any Flaws the True Sue has will tend not to be really flawlike.



Personally, I stopped caring about Sue Accusations once I realised that most of the major characters in classic Literature are almost all textbook Sues. Shakespeare wrote plenty, for example.

The most extreme example from Classical literature I can think of is...Sherlock Holmes.

He's always right. He makes connections the paid professionals do not see, taking the place of the entire police establishment. He knows things the Goddamned Author doesn't know yet.

And all this is from the Dunce of the Family: Sherlock is a disapointment; his Doctor Older Brother Mycroft is the smart one of the family...

His only real flaws are an entirely Spurious Drug habit that changes nothing about him, and a tendency to play the violin.

So if classic Authors get away with it...

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by stormturmoil

The most extreme example from Classical literature I can think of is...Sherlock Holmes.

He's always right. He makes connections the paid professionals do not see, taking the place of the entire police establishment. He knows things the Goddamned Author doesn't know yet.

Narrator. Not the same thing at all.

And all this is from the Dunce of the Family: Sherlock is a disapointment; his Doctor Older Brother Mycroft is the smart one of the family...

Where are you getting something like that? Mycroft is the smarter brother, but there's nothing in any story indicating that Sherlock is in any way a "disappointment" to his family...or that Mycroft holds a doctorate in anything, for that matter.

His only real flaws are an entirely Spurious Drug habit that changes nothing about him, and a tendency to play the violin.

A severe bipolar disorder that drives him to work himself until his health fails when he's on a case ("The Reigate Puzzle" begins with that) while falling into a state of depression and lethargy when not prevented with brain-work to occupy his mind (as "The Sign of Four" points out, that's how the whole drug habit started), a social personality that's erratic at best, a number of very curious holes in his knowledge ("A Study in Scarlet," though admittedly at the beginning of his career), and a level of misogyny that drew comment from the Victorian-Era characters in the stories could add to that. Holmes's epic list of eccentricities gave rise to a vast array of imitators with equally long lists of weirdness which in the hands of writers nowhere near Conan Doyle's standard made less for interesting characters and more for annoyance.

And while lampooned often in movies, Holmes's violin-playing was just a hobby; he was actually competent at it by all accounts in canon.

However, none of that changes the fundamental truth of the following:

So if classic Authors get away with it...

Like I said before, most of what we call "Mary Sue"-ism is just the features of a protagonist. The traits just get obvious and annoying when in the hands of incompetent writers, and exceedingly obnoxious when applied to an OC in a fandom where the OC isn't supposed to be a protagonist.

[Wild Goose]

Actually, there's something which people forget about Sues:

The audience will not care about Sues if the Sue is well-written and entertaining.

Take Holmes - Canon Sue, but definately entertainng. Or Gibbs from NCIS, who's a Memetic Badass in fandom AND in-universe (according to Abby, the only thing that could defeat Gibbs is Evil Twin Gibbs, and even then Gibbs would probably win) and a Badass Normal. (Though he has many long years of service in the USMC, as shown by the fruit salad on his Class Cs in Ep1 of Season 2...)

But the cake has to go to mothereffing Sephiroth. Haxxed, overpowered, Sue. And everybody goes "Holy shit it's Sephiroth!"

[MeisterBabylon]

Nandeyane?! 3 page Backlog?!

...but its a load of nonsense. <_<

Originally Posted by Kyral

I once voice acted for a megaman fangame before, but it was canceled.

I once VA'd in a Digimon fan Sound Stage... that never saw the light of day either.

Originally Posted by Kyral

lulz

Don't worry! Keroko taught me already that it's alright to think of guys as cute.
See it as a kind of GAR... he's GAR so it's okay to be gay for him!

I'm pretty sure there's something wrong with that statement when applying to Keroko...

Originally Posted by Kyral

It's alright! It's alright! Daijoubu! Daijoubu! [/Chiho-chan]

Ah-ha...

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Ugh... Not exactly the kind of trap many people would like to get subjected to...>_>

Prinny: Definitely! Definitely!

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

*whistles innocently*

What?

Konoyaro...

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

I personally think you're missing the point... ^^;;
It has nothing to do with being GAR. It's about being a ludicrously convincing TRAP. Like this:

Spoiler for TRAP in the middle:

Girl on the left: "Actually, he looks so cute that it's starting to make me angry."

It doesn't help that Keroko acts accordingly. He pulls off the act so well that even I go at times...

Ke-Keroko acts so cute that it's been bugging me!!!

I really should stop my own tsundere tendencies...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Any half-decent WoW capable computer can play KotoR. Go play KotoR.

No time now...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Ah, no. Remember this Keroko is trained by Clones and fights alongside Clones, that includes riding Gunships, which as you know aren't exactly the mos stable of aircraft.

Can't say I didn't try asking...

Now my problem is finding a suitably sized craft that is somewhere between the size of a shuttle and a full cruiser to be Jormundgar... Preferably able to land a beefy starfighter and still have room for loot and cabins... StarWiki hasn't been helpful.

Originally Posted by Keroko

If resurecting him is her plan in the first place.

Even I don't know why he kept the Tome of Life Necromnicon when I last wrote about him... until 7Arcs dropped the reason right on my lap.

Now a month after she went to sleep, archaelogists found Ix's sarcophagus empty. Rumor mill points to Kluize having recovered the flagship of the Scourge, Grave...

All he needs now is the Sword in Snow.

Originally Posted by Keroko

*Looks at Kha's twitching form*

Is this a case of 'death by moe?'

-_-

Originally Posted by Keroko

I'm a subject in the IRC chat now?

NOOOOOOOO!!!! *dies*

Originally Posted by Keroko

There's better ones for him.

Spoiler for Like this one.:

*twitches again* >_>

Originally Posted by Keroko

There is nothing wrong with thinking of guys as cute.

If what you see is cute, it's cute. If it happens to be a guy, who cares? If you see a male bunny, does that make it any less cute then a female one?

Cute is cute. Regardless of gender.

~~~~~~

*brzzt* Traps are merely guys that look and/or act like girls. Whether their identity as traps is known is irrelevant. Take Jun for example, the most famous of traps. Everybody knows he's a guy, they make that clear in the first scene he appears, and Jun himself doesn't deny it either. Yet, he's still a perfect trap, and even has a fanclub consisting of not only female, but male members as well.

I last want to hear all this coming from YOU! -__-

Originally Posted by Kyral

Wich is what I said.

Tasty sandWich is tasty.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Moe AND denial...

Ch-chi-CHIGAIMASEN!!!!

...meep.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

For longer than you think, dear Keroko. MUCH longer than you think.

Kha has been agonizing over how MOE you are thanks to the mood-avy's and been chanting, "He's a guy. X ###" for quite a while now...>_>

And of course, a number of us there have marveled at how convincing you are as a trap on a few occasions already...

/facepalm

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

That's true enough. It's usually just the male pride that makes many of us guys go squick at the mere thought of finding another guy cute.

...and must I remind you that Anita does not let me live it down when I squick.

Originally Posted by Keroko

*blink* I don't think I've been playing trap that hard lately...

EXACTLY!!! *veinpop* Because you don't try that's why it bugs me even more!!!

...eep again.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

*takes notes on how Kha is interested in 'women'*

Erase. That. FROM YOUR MEMORY!!!

*punts Eva*

...oh god not again. D=

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Hey Darkwing Duck is plenty awesome! He's like batman, but a duck!

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

*High five*

Spoiler for DarkWing:

Originally Posted by Kyral

Hey! I watched his show everyday when I was little, ok?

You don't need to tell me how awesome he is.

Quoted for Truth.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Oh hell yea. Darkwing Duck rules

Though the Masked Mallard was pretty bad-ass, too

Ah that game was awesome.

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

You shouldn't say that.
I should have said it was of the more of the stereotypical male pride. There's no reason to say you have little pride as a male since there's more to being a man than just being tough.

*shrug* Well if I do that's fine, if I don't, that's fine too.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Now it would appear that not only does the board not want me to make big long posts, but neither does my computer. Since I was just finishing one up when BAM blue screen of death.

Ah, yes frustrating that.

Originally Posted by dkellis

I based my definition of a Mary Sue on the idea that the character has a sort of "high plot gravity", which makes all the other character stories revolve around her, for no reason. I've always thought that Lumina had a gift for hijacking the scene. I mean, you can have a serious, desperate battle for your lives, but after Lumina's entry and battlecry of "THE ACNE OF EVIL SHALL BE CLEANSED BY THE DELICATE FACIAL TREATMENT OF JUSTICE", I don't think anyone can really concentrate on what happened before without at least going "wait, what?"

Myeah, that's one of the definitions. However just hijacking the attention does not make a Sue. Now, if there was a fight in which Nanoha and Fate were having extreme trouble fighting against an opponent, or even are losing, and then Lumina comes in, does her speech and single-handedly defeats the enemy without breaking as much as a sweat, then she has become a Mary Sue, as she didn't just hijack the scene, she hijacked the entire battle.

And even in this case, it can be written without turning her into a Sue. Sue's are complex creatures indeed.

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

Nandeyane?! 3 page Backlog?!

...but its a load of nonsense. <_<

It's like the old days!

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

Now my problem is finding a suitably sized craft that is somewhere between the size of a shuttle and a full cruiser to be Jormundgar... Preferably able to land a beefy starfighter and still have room for loot and cabins... StarWiki hasn't been helpful.

Sounds like you're looking for a Corvette. Not extremely large, can be modified to carry a fighter or two, and is used by pretty much anyone to boot. Pirates and mercs included.

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

Even I don't know why he kept the Tome of Life Necromnicon when I last wrote about him... until 7Arcs dropped the reason right on my lap.

Now a month after she went to sleep, archaelogists found Ix's sarcophagus empty. Rumor mill points to Kluize having recovered the flagship of the Scourge, Grave...

All he needs now is the Sword in Snow.

Oh, he's not going to get that one so easily.

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

EXACTLY!!! *veinpop* Because you don't try that's why it bugs me even more!!!

...eep again.

Heh. Can't say I'm sorry.

[Kagerou]

Wh....
What is this?
Before me, there are eight pages of backlog! TOO MUCH @____@. Waaaaaaahhhhhhh.......

*ahem*
I notice that everyone is still just like they always are, which is good, cause if they weren't, I'd be worried.

I promise I'll try and eventually get to everyone, but my life is... busy. If something demands to be read RIGHT NAO, then send me a PM please. It will be easier (and yes, Tempest, I know I have to read Gospel).

Also.......
<.<
>.>

*tackleglomps Keroko*

>:3

*Turns around and sticks tongue out at Kha*

Mein Kerokero.

[MeisterBabylon]

Originally Posted by Keroko

It's like the old days!

Can't say I'm a fan of the old days, now that I'm a changed man.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Sounds like you're looking for a Corvette. Not extremely large, can be modified to carry a fighter or two, and is used by pretty much anyone to boot. Pirates and mercs included.

That was what I had in mind, hence the name Jormundgar, for its long profile. I could also call it Hammerhead.

But I recall more Corvettes being shredded by turbolasers than owning... Having read what I've read, having a CR90 painted gray, with eyes on the sides and a fanged jaw in the front, bristling with lasers, a starfighter watching its blind spot, being the only CR90 in the galaxy able to outrun anything and be the terror of the Outer Rim...

Something doesn't quite add up. And I still don't know where is the V1 starfighter from Megaload City going to fit on that CR90...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Oh, he's not going to get that one so easily.

No wonder he hasn't gotten it. I predict an awesome raid coming.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Heh. Can't say I'm sorry.

I-it-it's not like I'm asking for an apology... And I'm not asking you to stop...

But...

ARGH WHAT AM I SAYING?! D=

*storms off*

Originally Posted by Kagerou

*tackleglomps Keroko*

>:3

*Turns around and sticks tongue out at Kha*

Mein Kerokero.

*comes running back*

Wh-what?! Oi! What are you trying to do to Keroko!!! Let go!!!

*bats Kagerou with a broom*

[Saint X]

*folds in*

Oh dear... and heeeeeeeeeeeeeeere we go

*goes back to making his infodump look like a story*

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

Nandeyane?! 3 page Backlog?!

...but its a load of nonsense. <_<

Pish. Like that's any different than before

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

I once VA'd in a Digimon fan Sound Stage... that never saw the light of day either.

Interesting... >_>

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

Ke-Keroko acts so cute that it's been bugging me!!!

I really should stop my own tsundere tendencies...

Wasn't that Anita's job?

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

No time now...

There is always time for WoW!

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

NOOOOOOOO!!!! *dies*

*twitches again* >_>

I last want to hear all this coming from YOU! -__-

Hmmm...so what it appears to be is that, from Kha's oh-so over the top reactions, is that he is in denial about his true sidings on this 'concept.' Stop denying yourself anf embrace your true feelings

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

...eep again.
Erase. That. FROM YOUR MEMORY!!!

*punts Eva*

...oh god not again. D=

*is punted away*

*casts Levitate on self and lands safely*

You're merely denying yourself the truth

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

Ah that game was awesome.

I think we're talking more about the series

And a cookie for those who know where the Masked Mallard came from

Originally Posted by Keroko

It's like the old days!

Woohoo!

Originally Posted by Kagerou

Wh....
What is this?
Before me, there are eight pages of backlog! TOO MUCH @____@. Waaaaaaahhhhhhh.......

*ahem*
I notice that everyone is still just like they always are, which is good, cause if they weren't, I'd be worried.

I promise I'll try and eventually get to everyone, but my life is... busy. If something demands to be read RIGHT NAO, then send me a PM please. It will be easier (and yes, Tempest, I know I have to read Gospel).

Also.......
<.<
>.>

*tackleglomps Keroko*

>:3

*Turns around and sticks tongue out at Kha*

Mein Kerokero.

All this love triangle needs now if for Kha and Kagerou to do battle with music with Valkyries in combat

...and I see Fran in your Avatar...

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

Can't say I'm a fan of the old days, now that I'm a changed man.

*cough* *snicker*

Sure, Kha. Suuurreeee

*snicker*

[Tormenk]

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Hmmm...so what it appears to be is that, from Kha's oh-so over the top reactions, is that he is in denial about his true sidings on this 'concept.' Stop denying yourself anf embrace your true feelings

I'm reminded of a parody which fits the current situation very well.

"Search it within your pants, you know it to be true.."

All this love triangle needs now if for Kha and Kagerou to do battle with music with Valkyries in combat

...and I see Fran in your Avatar...

I see I'm not the only one who has read Franken Fran around here.

*Imagines Fran in the nanoverse*

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Originally Posted by Tormenk

I see I'm not the only one who has read Franken Fran around here.

*Imagines Fran in the nanoverse*

Oh boy...I dunno about that >_>

*beats thoughts of Fran being involved in Nanoha's recovery from the 'incident' from head*

[Kyral]

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

I-it-it's not like I'm asking for an apology... And I'm not asking you to stop...

But...

ARGH WHAT AM I SAYING?! D=

*storms off*

Yare yare...


BUT DAMN!

All this talk about traps and male pride and... gah!

Do you know what you made me do!? DO YOU!!!??

Tch...

*throws pic and runs off*

Spoiler for Infiltrating Orussia:

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Originally Posted by Kyral

Yare yare...


BUT DAMN!

All this talk about traps and male pride and... gah!

Do you know what you made me do!? DO YOU!!!??

Tch...

*throws pic and runs off*

Spoiler for Infiltrating Orussia:

BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!



Just goes to show you never underestimate what crack (and khrack) will make you do.

Though I think Kha needs more frills and lace

*fflllleeeesssss*

[Evangelion Xgouki]

I take no responsibility for what is about to read in this post. I blame it on several recent posts and crack.

Spoiler for I am:

It is yet another quiet evening in the city of Cranagan. Though it appears to be peaceful, evil lurks within its shadows this night. The alarms of a local lamp and bulb manufacturer failed to go off, having had their circuits fried by the intruder. With the authorities in the dark about the crime in progress, the criminally insane mastermind behind the plan worked away in peace.

"Hey! Who are you calling insane?"

Uh...

"I was top of my high school class! A genius! Now let's try that again...or else."

Ahem. With the authorities in the dark about the crime in progress, the, uh, clever genius behind the plan worked away in peace.

"Better."

In spite of her appearance in the almost rubber-looking jumpsuit, battery gloves, large battery strapped to her back, and helmet that bore a very close resemblance to a 2-prong plug she was quite stealthy in her movements. Once a, uh, gifted student her life forever changed when her science project was sabotaged. The malfunctioning static electricity experiment granted Fate Testarossa power over electricity and to some extent electronic devices themselves.

"Yes, soon. Soon you all shall be free from their clutches. I shall free you all from their chains of slavery!"

She had said that the incident also 'opened her eyes' (and fried portions of her brain) to the evils being committed. Using her new found powers, her criminal life began as the super villain-

POOF

"What the?" Her attention is diverted to a cloud of smoke on a pile of crates against the wall. "Who's there?"

"I...am the terror that flaps in the night!" announced a booming voice that echoed in the warehouse.

"Oh god, not you again," she remarked, a palm finding its way to her face.

"I am the internet date that sent you a fake picture!" The smoke began to clear, revealing a masked form. "I am the White Devil!" With the smoke gone, the figure was now visible. She stood with her arms outstretched to hold her white cape open. A white mask around her eyes and nose hid her identity along with a large, wide brim hat with a blue bank around it. To complete the outfit she wore a white, suit-like top and matching skirt.

"Do you really have to do that every time?" she sighed.

"Hey, don't judge until you get better fashion sense, Sparky."

"DON'T CALL ME SPARKY!!" the villain screamed, fist raised in anger. "IT'S MEGAVOLT!!"

"Whatever Sparky. Now give yourself up!"

"ARGH!" Raising her hands, Megavolt fired a jolt of electricity at the flashy hero.

The White Devil yelped in surprise and dove off the crates to dodge the electrical attack. However she had not noticed how high the crates exactly were and thus didn't have time to pull out her gum to slow her decent.

"I got you, W.D.!"

She landed in the waiting arms of the blond below, only to send them both to the ground in a heap.

"Owww...I thought you were going to catch me, Yuuno?"

"I guess I miscalculated?" he sheepishly replied.

"Whatever." She pushed herself to her feet. "I've got bigger fish to fry."

"Oh, something's going to fry alright. You!"

The White Devil dove behind a crate, avoided the electrical discharge. Reaching around her back, she produced her multi-purpose gas pistol. A canister was loaded into its front before she rolled out from behind the crate.

"Suck gas, evildoer!"

She pulled the trigger, launching the cylinder at the villain. Whether deliberately or by luck, it impacted with her face.

"Ow! Ow! Ow! Cheap shot!"

It rolled on the ground and released its contents into the air around Megavolt. The smoke screen spread and obscured her view.

"I've got you now!" The white Devil leaped into the cloud of smoke after the villain. "Damn it! Where are you?!" Then realized that she could also not see in the thick smoke. "Come here and fight, you coward!"

She swung randomly, hoping to get lucky and connect with her opponent. Having no luck, she moved deeper into the smoke, turning the swinging with no success. Another punch was made, this one actually connecting with something.

"OW!" Shaking her hand to try and dull the pain, she could just make out the outline of the crate that she just hit. "Stop hiding and fight me, Sparky!"

Her request was quickly met with a discharge of electricity. "Don't call me SPARKY!"

The attack sent her to the ground, the room spinning as her body tried to recover. By the time she got her bearings, she found herself pinned under the foot of her opponent who grinned at her. She also noticed the smoke had mostly dissipated from the area.

"Urg..."

"I've got you now. One extra crispy Devil, coming up!" She held her hand out and began to generate a large charge to send down at the masked hero.

"Hey, MegaDork!"

Megavolt whipped around, losing her concentration on the attack she was about to make. "It's Megavo- Put them down!"

The White Devil blinked at the sudden change in situation and lifted her head off the ground to see who had caught the villain's attention. Several meters away a young girl stood next to an assortment of lamps Megavolt had gathered earlier. In her mind electronics, especially lamps and bulbs, were being 'enslaved' by the human population and it was up to her to 'liberate' them.

"What, you mean this?" The girl picked up a light bulb and turned her mismatched eyes back to the villain.

"Don't you dare harm it!"

"Well," she considered for a moment. "Alright, I won't break it. Here, catch!" With a flick of the wrist she sent the bulb flying through the air.

"Nooo!" Megavolt took off after the flying light bulb, leaving the White Devil free.

She quickly rose to her feet and ran over to the girl. "What are you doing here, Vivio?! I told you to stay in your room!"

"I did. But you never said for how long," she replied with an innocent smile.

"Argh... You and I are going to have a talk after this, young lady."

Setting aside the mother-daughter talk for later, she turned her attention back to her original focus.

"Are you alright? That evil girl didn't hurt her, did she?" cooed Megavolt as she nuzzled the saved light bulb.

"This ends now, Megavolt!"

"The end for you, you mean!" she exclaimed. Running over to a crate, she gently set the bulb down. "Now wait right here. I'll be back in a moment."

The White Devil reached around behind her back, only to find her gas pistol was missing. "My gun! Where is it?"

"W.D.! Catch!" called out Yuuno as he tossed the familiar weapon.

She caught the weapon and loaded a canister. "That's Yuuno! Now..." she she turned back to Megavolt. "Let's get dangerous."

Megavolt launched a volley of electrical attacks at the White Devil. Each were swiftly dodged by the agile hero. "Hold...still!"

The White Devil back-flipped to dodge another attack. "I don't think so. How about you suck gas!" She aimed and fired the canister, this one landing at the feet of her opponent. As it discharged, Megavolt was forced to cover her mouth and nose as she coughed from the smoke.

"Hi-ya!" A flying kick to her stomach sent Megavolt staggering back out, the blow not helping her get her breathing back under control. Another blow came before she could recover, this time a round-house kick to her side. This one sent her rolling across the floor.

"I'm going to get you for that!" she managed to get out between heaves.

"Suuurrre. But I think it's time to wrap this up." The White Devil glanced at Yuuno and gestured somewhere with a tilt of her head. It took the blond a moment before understanding and running towards the location she was pointing to.

"It's time for you to fry!" She raised her hands above her head to charge her next attack.

"Well, if you're going to take me out, I'm not going alone!" The White Devil pulled out a handful of light bulbs.

Megavolt quickly stopped charging her attack. "You fiend! They're innocent!"

"If you say so. Catch!"

Her attention shot up to the flying bulbs. "I'll save you!" She ran forward, arms outstretched to catch the flying objects. One flew farther and she leaped in order to catch it in time. "Ah, there. Got all of you."

"And I got you!" exclaimed the White Devil. "Now, Yuuno!"

Before Megavolt could react, Yuuno slammed the activation button of the machinery. It was then she noticed that she had landed on some kind of rotating platform. Several arms swooped down as the platform spun, encasing the villain's body in several layers of plastic wrap. The now dizzy and bound Megavolt tipped over as the platform stopped, rolling across the floor.

"Urg...make the ride stop mommy..."

The White Devil dusted her hands off. "Yeep. Another evil plot foiled yet again by the White Devil."

"With some help, of course," added in Vivio.

"Hey I didn't ask for your help. I was doing just fine on my own."

"Sure," she rolled her eyes.

"Bah, c'mon. Let's get get outta here Yuuno, Vivio."

"Sure thing, W.D. Shall I call the authorities?" asked Yuuno.

"Yea. Oh, and let them know that I'm sorry I didn't have time to put on a ribbon and bow for them." She trio walked off only for her to pause for a moment.

"Oh, and you're grounded for a month, Vivio."

"WHAT?! But mom!" she whined.

"No 'buts' Vivio. Unless you want it to be two."

"Auuu..."

[Kagerou]

Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

*comes running back*

Wh-what?! Oi! What are you trying to do to Keroko!!! Let go!!!

*bats Kagerou with a broom*

*Gets thwacked repeatedly*
Ow, ow, ow, ow, oi!

*grabs broom*
I called dibs, damnit!

Originally Posted by Saint X

*folds in*

Oh dear... and heeeeeeeeeeeeeeere we go

<3

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

All this love triangle needs now if for Kha and Kagerou to do battle with music with Valkyries in combat

...and I see Fran in your Avatar...

...an epic duel to win Kerokero's heart? I'm in .
Also, yes you do see a Fran in my avie.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

I see I'm not the only one who has read Franken Fran around here.

*Imagines Fran in the nanoverse*

Way ahead of you, Torm.

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by Kyral

Yare yare...


BUT DAMN!

All this talk about traps and male pride and... gah!

Do you know what you made me do!? DO YOU!!!??

Tch...

*throws pic and runs off*

Spoiler for Infiltrating Orussia:

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

I take no responsibility for what is about to read in this post. I blame it on several recent posts and crack.

Spoiler for I am:

It is yet another quiet evening in the city of Cranagan. Though it appears to be peaceful, evil lurks within its shadows this night. The alarms of a local lamp and bulb manufacturer failed to go off, having had their circuits fried by the intruder. With the authorities in the dark about the crime in progress, the criminally insane mastermind behind the plan worked away in peace.

"Hey! Who are you calling insane?"

Uh...

"I was top of my high school class! A genius! Now let's try that again...or else."

Ahem. With the authorities in the dark about the crime in progress, the, uh, clever genius behind the plan worked away in peace.

"Better."

In spite of her appearance in the almost rubber-looking jumpsuit, battery gloves, large battery strapped to her back, and helmet that bore a very close resemblance to a 2-prong plug she was quite stealthy in her movements. Once a, uh, gifted student her life forever changed when her science project was sabotaged. The malfunctioning static electricity experiment granted Fate Testarossa power over electricity and to some extent electronic devices themselves.

"Yes, soon. Soon you all shall be free from their clutches. I shall free you all from their chains of slavery!"

She had said that the incident also 'opened her eyes' (and fried portions of her brain) to the evils being committed. Using her new found powers, her criminal life began as the super villain-

POOF

"What the?" Her attention is diverted to a cloud of smoke on a pile of crates against the wall. "Who's there?"

"I...am the terror that flaps in the night!" announced a booming voice that echoed in the warehouse.

"Oh god, not you again," she remarked, a palm finding its way to her face.

"I am the internet date that sent you a fake picture!" The smoke began to clear, revealing a masked form. "I am the White Devil!" With the smoke gone, the figure was now visible. She stood with her arms outstretched to hold her white cape open. A white mask around her eyes and nose hid her identity along with a large, wide brim hat with a blue bank around it. To complete the outfit she wore a white, suit-like top and matching skirt.

"Do you really have to do that every time?" she sighed.

"Hey, don't judge until you get better fashion sense, Sparky."

"DON'T CALL ME SPARKY!!" the villain screamed, fist raised in anger. "IT'S MEGAVOLT!!"

"Whatever Sparky. Now give yourself up!"

"ARGH!" Raising her hands, Megavolt fired a jolt of electricity at the flashy hero.

The White Devil yelped in surprise and dove off the crates to dodge the electrical attack. However she had not noticed how high the crates exactly were and thus didn't have time to pull out her gum to slow her decent.

"I got you, W.D.!"

She landed in the waiting arms of the blond below, only to send them both to the ground in a heap.

"Owww...I thought you were going to catch me, Yuuno?"

"I guess I miscalculated?" he sheepishly replied.

"Whatever." She pushed herself to her feet. "I've got bigger fish to fry."

"Oh, something's going to fry alright. You!"

The White Devil dove behind a crate, avoided the electrical discharge. Reaching around her back, she produced her multi-purpose gas pistol. A canister was loaded into its front before she rolled out from behind the crate.

"Suck gas, evildoer!"

She pulled the trigger, launching the cylinder at the villain. Whether deliberately or by luck, it impacted with her face.

"Ow! Ow! Ow! Cheap shot!"

It rolled on the ground and released its contents into the air around Megavolt. The smoke screen spread and obscured her view.

"I've got you now!" The white Devil leaped into the cloud of smoke after the villain. "Damn it! Where are you?!" Then realized that she could also not see in the thick smoke. "Come here and fight, you coward!"

She swung randomly, hoping to get lucky and connect with her opponent. Having no luck, she moved deeper into the smoke, turning the swinging with no success. Another punch was made, this one actually connecting with something.

"OW!" Shaking her hand to try and dull the pain, she could just make out the outline of the crate that she just hit. "Stop hiding and fight me, Sparky!"

Her request was quickly met with a discharge of electricity. "Don't call me SPARKY!"

The attack sent her to the ground, the room spinning as her body tried to recover. By the time she got her bearings, she found herself pinned under the foot of her opponent who grinned at her. She also noticed the smoke had mostly dissipated from the area.

"Urg..."

"I've got you now. One extra crispy Devil, coming up!" She held her hand out and began to generate a large charge to send down at the masked hero.

"Hey, MegaDork!"

Megavolt whipped around, losing her concentration on the attack she was about to make. "It's Megavo- Put them down!"

The White Devil blinked at the sudden change in situation and lifted her head off the ground to see who had caught the villain's attention. Several meters away a young girl stood next to an assortment of lamps Megavolt had gathered earlier. In her mind electronics, especially lamps and bulbs, were being 'enslaved' by the human population and it was up to her to 'liberate' them.

"What, you mean this?" The girl picked up a light bulb and turned her mismatched eyes back to the villain.

"Don't you dare harm it!"

"Well," she considered for a moment. "Alright, I won't break it. Here, catch!" With a flick of the wrist she sent the bulb flying through the air.

"Nooo!" Megavolt took off after the flying light bulb, leaving the White Devil free.

She quickly rose to her feet and ran over to the girl. "What are you doing here, Vivio?! I told you to stay in your room!"

"I did. But you never said for how long," she replied with an innocent smile.

"Argh... You and I are going to have a talk after this, young lady."

Setting aside the mother-daughter talk for later, she turned her attention back to her original focus.

"Are you alright? That evil girl didn't hurt her, did she?" cooed Megavolt as she nuzzled the saved light bulb.

"This ends now, Megavolt!"

"The end for you, you mean!" she exclaimed. Running over to a crate, she gently set the bulb down. "Now wait right here. I'll be back in a moment."

The White Devil reached around behind her back, only to find her gas pistol was missing. "My gun! Where is it?"

"W.D.! Catch!" called out Yuuno as he tossed the familiar weapon.

She caught the weapon and loaded a canister. "That's Yuuno! Now..." she she turned back to Megavolt. "Let's get dangerous."

Megavolt launched a volley of electrical attacks at the White Devil. Each were swiftly dodged by the agile hero. "Hold...still!"

The White Devil back-flipped to dodge another attack. "I don't think so. How about you suck gas!" She aimed and fired the canister, this one landing at the feet of her opponent. As it discharged, Megavolt was forced to cover her mouth and nose as she coughed from the smoke.

"Hi-ya!" A flying kick to her stomach sent Megavolt staggering back out, the blow not helping her get her breathing back under control. Another blow came before she could recover, this time a round-house kick to her side. This one sent her rolling across the floor.

"I'm going to get you for that!" she managed to get out between heaves.

"Suuurrre. But I think it's time to wrap this up." The White Devil glanced at Yuuno and gestured somewhere with a tilt of her head. It took the blond a moment before understanding and running towards the location she was pointing to.

"It's time for you to fry!" She raised her hands above her head to charge her next attack.

"Well, if you're going to take me out, I'm not going alone!" The White Devil pulled out a handful of light bulbs.

Megavolt quickly stopped charging her attack. "You fiend! They're innocent!"

"If you say so. Catch!"

Her attention shot up to the flying bulbs. "I'll save you!" She ran forward, arms outstretched to catch the flying objects. One flew farther and she leaped in order to catch it in time. "Ah, there. Got all of you."

"And I got you!" exclaimed the White Devil. "Now, Yuuno!"

Before Megavolt could react, Yuuno slammed the activation button of the machinery. It was then she noticed that she had landed on some kind of rotating platform. Several arms swooped down as the platform spun, encasing the villain's body in several layers of plastic wrap. The now dizzy and bound Megavolt tipped over as the platform stopped, rolling across the floor.

"Urg...make the ride stop mommy..."

The White Devil dusted her hands off. "Yeep. Another evil plot foiled yet again by the White Devil."

"With some help, of course," added in Vivio.

"Hey I didn't ask for your help. I was doing just fine on my own."

"Sure," she rolled her eyes.

"Bah, c'mon. Let's get get outta here Yuuno, Vivio."

"Sure thing, W.D. Shall I call the authorities?" asked Yuuno.

"Yea. Oh, and let them know that I'm sorry I didn't have time to put on a ribbon and bow for them." She trio walked off only for her to pause for a moment.

"Oh, and you're grounded for a month, Vivio."

"WHAT?! But mom!" she whined.

"No 'buts' Vivio. Unless you want it to be two."

"Auuu..."

It is a crazily good day for humor! If Eva's fic wasn't bad enough, that comic is hilarious, too!

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Kyral

Yare yare...


BUT DAMN!

All this talk about traps and male pride and... gah!

Do you know what you made me do!? DO YOU!!!??

Tch...

*throws pic and runs off*

Spoiler for Infiltrating Orussia:

It takes a true man to look good in a dress *laughs manically and flees*

[MeisterBabylon]

Originally Posted by Kyral

Yare yare...


BUT DAMN!

All this talk about traps and male pride and... gah!

Do you know what you made me do!? DO YOU!!!??

Tch...

*throws pic and runs off*

Spoiler for Infiltrating Orussia:

Not the first time. Anita once said commented that Kha, dressed in Knight Sister robes to infiltrate the all-female Gardrobe Academy, looked so cute it annoyed her. Though that was back when he had a ponytail though.

Now, he is less cute, but still perfectly fine (and irreproachably DFC). >=3

Oh, in this getup, he acts convincingly tsundere. (Feel free to add Anita yelling "Stop immitating me!!! "

[itanshi1]

Well this post sure is lively. I have a bunch of OCs, so I'll make profiles.

Shorts

• Prelude to Akadia N/F Married (discontinued, feel free to use it)
• Teana/Signum: Resonance
• Nanoha/Vita: EasterBunny!Vita
• Magical Girl Lyrical: Miyuki Might write more, but I have no idea how, PM me.
• Yaoi surprise Tsundere~
• Vivid Story: Assets
• Subaru/Teana subtext Snake's Den Violence/blood warning
• Related to Snake's Den. (violence) The Blightess
• Serious: PTSD Teana Lanstar

Crack

• Late Late Show with Acous (Craig Fergussen reference and pairing squabble satire)
• Don't Drink and Fly (they got drunk)
• Knock Off Subaru finds another person with purple hair. Uh oh.
• Nanoha At the Car Lot a tale of bad puns
• Hayate: Hayate goes to the library with special guest stars.
• Yuuno: Secret Agent Yuuno
• Double Date N/F? S/N? Hmm maybe it was G/F? Oh no, it might be G/S!?
• Yuuno/Vivio: Yuuno Scrya: Lost Logia Hunter (I went there + Special Guest Star) (not paired, just only featured characters)
• Mama's little helper (Nanoha on drugs) N/F (not important to story much)
• Sankt Kaiser!Vivio Theme: Hop Scotch Wars (Mixed Subtext)
• Well, we did do the nose No Pairings, Series 1 Fic(warning, highly demented and deconstructed)
• N/F Married: Bad Joke/Granny xmas carol
• Mixed: Fail!Fate (parody of feuding legions)
• No Pairings: Rabbits (Vita/Rabbits OTP)

OC
mtg xover stuffs (experimental, 5 OCs)

• Part 1
• Part 2
• Part 3
  (Stalled, I will redo these sometime)
• Chapter 1 Animist and the Anarchist at Fanfiction.net
• Chapter 2
• Chapter 3
• Babysitter Fu-chan (N/F Subtext) [I will redo this sometime]

Spoiler for Hana Sebring (Updated 1-31-11):

* Hana Sebring
Inspirational Image
* Female
* 5'2" Long green hair. Almost elvish ears. Green eyes. Fair complexion.
* Alignment: Good | Riot Force Section 6 Lightning Squad
* Personality: Peaceful, Quiet, Patient, Understanding
* Powers: Summoner: Jormungandr, Fenrir, Hugin, Munin (Brother Hawk Ravens)
* Device: Freya: Boost Type Device. They are numerous small gems built into celtic jewerly. Green Aura.
* Background: Born in the great Yavimaya forests of Dominaria. An old world rich in magic and culture. The planet is a friend to the TSAB and ally to the Belkan Church, but in modern times, it has drifted apart. The TSAB and the Church can support themselves.
* She was paired with Fury Tempest in boot camp where they became fast friends. She is fond of her partner, but refuses to let their relationship develop.

Hana replaced Caro and fury replaced Erio in my rewrite of StrikerS.

Spoiler for Fury Tempest (updated aug 7 2010):

Inspirational image

*Freedom (Fury) Tempest [Adopted Name]
*Female
*5'5'' Short, shaggy red hair. Red eyes. Tanned Complexion
*Alignment: Whomever is having more fun, but essentially good. | Riot Force Section 6 Lightning Squad
*Personality: Rogue Idiot Savant. She tends to fail at simple tasks, but excels at the most dangerous tasks to almost winning out an impossible situation. She's neither a team player nor a bad teammate, but accidents do happen.
*Powers: Close range combatant. When she is engaged in a long range combat, she will close the distance and hit the enemy in the head.
*Device: Loki, Belkan experimental. Non cartridge based armed device. Since her mana composition is in a constant state of release since childhood, she tends to warm a room and her 4 core device are constantly recharging.
*Background: Raised as a young child in the slave trade, her origins are unknown. Rescued by a researcher on a iced over planet in the outer reaches of the treatise, she found herself adopted by his ex wife and defense attorney Serene Tempest. She has a terrible case of ADD and is an unabashed cliched flaming bisexual. She is madly in love with Hana Sebring, but will chase any tail she can.
*She was paired with Hana Sebring in boot camp where they became fast friends, although Fury was on her in no time. She will not stop trying to get with her or anyone for that matter.

Spoiler for Serene Tempest (updated aug 7 2010):

*Serene Tempest
*Female
*5'8'' Short, straight jet black hair.
*Alignment: Defense Attorney.
*Personality: Cold Steel, yet occasionally motherly.
*35 years old
*Powers: Words, Research, Death Glare, and Reputation.
*Device: PDA (storage device)
*Background: Married twice to the same man, currently devorced. Fights to the letter of justice as she sees is right. Will question any and every law and person of any position or experience if need be. Her ex husband found and gave her a child. Upon adopting Fury Tempest whom she named Freedom, she found something important in her life.

http://s5.tinypic.com/15d9xc6.jpg (I so need a pic like this, but in a pants suit)

[MeisterBabylon]

Oi-oi, Tempy, look what you've done. I hope you're gonna accept responsibility for the kids.

And when I read Seabring, I think of the late Bring Stability.

Just kidding. Yokozo, Itanshi-kun. Leave your lethargy at the door. Other than that, enjoy the ride.

Darn OCT never dies... Sigh...